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Hello Alextrax52,

These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

This was a very weird Short Story. Don't get me wrong. I like weird.


What I Liked the Most About It

That Carole had a dream. And she made it come true. it may have been a very weird dream. But it was still a dream come true.


Your Characters

I liked your main character a whole lot. But I didn't like her old boss. Getting fired for eating. That sounds illegal to me.


Location, Location, Location

I'm not exactly sure where this Short Story takes place. It could be in a big city or a small one. True, it reads like it's kind of a big one. But a little more detail would have been nice.


What I Didn’t Like About It

The length of it. I don't like it when a Short Story is so long. If it's a chapter in a book, that's okay length-wise. But for a Short Story, I don't think that it is. Of course, that's just my opinion.


Anything Wrong with It

It looks like you have a lot of problems with grammar. Missing periods, commas, etc. Run-on sentences that should be broken up into several sentences. Punctuation that should be inside the quotes of the dialogue instead of behind it. Thinking that shouldn't have quotes around them. They should be italicized instead. there were also two commas together. That should have been only one.

I'm very bad at grammar too. But with me, it is mostly tenses. What I am trying to write is that I could be wrong about some of this. I don't think that I am, though. But I could be. You may want to check into that.


Last thoughts

I liked this story very, very much. The only reason why I didn't give a higher rating is because of its length. And the grammar problems that I think that you have.



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Hello lezismore-with 2020 vision,

These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

I like this story a lot. once I started reading it I couldn't stop. that's how good it was.


What I Liked the Most About It

The suspense. It kept me wanting to continue reading to find out what was going to happen next.


Your Characters

You did a very good job with your characters. Especially, when it comes to giving them names. I like that most of all. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name. It makes them feel more real if they have one. At least that's what I think.


Location, Location, Location

Of course, the graveyard where this story is taking place. A little bit more detail would have been nice. But I still think that you did a great job with it.


What I Didn’t Like About It

This is a hard one for me. That's because I liked all of it.


Anything Wrong with It

it looks like you have made a lot of mistakes with this Short Story. There may be more. But these are the ones that I noticed and think are:

“I don’t want to keep them you understand,” she had emphasized, “I merely wish to retrieve an item from the urn, and then you can put them back again.” There were a few like this one.

and the grave dug deeper The word 'the' is missing from you Short Story.

shouldn’t shovels and spaces be shovels and spades Spade instead of spaces.

“Traffic can be a trial.” agreed Yak. should be “Traffic can be a trial,” agreed Yak.

ceramic use should be ceramic urn

and the vortex became denser The word 'the' is missing.

“That not fair you always…” should be “That not fair. You always…”

The Skeleton paused for a short period, carefully considering its choices then finally rose to its fee and reluctantly should be The Skeleton paused for a short period, carefully considering its choices, then finally rose to its feet and reluctantly



Last thoughts

The reason why I didn't give it a better rating is because of what's above. Overall, I think that you have done a great job with this Short Story. But it looks like you have made quite a few errors with it.



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Hello GhostFerno,

These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

This is a very interesting novel so far. I liked it a whole lot. It was kind of confusing at first. At least it was for me. But it got a lot better after the Prologue chapter.


What I Liked the Most About It

The Prologue. I liked that you didn't write about the characters and what is going to happen to them like most Prologues are. You dived right into the story. The only thing that I think is wrong is calling it Chapter (0). I don't think that's right. It should be called either Prologue or The Prologue. You might want to check into that.


Your Characters

I like that you gave Adrian and Lawrence names. Personally, I would have given their parents names too.


Location, Location, Location

You didn't go into too much detail when it comes to locations so far. But that's okay. It's a novel instead of a Short Story. With a Short Story, you are very limited when it comes to details. But with a novel, you can stretch it out. So, you can take your time on working on the detail.


What I Didn’t Like About It

The Author Notes: I know this is only your first draft. But I still don't think that you should be putting Author Notes in there. When you finish this novel, you're not going to be sending them to the Publisher, are you? I don't think that you should put them here either. But that's just my opinion.


Anything Wrong with It

I found a few things that I think are errors. Other than The Prologue that I mentioned above, it looks like there are others. At least I think that they are. I used to put single quotation marks around my thoughts too. Then it was pointed out to me that we no longer do that. Now we use italicize instead of quotation marks. shouldn't it be Lawrence smiled and said, "yes." instead of Lawrence smiled and said yes? He and his brother is another error that I used to make a lot. Unfortunately, I still do. But only with the 'me' versus 'I.' I think it should be his brother and him. You may want to check into that too. The last thing that I think is an error is the "..." that you had a lot of in this novel so far. What are they?


Last thoughts

Overall, I think that you have done a great job with this novel. And I hope that you continue working on it until it's finished.



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Hello LegendaryMasK❤,

I am reviewing this script for The Monthly Script Writing Contest. These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

You did a very good job with this script. At least I think that you did. True, there were some problems with it. But that doesn't mean it wasn't a bad script. It just means that it could have been a lot better.


The Story Itself

I liked this story a whole lot. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good. What did I like the most about it? Why did I like so much? Both of these questions have the same answer. It's because of what this story is about aka the Coronavirus.


Was It Formatted Correctly?

No, it wasn't. There are several problems when it comes to formating this script. The first thing that I noticed was your opening paragraph explaining the scene forthcoming. That shouldn't be there. Instead, it should start out with the Words FADE IN. And if this is for a TV script, then it should be TEASER, TAG, or ACT number. The next thing I noticed was there are no Scene Headings. Instead, you used Act One; Scene One: etc. And you centered them. That's another no-no when it comes to scripts. I thought that I explained Scene Headings in my Script Samples. But it looks like I need to check them out again. What I think is the biggest problem with this script is your Character Names and Dialogue. The names appear to be pretty good. Except for when you sigh. That should be on the next line down. Speaking of lines, there should be no spaces between the Character Names, Parenthesis, and Dialogue. There should also be no Quotation Marks around the dialogue either. And you missed some of them anyway. I understand talking to yourself and thinking out loud because I do that a lot too. But it shouldn't be shown like this in scripts.


Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words

If this was a Short Story then Quotation Marks are to be used for dialogue. But not in scripts. I don't think that they are a grammar error when you use them like this. But I could be wrong about that. You might want to check into that.


Any Last Thoughts

I also noticed that this is your Anniversary month with us. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.



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Review of The Team  
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Hello Odessa Molinari smiling,

I am reviewing this script for The Monthly Script Writing Contest. These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

What I liked the most about this script is what it's about. Not they are writers for a Daytime Drama, even though I do like that too, but because of why they are doing it the way that they are aka because of the Coronavirus.


The Story Itself

They are writers for a Daytime Drama. And they doing it through Video Conversing. I liked that you used the current problems that we are all facing right now a whole lot.


Was It Formatted Correctly?

There are several problems with the formatting for this script. The first thing that I noticed was with your Scene Heading. There shouldn't be I hyphen after INT. or EXT. It wasn't too long after that noticed your next problem. It's the words FADE INs that you used before each Scene Heading. Not only didn't you have a FADE OUT at the end of those scenes, but they shouldn't be there. If this was a movie then there would be one IN at the beginning and one OUT at the end. And if this was a television script, there would be a TEASER, TAG, or ACT before the IN and an OUT at the end of it. The biggest problem with the formatting I noticed is with your Character Names and Dialogue. It looks like you centered them.


Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words

It doesn't look like you made any grammar, spelling, etc. errors with this script. But if you did, I didn't notice them.


Any Last Thoughts

I think that this is a great idea for a television series. Especially, since they are writers for a Daytime Drama. There have been a few other ones like it. Including a well-known one about a comedy skit series aka The Dick Van Dyke Show. But I don't think that there has been one for a Daytime Drama.



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Hello willow,

These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

By the time you finish reading this review, you may think that I didn't like this Short Story. But you would be wrong about that. I liked the story very, very much. The story isn't the problem, though.


What I Liked the Most About It

The theme of it. That's what I liked the most about this Short Story.


Your Characters

You gave most of your characters in this story a name. And I like that a lot. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that makes them more real if they have a name. At first, I was wondering if you were going to name the dad. But you did. The only one you didn't give a name to was yourself. I understand why you didn't do it since you are telling this story. But it can be done. You did it with Ricky. Something different could have been done for you. Maybe, one of your kids could have used it in some way or if they are too young to be calling you by your first name, then Ricky could have done it. How about when he was commenting on the bunnies getting out of their new home.


Location, Location, Location

I think that you did a very good job with this story. True, I don't know where this house is. But I do know it's a house thanks to the detail you have given us.


What I Didn’t Like About It

True, there quite a few problems with this Short Story. But that I don't care about that. What I didn't like was how it ended. It reads to me like you just stopped writing it. You kind of ended it with your last paragraph. But there are still a lot of questions about what happened to the bunnies, Bunnyville, etc.


Anything Wrong with It

There are a lot of things wrong with it. Most of it is with missing commas and a lot of single spaces between the quotation marks within the dialogue. But there are a lot of other problems too. It started with the first paragraph that was broken up with Paragraph Breaks several times. That is true one or more times during it too. And it ended with the ending.


Last thoughts

Why did I Rate this Short Story like this? It's because of what is wrong with it. I make a lot of mistakes myself. So, that doesn't affect my rating decision that much, if any, if there are only a few mistakes. But this one has a lot more a few.


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Hello Charlie Carrol,

These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.


Overall Impression

This was a very, very good Short Story. I liked it a whole lot. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good.


What I Liked the Most About It

It kept me in suspense not knowing what was going to come next. That's what I like the most about this Short Story. I also liked how you didn't really reveal your main character's gender until the end.


Your Characters

Personally, I think that you should have given your main character in this story a name. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have one. A name for the mother and father would have been nice too. Yes, I know that isn't easy to do with First Person Singular. At least I think that's what it's called. But whatever the tense, it can be done. Maybe something like 'my dad, George' or 'my mom, Helen.' Especially, after they get into their teens when most teens call them by their names instead of their parental titles.


Location, Location, Location

I'm not too sure where this story takes place. I know it's somewhere where there's a bath, a shower, and a bath again. But other than that, I'm not sure where it's at. Is it an apartment, or a duplex, or a house? A little bit more detail about that would have been nice.


What I Didn’t Like About It

Another one I'm not sure about. This is a hard one because there wasn't really anything that I didn't like about it. I think that you have done a very good job with this story.


Anything Wrong with It

There is nothing wrong with this story. At least I didn't read it. If there was any, I didn't read it.


Last thoughts

Why didn't I give this story a better Rating? It's because of what I mentioned above. I liked it and the theme of it. But that wasn't enough. It kept me interested in it from the beginning to the end. And I liked that I finally found out this was from a female's POV. But even without what I mentioned above, I don't think I would have given it a five-Rating. A four or a four-point-five, but not a five.


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Review of Squirrel Survivor  
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Hello Angus,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This is one of the best poems that I have read in a long time. There are two things that I liked the most about this poem. One is that you centered it. The other one is that you colorized it. Either one of them makes it easier to read. But together it's even better. At least I think that it is. I do have one question, though. Was there a reason why you colorized this poem as you have done?

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Hello Maryann,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

You wanted a Rating of One for this poem. And I'm going to give it to you this time. Not because you asked for it, but because I didn't understand it. Maybe it's because I don't understand this style of Poetry. But I was very confused about this poem. I know that it's about Spring. And that it's related to the other three seasons of the year. But other than that, I'm not sure what it means. What you are trying to mean.

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Hello Maryann,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

I'm sorry, but I can't rate this poem only a two like you want me to do. It's a lot better than that. At least I think that it was. In fact, I think that you have done a great job with this poem. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop doing it. It was that good. The only thing that I didn't like about it was the title. This may have been your first poem for this contest. But I think the title for this poem should have been, Bad Roses, because that's what this poem was about.

There are two reasons why I chose this poem to review. One is that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary. The second reason is that you are also a Reviewer.

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Hello Thankful Sonali WDC POWER!,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This is one of the best poems that I have read in a long time. I liked it very much. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good.

What I liked the most about it was that it was centered. I think that it's easier to read if it's centered.

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Hello Thankful Sonali WDC POWER!,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

There are two reasons why I chose this poem to review. One is that you are also a Reviewer. But the main one is that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

What I like the most in this poem are two things. One of them is that you centered it. And I think that it's easier to read when it's centered. The other thing is that you used dialogue in it. There isn't any in most poems. But I have seen a few like this one.

It does appear that you may have missed a couple of rhyming lines. At least it looks like they are to mean. In the fourth group of lines, 'anyone' doesn't rhyme with 'run'. Does it? And in the seventh group of lines, I don't think that 'advice' rhymes with 'career-wise'.

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Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Angus,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

I liked this Short Story very much. It may only be fifty-five words long, but it was still a good read. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. That's how good it was. What I liked the most about it was how it ended. I like a sudden twist at the end of my short stories too.

It's true, that I only selected this poem to review because you are also a Reviewer. But that's not the only reason, though. I also chose this one because this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of The Old Man  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello 1,

I have just finished reading your Short Story, 2. These are only my opinions.

This one a very close one. I liked this story very, very much. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good. the only reason why I'm not giving it a five-rating is that in paragraph one you have a missing a word. Most his time was spent roaming the countryside, should be Most of his time was spent roaming the countryside, I know that this one is missing is because when I Pasted it in this review my Grammarly pointed it out.

I think there was one among the dialogue too. But I can't find it right now. Other than one or two missing words, I think that you did a great job with this story.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello River in Isolation,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This was a very good Short Story too. I liked it a whole lot. What I liked the most about it was the ending. And how your main character got even with the abusive woman behind him. At least I think that it's a him from the way it read. But I'm not sure about that. That's not the reason why I didn't rate this one better. It was because there are a couple of paragraphs that are cut off part of the way through them.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of The Shortcut  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Hello River in Isolation,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

I liked this Short Story a lot. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop until I finished it. That's how good it was. Unfortunately, there were a lot of problems with it. Most of them had to do with grammar. Especially, with commas, quotation marks, and periods. I'm far from an expert when it comes to grammar. As far as you can get. But if I noticed them, then others who are experts will notice them too. Like whoever the judge was for that day's Prompt. I also noticed at least one missing word. You may want to re-read this story again.

While I was looking for something to review, I noticed that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary. This being your Anniversary Month isn't the only reason why I chose this Short Story to review. I also did it because you are also a Reviewer too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of Midnight call  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Tiger Cub 🔱,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This is one of the best short stories that I have read in a long, long time. Especially, since at first, I didn't think that I was going to like it. But once the dialogue started, then it got better. a hundred percent better. At least that's why I think. What I liked the most about it was the ending. It made me laugh so hard that I couldn't stop doing it. I think that you did a great job with this Short Story.

One of the reasons why I'm reviewing this Short Story is because you are also a Reviewer. But the main reason why is because this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Dartagnan,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This was a very, very good poem. One of the best ones that I have read in a long time. That's how good it was. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. It was that good. What I liked the most about it was how you used the Prompt words within it. I also liked that you rhymed the second and fourth lines. And I really liked that you broke them up into four-line paragraphs.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of The Fishing Date  
Review by PureSciFi
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Dartagnan,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

I'm not just reviewing this poem because you are also a Reviewer. No, I'm also doing it because this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

Now for the good part: the review. I liked this poem a whole lot. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good. What I liked the most about it is how you used the Prompt words in it.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Hello Pat ~ starting a new journey,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

A very, very good poem. I would have given it a three-point five rating if I could do it. That's how good it is. What I liked the most about it is that it's centered. I also liked how you started it with an old adult poem. Making it look like the rest of it was going to be your take on it. Then suddenly it changes from that. I also liked the way it ended.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of Halloween  
Review by PureSciFi
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Pat ~ starting a new journey,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

There are two reasons why I selected this poem to review. One reason is that you are also a Reviewer. But the main reason is that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a Happy Anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

Now for the review itself. I think that you did a very, very good job with this poem. What I liked the most about it was that you centered it and that you colorized it. I think that it's a lot easier to read them if you do either one of them. But to do both is even better. At least that's what I think.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of Lindsey's Jewels  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello ♫~ Kenword~♫,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

This is one of the best short stories that I have read in a long time. the only reason why I didn't give it a higher rating is because of one thing or is it to things. I'm referring to your thoughts that have quotation marks around them. Personally, I think thoughts are dialogue. But no one else does. Either way, they shouldn't be in quotation marks. The second part of what I'm not sure of is which one is a thought. It reads like it's the first one. but it could be the second half or both.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of Joyous Morning  
Review by PureSciFi
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello ♫~ Kenword~♫,

This review is brought to you by the Contest Entries Raid. These are only my opinions.

What can I write about this poem except that I liked it very, very much. It may have only been six lines with the first couple as a single word. But they were six good lines. I think that you did a very good job with this poem. There are two things that I liked the most about this poem. One is that it's centered. I think that it's easier to read if they are centered. The second is that it's colorized. Especially, if it's a color like this one. It makes it easier to read too. At least I think that it is.

Two reasons why I selected this poem to review. One reason is that you are also a Reviewer. The second reason is that this is your Anniversary Month. And I wanted to wish you a happy anniversary. Happy Anniversary.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this poem with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of Pick Me  
Review by PureSciFi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello willow,

I have just finished reading your Poem, Pick Me. These are only my opinions.

You are the first one to accept this challenge. And I really wanted to give you a five-rating just for that. But I can't. That wouldn't be far to you, to me, and to anyone else who accepts this challenge. I would still do it, though. If I thought that it deserved it. But I can't with this poem.

Don't get me wrong. I liked this poem very, very much. You have done a very good job with it. At least I think that you have. What I liked the best about it is that you rhymed every second and fourth line. But that is what I didn't like about it too. I think that if you are going to do that, then you need to break them up into paragraphs with four lines each. It will just make it look better, I think.

When I was going into your Portfolio to get this poem to review, I noticed this is your anniversary month too. Happy Anniversary.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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Review of New Sig  
Review by PureSciFi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello dragonwoman,

This review is brought to you by the February Review Raid. These are only my opinions.

I like this image a whole lot. What I like the most about it is the baby dragon that she's holding. It really does look like she loves it. Where did you get this image? Did you find it, create it yourself, or had someone else do it for you? Do you have any more like it? If you do, I would be very interested in looking at some of them too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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