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This was really nice. It does seem true that we only appreciate something most after the fact. I was closest to my grandma on my mom's side. It helps to remember the happier time you had with them. Then you have memories, so it's not like they're totally gone. You have those times you shared with them and it's meaningful.
There's a name to poems written like this but I can't remember just now. The idea of dreams beneath our feet tickles me a bit. I've and some weird ones these last few nights. Interesting how our mind takes things during the day and transfers them into our dreams while we're asleep.
You were doing so well. It's just near the end, where you talk about being a believer has benefits you lost me a bit. It sounds like you're heart's in the right place. Just be mindful of how you go about trying to bring others to the lord. If it comes off like an ad, you may want to try a different approach.
I really liked this poem. I like the imagery this poem brings up. It seems really though provoking for me. As far as constellations go, I'm Capricorn. I think it would be neat to see my zodiac sign as a constellation. I also just noticed that there are rhymes within it as well. I like poetry that rhymes.
That was a really nice poem. You could really feel the emotion/heart that went into it.
Critique wise, I might say ''in need of help.'' I'm not sure some is necessary there. I can't tell as far as punctuation because poetry makes everything interesting. The stanzas/lines seems to flow as they start short and elongate as the poem goes on.
Love the title, I have to say. I like the concept behind this, I do. But it's a bit confusing on what you're saying. I tried to read this and I think I got lost. There's ''inner dialogue'' and then, I don't now what. It's a little to follow. Perhaps a bigger font and spacing this a bit would help.
I think you have a good idea, it just needs some tweaking.
May I say thanks for being brave enough to share and hope you continue to do so.
In the future, I think it would be beneficial to put space b/w your paragraphs so their easier to read. When it gets like this, it can be hard to make out. You seem to feel very passionate about this topic. I would love to read through this, it seems to be quite informative. This would greatly benefit from a little sprucing up. And when making an argument, be careful not to sound as if you're accusing people, and out right attacking them. You'll lose your audience and it won't be as easy to persuade them to your side. Something to be mindful of.
Anyways, thanks for sharing and hope to see you around more often!
Now a days, it seems there's many more sore losers. We can't be agreeable or even agree to go our spate ways and at least part amicably. People seem to get so nasty and think they can just act that way and that makes it right. It's awful how messed up society's gotten. I feel bad for future generations who grow up with that and think that's an acceptable manner to behave. The future suffers for the problems the past left untouched. Tragic.
I think it's human nature to question why we're here. Especially in times of strife and sadness, we tend to ask ''why?'' There aren't always answers for these questions, sometimes faith Is all you have to get through difficult times and explain what we can't wrap our minds around. I think is a nice, short explanation for why God made-to share creation with us. I like that idea.
This oddly reminds me of ''The things they carried'' in a way. Just b/c of how they go off into the war and come back with some remnant of the war still with them. It's not always a glamorous affair as its made out in movies or books. The reality can be a grisly and often depressing truth we don't always want to think about.
This really captures the imagination. It's very intriguing to think of lightning captured in something so small. It makes me think of a mini tornado caused by soda bottles for some reason. The personification of the lightning as seemingly female also adds to the mystery of it all.
I like the idea behind this. The fact that this starts and ends the same really goes well with this poem's background. A traveler starts out on a journey and is changed in the process, big or small. I liked your descriptions in this. Words can play a big part in bringing life into poetry.
Something about the seasons that sticks with us, making us want to write about them. Maybe because wherever you're from you experience some kind of seasonal change, so it's relatable in a sense. I really like your descriptions in this poem as you're describing this memory of yours. It helps bring it to lifer for the reader.
This was so sweet and touching. I was kind of expecting this to end badly but I'm glad it didn't. You have a fun handle name. I appreciate the size font you used on this. Sometimes it hard to decipher the really small stuff so this is much appreciated.
I think this was given a lot of thought and I appreciate your sharing it. Sometimes, I find it hard to write about real life things. It just seems so boring and at times, repetitive to go on about. But finding those memories that stay with you is really one of the ways to stay motivated through life's challenges. It's hard to lose a friend/ship. But when one fades away you may gain a new one you weren't expecting. Hang in there. Keep writing on.
That first verse may need some cleaning up. It just sounds awkward and confusing. Also it made me think of this song ''Love the way you hate me''. {Just the 1st verse.} Maybe ''died, and lived for me'' would be better. Your word choice and descriptions really help shape this strong love/hate relationship taking place.
I feel I can grasp the reality of this a bit more than others. Cats like our neighborhood, there are a couple that haunt our street. I try not to hate on the animals since their not responsible for the actions of humans that got them there. It is a nice poem.
I think it's cool to have this. Especially with how things are now, politics and religion are difficult to bring up. You can't have an opinion w/o upsetting someone. It also seems like the country is straying from God has time goes on. I'm really hoping that things turn for the better.
I stink at foreign languages. But it was fun trying it out none the less. I really liked reading your poem. Not really sure the relevance the quiz had to the poem but whatever. It was really nice and I had fun attempting to reason out Italian. All around, I enjoyed myself. Keep 'em coming!
Here I thought we were just floating on clouds. The ending seems a bit depressing. Then, so the lot of a poet. The first stanza, 3rd line seems awkward. For the most part, it flows, that one line, stumped while I was reading it. It seemed a bit awkward to me. I could see reading this on the beach.
Interesting information anyway. I don't think I've seen one this small before. Keeps things fairly simple that way. The #4 clue, their I think is the proper use in that sentence. Otherwise, it seemed a neat little crossword. Just thought I'd try something a bit different this time.
Interesting. A unique way of getting stories of a similar genre noticed. It looks like you put a lot of work into this to pull it off. I hope it went well for you. It's nice to discover new things I didn't realize were out there in the WDC community. Don't forget to keep writing.
I like how clear and easy to read this poem is. I am partial to poems that rhyme. The font color is appealing as well. One thing I saw: ''Doubt wants to be free from its hold. Or, ''doubts want to be free from its hold.'' Otherwise, this kept my attention to the end. Keep on writing.
I enjoyed that way too much. It was so realistic and entertaining. I wish I could be so thorough, and write so well. I'm more of a brain stormer. I get ideas just fine. Then they kind of sit b/c I don't know how to proceed. Oh well. This was really well written. I almost was going to comment on your word count. But I think it was unlimited b/c of some special pro motion of what not. Well done. Keep them coming!
Well this brings me back to my mythology lesson days. I had a middle school language arts teacher who delved a bit into Greek mythology. It was pretty interesting learning about ancient beliefs and what the different god/goddesses represented. Just how people back then explained the world around them. It was interesting.
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