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#4468700

Review of the Love of my Life

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello Billy the Kid,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eleventh year with us.

Overall Impression:

I don't think that I have ever seen a poem like this written before. Is this the kind of poem that I don't know about? Don't get me wrong? This might read like I don't like this poem. but I do. I liked it a whole lot.

The Poem Itself:

Most poems are only a few words per line. But this one has a few hundred. a lot of writers indent the first lines of their Short Story paragraphs. I'm one of them. But this poem is just the opposite. It's indented after the first line. That's why I liked this poem so much. It's different than any other poem I have read before.

How It Made Me Feel:

This poem made me feel sad. Sad because he's not going to get what he wants, her.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

No errors that I could find. The only thing that might be one is how it was written. I don't think that it is. But you might want to look into that.

Any Last Thoughts:

Do you have any other poems like this one? If so, I would be very interested in reading some of them too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4468699

Review of Silence

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello Michael Mulcahy,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your ninth year with us.

Overall Impression:

What can I say about this poem except for that I liked it. I didn't understand what it had to do with Romance/Love, though. did I miss the meaning of this poem?

The Poem Itself:

I am not a big fan of Poetry because I'm not very good at it myself. But I know what I like to read. And I liked this poem a whole lot. I think that you have done a very good job with it.

How It Made Me Feel:

It makes me feel happy. Happy that I have gotten the chance to read it.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

I'm not sure, but it may be an error that you didn't capitalize most of your lines. then again, you didn't end them with punctuation either. So, I may be wrong about the capitalization. You may want to look into that.

Any Last Thoughts:

February is the month for Romance/Love. What says that better than Poetry. that's one of the reasons why I selected this poem to read and review. Another reason why is because this is your anniversary month with us too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4468698

Review of The Truth is Serrated

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello esaul,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fourteenth year with us.

Overall Impression:

If I read this poem right, it's broken up into four sentence paragraphs. Yet you write it as a one sentence per line paragraph. Is this the kind of Poetry that I don't know about?

The Poem Itself:

The title description doesn't match the poem. Don't get me wrong. I liked this poem a whole lot. I just don't understand what the title description has to do with the poem. It doesn't look like it does to me.

How It Make Me Feel:

This poem made me feel good. I'm so happy that I got the chance to read it.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

No errors that I can read. Unless it's because it's one long one paragraph. I don't think that it is. But it might be. You may want to check into that.

Any Last Thoughts:

February is the month for Romance/Love. That's one of the reasons why I'm reviewing this poem. I'm also doing it because this is your anniversary month.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4468697

Review of A bird

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello -B-,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.

Overall Impression:

You have done a very good job with this poem. At least I think that you have.

The Poem Itself:

At first, I didn't understand the title and title description had in common. I thought it might be about Puppy Love or First Love. But then I started reading it. Now I understand it is about a bird.

How It Made Me Feel:

I'm not sure how I feel about this poem. Not because I don't feel anything about it. It's just the opposite. I can't decide how I feel the most about it.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

It looks like you misspelled 'is' in 'Let is sit in your nest.' Shouldn't it be 'it' instead?

Any Last Thoughts:

What I liked the most about this poem is how the title and title description reflected what the poem was about. but it leads the reading into believing it's about young love. That's why I liked this poem very much.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4468696

Review of Come home

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello M.J Poe,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eleventh year with us.

Overall Impression:

This is one of the best poems that I have read in a long time. I think that you did a great job with it. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.

The Poem Itself:

The title for this poem makes it read like this individual may come home someday. But the poem reads like they have passed away. Which is it? I'm also a little confused about who is waiting for who. It reads like a man is waiting for a woman. But it could be the other way around.

How It Make Me Feel:

I'm very sad. That's how this poem makes me feel. I feel sad because one lover is waiting for the other to come back to them or to join them in Heaven.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

It looks like you misspelled the word 'futrue.' Should it be future instead?

Any Last Thoughts:

Do you have any other poems as good, or better, than this one? If so, I would be very interested in reading some of them too. This poem was that good.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4468694

Review of Postcards

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello T.L.Finch,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fourteenth year with us.

Overall Impression:

This is one of the best, if not the best, poems I have ever read. I think that you have done a great job with this one. Do you have any other poems as good or better than this one? If so, I would be interested in reading some of them too. This one is that good.

The Poem Itself:

What I liked the best about this poem is how it is written. I like that you centered it. It makes it easier to read if it's centered. At least I think that it is. I'm not a big fan of Poetry because I'm not very good at it myself. But I know what I like to read. And I liked this poem very, very much.

How It Made Me Feel:

Very sad. I'm sad because he only has the postcards to remember her by. I am also happy too. Happy that I have gotten the chance to read this poem.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

No errors that I have read. I think that you have done a great job in writing this poem.

Any Last Thoughts:

It's true that I only chose this poem because of its genre of Romance/Love. But that's not the only reason I am reviewing it now. I'm also doing it because this is your anniversary month with us.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4468378

Review of Frozen heart of blue

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello JoyceFox,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your Tenth year with us.

Overall Impression:

This is a very interesting poem. I liked it a lot. At least I did what parts of it I could understand. Maybe it's because it's one big paragraph. Personally, I what have broken up these one sentence sentences into groups of three to six. it probably would have been fours. Isn't that what most poems are broken into?

The Poem Itself:

What is this poem about? I'm not sure.

How It Made Me Feel:

I'm not sure how I feel about this poem. If I had to pick a feeling, it would probably be confused. I was very confused about this poem.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

It doesn't look like there are any errors with this poem. The only thing that might be is the length of this one paragraph. Unless this is the kind of poem that is supposed to be written like this. Then I am the one who is wrong.

Any Last Thoughts:

One reason why I chose this poem is that this is the month for genre Romance/Love. but it's not the only one, though. I am also reviewing it because this is your anniversary month.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4441441

Review of The Other Side of the Clouds

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello ♥tHiNg♥,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your seventeenth year with us.

Overall Impression:

What I like the best about this story is who is writing it. Not the narrator part of it, but who the main character is. it's written from the POV of a cow. I liked that very much.

The Story Itself:

This was the ultimate travel destination. Only it's a one-way destination. Unless you believe in reincarnation.

Location, Location, Location:

At first, I wasn't sure where this story took place. It didn't take me long to find out where it is: It's Heaven aka the ultimate one-way destination.

Your Characters:

I can understand why you didn't give this character a name since she is a cow. Most cows do have names, though. If I was writing this story I would have given her a name. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke:

There is no dialogue in this story, but I'm not too surprised about that. After all, this story is about a cow. Cows can't speak, but they can think. That's what she is doing in this story. She's thinking. Personally, I believe that thinking is also a dialogue. It just a difference between using your mouth or mind to do the talking.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

No errors that I noticed. That doesn't mean there aren't any. It does means that if there are any I didn't notice them.

Any Last Thoughts:

I noticed that you got an Awardicon for this story. Does that mean that you won this contest?

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4441439

Review of Strange

Review by PureSciFi

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello Wanderer,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your first year with us.

Overall Impression:

This is a very interesting read. Don't get me wrong. True, this might read like I don't like this story, but I do. I liked it a whole lot.

The Story Itself:

I'm not sure what this story is about, or what it has to do with the Travel genre. I've read it several times, and I still don't understand it or what you are trying to do it.

Location, Location, Location:

Like the story itself, I'm not sure where this story this place. It doesn't look like any are mentioned in this story.

Your Characters:

Whoever is narrating this story is the main character in it, but no name was given to this individual. If I was writing this story, I would have given this individual a name somehow. I know that isn't easy sometimes, but it can be done. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke:

There was only one line of dialogue in this story, but I think that it's more of a thought than dialogue. There's nothing wrong with that. I'm one of those who thinks that thinking is also dialogue. It just was done with thoughts instead of verbally.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

It looks like the one line of dialogue is done incorrectly. If it is dialogue it should be enclosed in double Quotation Marks instead of single ones. On the other hand, if it's a thought then it should either be italicized or left alone like the rest of the story.

Any Last Thoughts:

I'm very curious about one thing, though. What is this story supposed to be about, and what does it have to do with the Travel genre?

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4441438

Review of Attitude: The Re-Making of a Family

Review by PureSciFi

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello SWPoet,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eleventh year with us.

Overall Impression:

This is one of the best-written stories that I have read in a long time. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. It's that good.

The Story Itself:

At first, it looked like this story was about Emma being the one going to court because of something that she had done. Even by the end of the first paragraph, it looked like I was right about it. It was right after that, that I realized she's the lawyer in this case. At least I thought that was what she was. Once again I was wrong. She's a Social Worker, not a lawyer. You kept me guessing who Emma was and why she was there. I like that very much.

Location, Location, Location:

I'm not sure where this small Southern town is at, but most of this story took place in the courtroom building. Only the last few paragraphs were outside of the courtroom.

Your Characters:

Of course, Emma is the main character in this story. This story revolves around her. She's not the only one though. The family she's trying to help is also a big part of it too. I liked that you gave your characters a name. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke:

There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story, but what there was looked good. At least it did to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

It looks like you have made at least a couple of mistakes that I noticed. Shouldn't it be 'They formed' instead of the 'formed?' Also, shouldn't it be just one 'to have' instead of two? I think you might have made a mistake with tenses too. Most of it is written in Past Tense, but at least one time you used Present Tense. You might want to re-read this story again.

Any Last Thoughts:

I noticed that you wrote this story for one of the WDC monthly contest. How did you do in this contest? Did you win it? If you didn't, you should have. This story was that good.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4441437

Review of That Room in Venice

Review by PureSciFi

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Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

Hello N. Bukczevnikova,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eighth year with us.

Overall Impression:

I liked this story a whole lot. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.

The Story Itself:

This was a very straightforward simple story. It's about an eighteen-year-old woman who goes to Venice, and what happened to her while she was there.

Location, Location, Location:

You did a very good job at describing several places in Venice. At least I think that you did.

Your Characters:

I'm wondering about something. You gave names to the family that you stayed with, in Venice, but you didn't give yourself a name. I liked that you gave the other characters a name, but if I was writing this story I would have somehow given myself a name too. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke:

There was a lot of thinking in this story, but only one line of dialogue. What dialogue there was looked good. At least it did to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

It looks like you missed an 'a' in the first paragraph. Shouldn't it be 'a free' instead of just 'free?' Another mistake I think you have made is mixing your Tenses. You did that a lot in this story. About half it was written in Past Tense, but the other half was done in Present Tense.

Any Last Thoughts:

one of the reasons I selected this Travel genre story is because I wanted to know more about Venice. I didn't learn too much about it, but I'm still very glad that I chose it to review. I liked it that much.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4441227

Review of My Inner Voice

Review by PureSciFi

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Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

Hello Cpt Aravan,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fifth year with us.

Overall Impression:

Personally, I would have separated these paragraphs, lines, by a space. I think that it's easier to read if you do that. Otherwise, I think that you have done a great job with this story.

The Story Itself:

It's not unusual for us to hear voices in our head. It happens to all of us. What you do with those voices is what this story is about. The voices are telling you that kill Derrick before he kills you, but you don't listen to them.

Location, Location, Location:

I'm not sure where this story takes place. I know that Lake Michigan is near them, but that's all I know about it. A little bit more detail would have been nice.

Your Characters:

Derrick is the only name mentioned in this story, but he isn't the main one though. The main two are the voice and who they are talking to. That's one thing I would have done differently if I had written this story. I would have given them a name too. True, that might be hard to do sometimes, but it can be done. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke:

Most of this story is dialogue. That's okay with me, but it might not be for some, if not a lot of, Reviewers. They will say that this is telling instead of showing. That you should be showing instead of telling more. The dialogue itself looked good. At least it does to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

As far as I know, there isn't anything wrong with a mostly dialogue story, especially since we have a contest that totally is, but it might be. You might want to check into that.

Any Last Thoughts:

Does Derrick kill you? Is it the other way around? Was the Voice right? Do you kill Derrick before he kills you? These are just a few questions that need to be answered. Have you answered them in another story?

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4441226

Review of The Handoff

Review by PureSciFi

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello Tony Oaks,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eighth year with us.

Overall Impression:

What I liked the most about this Short Story is how it is written. It's one of the best-written stories I have read in a long time. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. It's that good.

The Story Itself:

This reads like it's a two-part story without it being one. The first part is about Tribaud, and the second part is about Jacques. As the title indicates Tribaud handed off a package to Jacques. This was well written. At least I think that it is.

Location, Location, Location:

The Amiens Cathedral is the only location mentioned in this story, but it's not the only one though. Before and after Tribaud gets there are also settings too.

Your Characters:

Tribaud and Jacques are both the main characters in this story. At least I think that they are because they are both in it about the same length of time. I liked that you gave your characters a name. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke:

There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. Most of it wasn't dialogue, but what little there was looked good. At least it does to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

I'm not sure if it's an error or not, but I think that it is. I think that you are supposed to separate the dialogue between the different individuals. You might want to check into that.

Any Last Thoughts:

What happened to them after the handoff? Did Tribaud get burned? Jacques did get away, didn't he? There are a lot of unanswered questions. Have you answered them in another story?

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4441225

Review of The Phone Booth

Review by PureSciFi

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello Beach Rat,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.

Overall Impression:

This is one of the best short stories I have read in a long time. I loved it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good.

The Story Itself:

Sarah is a new employee. Once she is shown around the place she's put in charge of the story while her boss, and owner, Arnie leaves. Since it's Tuesday, it should be an easy shift. For the most part, it is. At least it is until the end of it.

Location, Location, Location:

Arnie's Stationery Store is the main location in this story. It's also the only one. Only I don't think it's just a Stationery Store.

Your Characters:

I liked that you gave both of your characters a name. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke:

Most of this story isn't dialogue, but there is a little bit of it. What dialogue there is in this story looked good. At least it did to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

It looks like you made an error in the first paragraph of this story. Shouldn't it be'the rack' instead of 'rack.' Other than that, I didn't notice anything wrong with it.

Any Last Thoughts:

This story just sort of ended. It ended with a cliffhanger, but it did just end. I like that a whole lot. Who is the one who suddenly disappeared? How did he do it? Where did he go? These questions and many more need an answer. Did you ever answer them in another story?

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4441221

Review of Chaos at the Chorus

Review by PureSciFi

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello Dr Taher writes again!,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your sixteenth year with us.

Overall Impression:

If you read the rest of this review, you might think that I didn't like it, but I did. I liked it very much. You did a really good job with this Short Story. At least I think that you did.

The Story Itself:

There isn't too much Action in this story. It doesn't even look like it's an Adventure either. It's the story of a young girl named Alice who turns the wrong way and causes a domino effect with the others there.

Location, Location, Location:

I'm not sure where this story takes place. I think that it's a gymnasium, but I'm not sure. A little more detail would have been nice. Yes, I know that's hard to do with a Word Count Limitation, but it can be done.

Your Characters:

Of course, Alice is the main character in this story. After all, this story revolves around her. She's not the only one. There are several others, but they don't have names. Personally, I would have found a way to give them names too. I liked that you gave her a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke:

Very little dialogue in this story. That's understandable considering the length of it. What little dialogue there is looks good. At least it did to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

No mistakes I could find. If there are any, I didn't read any. Good job. Grammar, Spelling, etc. is what makes a story good or bad. If it's done correctly, like this one, then it's good.

Any Last Thoughts:

Have you written any other stories as good, or better, than this one? If so, I would be very interested in reading some of them too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

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#4441219

Review of The Brief Psychic Age Part One

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello Eli Crow,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your seventh year with us.

Overall Impression:

This is a very good start to a much longer story. I liked it very much. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. It's that good.

The Story Itself:

The way this story begins it's a little confusing to me. I understand what you are trying to write, but not what it means. Maybe it will get better with part two, three, etc.

Location, Location, Location:

I'm not sure where the location is at in the first section of this story. It reads like it's a village, town, city, etc., but it's not very well detailed. The second one is a little better, but it's not much better. A little bit more detail would have been nice. Maybe we will get more detail in future parts.

Your Characters:

It looks like Magdeline is going to be the main character in this story, but I'm not sure. someone else might be the main one, and Magdeline maybe just a secondary one, but this reads like she is the main one. I liked that you gave her a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke:

There wasn't too much dialogue in this story. What little there was looked good to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

No grammar problems that I noticed. I like that a lot. A story is easier to read if it's done correctly. At least I think that it is.

Any Last Thoughts:

How many parts are in this Short Story? Is it part of a much longer story? Maybe it's the beginning of a novel? You got me hooked on part one. If the others are as good as this one, I am very interested in reading them too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4441218

Review of The Ranger's Mark: A RoM Short Story

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello EOIWriting,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fourth year with us.

Overall Impression:

A very suspenseful story. I liked it very much. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. It's that good. Well done.

The Story Itself:

Overall, I think this is a nicely written story. It's the story about an assassin that has been hired by a slave girl to kill her owner. It looks like a very simple story, but it isn't. I like that a whole lot.

Location, Location, Location:

I think you have done a great job in describing the location of this story. At least you have with the rooftops. A little bit more about the city, village, kingdom, etc. would have been nice.

Your Characters:

At first, I didn't think you would introduce your victim in this story. You did Orion right from the beginning, but not Spencer. It was about halfway through the story before you introduced him. I liked that you gave your characters a name. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke:

You have done a great job with your dialogue too. At least I think that you have. The first half is action, which is good for an Action/Adventure Short Story, and the second half is dialogue. I like that a whole lot too. Personally, I try to write my short stories half and a half. One-half action. The other half dialogue.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

There is one mistake that you have made when it comes to Tenses. Shouldn't it be 'was' instead of 'is?' Also, you made an error with a thought too. Thoughts shouldn't be in quotation marks. They should be either italicized or left alone. I think they can also be underlined in short stories, but I'm not sure about that. You might want to look into that.

Any Last Thoughts:

It looks like from the title that this is part of a novel. Is that true? Have you got any more stories like this one? If you do, I would be very interested in reading some of them too if I can.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4433731

Review of Romantic Encounters of the Animal Kind

Review by PureSciFi

Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

This is a Screenwriting Image. Only the scriptwriting part can barely be seen.

Hello Schnujo--Join item 2109126 ,

I am reviewing this script for The Monthly Script Writing Contest. These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.

Overall Impression

I'm so sorry that I didn't notice this wonderful script until a few hours ago. I went into this contest like I do every view days to check on any entries, and that's when I noticed it. Once again, I'm very sorry it has taken me so long to do this review.

The Story Itself

I liked this script very much. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good. What I liked the most about it is the interaction between Sarah Jane and Mark.

Was It Formatted Correctly?

No, it doesn't look formatted correctly. Of course, that's mostly because of WDC. The script itself probably is formatted correctly or at least a lot closer to it. There was a couple of possible problems with it, though. One is your Character Descriptions. The 'Laughs' are okay, but there a couple of longer ones that should have been Action Descriptions. Even a couple of shorter ones probably should have been. Second problem is that when you had Sarah Jane and Mark leaving the kitchen to start their Food Rounds that should have been a new scene.

Any Last Thoughts

I'd like to say that this script should have won the contest for this month, but I can't. I liked it very much, and it was a very close call, but I liked the winner just a little better. Hope this lateness and final decision doesn't discourage you from entering more of my contests.

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Thank you for sharing this Script with me. I hope to be reading more of them real soon. Keep on writing great Scripts like this one.

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#4433529

Review of Storm of Change

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello T.L.,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your thirteenth year with us.

Overall Impression:

This may have been a short poem, but it was also a very powerful one. At least I think that it was.

The Poem Itself:

I read this poem several times before I realized what it was about. The Title and Title Description helped me a lot too, but it's the re-reads that helped me the most. Luckily, this poem wasn't too long for me to do that. Most of them are.

How It Make Me Feel:

It made me feel happy. Happy that I got the chance to read it.

Any Last Thoughts:

It's true, I only chose this poem to review because it's your anniversary month and because today is the August Super Power Review Raid, but I'm very glad that I did. I like it very much.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4433526

Review of Remember Me Before You Go

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hello 1,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your 2 year with us.

Overall Impression:

Wow. I thought that I have read some great poems, but this one beats them all. You did a fantastic job with it. At least I think that you did. That's why I gave you a five rating. I don't do that very often.

The Poem Itself:

What I liked the most about this poem is of the way you wrote it. You started out with her life and death. Then you went to her parents, and finally to her sister and brother. This like six poems wrapped up into one. I like that a lot too. The only thing I would have done differently is to talk about her death. Either by her or at least one of the others. It read like she might have died from some kind of cancer. Is that why you didn't write about it?

How It Make Me Feel:

This poem made me feel very sad. Sad because of what it was about.

Any Last Thoughts:

It's true, that I only picked this poem to review because this is your anniversary month. That isn't the only reason why I am reviewing it today, though. The reason why I'm doing it now is that today is the August Super Power Review Raid.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4433525

Review of Chapter 7 Poem 3 - A love song II

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello David Cooke,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your tenth year with us.

Overall Impression:

True, I only chose this poem because it's your anniversary month and today is the August Super Power Review Raid, but I'm very glad that I chose it. I liked it very, very much. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. it was that great. Good Job.

The Poem Itself:

What I liked the best about this poem is that you colorized it. Blue for him, and pink for her.

How It Make Me Feel:

This poem made me feel both happy and sad. Happy that I got the chance to read it, but sad because of what this poem was about.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

It looks like you might have made a slight spelling error in this poem. in the first piece of dialogue, it read like you both were men. At first, I thought this was a gay love story. Then I read the second piece of dialogue and realized it wasn't.

Any Last Thoughts:

The only thing that I might see wrong with this poem is how long your dialogue is. I'm not real crazy about the swearing either. I don't think that you need that in a poem or a story. There's nothing wrong with it. It's just not me.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4433523

Review of That's All It Was, A Dream.

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello LadyRose,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your 2 year with us.

Overall Impression:

I liked this poem very, very much. I'm so happy that I got the chance to read it for your anniversary month. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.

The Poem Itself:

The two things I would have done differently if I was writing this poem is not to use single word lines or repeat the same word or phrase without there being at least two sentences or paragraphs between them. As far as I know, there is nothing wrong with that. That's just the way I like to write.

How It Make Me Feel:

This poem made me feel a little sad. Not because of the poem itself, but what it was about. I also felt worried for him. At least I think that it was him. It read like it was. Did I miss read that?

Any Last Thoughts:

Didn't just review this poem because of your anniversary. I also did it because today is the August Super Power Review Raid

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4433522

Review of Met a Warrior Once

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello 1,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your 2 year with us.

Overall Impression:

If this was a Short Story I would have to scold you on repetition on a phrase, but it's not a Short Story. It's a poem. So, as far as I that is okay. Personally, I wouldn't have done that myself. That's just the way I like to write. There have to be at least two sentences or paragraphs before I will use a word. or in this case a phrase, again.

The Poem Itself:

I think that you did a very good job with this poem. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good. I liked it very much. Good Job.

How It Make Me Feel:

This poem wanted to make me be happy, and it did. Not only am I happy for your warrior, but I'm happy that I got the chance to read it.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words:

Capitalization of the letter I. I noticed that you didn't do it in the Title Description and at least twice in the poem itself.

Any Last Thoughts:

There are two reasons why I am writing this review today. One reason is that this is your anniversary month. The other reason why it's today is that this is the August Super Power Review Raid.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4433521

Review of Memorial Junction

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Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

Hello C.O.,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fifteenth year with us.

Overall Impression:

This was a very interesting read that I have chosen for your anniversary review. Not even the Title and the Title description helped me to understand it.

The Poem Itself:

I'm not sure what this poem was about. What I could understand of it I liked. I liked it a whole lot. Would have liked it more if I understood it. What was this poem supposed to be about?

How It Made Me Feel:

That is a good question. I don't know how I feel about it because I don't understand it.

Any Last Thoughts:

I didn't just review this poem because it's your anniversary month. Did it today because this is the day for the August Super Power Review Raid too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4433520

Review of Divine Valentine

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello Abbasali Rozais,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your thirteenth year with us.

Overall Impression:

I loved this poem. I'm so glad that I chose it to review for the August Super Power Review Raid. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. I liked it very, very much.

The Poem Itself:

I'm not sure who this poem is about. It could be either gender, but the way it's written I would say it's about a female. Am I right about that?

How It Make Me Feel:

This poem made me feel sad because of what it's about. I'm also happy because I got the chance to read it.

Any Last Thoughts:

I didn't just review this poem today because of the Raid. The most important reason why I did it is because this is your anniversary month too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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