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Review of The Smart Thing  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This was such a treat to read, Hooves. I'm in awe of your skills as a poet. The unexpected rhymes like trouble and bubble are gems.

Since poetry doesn't follow the same grammatical rules as prose, I didn't even look for any of those.

Good luck in the contest today!! Your entry is top notch!

Always a fan,

Royal Eduardo
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Review of The Forever Wife  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Congrats on your win! The story was intriguing and held my attention. You build tension in such a delicious way, and paint the characters in a brilliant shade of grey.

There were no grammatical errors that I saw. The pacing was fast and held me captive until the very last word. What a wonderful story! Once again congrats on your win, it was well deserved.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a lovely poem! You brought the scene to life with just enough descriptions and made the reader part of the narrators journey (for a while anyways). I really enjoyed this piece, thank you for sharing it.

Write on!
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Review of Moon River  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
What a great entry! Your sonnet is such a revelation and so sweet. I'm currently taking Shakespeare and learning about his sonnets. I am impressed that you are so good at writing something that can be so challenging. I have written 2 and they are horrible LOL.

Great job!

Good luck in the contest tomorrow!
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Review of I Don't Dance  
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hi, I'm Royal Eduardo and I am the judge for The Weekly Quickie round 216.

Prompt: The prompt was to write a story based on a song. A requirement you more than fulfilled.

Story: A woman at a bar? Dancing with friends

What I liked: I loved that you incorporated the song into your piece, very clever.

What I didn't like: Even after a few readings I was confused about who was doing what and why.

Overall: This is an interesting piece. Write on!
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Review of Rope Burn  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, I'm Royal Eduardo and I am the judge for The Weekly Quickie round 216.

Prompt: The prompt was to write a story based on a song. I'm not familiar with the song you choose but believe that this was an inspired piece.

Story: A couple having very kinky sex.

What I liked: The suspense and eroticism built very nicely throughout the piece.

What I didn't like: The briefness. I know it's the rules, but I was engorged in the story and didn't want it to end.

Overall: One of the best pieces of erotica I've read. Write on!
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi, I'm reviewing your piece as judge of The Weekly Quickie Round 209. These are just my opinions, so take from them what you will.

Prompt: One relationship ends, and another begins. You certainly satisfied the prompt. Though I wish there had been a little more heat to the story.

Grammar: I didn't notice anything that stood out to me.

Overall impression: This seems to be a story that could be evolved into something really special. Your characterization is memorable and on target.

Thank you for entering!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a cute poem. For a second I thought we were going to veer into a discussion about the Flint Water Crisis but in glad it didn't. You did a great job!
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Rated: GC | (4.5)
Thank you for entering Round 164 of the Weekly Quickie Contest! I am sending this review as Judge of the round.

This was a great story and should you ever decide to expand on it, you have left yourself enough room to grow to this scene or continue on after it. I loved how you kept the pace tight and fast, even while making the sex seem to last forever.

Great job!
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Rated: 18+ | (2.0)
You have a very interesting start to something that could be very special here. However the spelling errors and lack of formatting take away from this. A quick edit would be in order to really get this story going, I think. Also go over the paragraph and look at some of the grammatical mistakes, like I should be capitalized.

Russhia should be Russia (unless you are trying to create another country) and the R needs to be capitalized.

Siut should be Suit

Atmisphere should be Atmosphere.

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Rated: XGC | (4.0)
This was an interesting story, one that had me captivated. The one flaw in my opinion is you tease us with the end and we don't get to know what happened.
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Review of The Super-Analyst  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
This story is good but when you stop cold to talk about Marie's accomplishments it takes the reader out of the story.
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Review of Margaret's Lesson  
Rated: XGC | (3.5)
This sentence seems odd to me, maybe a comma would help it? "Flipping through her blouses and skirts, fondling a silky wrap dress Margaret finally decided on the gray wool power suit with a black blouse."


That was the only real problem I found with the story. You did a good job following the prompt, and Jason really pops when he enters the story.

Great job!
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Review of Terror in White  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
What a great, fun poem. The reading is easy and it was finished before I knew it began. At first I thought you were talking about a ghost, and then a poltergeist but either way it sounds like you knew this character, creature very well and you brought his voice to light!! It was a pleasure to read this poem.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
What a fun, clever story! I love how you started the story off with action and kept building it from there. Everything about this story screams fun, and your voice in this piece appears as though you are enjoying yourself. That makes it more fun for the reader, and really sells the comedy aspect of the story! Great job!
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Review of The Coming  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh I really like this one. It seems to be hinting at religious undertones, namely the second coming. It's interesting how you twist it to be a bad thing because one could argue that man trying to decode the bible to figure it out will have hellacious consequences. I love that the poem Itself is short, to the point and doesn't get mixed up in a lot of fluff, a statement is made and the evidence is supported. By far this is one of my favorites of your pieces, besides that very cute limerick you did for me *Wink*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oo dark, I almost get the feeling of suicide here but with enough doubt that someone else could argue a break up or just depressio. Job well done
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Review of Seven  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I feel bad for this woman, you have the ability to write characters that are at once totally unsympathetic and yet vulnerable and make your fans root for them
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Review of The Missing Page  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I need more!! What happens to Rayne? This was a great story,you handled the subject well
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Review of The 3rd Wheel  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I loved the Bruce Willis connection, and the twist at the end
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Loved this *Smile* you're very talented
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
An interesting take on the prompt. I like the way you laid everything out!
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