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#4406089

Review of "Natchez"

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello YahsPoet,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your tenth year with us.

Overall Impression: I don't really like most of history all that much, but I know what I like to read, and I liked this poem very much. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. It was that good.

The Poem Itself: I'm not a big fan of History. Probably because I was never good with it in school. So, I'm not sure what the reference is to it in this poem.

How It Make Me Feel: A little confused, but that's probably because of the history. I didn't understand that part of it.

Any Last Thoughts: What I liked the best about this poem is that it rhymed. I like that a whole lot. Probably because I can't do that myself. At least most of it rhymed, but it looks like not all of it did. Did I miss something?

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Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4406088

Review of Sailor's Warning

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello Blake~almost got scammed!,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eleventh year with us.

Overall Impression: Don't get me wrong. I did like this poem a whole lot, but I am a little confused by it. Couldn't understand what it was about.

The Poem Itself: What was this poem about? The Title says it's about a Sailor, but I didn't read that in this poem.

How It Make Me Feel: Confused, yes, but it also made me feel curious. I wanted to know what it was about. How I was supposed to feel about it?

Any Last Thoughts: I do have to admit something. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. Mostly because of my confusion, but also because I wanted to read what it was about. That's why I liked this poem so much.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4404077

Review of The End

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Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

It is only one word. That word is 'screenwriting.' There isn't much else in it.

Hello Genipher,

I am reviewing this script for The Monthly Script Writing Contest. These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.

Overall Impression: This was a very good script. I liked it very much. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story Itself: It all started with the President declaring war against Russia, China, and Mexico. At least it looks like that was about to happen. The other two Acts reflected it too. I think you did a great job with this script.

Was It Formatted Correctly?: True, it doesn’t look like it has been formatted correctly, but I think it’s because of the WDC formatting. It looks like you did a pretty good job with the formatting to me.

Any Last Thoughts: You always write great scripts. Keep it up. I can’t wait to read your next one.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Script with me. I hope to be reading more of them real soon. Keep on writing great Scripts like this one.

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#4400143

Review of Dragon adoring

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Hello SeverinR,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your seventh year with us.

Overall Impression: I liked this Fantasy story very, very much. It kept me interested in it from the beginning to the end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop.

The Story Itself: What I like the best about this story was how you describe Melima and Eildetha. Most writers, including myself, describe them in one or two paragraphs. You did yours throughout this Story. I like that a whole lot.

Location, Location, Location: [5]

Your Characters: It looks like Melima is the main character in this story, but it could also be Eildetha. I liked that you gave your characters a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: Except for the thoughts at the beginning and the ending of this story, and the one piece of dialogue there wasn’t any dialogue in it. What little dialogue there was looked good to me, though.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I think that I find at least two errors in this story, but there could be more that I didn’t catch. You might want to re-read this story again. One is the wrong word in the first paragraph. Shouldn’t it be ‘there’ instead of ‘they?’ The second mistake I think that you made is that you mixed Present Tense with Past Tense. I saw it at least once, but there could be others that I didn’t catch.

Any Last Thoughts: This was a very well written story. Do you have any more like it? If you do, and they are as good or better than this one, I would be very interested in reading some of them too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4400142

Review of The Face

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

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Hello millhouse,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.

Overall Impression: A very scary story, but I like scary. I also liked this story very, very much too. It kept me interested in it from the beginning to the end.

The Story Itself: What I liked the best about this Fantasy story was the Suspense. I couldn’t stop reading it even if I wanted to. Which I didn’t. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I read it all

Your Characters: Ridley is the main character in this story. In fact, he’s the only one. I liked that you gave your character a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: There is one problem that I noticed with this one line of dialogue. At least I think that there is. One is that it’s a thought, but it’s not treated like one. Shouldn’t it be in Italics? Most, if not all, writers and reviewers might not think that thoughts are dialogue, but I disagree. To me, thoughts are internal dialogue. You might want to check this out.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: The only possible problem that you might have with your grammar is when you used the word ‘sink.’ Shouldn’t it be ‘sank’ or ‘sunk’ instead.

Any Last Thoughts: I’m not sure I would classify this as a Fantasy. What makes this story a Fantasy? Is it because of ‘The Face?’ Speaking of ‘The Face,” what is it? You never explained that in this story. Is this just part of a longer story?

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4400141

Review of The Witch Hunt

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

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Hello Kodan Wolf,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eleventh year with us.

Overall Impression: I loved this Fantasy story. In fact, I loved it so much that I couldn’t stop reading it once I started.

The Story Itself: I’m a little bit confused about this story, though. Volnar is a witch hunter. Only there were no witches in it. It was about a cult.

Your Characters: Volnar is the main character in this story, and I like that you gave them a name. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: Except for a little bit of chanting there wasn’t much dialogue in this story, but what there was looked good. At least it did to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: It looks like you might have missed a few commas. The first one that I think I noticed is when you mentioned ‘Volnar, the witch hunter,’ I also noticed that you wrote ‘out side’ instead of ‘outside.’ You might want to check into both of these possible errors in grammar.

Any Last Thoughts: I think that you did a great job with this story. Do you have any more just as good or better than this one? If you do, I would be very interested in them too if I can.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4400140

Review of Transgression is in Session

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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Hello Fifthwood,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fourth year with us.

Overall Impression: This was a very interesting Fantasy story. It might sound like I didn’t like it, but I did. In fact, I liked it very much. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop.

The Story Itself: What did I like the best about this story. It was the Suspense within it. I didn’t know what was going to happen next unless I read on. I liked it a whole lot.

Location, Location, Location: You did a very good job in describing this location. Some, maybe even most, might say that you put too much description into it but I don’t think that you did.

Your Characters: The one thing that I would have done differently was focused this story on one or two individuals, and given them a name. I can understand why you didn’t because there were so many of them, but I would have figured out a way to do it anyway. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I noticed a couple of grammar errors. Both are in the third paragraph. One should have been ‘wear’ instead of ‘wears.’ The other one is a missing hyphenation in ‘one-year.’ Other than those two I didn’t find anything else wrong with this story.

Any Last Thoughts: You did a great job with this story. At least I think that you did it.

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Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4400139

Review of The Dream Girl

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Hello Antwan Micheals,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your Eleventh year with us.

Overall Impression: I liked this Fantasy Story very, very much. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop.

The Story Itself: This was a story about a little girl named Nixie who was having a dream about another little girl named Juliet. Only you didn’t let on that it was a dream, despite the title, until toward the end of it. I liked that a whole lot.

Your Characters: Nixie and Juliet are both the same little girl. At least I think they are the same. Whether they are or not I liked that you gave them a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: The dialogue wasn’t too much, but what there was looked good to me. Good Job.

Any Last Thoughts: One thing I would have done differently with this story if I had written it I would have given Nixie and Juliet an age. I don’t do that with adults too much, if ever, but I do with children, preteens, and teens.

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Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4400138

Review of Reaching for the Stars

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Hello Yera ~Twelve!~,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your sixth year with us.

Overall Impression: A very interesting fantasy story. Don’t get me wrong. I liked this story very, very much. What I liked the most about it was what it was about.

The Story Itself: Even though you didn’t mention it in this story, it’s about a mermaid. At first, I thought it might be about a fish but then you mentioned fingers. Then I knew she was a mermaid.

Your Characters: Raeyna is the main character in this story. In fact, she is the only character. I liked that you gave your character a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

Any Last Thoughts: I think that you did a very good job with this story. Especially since it’s part of a contest. It’s not easy doing that. It has been a long time since I did a story for Daily Flash Fiction, but I know how hard it is to write one. Did you win this contest?

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Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4400137

Review of Encounter with the Unwanted

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Hello C. William White,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eighth year with us.

Overall Impression: This was a very, very good story. At least I think that it was.

The Story Itself: What I liked the most about this story is what it was about. It was about a knight on a quest who encounters a troll, and what happens after they meet. I think that it was very well written. Great Job.

Location, Location, Location: A hidden grotto is the location for this story. I think you did a very good job in describing this location.

Your Characters: Agorus is the main character in this story, but the Troll is also a big one too. I liked that you gave Agorus a name, but I would have given the Troll one too. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story, but what dialogue I read looked good to me. The only problem that there might be with it is that you didn’t say who was saying what. It was pretty obvious to me, but it still might be a problem. You might want to check into that.

Any Last Thoughts: The only problem that you might have with this Fantasy story is how it ended. It didn’t really end. Is this just the beginning of a longer story?

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Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4400136

Review of Understand

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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Hello ShatteredGlass,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.

Overall Impression: Don’t get me wrong. I liked this story very much, but it was a little confusing to me. Not what it was about, loved the story. Just not how it was handled.

The Story Itself: At first I thought this was a Fantasy story about a leaf and it sort of was after the first paragraph, but from the way it started it read more like it wasn’t. Then after that paragraph.

Your Characters: The leaf is the main character in this story. Most would disagree with that because it’s not real, but I think that it is. It doesn’t matter to me if they are real or even if they are children vs adults. It’s who is in the story the most that matter to me. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: In the second paragraph ‘children’ is misspelled. The same is true in the third paragraph. Only it’s the word ‘leaf’ instead of the word ‘leave.'

Any Last Thoughts: Despite how this review reads, I liked this story very much. Do you have any more like it? If they are as good or better than this one I am very interested in reading so of them too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4400133

Review of Dollar Menu

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Hello LuminariesBooks.com,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eighth year with us.

Overall Impression: I liked this story very, very much. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. It was that good. Great job.

The Story Itself: Why did I like it so much? That’s because it made me smile. I think that I even laughed a few times while reading it.

Location, Location, Location: Burgerville is the location for this Fantasy story. It didn’t go into any detail about it, but it didn’t need to be. The title said it all. Another great job well done.

Your Characters: There were several characters in this story. Most of them had names too. I liked that you gave your characters a name. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: Personally, I would have broken this one paragraph story into two, three, or more paragraphs. I don’t think that it’s wrong in doing it, but I do think that it’s easier to read if it’s broken up.

Any Last Thoughts: This story reads like you are telling it more than showing. Which is a no-no when it comes to Short Stories.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4395726

Review of Stolen Heart

Review by PureSciFi

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello Genipher,

I am reviewing this script for The Monthly Script Writing Contest. These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.

Overall Impression: I like this script very, very much. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. Good Job.

The Story Itself: What I liked the most about this script is just how evil Delilah is. A lot of Horror and Suspense with a hint of Scary and Thriller. I like that a whole lot.

Was It Formatted Correctly?: If I was to base your formatting on just the Item you created here, I would have to say no it's not formatted correctly. Only I don't judge based on that because I know no matter how good you try to create it correctly you can't do it. It looks pretty good to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: No errors that I could read. I didn't read any Tense problems. It looks like it's all in Present Tense like it should be.

Any Last Thoughts: The only problem that you might have with this script is when you wrote (pause) then (clasps hands together). I don't think you need the (pause). There is at least one other (pause) that I don't think that you need, but there's nothing wrong with it being there. Also noticed one Camera direction and a Pan Down. I don't think they should be there. That's the Director job with the Shooting Script. You can do the same thing without writing it by how you write it.

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Thank you for sharing this Script with me. I hope to be reading more of them real soon. Keep on writing great Scripts like this one.

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#4388022

Review of Masculin/Feminin

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Rated: ASR

| (3.5)

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Hello sindbad - We Got This!,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fifth year with us.

Overall Impression: I selected this Script to review because you don't have any Folders, and I have decided to review Folders this year whenever possible. Also selected it because it was supposed to be a Script. Only it isn't. It's not even Outline.

The Script Itself: A one-sided conversation that rambled on. That's what I just read. It didn't make much sense to me. This Script read more like a dream than anything else. Is that what this Script is all about?

Location, Location, Location: The Location for this appears to be an eating establishment of some kind, but I'm sure about that. There's a little bit mentioned about it toward the beginning of it, but nowhere else. Did I miss that description?

Your Characters: I'm not sure who the main character is in this Script. No one is mentioned. Anything about them isn't mentioned either. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: Most of this Script is in Short Story dialogue form. Except for their length that I would have broken up into several paragraphs, each this dialogue looked good.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: Captialization is a big problem in this Script.
There wasn't any.

Any Last Thoughts: This review might read like I didn't like your Script, but I did. I liked it a whole lot.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4388021

Review of Mystery Short Stories & Novels

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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Hello Jeannie ♥7 yrs. with WDC!♥,

Congratulations on surviving another year with us. This is your seventh year with us.

I have reviewed Short Stories, Poetry, and Blogs. So, I have decided to review Folders this year. These are just my opinions. Whether you agree with them or not, that’s up to you.

Overall Impression? Most of this Portfolio were Folders, eleven to be exact. I chose this one because of the type of Items within it, and the genre too.

What kind of Folder is this? This is a Mystery Folder. It contains both Short Stories and a Novel.

Is it well organized? Yes, I would say that it's well organized. The Novel comes first, then the three Short Stories.{c}

How many are there? There is one Novel and three Short Stories. Which is a little confusing to me. After all, the Size indicator says that there should be five of them total.

Did I like them? Of course, I liked them. They are mysteries after all, and I'm a big fan of Mysteries.

What did I like the best about it? This question is an easy one for me to answer.
I liked that there were so many Folders to choose from. It was a hard to chose which one I was going to review.

Any Last Thoughts? I haven't read any of these Items yet, but I want to. I'm just not sure when I will have the chance to do it.

If you're interested in getting even with this review you can review any of my work. You will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing these Folders with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on creating great folders like these.

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#4388018

Review of ruwth is writing...

for entry "The Counselor"

Review by PureSciFi

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Rated: 18+

| (3.5)

This is a Screenwriting Image. Only the scriptwriting part can barely be seen.

Hello ruwth,

I am reviewing this script for The Monthly Script Writing Contest. These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.

Overall Impression: Even before I started reading this script, it thought to myself there is no way that this script is going to win this contest. I was wrong with that thought.
If I was judging it on format then I would have been right, but I don't just judge on that.

The Story Itself: This review might read like I didn't like this story, but I did. I liked it a whole lot. The story wasn't your problem. It was the formatting that was

Was It Formatted Correctly?: Besides the FADE OUTs being left justified instead of right justified there were several other problems with this script. One is the capitalization of your characters. They are only capitalized the first time they are introduced in the Scene Descriptions. all other times they are capitalized normally. Another big problem is the Size you used. On WDC it's okay to use Arial instead of Courier and ten (Size:4 on WDC) instead of twelve, (Size:5) but not fifteen like you used. Yet, another problem is that you centered your Character Names. They are supposed to start two inches from the left margin and lined up together. Another problem is your dialogue. It's supposed to start one inch from the left margin. The same is true for your Character Actions, aka the parenthesize section. Those should start one-and-a-half inches from the left margin. I thought that I explained all this in my Sample Second of my contest. Please let me know if I didn't.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: Tense is a big problem when it comes to scripts. Scripts should be written in Present Tense unless they are talking about the past. Then they are Past Tense. Even Flashbacks are done in Present Tense. There was at least one word that was in Past Tense instead of Present Tense. You might want to check into that. Other than that, I didn't find anything else wrong with grammar, etc.

Any Last Thoughts: Another problem I had with this script was how it ended. It didn't.

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Thank you for sharing this Script with me. I hope to be reading more of them real soon. Keep on writing great Scripts like this one.

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#4388016

Review of Stringin' a Gumshoe

Review by PureSciFi

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Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

Images don't have to be pictures; This is one of them.

Hello Genipher,

I am reviewing this script for The Monthly Script Writing Contest. These are just my opinions. You are the only one who can decide whether you agree with me or not.

Overall Impression: I liked this story very much. It kept me interested in reading it from beginning to end.

The Story Itself: Your characters was well defined. The dialogue looked good.

Was It Formatted Correctly?: Overall, you did a very good job with formatting this script correctly. There were a few problems with it, though. The FADE TOs should have been Scene Heading with the time of day moved up a little, like A SHORT TIME LATER or ABOUT A HALF HOUR LATER. Something like that. You don't need to use the word at the end of most of your dialogue either. If you have dialogue after it that's okay, but if no the '--' at the end of it says the same thing. Sometimes you can even use periods instead of the '--' too. The biggest problem was the Font and Size you used. Since this is WDC, Font and Size doesn't matter as much, but if this was for possible Production it should have been Courier instead of Arial and twelve (5 on WDC) instead of ten. (4 on WDC)

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: Since this was a period piece, I'm not sure about some of the terminology used. It does look like you made at least one spelling error. It looks like it should have been ankle instead of cankle? You might want to check that out.

Any Last Thoughts: What I liked the best about this story is how it ended. It looks like it ended with the start of a new mystery. I like that very much because I do that a lot too.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Script with me. I hope to be reading more of them real soon. Keep on writing great Scripts like this one.

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#4385103

Review of Secret Diaper Girl

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello Z dog,

This review is brought to you by The Welcome Newbies Raid. These are only my opinions.

Overall Impression: I selected this Short Story to review for two reasons. One was because you are a Newbie. And I wanted to welcome you to the WDC. The other reason was that I liked the Title and Title Description.

The Story Itself: This was a very weird Short Story. But I like weird very much. At first, I thought it was a fetish Short Story. and I thought that this isn't right for a girl of twelve. But once I started reading it I realized I was wrong about that.

Your Characters: In the Title Description you mentioned who the main character is in this Short Story. But you didn't in the story itself. I would have done it in the story itself too. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated this one long paragraph into two or more smaller paragraphs. But that's just the way I like to write my Short Stories.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with the WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4385101

Review of In God's Great Hands

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello PWheeler,

This review is brought to you by The Welcome Newbies Raid. These are only my opinions.

Overall Impression: One of the reasons why I read this poem for review is because you are a Newbie. And I wanted to welcome you to WDC. But the main reason was that I was curious what a Rondeau poem was.

The Poem Itself: Other than it rhymed throughout most of it, I'm still not sure what Rondeau means. I did notice that at the end of each group of lines it didn't rhyme with the lines above it. Is that what Rondeau is?

How It Make Me Feel: Happy. That's how I felt about this poem. I am very happy that I got to read it.

Any Last Thoughts: I'm not a very Religious type of guy. Don't get me wrong. I do believe in God. I just don't like to read it. Most of them are just too preachy. But this one wasn't. That's why I liked it so much.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4385099

Review of Living a Life Without You

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Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

Hello DyingLove98,

This review is brought to you by The Welcome Newbies Raid. These are only my opinions.

Overall Impression: What can I say about this poem other than I read it, and am reviewing it because you are a Newbie. And I wanted to welcome you to the WDC. But that's not the only reason why I'm reviewing it. I am also doing it because I thought that I thought that I would like it. And I did.

The Poem Itself: It read to me like a list of things that you couldn't live a life without you. Is that what you wanted to accomplish with this poem?

How It Make Me Feel: I felt sorry for this individual. They had a long list of things that they couldn't live without.

Any Last Thoughts: I think that you might have made one big mistake within this poem. You used the 'f' word. But you rated it as 'E' for everyone. I think it should be eighteen plus at the very least. You might want to check into that.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4385098

Review of dear me

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Rated: ASR

| (3.5)

Hello lenny,

This review is brought to you by The Welcome Newbies Raid. These are only my opinions.

Overall Impression: I selected this contest entry for two reasons. First, because I wanted to welcome you to WDC. The second reason is that of the Dear Me contest that is being run this month.

The Letter Itself: I'm a little bit confused by this letter to yourself. Not the letter itself because I think that you did a very good job with it. I liked it a whole lot. What I'm concerned about is that you talked about what you were going to do with personal life this year. There's nothing wrong with that. But you didn't even mention what your goals are this year when it comes to your writing. And I think that's what this Contest is all about.

Any Last Thoughts: True, I don't think there is anything wrong with you writing about yourself. But I think the main focus of this contest is about writing and writing-related activities like reviewing and contest entries. You might want to check into that before the end of the month deadline. Then again, I might be wrong about all of this. Maybe you should send an email to Jeff with a question about this. I think Jeff is the one you email if you have a question about this contest. He's the one you email for most contest it looks like.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this letter with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great letters like this one.

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#4385097

Review of A Child Unloved

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello Heather,

This review is brought to you by The Welcome Newbie Raid. These are only my opinions.

Overall Impression: It's true that I only selected this poem because you are a Newbie and I wanted to welcome you to WDC. But I am very glad that I did. If I hadn't I wouldn't have gotten the chance to read this fantastic poem.

The Poem Itself: I'm not a big fan of Poetry. Probably because I'm not very good at it myself. But I do like to read it. And I am very happy that I selected this poem.

How It Make Me Feel: I feel sorry for this individual. Mostly because it's a child. But nobody should feel like that.

Any Last Thoughts: This poem was very well written. Do you have any more just as good or better? If so I would be interested in reading some of them too if I can.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4385095

Review of Haikus of a Flightless Mammal

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello Slytha,

This review is brought to you by The Welcome Newbie Raid. These are only my opinions.

Overall Impression: First, I wanted to welcome you to WDC. And I have to admit that is the main reason I am reviewing this poem. But I'm glad that I did.

The Poem Itself: I don't know too much about Haikus. But I do know what I like. And I liked this poem very, very much. I also liked the way you arranged those three paragraphs.

How It Make Me Feel: Great. I think that it's great I got the opportunity to read this poem.

Any Last Thoughts: What I liked the most about this poem is the colorizing of it. Is there a reason why you colorized those words?

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4385094

Review of Presence in the Clouds

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello Charlotte Gray,

This review is brought to you by The Welcome Newbie Raid. These are only my opinions.

Overall Impression: Maybe the main reason that I selected this Fiction story to review is that you are a Newbie that I wanted to welcome to WDC. But I'm glad that I did it.

The Story Itself: Personally, I would have separated this one paragraph into two or three paragraphs. I think that makes it easier to read if you do it that way.

Your Characters: The one thing I would have done differently with this story is given this individual a name. But maybe you did. You did mention Peter Pan. Is that who is the main character in this story? Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: It looks like you made a Spelling error with this story. Shouldn't it be 'them' instead of 'hem.'

Any Last Thoughts: I think that you did a very good job with this story. In fact, I liked it so much I can't wait to read more of your writing if I can.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4377198

Review of Items With Award Ribbons

Review by PureSciFi

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello Angel_Eyes,

This review is brought to you by the Happy Wishes Power Raid. These are only my opinions. Whether you agree with them or not, that is up to you.

I have reviewed Short Stories, Poetry, and Blogs. So, I have decided to review Folders this year.

Overall Impression? There was six Folders to chose from. I chose this one because the Items in it were award winners.

What kind of Folders are these? There's a little bit of everything in these six Folders. I like that a whole lot.

Are they well organized? These Folders are well organized. At least they look like they are to me.

How many are there? I'm not sure how many Items are in the other five Folders.
But there are six of them in this one. And all of them are different. I like that a lot.

Did I like them? I think that I just answered this question. Yes, I do like them.

What did I like the best about them? Already answered this question too. I like that they are all different. That's what I like the most.

Any Last Thoughts? There is only one Item in your Portfolio that hasn't been put into one of the Folders. I'm a little bit curious about that. Is there a reason why it's not in one of them?

If you're interested in getting even with this review you can review any of my work. You will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing these Folders with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on creating great folders like these.

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