Not a terribly good story line. But, nonetheless a pretty well written story. Grammar wasn't particulary good. There were words like 'deck' in the one sentence that should of been singularized. A couple of others aong the way. No big deal though. This story kept me interested until the very end. You had that storm out there. You could have made this tory a lot more interesting with the use of the storm. Keep it up though!!!
I really enjoyed this poem!!!. Both in a happy way and a sad way. Happy that people like yourself support the young men and women in uniform. And sad because of what these men and women must be thinking in the few precious seconds before they close their eyes forever. I also think think that this poem was really thought out well before you wrote it. It tells me that you have a very bright mind.
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