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Review of All I Really Want  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
MadMan -

I confess I didn't think too highly of this item UNTIL I digested the last stanza.

Very powerful and a punch to your readers. *Smile*

The second stanza (last line) establishes your mantra, so to speak and it was totally dynamic in the subsequent stanzas.

The fifth was a tad repetitious with the "and' word: I would edit it this way;

Sometimes I think about paper, and pens, no comma after paper
And words, and thoughts, and whether I’m really even here or not, Omit the beginning And. No comma after thoughts
And I wonder if you get the messages I write,
‘Cause all I really want is to tell you I’m sorry for hurting you. Such a sweet surprise closer on this stanza *Delight*

Your final stanza absolutely blends the whole piece together for me and I find I like it all very much!

SM

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Doug Rainbow -

I saw a referral in the Poetry Newsletter to read this item and I'm glad I clicked on.

Your examples are as varied as wildflowers and you made it melt smoothly even though the meter is not 100%.

As in: A railroad track, a sneak attack, 8
The last pickle in the jar. 7
A subordinate rank, a ship that sank, 10
The end of a falling star. 7

Even with the non-perfect meter, it comes off smooth and entertaining!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This contest idea is probably the most provocative for any one who aspires to be a writer. 24 hours and a prompt is like cramming for finals in High School.

A real challenge, such a brain tease and rush - Congrats for the forum and the life of it. You are attracting many folks whether they enter or not. I have entered before and won it.

Hoping you inspire many more members to dive into the time-frame and subject matter with gratifying results.! *Bigsmile*
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Bella darling! How daringly naughty and risque! I LOVE IT!

As I read this delicious concoction of rhyming bliss, my eyes got wider and wider as I consumed the delicacy before me. You, my dear, are an ARTEEST! *Laugh*

This wonderful, creative, sassy, irreverent, unbelievably excellent, comical, and irrepressibly WOMAN ROARING piece goes to Public Reviews so all these folks can ENJOY this comedy in rhyme! *Laugh*

They will too! *Bigsmile*
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Review of Winter's Waif  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Sue -

What a joy it was to read this metered piece. Beautifully done.

Crazy Eights! *Delight*

Wonderful! You should be entering contests - or maybe you have, I have not been to your port. *Blush* But I plan to *Wink*

SM
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Review of Wippedd Words  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
TC~

How absolutely C L E V E R *Exclaim*

The subject matter is whimsical, the approach semi-serious, the delivery comical and very clever, oh yeah, I said that already *Bigsmile*.

I was highly entertained by this piece and will make this review a Public Review so others can enjoy this one as well.

Keep pushin' the plume.

SM





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Review of The Choice  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
SoCal Scribe -

I'm a poet and just got around to reading the story entries in the "Invalid Item.

So glad I chose this one first! *Delight* I liked this timeless dilemma. Has overtones of the Gift of the Magi to it and that's a win-win.

The love expressed between the two is palatable and precious. Your sentence structure is wonderful to behold AND your word selections are your own.

I tried to find an error and could only find one. Listed below is a teeny spelling error. If I hadn't been eating and concentrating on what was in my mouth, I would have missed it, I'm sure! *Laugh*

“Are you out of your mind?” Roger exlaimed."

Spelling: " exclaimed "

I just hope the story Judges show you favor.

The Best to you,

SM
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Review of Tale untold  
Rated: E | (4.5)
JTTJ -

This is pure sweetness! Your word choices are exquisite, the sentiment palatable.
And so I wonder, . . . where is the recognition? If I had the Gps I would do it myself! *Delight*

Grammar, spelling, form (of course) and content are above-average with a smooth delivery, no force anywhere.

I'm sending this review to Public Reviews so your co-members can ooh and ahh over this concisely constructed confection! *Left* Like that alliteration *Question* *Wink*

You may receive that awardicon YET! *Smile*

SM

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Review of Squirrel Hunting  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)


Leger,

Again, the consummate storyteller! *Smile* This one made me laugh OUT LOUD and I rarely laugh out loud. *Thumbsup*

I really have to pee, damn it. He rolls his eyes and ignores me. I scramble off the dirt pile and try to find a "good spot" to pee. You know, a spot where you can brace on a tree and not piss on your sock.

*Laugh* AND *Laugh* AND *Laugh*

Then you iced the story cake with the following;

The squirrel watched us both with interest. Finally I zeroed in on the creature and squeezed. POW! The kick from the gunshot slammed into me and threw me off balance. Down the pile of dirt I rolled like a big puffy snowball. Just as I lost my balance, he snatched the gun from me to save it from damage. There I sat sprawled at the bottom of the hill like an over-sized down pillow. OOF!

You are so adept at telling a story from your own personal perspective and even making the hilarious self-deprecating remarks - readers love the comical honesty ESPECIALLY when pregnant!

You know at least 1/2 your readers will positively identify with this!

LOVED THIS LEGER! *Laugh*

SM
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow Miss Sarah -

What a editorial *Exclaim* Blistering to Robert Mugabe's administration.

You spin a type of webbing on the reader who, if they didn't care before reading this article, they would after consuming your keen insight to the political world that swirls about Africa.

Well done by crackie and to prove to you, dear lady, that there is more than one way to skin a polecat . . .

. . . you'll see. *Wink*

SM
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Review of The Dairy Maid  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Bella Bunny -

Such exquisite rhythm, and word choices are waaay above average. What a natural talent you are. *Delight*

You make it seem effortless due to the finesse and smoothness that pleasures our sensors *Bigsmile*

But this is NOT the first time I have read you - Glad to see you are charmingly consistent in your work.

SM

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Review of Opposites  
Rated: E | (5.0)
CS -

So why hasn't this jewel received a ribbon? Say? *Smile*

I would but after checking I only have 8,398 - I'm sorry, . . . it deserves one.

You already know this is extremely powerful and unfortunately not everyone will absorb all the faceted beauty here.

But I do!

SM
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Review of One Naughty Night  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Mr./Ms J. A. Buxton -

How really comical, and that's one helluva' cat too! *Laugh*

Congratulations on winning the Writer's Cramp 3 days ago! I won the first time I entered "Invalid Item.

I didn't notice any misspellings or grammar errors. As far as content, you presented it interestingly enough and there was an element of humor, which always WINS! *Bigsmile*

Truth is stranger than fiction sometimes and you told a "stinker" (**pun intended**) of one! *Laugh*

Has to go to Public Reviews so your co-members can enjoy the perception of your home-girl there.

Aside from the clean-up, it was a win-win situation. *Cool*

SM
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Review of Pigeon Parade  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Harry -

I read this because it's listed in the Poetry Newsletter, otherwise, we in all probability would have never crossed paths. That's why I take a coupla' newsletters. *Smile*

The last stanza(?) was my favorite, your analysis at the end was almost comical, since you, yourself are male. *Laugh*

Today I watched a lusty male pigeon,
his chest puffed up and his head bobbing,
marching after a coy female who was giving
him a cold shoulder. They paraded in tandem
all over the yard, him strutting his heart out
to please her, but to no avail. Off she flew,
leaving him to his misery. Like any other
rejected male, he took it hard…until another
likely female caught his attention. Then his
strutting parade began anew. There must be
a valuable life lesson in here somewhere. *Rolleyes* Overstating the obvious *Question* *Laugh* N *Laugh* N *Laugh* *Exclaim*

This goes to Public Reviews so other males can search that life lesson you mentioned in the piece *Wink* *Exclaim*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
NickiD -

How absolutely B R I L L I A N T *Exclaim* What a visual delight. Such a piece of art both written word and the formatting is a stroke of genius.

If I had the Gps I would place a ribbon on it! Sorry, I only have 4,156 Gps in my bank.

I LOVE THIS!

Has to go to Public Reviews so your co-members can see and read this piece of ART!

This item has made my day. I'm gonna' link my blog readers to this piece, so they too can see this visually stunning ART*Exclaim*

SM
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dr. Smith ~

What's to say but you have penned an epic. The language is not only pleasing to the mind's ear, but you maintain the dialect and rhythm, this is not only brilliant but
it

R O C K S *Exclaim*


It doesn't surprise me to see the high ratings, what else could one do?
You must have a poet's soul as evidenced by this piece.

SM
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Kathleen,

What did you stop for? *Bigsmile* I was getting all comfy and bang it's over.

Yes, we are spiraling in a downward slant, aren't we? Tragic we've become, apathetic to situations such as you described. I think we've loss some spine and become a nation of pollyannas and it does me no good to think or write that.

I'm predicting that military enrollment will be up by the end of this year. I know an 18-year old that's going to Afghanistan in August.

Have a celebratory evening and maybe a little wine.

SM



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Rated: E | (4.5)
Tikku -

This is sooo Goooooood! *Bigsmile* Are you one of the Creator's blessed that can just release this dessert right through your fingertips, with little backspacing needed?

Well, ARE YA' *Question* *Pthb* *Laugh*

You are deliciously expressive at this restricted art form. Power-packed and delivered so smoothly and yet it dukes the reader right between the eyes. Your words impact are memorable and that's exactly what we writers want.

WELL DONE! *Cool*

SM

Oh yeah, this has to go to Public Reviews because your co-members should know this richness is abundant in your work. *Smile*
*Delight* It's jolly good to make your acquaintance *Delight*
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Review of Winter Night  
Rated: E | (5.0)
arakun -

Such a beautifully formatted piece - then the content is breathtakingly executed.

What more can I say or rate?

This should be calligraphied out and double matted in a large frame with earth tones and non-glare glass and showcased in your home.

All your co-members need to see this one - Public Reviews here this one comes.


Wonderful snack. *Wink*

SM
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Review of A typical family?  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Mr/Ms Mitchell -

I want to congratulate you on your second place win and to tell you that I truly think your entry was superior to my own. *Delight* (**SM must be crazee**) *Wink*

Your form was 8-8-8-8-8-8-10-10. I loved it! Next week you will get First Place, I know! *Bigsmile* I appreciate good writing and I hope to see you for this coming round.

I LOVE good competition and you are a worthy opponent! See you next week!

SM

P.S. I'm sending this to Public Reviews so your co-members can see what an excellent writer you are. *Check1*

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Kare -

So glad I went blahhhg surfing tonight - You always seem to absorb your surroundings and describe them so uhhh, . . . completely and totally.

You are a literary sponge and whenever you squeeze yourself, it comes out so perfectly. Glad I didn't go the way of the Studebaker *Laugh*

I'll come back and see you soon.

Eat well and love hard. *Cool*

P.S. Going to Public Reviews because others need to understand where you are coming from and going to. *Reading*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Sarah -

Such a loving, sweet story about Chewy. Giant Schnauzer, I had a miniature named Chrissy and she had 7 puppies, 6 boys and one girl.

It sounds like he became the most popular pup in your house. Are the other four dogs, purebreds? Just curious. *Smile*

Your husband, Ivan, seems so laid back and easy-going. He accepted the new puppy with no lip-service to you about the four you already had. Good man!

I brought home two cats from the SPCA*, when they had a Free Adoption Day last August. When I called my ex about two, he got very mouthy and firm about only one. *Rolleyes*

*Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Animals

Needless to say, Max and Mollie love him and (**Shhh, . . . don't tell**) he cares about them too. Warms the *Heart* don't it?

Boris sounds like a charmer - does he want to sleep with you and Ivan?

Max and Molls are banned from my ex's room at night, (Tom has allergies to cat dander) but when he exits in the am, they bolt to his room, smelling everything, in case something has changed, or been moved.

Which of the five dogs is your favorite? Ivan's favorite?

Glad to learn you are a canine lover - God sure knew what he was doing when He created companion animals. *Heart*

I'm gonna' place this on Public Reviews so your co-members can see another side of you; Miss Sarah, the animal lover. *Delight*

Please enjoy the Gps as a token of a common thread that runs between us, we love animals, but more importantly, I loved the way you described the entire story of how you came about getting your Big Baby. *Cool*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Storymistress -
From your questionnaire I C&P my comments:

YES - I asked about emoticons not costumicons when I inquired at the Non-Tech Forum. Sorry but they linked me here. I do know the difference *Smile*

Sorry for the intrusion. Oh yes, 1, a right-handed *Thumbsup*?

2. An eggy face ?

3. Praying hands ?

SM
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Review of Labrynth  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Ken!

And you have a sense of humor too! How positively wonderful!

Boy, I was reading this fast, like reading fast would make something happen, *Laugh*. You get your reader all wound up and BANG! WHAM! GOTCHA'

Ready for a cigarette?

Smartee-pants! *Bigsmile*

SM
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Review of WINTER WALK  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Ms Mize -

Nicely done. I have never heard of this form but that's what we're here for, right? To learn, grow and improve our skills.

Could this form be as long as you wish, or is it restricted to the five stanzas you offered here?

The faint howl
of a solitary, persistent hound
confronts the silence.


The above is my favorite part. Kinda' spooky *Smile*

All readers will be able to "see" your thoughts and your character's movements.

I like it *Bigsmile*

Get busy, you have MORE Lunes to plume! *Cool*

SM
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