I really like the way you convey your feelings.
"The thousands"of people who are dead and watching.
I often wonder about the rich buried in ornate plots myself so that spoke to me also.
I think that you express what many feel.
In a gentle even voice.
My guess is that you are young and do not want to think about being buried in that cemetery.
Might I suggest a further piece about that?
Just an idea about exploring the one kernel of the idea.
This is lovely.
You are able to insinuate your love as well as say it.
I especially like
"It is something more."
That sounds to me that you stay within what you are and do not try to say what can't be said.
I can feel the melencholy.
I didn't think it flowed evenly throughout.
The last two lines confused me.
"Only then will I show you my way", especially.
I guess I am not sure if there should be one more quartet
explaining what that way is.
I think it can be taken to mean more than one thing.
Perhaps more would give a better sense of you.
I liked it.
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