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Hello LegendaryMasK❤,

I am reviewing this script for The Monthly Script Writing Contest. These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

You did a very good job with this script. At least I think that you did. True, there were some problems with it. But that doesn't mean it wasn't a bad script. It just means that it could have been a lot better.


The Story Itself

I liked this story a whole lot. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good. What did I like the most about it? Why did I like so much? Both of these questions have the same answer. It's because of what this story is about aka the Coronavirus.


Was It Formatted Correctly?

No, it wasn't. There are several problems when it comes to formating this script. The first thing that I noticed was your opening paragraph explaining the scene forthcoming. That shouldn't be there. Instead, it should start out with the Words FADE IN. And if this is for a TV script, then it should be TEASER, TAG, or ACT number. The next thing I noticed was there are no Scene Headings. Instead, you used Act One; Scene One: etc. And you centered them. That's another no-no when it comes to scripts. I thought that I explained Scene Headings in my Script Samples. But it looks like I need to check them out again. What I think is the biggest problem with this script is your Character Names and Dialogue. The names appear to be pretty good. Except for when you sigh. That should be on the next line down. Speaking of lines, there should be no spaces between the Character Names, Parenthesis, and Dialogue. There should also be no Quotation Marks around the dialogue either. And you missed some of them anyway. I understand talking to yourself and thinking out loud because I do that a lot too. But it shouldn't be shown like this in scripts.


Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words

If this was a Short Story then Quotation Marks are to be used for dialogue. But not in scripts. I don't think that they are a grammar error when you use them like this. But I could be wrong about that. You might want to check into that.


Any Last Thoughts

I also noticed that this is your Anniversary month with us. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.



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Hello Odessa Molinari smiling,

I am reviewing this script for The Monthly Script Writing Contest. These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

What I liked the most about this script is what it's about. Not they are writers for a Daytime Drama, even though I do like that too, but because of why they are doing it the way that they are aka because of the Coronavirus.


The Story Itself

They are writers for a Daytime Drama. And they doing it through Video Conversing. I liked that you used the current problems that we are all facing right now a whole lot.


Was It Formatted Correctly?

There are several problems with the formatting for this script. The first thing that I noticed was with your Scene Heading. There shouldn't be I hyphen after INT. or EXT. It wasn't too long after that noticed your next problem. It's the words FADE INs that you used before each Scene Heading. Not only didn't you have a FADE OUT at the end of those scenes, but they shouldn't be there. If this was a movie then there would be one IN at the beginning and one OUT at the end. And if this was a television script, there would be a TEASER, TAG, or ACT before the IN and an OUT at the end of it. The biggest problem with the formatting I noticed is with your Character Names and Dialogue. It looks like you centered them.


Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words

It doesn't look like you made any grammar, spelling, etc. errors with this script. But if you did, I didn't notice them.


Any Last Thoughts

I think that this is a great idea for a television series. Especially, since they are writers for a Daytime Drama. There have been a few other ones like it. Including a well-known one about a comedy skit series aka The Dick Van Dyke Show. But I don't think that there has been one for a Daytime Drama.



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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello lezismore-with 2020 vision,

These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

A very interesting story. At first, I didn't understand what this story was about. But I was interested in finding out what it was. So, I continued reading it. By doing so, I ended up not only understanding it but like it very much.


What I Liked the Most About It

I like that you gave Jamie's teddy bear a voice. And that you used italics for it. Except that you didn't do that one time, though.


Your Characters

Of Course, Jamie is the main character in this Short Story. But there are others too. Including his teddy bear, Oscar. Some may not consider Oscar a character because he isn't real. But I do.

I also liked that you gave all of your characters a name. Personally, I try to do that with all of my characters. Especially, the main ones. It makes them feel more real if they have one. At least I think that they do.


Location, Location, Location

This is also a little bit confusing to me. If I read this Short Story correctly, Jamie is twelve. And he has tried to run away from home because of abusive parents or adoptive/foster parents. I also read that Jamie left a house and got almost to another house that may help him. But he had to retreat to some woods nearby when his 'parents' showed up. What is confusing to me is where all of this takes place. A little bit more detail on this would have been nice.


What I Didn’t Like About It

The title for this Short Story is a little bit confusing to me too. It reads about a stepson. But what I read it reads more like he has been taken against his will. And that now that he's old enough to do so he tries to get away from them. Where is the stepson in this part? Will that be revealed in another part? Which one is his stepparent and which is his natural parent?


Anything Wrong with It

I'm not very good at grammar. So, I could be wrong about this. But it appears you missed a few commas and periods. It also looks like you missed a word or two and some spelling. I also think that you didn't space after one of your dialogue. But I'm not sure about that. It could be that there was a space, but I didn't see it. You may want to look into this. Maybe you just need to re-read it again.


Last thoughts

Is this the beginning of a novel or a much longer Short Story. Either way, I think that you have done a very good job with this part.


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Hello Derrol Edwards- Fantasy Writer,

These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

I liked this story a whole lot. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop. It's that good of a Short Story.


What I Liked the Most About It

I'm a big fan of Science Fiction or Fantasy stories. That's what I liked about this one. That it's a Fantasy.


Your Characters

One of the things that I liked about this Short Story is that you named your main characters. Silver and Sigmor are the main ones. But the 'monster' and the 'fallen star' are also a big part of it too. I would have found a way to give them names too. You may have done that with 'Ent.' But it reads more like a title or race than it did a name. As for the 'fallen star,' Silver may have given her a name. Something he's going to call her until he knows her real name. Unless Fallen Star is the name that he has given her. In that case, I think that he should have pointed that out some way in this story.


Location, Location, Location

A wooded area is where this Short Story takes place. But I'm not sure where it's at. On what planet? Is it Earth or another planet? A little bit more detail would have been nice.

I tried to look up this contest to read more about this world of yours. But I couldn't find it.


What I Didn’t Like About It

There are no paragraph separations. That made it hard for me to read. My comments right above this one is a good example of what I mean about separating paragraphs.


Anything Wrong with It

I found several things wrong with this Short Story. At least it looks like there are to me. I'm not very good at grammar. But in reading this story it looks like there are a lot of sentences that ran on. That they should be separated into one or more sentences by a period(s). You may want to check into that.


Last thoughts

It looks like your Short Story just ended. Is this just part of a longer story.

Also, the title of this story doesn't match the story. Where is the Crown of Thorns in it?


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Hello willow,

These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

By the time you finish reading this review, you may think that I didn't like this Short Story. But you would be wrong about that. I liked the story very, very much. The story isn't the problem, though.


What I Liked the Most About It

The theme of it. That's what I liked the most about this Short Story.


Your Characters

You gave most of your characters in this story a name. And I like that a lot. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that makes them more real if they have a name. At first, I was wondering if you were going to name the dad. But you did. The only one you didn't give a name to was yourself. I understand why you didn't do it since you are telling this story. But it can be done. You did it with Ricky. Something different could have been done for you. Maybe, one of your kids could have used it in some way or if they are too young to be calling you by your first name, then Ricky could have done it. How about when he was commenting on the bunnies getting out of their new home.


Location, Location, Location

I think that you did a very good job with this story. True, I don't know where this house is. But I do know it's a house thanks to the detail you have given us.


What I Didn’t Like About It

True, there quite a few problems with this Short Story. But that I don't care about that. What I didn't like was how it ended. It reads to me like you just stopped writing it. You kind of ended it with your last paragraph. But there are still a lot of questions about what happened to the bunnies, Bunnyville, etc.


Anything Wrong with It

There are a lot of things wrong with it. Most of it is with missing commas and a lot of single spaces between the quotation marks within the dialogue. But there are a lot of other problems too. It started with the first paragraph that was broken up with Paragraph Breaks several times. That is true one or more times during it too. And it ended with the ending.


Last thoughts

Why did I Rate this Short Story like this? It's because of what is wrong with it. I make a lot of mistakes myself. So, that doesn't affect my rating decision that much, if any, if there are only a few mistakes. But this one has a lot more a few.


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Hello Charlie Carrol,

These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

This was a very, very good Short Story. I liked it a whole lot. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good.


What I Liked the Most About It

It kept me in suspense not knowing what was going to come next. That's what I like the most about this Short Story. I also liked how you didn't really reveal your main character's gender until the end.


Your Characters

Personally, I think that you should have given your main character in this story a name. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have one. A name for the mother and father would have been nice too. Yes, I know that isn't easy to do with First Person Singular. At least I think that's what it's called. But whatever the tense, it can be done. Maybe something like 'my dad, George' or 'my mom, Helen.' Especially, after they get into their teens when most teens call them by their names instead of their parental titles.


Location, Location, Location

I'm not too sure where this story takes place. I know it's somewhere where there's a bath, a shower, and a bath again. But other than that, I'm not sure where it's at. Is it an apartment, or a duplex, or a house? A little bit more detail about that would have been nice.


What I Didn’t Like About It

Another one I'm not sure about. This is a hard one because there wasn't really anything that I didn't like about it. I think that you have done a very good job with this story.


Anything Wrong with It

There is nothing wrong with this story. At least I didn't read it. If there was any, I didn't read it.


Last thoughts

Why didn't I give this story a better Rating? It's because of what I mentioned above. I liked it and the theme of it. But that wasn't enough. It kept me interested in it from the beginning to the end. And I liked that I finally found out this was from a female's POV. But even without what I mentioned above, I don't think I would have given it a five-Rating. A four or a four-point-five, but not a five.


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Hello Angus,

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This is one of the best poems that I have read in a long time. There are two things that I liked the most about this poem. One is that you centered it. The other one is that you colorized it. Either one of them makes it easier to read. But together it's even better. At least I think that it is. I do have one question, though. Was there a reason why you colorized this poem as you have done?

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Hello Maryann,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

You wanted a Rating of One for this poem. And I'm going to give it to you this time. Not because you asked for it, but because I didn't understand it. Maybe it's because I don't understand this style of Poetry. But I was very confused about this poem. I know that it's about Spring. And that it's related to the other three seasons of the year. But other than that, I'm not sure what it means. What you are trying to mean.

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Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Hello Maryann,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

I'm sorry, but I can't rate this poem only a two like you want me to do. It's a lot better than that. At least I think that it was. In fact, I think that you have done a great job with this poem. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop doing it. It was that good. The only thing that I didn't like about it was the title. This may have been your first poem for this contest. But I think the title for this poem should have been, Bad Roses, because that's what this poem was about.

There are two reasons why I chose this poem to review. One is that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary. The second reason is that you are also a Reviewer.

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Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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Hello Thankful Sonali WDC POWER!,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This is one of the best poems that I have read in a long time. I liked it very much. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good.

What I liked the most about it was that it was centered. I think that it's easier to read if it's centered.

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Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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Hello Thankful Sonali WDC POWER!,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

There are two reasons why I chose this poem to review. One is that you are also a Reviewer. But the main one is that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

What I like the most in this poem are two things. One of them is that you centered it. And I think that it's easier to read when it's centered. The other thing is that you used dialogue in it. There isn't any in most poems. But I have seen a few like this one.

It does appear that you may have missed a couple of rhyming lines. At least it looks like they are to mean. In the fourth group of lines, 'anyone' doesn't rhyme with 'run'. Does it? And in the seventh group of lines, I don't think that 'advice' rhymes with 'career-wise'.

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Hello Liam,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

I'm not sure what the title for this poem means. If it even does mean something. Does it mean something? It doesn't matter. I think that you have done a great job with this poem. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good. What I liked the most about this poem is how the second and fourth lines rhymed.

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Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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Hello Liam,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

I'm not surprised that you got the first prize with this poem. It's that good. What I liked most about it is that each pair rhymed. I'm not very good when it comes to Poetry. But I know what I like. And I liked this poem very, very much. I admire anyone who can rhyme Poetry. Probably because I can't do it myself.

You are also a Reviewer. That's one reason I chose it to review. But it's not the main one. The main reason why I'm reviewing it is that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

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Hello elizjohn,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This may only be fifty-five words long, but they are fifty-five well-written words. I liked it very much. Did you win this contest? If you didn't, you should have. It's that good.

One reason I chose this Short Story to review is that you are also a Reviewer. But the main reason why I did it is that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Hello Angus,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

I liked this Short Story very much. It may only be fifty-five words long, but it was still a good read. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. That's how good it was. What I liked the most about it was how it ended. I like a sudden twist at the end of my short stories too.

It's true, that I only selected this poem to review because you are also a Reviewer. But that's not the only reason, though. I also chose this one because this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of The Old Man  
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Hello 1,

I have just finished reading your Short Story, 2. These are only my opinions.

This one a very close one. I liked this story very, very much. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good. the only reason why I'm not giving it a five-rating is that in paragraph one you have a missing a word. Most his time was spent roaming the countryside, should be Most of his time was spent roaming the countryside, I know that this one is missing is because when I Pasted it in this review my Grammarly pointed it out.

I think there was one among the dialogue too. But I can't find it right now. Other than one or two missing words, I think that you did a great job with this story.

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Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Hello River in Isolation,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This was a very good Short Story too. I liked it a whole lot. What I liked the most about it was the ending. And how your main character got even with the abusive woman behind him. At least I think that it's a him from the way it read. But I'm not sure about that. That's not the reason why I didn't rate this one better. It was because there are a couple of paragraphs that are cut off part of the way through them.

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Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Hello River in Isolation,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

I liked this Short Story a lot. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop until I finished it. That's how good it was. Unfortunately, there were a lot of problems with it. Most of them had to do with grammar. Especially, with commas, quotation marks, and periods. I'm far from an expert when it comes to grammar. As far as you can get. But if I noticed them, then others who are experts will notice them too. Like whoever the judge was for that day's Prompt. I also noticed at least one missing word. You may want to re-read this story again.

While I was looking for something to review, I noticed that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary. This being your Anniversary Month isn't the only reason why I chose this Short Story to review. I also did it because you are also a Reviewer too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Hello Tiger Cub 🔱,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This is one of the best short stories that I have read in a long, long time. Especially, since at first, I didn't think that I was going to like it. But once the dialogue started, then it got better. a hundred percent better. At least that's why I think. What I liked the most about it was the ending. It made me laugh so hard that I couldn't stop doing it. I think that you did a great job with this Short Story.

One of the reasons why I'm reviewing this Short Story is because you are also a Reviewer. But the main reason why is because this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Hello Dartagnan,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This was a very, very good poem. One of the best ones that I have read in a long time. That's how good it was. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. It was that good. What I liked the most about it was how you used the Prompt words within it. I also liked that you rhymed the second and fourth lines. And I really liked that you broke them up into four-line paragraphs.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Hello Dartagnan,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

I'm not just reviewing this poem because you are also a Reviewer. No, I'm also doing it because this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

Now for the good part: the review. I liked this poem a whole lot. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good. What I liked the most about it is how you used the Prompt words in it.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Hello Pat ~ starting a new journey,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

A very, very good poem. I would have given it a three-point five rating if I could do it. That's how good it is. What I liked the most about it is that it's centered. I also liked how you started it with an old adult poem. Making it look like the rest of it was going to be your take on it. Then suddenly it changes from that. I also liked the way it ended.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of Halloween  
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Hello Pat ~ starting a new journey,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

There are two reasons why I selected this poem to review. One reason is that you are also a Reviewer. But the main reason is that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

Now for the review itself. I think that you did a very, very good job with this poem. What I liked the most about it was that you centered it and that you colorized it. I think that it's a lot easier to read them if you do either one of them. But to do both is even better. At least that's what I think.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello ♫~ Kenword~♫,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This is one of the best short stories that I have read in a long time. the only reason why I didn't give it a higher rating is because of one thing or is it to things. I'm referring to your thoughts that have quotation marks around them. Personally, I think thoughts are dialogue. But no one else does. Either way, they shouldn't be in quotation marks. The second part of what I'm not sure of is which one is a thought. It reads like it's the first one. but it could be the second half or both.

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Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of Joyous Morning  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello ♫~ Kenword~♫,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

What can I write about this poem except that I liked it very, very much. It may have only been six lines with the first couple as a single word. But they were six good lines. I think that you did a very good job with this poem. There are two things that I liked the most about this poem. One is that it's centered. I think that it's easier to read if they are centered. The second is that it's colorized. Especially, if it's a color like this one. It makes it easier to read too. At least I think that it is.

Two reasons why I selected this poem to review. One reason is that you are also a Reviewer. The second reason is that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a happy anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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