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I believe in constructive criticism and honesty. I can adapt my review style to fit the kind of feedback an author is looking for (e.g., developmental suggestions, fine-tuning, proofreading, etc.), but will always try to be as encouraging and helpful as possible.
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Plotting, characterization, dialogue, structure/pacing, and professional considerations. I can also do serviceable technical editing/proofreading, but I'm much better with developmental/creative feedback.
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I read almost everything. I particularly love genre fiction (mystery/thriller and science fiction/fantasy especially) and nonfiction of all kinds.
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Hi Words Whirling 'Round

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Positives

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a great job with the structure and imagery, and the language used was really visceral and impactful. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi DaKidRocks

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Positives

I really liked the brief, staccato structure and pace of this poem. It was short, but really impactful. The choice of having all the lines either contain only two or three words was really effective for a poem of this type. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed reading this. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sumojo

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Positives

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a great job packing a ton of imagery and meaning into just a few short stanzas, and your structure was excellent. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Angelica Weatherby- July 4th

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Positives

I thought you did a great job with this poem. It was simple, to the point, and you did an excellent job with the imagery and structure. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this piece. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi R☆

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Positives

I thought you did a great job with the theme of this piece, and connecting the technological with the religious. Nice work!


Suggestions

TYPO: The computer sings a synth melody sung by its choir of screen angels...

TYPO: It wires your heart into its own, making you one; with the illusion of individuality.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed reading this piece. Well done!


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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hi THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days!

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I don't think I've ever seen a mashup between Jane Eyre and Harry Potter before! This was creative and I think you did a great job featuring all of the Harry Potter elements that you think someone from 200 years ago would be interested to see.


Suggestions

I would have loved to have seen a little more about not just Hogwarts and Harry Potter, but some of the other modern elements that Jane Eyre would have discovered as well. In addition to the magic and literary elements, I imagine she'd also be relatively gobsmacked by things like electricity and even the train to Hogwarts. It would have been great to include some of those elements as well.

I also can't say that, for me personally, meeting JK Rowling is anywhere near the top of my list of celebrities I'd like to meet after her recent forays into anti-trans activism and outright bigotry; she's one of the foremost examples of situations where I very much try to separate the author from their work, because I love the Harry Potter books but detest her as a person. But I don't suppose Jane Eyre would be aware of any of that backstory if she were to suddenly time-travel to the present day for a Harry Potter holiday. *Wink*


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed reading this item. It was imaginative and entertaining. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Joey's Summer Sparkle

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Positives

I thought you did a good job with this poem. This piece definitely brings back memories of all the Game of Thrones activities and prompts throughout the years, and I think you did an excellent job responding to the prompt.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed this piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi danielbird

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Positives

I really liked the structure of this piece. The language is sophisticated, and you presented an engaging, well-paced poem that lends itself well to reading multiple times to fully appreciate it. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

I really enjoyed reading this piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim Chiu

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Positives

I thought you did a really great job with the structure and imagery of this piece. The language was elegant and sophisticated, and you painted a vivid picture in comparatively few words and lines. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Positives

I liked the juxtaposition of the animal and human roles in this story. I thought it was a really clever way to subvert expectations, and you did a good job of still capturing the owner-pet relationship while inverting the roles. Nice work!


Suggestions

I would have loved to have seen a little more build-up to the payoff of the switched roles. As it is, the story just kind of lays it out like it's a commonly-understood fact, and I think there's a real opportunity here to subvert your audience's expectations with a little bit of setup and payoff. I think it would be really compelling if we're following a story of a teenage girl who is being distracted from doing her homework by her pet... and if we get a more traditional image of that in our minds first before you pull a bait-and-switch and reveal that the dog is the one doing homework once it has a chance to catch the reader off guard and surprise them.


Overall

Overall, this was a fun read and it has a lot of potential. You're off to a great start!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I thought you did a good job with this piece. The mix of dialogue and description was well balanced and kept the story moving along at a brisk pace.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Positives

You did a great job with the details and description in this piece. There was just enough information to paint a clear picture in the reader's mind, while still leaving enough room for their imagination to fill in the gaps.


Suggestions

From a formatting perspective, you might want to consider employing some paragraph breaks to help structure the piece and make it a little more readable.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Nice work!


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Positives

I enjoyed reading this story. Flash fiction stories are always fun to read, and I thought you did a great job with this one.


Suggestions

This isn't specifically a suggestion for the story itself, but I'd highly recommend setting at least one genre other than "Contest Entry" for your piece in order to give potential readers some idea of the story's subject matter.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a solid job with this. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I thought you did a good job with this story. The details and description were excellent and the overall pace was engaging. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the read and thought you did a great job. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I thought you did a great job conveying emotion and feeling in this piece. Your use of detail at the beginning helped set the scene and allowed the reader to identify with you as you eventually shared more of your mindset with them. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a solid job with this piece. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I enjoyed reading this item. I thought it was thought-provoking and interesting, and you did a great job of mixing both rhetorical questions and actual questions to get the reader to think. Well done!


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No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I thought you did a great job with this item. The imagery and the structure of the piece were both excellent, and you did a great job of capturing the theme that love seems silly or illogical until you experience it for yourself. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. *Smile*


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Rated: 18+ | (2.0)
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Positives

I thought the writing was direct and to the point, and had some really visceral, impactful language for such a short piece.


Suggestions

It's a little unclear what the purpose or goal of this piece is. It's listed as being a draft of a piece of writing in the "Animal" genre, but the intro and the body of the item itself don't really elaborate on that premise.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job making an impactful impression with your writing, but there's a bit of confusion about what this piece is or what the author's intentions with it are, which would be helpful to elaborate upon.


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Positives

I thought you did a great job with this poem. I particularly liked the fact that you took a common interpretation about the metaphor you were using, and put a spin on it in the first few lines. It was a great way to engage the reader.


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No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a good job with the structure and the pacing; it was a quick, engaging read that kept my interest throughout. Nice work!


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No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!


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Positives

I thought you did a good job with this poem. The imagery and thematic elements were both excellent, and I thought the piece was well structured. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, this was an engaging, interesting item to read. Well done!


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Positives

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a great job with the structure and the imagery; the piece was easy to read and thought-provoking. Nice work!


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Overall

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Positives

I really liked the imagery and the visuals in this piece. I thought you did a great job creating and engaging and immersive poem. Well done!


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Overall

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Positives

I thought you did a great job with the imagery and construction of this item. In just a few short words and stanzas, you really did a great job setting the scene and painting a vibrant picture of Japan for the reader. Well done!


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Overall

Overall, I think you did a great job with this piece. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Train* Positives

I thought you did a great job with the theme and content of this piece. Acts 2 is such a formative piece of scripture for me (our former church spent nearly two years reading through the Book of Acts in its entirety and dissecting it), I read your piece and it instantly brought to mind so many of the moments from Acts as a whole, as well as how integral Acts 2 is to the idea of the modern church. Really well done!


*Train* Suggestions

While I know that the form "quatrain" can cover a lot of ground, structurally speaking, I found it a bit difficult to find a rhythm in reading this piece because each quatrain seems to vary slightly. For example, the first quatrain didn't have any lines with a perfect rhyme, while the second one was abcb. But then the third one was abCC. And the fourth was abab.

If the goal was to demonstrate the versatility of the quatrain form, you might want to articulate that a bit more in the notes at the bottom of the piece (i.e., that you're intentionally playing with the form), otherwise I might humbly suggest aiming for a more consistent rhythm or structure from quatrain to quatrain so that the reader's focus isn't pulled away from the content and toward trying to figure out what the internal structure of the poem is supposed to be.


*Train* Overall

Overall, I thought this was a really enjoyable item to read. I loved the contest and while I think there's a bit of improvement that could be made in execution, it doesn't change the fact that this was a very effective, engaging piece. Nice work!


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