|Hi, I'm reviewing your piece as judge of The Weekly Quickie Round 209. These are just my opinions, so take from them what you will.
Prompt: One relationship ends, and another begins. You certainly satisfied the prompt.The reader is left a little unsatisfied with that cliffhanger.
Grammar: I didn't notice anything that stood out to me.
Overall impression: The cliffhanger ending makes the story stand out but also leaves the reader a little upset that they don't know what happens. I know you said that this is part of a larger story, so that might lead to new readers for you.
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