Might I say right out the gate. What a unique username. This is creative, yet simple is its imagery but tells more than it says. The soul seen through a candle, and soulless a wick that feeds the fire. The lack of captivation it nice as I not a romantic. Is the punctuation or lack or it intentional? If you centered it, it would do wonders for presentation. Thank you for sharing, I enjoy poetry and yours was a delight.
A snowy morning and bang! a love poem, not very romantic, but a last feelings of what one would think of themselves, and how their feelings survive and have the right to love the other. Not the classic troupe, but more of a darker journey with a lighted tunnel end. Thank you for sharing.
Morning, Tim Chiu Random Review brought me and delightful a love poem so early in my day. Great imagery, and that passes to feel, heartwarming and a bit sensual. Relationship can all consuming whether in fuzzy, blind struck sunlight or regretful chatter. The former here, and a pleasant to read with my coffee.
No suggestion beyond cosmetic, and well edited. Thank you for sharing way back in 2017.
Easter, very spiritual and has an old historical feel to, I say it's the form I don't know it. Some fantastic prose, wow! Thank you for sharing, I have no suggestions.
Good afternoon, Joy Random review link brought me and how delightful. Two retired aged men fight for the remote, one of a kind in subject, and a neat form to boot.
So well written, I could see these men in all their aged glory, the anger, the shaking fist, the exchange of bad words and a smack in the face with the remote. No suggestion as I struggle with forms and this seems spot on.
What a delightful find random review has found for me.
"in silence there is horror yet also: beauty" I got shivers. This is wonderful right up bright and blinding in my dark place. It's different as not really a gothic poem but more an explanation of horror of silence and being alone, the fear of the mind. Very much of mental health and the shadow cast by that light that casts shadows in our darkest corners, holding hand with the horror that cares. No suggestion this is well written and very my enjoyment. Enjoy your day and again Thanks!
Random Review link brought me and I enjoyed this long prose, train, feelings quite a jump from the start to the end, interesting, a little hard to understand so two reads.
Creative and I had a flash of a very sad manga I read once, involving a train. No suggestions as this is well edited, kind of like going down a rabbit hole. Thanks!
Hope is for dreamers and realists that know what lays waiting in the dark if the bright spot of hope goes out. Despite what happens we will always hope, though is may not feel like. Simple, well written, some questions we have all asked ourselves and the thought on those questions. This is able to stir up but not unbalance anyone with trauma. Well edited and easy to understand. Thank you.
Good Day, Tim Chiu Random Review Link has gone way back..
Tells of winning, though what was won a mystery, the thrill, the mindset, how fleeting that moment can be. Enjoyable. Some very good prose and had me rereading a few lines. Thank you for sharing, and no suggestions to change this. Kudos!
WOW! What a crazy well written poem. I enjoyed the "story" to it, and could imagine the feelings tangled in it's stanza that are quite long. Great rhyme, to say so much, I think this is superb. No suggestions, gosh nope, and Thank you so much.
Early I know. Relationships are hard and always takes two to make or break them, this poem reminds me of someone and I can relate to the shutting down, the feeling of being blocked. Complicated for sure.
Gosh, if not for the description I would not of seen the rose of a youth, hyped and sexy, not of aged and gravity. So creative, delightful so thought out. I enjoyed this poem a lot and can't but smile at the imagery and mood it provides. Well written and edited, Thanks!!
Good Sunny Day, Mursal Random Review link found you.
A love poem, full of opposite imagery, designs to show the torment and highs and lows of caring and perhaps it not being returned. Almost has a feel of a stalker.
I don't see any punctuation errors and there is some rhyme. Simple, well done. Thank you for sharing and enjoy your day.
I'm not fiamilar with many poetry forms and struggle with almost any form, that said this is so sad and magical, to still love when you forgotten that love is crazy. Thanks for the authors note to clarify the poem. I could see her in her T shirts and honestly sad.
Good afternoon, Beholden Random Review Link favors you.
Pandora. So much legend and myths about that box. This is a great poem, prose is spot on, and there's deep mysterious imagery, a gift no something not wanted but not being aware. Thanks for sharing and being involved in contests. No suggestion to edit.
Enjoyable somewhat dark, very easy to understand poem about the ending of Halloween, all the preparation, the rituals, the vulture's wing, the lasting effect done. The sense of accomplishment. No deep imagery, quaint and well done.
How simple and romantic at the same time. I don't know of this form, but seems to be a good one for feelings. It can yet another year or we can make it a wonderful next day and year, No suggestions, I just enjoyed the easy to understand poem.
Thanks!
Creative, a great mystic poem asking some serious questions, those questions we all have asked at one time or another. There a touch of creepy, and love expressed in a way new for me, I read it twice, no suggestions to improve it, though that said, I do wonder the last three stanzas why? But It is good, and I did enjoy it.
Thanks kindly for sharing.
Editor, dark, creepy and carrying a scythe, well done. A glimpse of darkness, of what's below. Slash and Burn indeed. This is almost like a 80s slasher horror movie, No suggestions, entertaining, abode Dante. Thanks!
Fatigue and Exhaustion mentally and physically, can be different for everyone, though myself can say I have not felt exhaustion since my youth. This is quite creative, the struggle of being torn by so much in your mind and it showing physically. Kind of dark and somewhat sad. Depression? I hope it helped in some way sharing. I don't see any errors, but suggest a font change perhaps.
Thank you, and enjoy your day. staiNed
Congrats on your win, and thanks for the explanation on the form used. Always helpful. Thunderstorms are common in the summer here, and I surmise that such imagery described does happen. Clear, not overdone in imagery. I enjoyed it, and see no errors to change it. Thanks!!
Favorite:
Storm’s coming we surmise
As strong winds toss about debris
So many questions. So much wondering, and very creative expression. Easy to understand to follow. A lot can relate to this, a kind of day dream state that we often find ourselves in. No suggestions and I enjoyed. Thanks!
Good day, Fyn Very sad and so needs to be remembered and thought about for sure, I know of things myself that are similar and so very sad.It breaks our hearts to know that such hateful happened and still happen today, there is no need for it. No suggestions and thanks for the font choice, I imagine it was hard to write but something that was needed, and if worth doing it often isn't easy.
Great ending and I enjoyed this mostly for it have a darker side of what we experience as people. Easy to understand, simple but thoughtful in your imagery, No suggestions, again enjoyed. Thanks!
Too Funny! We get one shot and we don't worry about that shot till we dying, I have a lot of books on death, immortality, and blah blah, mostly from when my son died, grief and depression. This is good, almost has an exasperated feel to it.
We're fickle and we don't understand ourselves, well edited and I did think about it once in a blue, Thanks! and there's a spelling error in the description.
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it nice as I not a romantic. Is the punctuation or lack or it intentional? If you centered it, it would do wonders for presentation. Thank you for sharing, I enjoy poetry and yours was a delight.
