These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.
By the time you finish reading this review, you may think that I didn't like this Short Story. But you would be wrong about that. I liked the story very, very much. The story isn't the problem, though.
What I Liked the Most About It
The theme of it. That's what I liked the most about this Short Story.
You gave most of your characters in this story a name. And I like that a lot. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that makes them more real if they have a name. At first, I was wondering if you were going to name the dad. But you did. The only one you didn't give a name to was yourself. I understand why you didn't do it since you are telling this story. But it can be done. You did it with Ricky. Something different could have been done for you. Maybe, one of your kids could have used it in some way or if they are too young to be calling you by your first name, then Ricky could have done it. How about when he was commenting on the bunnies getting out of their new home.
Location, Location, Location
I think that you did a very good job with this story. True, I don't know where this house is. But I do know it's a house thanks to the detail you have given us.
What I Didnâ€™t Like About It
True, there quite a few problems with this Short Story. But that I don't care about that. What I didn't like was how it ended. It reads to me like you just stopped writing it. You kind of ended it with your last paragraph. But there are still a lot of questions about what happened to the bunnies, Bunnyville, etc.
Anything Wrong with It
There are a lot of things wrong with it. Most of it is with missing commas and a lot of single spaces between the quotation marks within the dialogue. But there are a lot of other problems too. It started with the first paragraph that was broken up with Paragraph Breaks several times. That is true one or more times during it too. And it ended with the ending.
Why did I Rate this Short Story like this? It's because of what is wrong with it. I make a lot of mistakes myself. So, that doesn't affect my rating decision that much, if any, if there are only a few mistakes. But this one has a lot more a few.
If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.
Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.
PureSciFi aka SpaceFaction