I thought this poem was really creative; I love the idea of comparing body parts to the crew of a ship, and a mutinous crew at that! The structure of the rhyme scheme also kept the pacing of the poem moving briskly through all 48 lines.

I can't think of any significant suggestions for improvement.

This was a really creative and fun poem to read. Nicely done!

This was a fun, breezy poem written for the site's 22nd birthday. I like the simplicity of the piece, and I'm not sure whether it was intentional or not, but it seemed to follow the general cadence of the "Happy Birthday" song, which I thought was a really enjoyable little detail.

The rhyme scheme doesn't always match. In each of the first two stanzas, the rhyme scheme is AAB, AAB... but in the third stanza it's ABC ("roared" and "floors" don't rhyme the first two lines like in the previous stanzas)... and in the fourth stanza it's AAA (all three lines rhyme). As a result, it was a little difficult to settle into a consistent cadence or pace when reading.

As a whole, this was a simple and entertaining poem celebrating a birthday milestone for the community. I think there's room for improvement, especially with clarifying the structure and whether the deviations in the later stanzas was intentional, but otherwise I very much enjoyed the read.

I like the overall structure of this story, but at under 500 words, it reads a little bit like an "info dump" where one character is just downloading a whole bunch of information to the audience via a secondary character. This creates a bit of a lack of conflict in the story since there are no stakes; it's just a recounting of what's already happened. I would have loved to have seen the backstory spread out a little more so it wasn't just one character essentially saying, "uh huh, go on" when the narrator character needed a pause, but the actual backstory itself was compelling and I think there's a lot of potential for a larger, more developed story in here.

Steve is definitely a compelling character as the reader watches his backstory unfold. There's a sense that he's a fully-realized character with plenty of past experiences to draw from, but the dynamics of this story suffer from the same issues as the last one, where there's not really much conflict because it's a character sitting in the bar, essentially recounting his biography to an audience.

I like that this entry is starting to explore the world of the bar a little more. The fact that it's not just a one-to-one exchange between a character conveying information to another character and instead expands on the other characters and the environment of the bar is helping to build this into a really compelling continued narrative. Nice job!

This was a fun, entertaining vignette and I liked the historical tie ins and the information about the drinks, but it felt like this didn't have a lot of connection to the larger narrative you're building. It read a little bit like a "bottle episode" from a television series (like a Halloween or Christmas episode) where it's not part of the regular season arc, but sends the characters on a little side quest along the way. Nothing wrong with that, of course, just an observation.

As a Frank Lloyd Wright fan (and fan of architecture in general), this was the story I was most looking forward to reading. I enjoyed the debate about modern architecture and its drawbacks.

Overall, I really enjoyed your entry and thought you did a great job coming up with different ideas for stories based on the songs in the album. It was a pleasure to read!