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I balance my reviews by commenting both on what worked and suggestions for improvement. I evaluate material as honestly and objectively as possible, while still being positive and supportive. I can adapt my review style to fit the kind of feedback an author is looking for (e.g., tough love, encouragement, alternative suggestions, etc.).
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Structure, pacing, characterization, plotting, dialogue, and considerations for the professional marketplace. I'm okay at technical editing but much better with broader creative considerations.
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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The WDC Soundtrackers Group  
Rated: GC | (4.5)
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Hello Leger~

I'm sending this review in connection with "Musicology Anthology.

I really enjoyed all of your entries. You did a great job drawing inspiration from the album and its songs, and all of your stories were well-written and interesting. I really liked the variety of different entries.

Sorry for the delay in judging this contest, but thank you for taking the time to write so many entries and submit them! *Smile*

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review of Hullabaloo  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The WDC Soundtrackers Group  
Rated: GC | (4.0)
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Hello hullabaloo22

I'm sending this review in connection with "Musicology Anthology.

Overall, I thought you did a really great job with all of your entries. You did a good job of drawing inspiration from the songs, and each entry was unique, interesting, and offered a good variety of reading experiences.

I apologize for the judging being so late on this contest; thank you for your participation and taking the time to enter this challenging activity!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The WDC Soundtrackers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Hello Kåre Enga, P.O. 22, Blogville

I'm sending this review in connection with "Musicology Anthology.

Thank you for taking the time to enter Musicology Anthology and apologies for taking so long to get around to the judging!

Overall, I think your pieces all made good use of imagery, were well paced, and were interesting. The inspiration from the songs was clear in each entry.

If there were one area to suggest for improvement, it would be that the pieces themselves didn't feel so much like stories that had a defined beginning, middle, and end, as much as they felt like short vignettes or standalone scenes that lacked a narrative arc.

That said, though, they were enjoyable to read and I'm glad you took the time to enter the contest. Good work!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Party Funds  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Sumojo

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.

It's nice to be able to return the favor of doing an I Write review for one of your items, and I'm even more pleased that it's an actual story rather than a poem! *Delight*

I thought you did a good job setting up the disparate and yet interconnected events that all related to the spread of a virus. You really showed how simple interactions that are initially perceived to be harmless can actually, in total, add up to something truly problematic.

You included a level of detail that made it easy to imagine the scenes you were setting, without weighing down the pacing or slowing the narrative. Overall, I thought you did a good job with this entry and I wish you the best of luck in the contest! *Smile*

I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review of WOUND  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello J.L. O'Dell

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.

I always enjoy reading your entries for 24 Syllables. You consistently manage to create vivid, interesting entries with so little to work with! Overall, I liked your take on the prompt and thought this piece was both well-written and sophisticated.

I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review of A Long Way Home  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello debmiller1

This is an official judges' review for the July 2020 round of "Rhythms & Writing: Official WDC Contest

This was one of my favorite entries of the contest. I thought you did a great job with the prompt, and creating a vibrant setting full of interesting characters. I wish I had some suggestions for improvement, but honestly I wouldn't change a thing about the story. I loved it just the way it is. *Smile*

Thank you for the undertaking the time and effort to enter one of the site's official contests. I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review of Finding Home  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Elfin

This is an official judges' review for the July 2020 round of "Rhythms & Writing: Official WDC Contest

It's always a pleasure to read your work, and this story is certainly no exception. Good characterization, entertaining storytelling, and your writing style captures the reader's attention and doesn't let go until the very end. I also enjoyed your take on the prompt. I wish I had some suggestions for improvement, but you did great with it just the way it is! *Smile*

Thank you for the undertaking the time and effort to enter one of the site's official contests. I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review of Following A Dream  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello 💙 Carly - Pumpkin Spiced

This is an official judges' review for the July 2020 round of "Rhythms & Writing: Official WDC Contest

Great job on this story. I really enjoyed the characterization and your take on the prompt, in particular. It's always a pleasure to read your work, and this story was certainly no exception. Well done and keep up the good work!

Thank you for the undertaking the time and effort to enter one of the site's official contests. I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review of I Did It My Way  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Hello Odessa Molinari

This is an official judges' review for the July 2020 round of "Rhythms & Writing: Official WDC Contest

I thought you did a good job with the dialogue in this story, but at only a quarter of the allowable word count and without much description, I thought there was room to expand the story a little with some additional details and context, but it was otherwise a good take on the prompt. Nice work!

Thank you for the undertaking the time and effort to enter one of the site's official contests. I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review of Lone Wolf  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Hello Robert Edward Baker

This is an official judges' review for the July 2020 round of "Rhythms & Writing: Official WDC Contest

I liked your take on the prompt. I thought you did a good job with the characterization and providing vivid imagery and details of the setting. The one issue I did notice was that early on in the car buying process, Marta tells Bob that she only has $5,000 to spend (and then tells him to half it), but then Bob tells her he can let the VW bus go for six grand. And then they negotiate and she agrees to buy it for five thousand (which is twice what she said she could afford). I think that element threw me because the numbers were so far off from the information that Marta initially conveyed she was able to pay. Otherwise, I enjoyed reading this story and thought you did a good job.

Thank you for the undertaking the time and effort to enter one of the site's official contests. I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Party Funds  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello ruwth

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.

We're trading reviews and alternating posts in the I Write forum, it seems!

I really enjoyed the fact that you connected several blog posts together and gave the reader a sense of a continuing journey. It really helps add context and appreciation to the moving day story that you communicated in this blog post. I thought this entry was well written, paced effectively, and kept my interest throughout.

Overall, you did a great job!

I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Party Funds  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello ruwth

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.


As someone who just finished a month-long challenge to blog every day, I wish you the best of luck! It's a time consuming test of your endurance, but can be really rewarding if you're able to see it through to the end. Even if you end up missing a day or completing an entry late, keep at it! *Bigsmile*


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Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review of Pacific  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Toffeeman1957

This is an official judges' review for the April 2020 round of "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest


         *PenR* Premise.

The premise was interesting and I enjoyed the take on the prompt.

         *Penr* Story.

The story was well-developed and moved along at a brisk pace.

         *Penr* Characters.

The characters were well-developed and interesting.

         *Penr* Dialogue.

You made good use of dialogue to keep the story moving forward.

         *Penr* Technical.

No technical issues that I could find.

         *Penr* Overall.

Overall, I enjoyed this entry and thought you did a good job with the prompt.

Thank you for the undertaking the time and effort to enter one of the site's official contests. I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Roberts89

This is an official judges' review for the April 2020 round of "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest


         *PenR* Premise.

I liked your take on the prompt. I thought it was original and interesting.

         *Penr* Story.

The story was compelling and had me engaged throughout.

         *Penr* Characters.

Your character development was excellent; both Marie and Sharon felt like fully-realized, intriguing characters.

         *Penr* Dialogue.

The dialogue was okay; it mostly served its purpose of moving the narrative along efficiently, but for me it didn't really stand out or shine beyond being functional.

         *Penr* Technical.

No technical errors that I could find.

         *Penr* Overall.

Overall, I enjoyed this entry. I think you had a good take on the prompt, and you executed it well.

Thank you for the undertaking the time and effort to enter one of the site's official contests. I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hello Graham B.

This is an official judges' review for the April 2020 round of "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest


         *PenR* Premise.

I liked your premise and your take on the prompt.

         *Penr* Story.

Overall, I found the story to be compelling and really liked the level of detail and imagery you infused into the piece.

         *Penr* Characters.

Both of your characters were really well-developed and interesting.

         *Penr* Dialogue.

Some of the back-and-forth dialogue early on in the piece slowed down the read a bit because it felt at times like banter that wasn't really moving the story forward. That said, you did a good job with the dialogue toward the end of the story and dealing with the really emotional ending between the two.

         *Penr* Technical.

No technical issues that I could find.

         *Penr* Overall.

Overall, this was a solid entry. It was a good take on the prompt and well-written. Nice work!

Thank you for the undertaking the time and effort to enter one of the site's official contests. I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Hello Odessa Molinari

This is an official judges' review for the April 2020 round of "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest


         *PenR* Premise.

I thought your premise was a good take on the prompt.

         *Penr* Story.

I found the story to be quite problematic, particularly due to a jump in the timeline (the second paragraph has Suri saying she "is to marry" implying the marriage will come in the future, then the next paragraph immediately jumps to "The wedding, three months ago," and creates a really jarring leap forward, especially since the first two paragraphs were written in a way that made it seem like they were happening presently, rather than in the past.

         *Penr* Characters.

The narrator character didn't really work for me, particularly after running into Suri again. The narrator literally states things like, "I didn't know what was happening to her" and "I knew she was being controlled, but how?" and that it took watching Handmaid's Tale to realize that Suri's husband was abusive, controlling, etc., but that information seems pretty self-evident and it's a bit strange that the narrator of the story seems so oblivious throughout the story until the very end.

         *Penr* Dialogue.

The dialogue was minimal but kept the story moving along and was well-placed.

         *Penr* Technical.

No technical errors that I could find.

         *Penr* Overall.

Overall, I think this piece has a lot of potential, but in its current form it fell a little short of the mark. I would have loved to have seen a little more discernment from the narrator, and to have the timing issues ironed out.

Thank you for the undertaking the time and effort to enter one of the site's official contests. I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello 💙 Carly - Pumpkin Spiced

This is an official judges' review for the April 2020 round of "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest


         *PenR* Premise.

I really like the premise of this story, and the way you tied it into what's happening in the world right now.

         *Penr* Story.

The narrative felt a little light on story. While not every entry has to use every bit of the available word count, it felt like there was an opportunity to flesh this out a little. As it is, it feels a little more like a vignette than a fully-realized story with a beginning, middle, and end.

         *Penr* Characters.

The characters felt like they could have benefitted from a little more definition. As with the story suggestions, a little more character development would go a long way to adding context to these characters and their conversation.

         *Penr* Dialogue.

The dialogue was effective at moving the story along.

         *Penr* Technical.

No technical errors jumped out at me.

         *Penr* Overall.

Overall, I enjoyed reading this entry and found myself wanting more of it! The thing I liked best was how it felt topical and current, and I only wish there had been a little more meat on the bones of this story.

Thank you for the undertaking the time and effort to enter one of the site's official contests. I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WdC author!

Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Party Funds  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Prosperous Snowwoman

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.


I really enjoyed this poem, particularly as it echoes so many of the sentiments I'm currently feeling about this past Memorial Day weekend. On the one hand, I want to honor the people who have bravely fought for this country and its freedoms, but on the other hand, it makes me sad to see others put their own personal freedoms and wants ahead of the needs of the rest of the country. It would be one thing if everyone were making a personal choice between staying home or going out and maintaining public health guidelines (wearing masks, social distancing, etc.) but it breaks my heart to see people selfishly ignoring all that guidance and taking an "all or nothing" approach to helping fight this pandemic.

Sorry for the rant, but I just wanted to say that this piece really spoke to me and inspired me. It was well written and thought-provoking. Clearly! *Laugh*

Well done!


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Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Party Funds  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello Intuey

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.


I really loved this piece. I thought the varied structure worked incredibly well, and the imagery was vibrant and engaging. To be honest, I'm not very well versed in poetry and I'm not sure I've seen a form like this before, where there are so many different elements interacting together. I thought it was great! I have no suggestions for improvement; I think it's perfect the way it is.


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Jeff


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Review of Curiosity Shop  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Party Funds  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Sumojo

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.


You did a great job with this story! I thought your level of detail and description was excellent, and the atmosphere you created was completely immersive. Katerina was a compelling protagonist and the Curiosity Shop was a great location that really fit thematically with the rest of the piece. I wish I had some suggestions to give you for improvement, but I think this is a great piece as it is!


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Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review of Measuring Cup  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Party Funds  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hello ♥HO HO HOOves♥

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.


Looks like the tables have turned and it's my turn to review you! *Delight*

I really enjoyed this poem. It definitely delivered an unexpected line halfway through the piece. This poem definitely didn't go where I was thinking it would, and throwing in a twist is a really impressive feat with such a comparatively short piece. Your diction, structure, and presentation are all excellent, as always. It was a pleasure to read this piece!


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Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review of Ruby's Romeo  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Party Funds  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello Odessa Molinari

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.


First of all, I want to say that it's nice to have the chance to review a non-poetry item for I Write! *Laugh*

I think you did a good job with this piece, overall. The content of the individual vignettes was good; the presentation was simple and straightforward, and the interactions between Ruby and Roscoe were realistic. The flow of the piece felt a little choppy due to the relatively short scenes separated with section breaks, and the story felt like it ended rather abruptly, but I think there's a lot of potential here, especially with the character dynamics of a generous caregiver's intentions being misunderstood. Overall, I enjoyed the read.


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Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Party Funds  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Prosperous Snowwoman

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.


This was a wonderful, very succinct poem that accurately expresses the frustration of our current situation. A lot of people are starting to get a little stir-crazy with being forced to shelter in place, and your poem did a great job in just a few words, of capturing that frustration and sense of anxiety. Only one small technical note; I think you're xlink WML is broken as it doesn't provide an actual link to the Tanaga form. Other than that, I thought this was a fantastic piece. Well done!


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Respectfully,

Jeff


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Party Funds  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello Prosperous Snowwoman

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.

Freestyle poetry is definitely not my strong suit, so forgive the simplicity of this review. Overall, I thought it was a really sophisticated piece with great use of language and a flowing, well-paced structure. I liked the emotion in the piece, and the context you provided in the notes at the bottom to give the reader more information. Nice work!

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Respectfully,

Jeff


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for entry "Randy the Leprechaun
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Party Funds  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello Prosperous Snowwoman

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2020.


I really enjoyed this limerick. This is one of my favorite types of poetry (perhaps because I'm a fan of bawdy humor and short reads? *BigSmile*), and thought you did a great job with this piece. I could very clearly picture Randy the liquored-up leprechaun and just how drunk he'd have to be to mistake a skunk for a piece of candy. *Laugh*

Overall, I thought the technical execution of this poem was quite good, with good visuals and an effective structure and choice of rhymes. Nicely done!


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Respectfully,

Jeff


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