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Review of Underground  
Review by gnomedeplume
Rated: E | (3.0)
I really like the way you convey your feelings.
"The thousands"of people who are dead and watching.

I often wonder about the rich buried in ornate plots myself so that spoke to me also.

I think that you express what many feel.
In a gentle even voice.

My guess is that you are young and do not want to think about being buried in that cemetery.
Might I suggest a further piece about that?
Just an idea about exploring the one kernel of the idea.

keep at it you have a gift.
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Review of Always, forever  
Review by gnomedeplume
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is lovely.
You are able to insinuate your love as well as say it.
I especially like
"It is something more."
That sounds to me that you stay within what you are and do not try to say what can't be said.
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Review by gnomedeplume
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I love this.
You have captured an essence in your layered metaphors much like breathing.
Intentional and unintentional at once.

You show the reader the gentle yet awesome intermingled.
Thank you.
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Review of The Wind  
Review by gnomedeplume
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is very nice . The only suggestion is to add " of " before Storied places far and near,

Of storied places far and near

I really like this.,
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Review of My Way  
Review by gnomedeplume
Rated: E | (3.0)
I can feel the melencholy.
I didn't think it flowed evenly throughout.
The last two lines confused me.
"Only then will I show you my way", especially.

I guess I am not sure if there should be one more quartet
explaining what that way is.
I think it can be taken to mean more than one thing.
Perhaps more would give a better sense of you.
I liked it.


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