First Impression !
The story appears to be relating a love story. The writer himself is the main character (protagonist), and uses First Person Pronoun narrating the accounts how he fell in love with a beautiful girl on a cold, crisp, Christmas Eve in Fairmount Park outside Philadelphia.
Most of the story reveals the writer’s pleasant as well as bitter moments in the romance. It also vividly depicts the feelings of a lover when he’s afraid of being betrayed by his beloved.
The storyline is well-sequenced. The exposition is less, but defines every character very well. The Rising Action has great proportion in the story. The story reaches its climax in the ending. There is clear ending of the story, or you can say that the ending is definite. We discuss each element of the plot one by one:
The beginning of the story is simple and lucid. The writer beautifully sketches the scenario of the cold night on Christmas Eve when he met the girl, named Jo first time.
The conflict originates in when Jo told the writer that she would be going to New York with her girlfriend for some office business. The situation worsened the conflict when Jo didn’t meet him for a long time; no reply of phone calls, messages etc.
Here, the writer’s depiction is quite realistic. He shows his keen observation towards the things and matters. The conflict really colored the beautiful sketch.
The story paces well. The writer does not focus so much at the detailed description of the places, characters etc. Only the necessary areas have been emphasized. That’s well-done.
The Ending or Resolution !
The resolution results that the writer gets his love back. The intricate situations resolved just because of his letter.
The ending of the story is definite and leaves no ambiguity. Such stories have great impact and impressions on the readers’ mind if they have serious conflict and happy ending.
All the characters of the story are well-described and engaging the readers’ attention. The characters are real; the ways they behave seem to be very realistic. The main character ( protagonist ) fell in love with a beautiful girl, Jo. After some months, the circumstances led them to the conflict where he began to realize that his sincere and true love would not be his destiny.
What I got the feelings from the characters of the story is that; despite being sincere with others, the circumstances are out of control. Man struggles hard to smoothen the affairs and relations, and he succeeds in the long run.
Setting and Imagery !
There is not so much setting that can distract from the enjoyment of the story and slow down the pace. Once, a reader starts reading the first line, he continues to read up to the last word. The key elements of the story have been described adequately. There are not so unimportant elements that can mislead the readers.
Writing Style !
The rich technical terms and beautiful word choice embellish the writing style and adorn the flow of the story.
Dialogues are natural, persuasive and tempting. Mostly the story paces up through the dialogues.
Technical Aspects !
Writing Style !
The writing style is very good. The flow of the writing is smooth. The writer vividly depicts the situation using the beautiful words. Good command on the choice of suitable words according to the situation, especially the dialogues that are quite natural.
Specific Highlights !
I genuinely enjoy your writing works that are informative, entertaining, enthralling and intriguing the readers. I spotlight a few paragraphs from this chapter.
That cold, crisp, Christmas Eve in Fairmount Park outside Philadelphia is a night I will never forget. The small bridge over the raceway, a small creek running parallel to the river, illuminated by the gas streetlights that lined the walkway. The light reflected off the ice covering the creek and sparkled with the fresh fallen snowflakes that settled, then quickly floated across the surface. The night air was magical, as I looked out across the Schuylkill River toward the old stone railroad bridge that spanned across it.
I heaved a snowball halfheartedly at the gas street light that lined the walkways of the park. But it missed and went sliding across the ice on the small creek that ran parallel to the river. It tumbled and tumbled smaller, just like my hopes, as it rolled away. Finally it found rest as my teary eyes fixed on it. I became lost in thought until I finally closed my eyes and asked God one final time to bring me an answer. I had been so sincere before and felt sure my prayers were heard. But too much time had gone by now and all hope seemed gone. Opening my eyes I looked toward the river, obscured by the glare of the lights, then heavenward as if an answer floated somewhere above my head, just out of view.
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Overall, I appreciate the efforts you put in writing the wonder full novel with amazing theme. Great effort !
Write on !