I LOVE TULIPS! And I loved reading your poem about them! They truly are one of God's special blessings among all of the floral blessings He created for mankind to enjoy!!!
A unique topic and a poignant, perfect expression of it. Loved how you started it out, how you arranged and timed the emotions of your characters, and how you brought your event to a relieving, joyful conclusion.
I enjoyed reading your short poem on having and dealing with limits. It was unique and beautiful, and full of wisdom and encouragement for your readers to follow your determined attitude in their own lives.
WOW! What a beautiful expression of love and loss and hope and joy in knowing that though you are without the one you've loved so deeply now, you will be reunited one day with him in Heaven, and never be without his and the Lord's presence in your life again! Every husband and wife and mother and father; indeed, every relative and friend of a precious loved one who has gone to be with God will relate to all of the emotions you've so perfectly recreated in this life event you've put into words as a memorial to the one who has been so dearly and completely loved. It moved my heart deeply as I read it and was reminded of the times in my own life when I lost someone, temporarily, too, into the hands of God, my sadness at the loss, but my joy in knowing my loss was only temporary, only for the remaining time that I am here without them in this heaven and earth.
Enjoyed reading your short little poem. It was poignant and to the point, presenting an unique idea that you could expand into a longer poem if you decide to work on doing that.
Great job on putting your topic briefly and succinctly, Brittany!
Enjoyed reading your thoughtful, poignant poem. Everyone is definitely more than the image other people may have of them before they take the time to really get to know them, what motivates them, where they live in their hearts and spirits.
Great job, Estrella Mae, on expressing the emotions a person feels when others don't see their real selves, but only the other person's image of who they are!
Another poignant poem expressing the emotional dilemmas a heart goes through when it stops denying the feelings it has developed for another beyond the beauty and joy experienced in being "just special friends."
Loved reading your poem "I Love You, Lord", rejoicing with you through it for all of the blessings of Agape Love God has given to you throughout your life, in good times and bad times, times of faith, times of doubt, times of sin and times of resistance to sin.
Great job, Tess, in expressing your heart toward God in this poem!
Enjoyed reading your poem. You're so right about love sometimes happening in just a moment. Wouldn't it be wonderful if love could happen for everyone in this way, in every relationship?! But alas, sometimes that moment is preceded by many, many moments of getting to know the other person as friends first, and that process leading up to experiencing that special moment when love enters each other's heart!
Great job, Melody, on describing how it feels to experience love's special moment!
Thanks for becoming one of my fans! Love this Spiritual Musing of yours about smiling into the eyes of Jesus! It's always a great encouragement to our hearts to know we'll be smiling with Him forever one day in "the new heaven and new earth", in the Holy City, "New Jerusalem", in a sin-nature free atmosphere there of love, joy, peace, faith and thanksgiving!
WOW! You really captured the atmosphere of Michael's Christmas party perfectly in this latest installment from your novel. Beautifully written to keep your readers involved and enthralled with each moment described and experienced by Marissa! Can't wait to read what happens next in your romantic narrative for Marissa and Michael, Maureen!
Makes me want to do all that you ask,
To set my mind, my soul, my heart
Happily about the task.
For how many out there truly care
To invite you to open up and share
All the thoughts, words, and music
That fill your being
With passionate joy and loving feelings?
Isn't it fun to sit down, take a look at yourself, and slowly, line after line, craft a creative description of who you are? Really enjoyed learning the what makes up the young woman using the handle "Stars Above".
What a beautiful poem! Something different and fun to contemplate about. Where do those cool or warm breezes come from that arrive upon our waiting doorsteps?
I enjoyed how you suggested some possible starting points, then carried your breeze along from those to your abode.
And the plot begins to thicken! It'll be fun to see how you develop it further, as Marissa learns more about Michael and his business, and why the Feds are so interested in learning more about him and his business dealings too. What could cause the Feds to put Marissa through all they put her through? I'm looking forward to reading where you take Marissa's relationship with Michael from here. This could turn into a suspenseful thriller, as well as, an engaging romance.
You have to go back over what you've written and do some more editing to correct typos and sentences with repetitive information, eliminating those and tightening up what you've written, as you have time to work on editing this section of your storyline more, Maureen, but other than that need: GREAT JOB creating new developments in your storyline to keep your readers interested in your story and wanting to continue reading to find out what's going to happen next.
Isn't love GREAT! How well I remember every nuance pf emotion I experienced each time I've fallen in love with "someone special". Your poem prompted sweet memories of those precious first moments of realizing you are in love.
A very captivating essay. I found myself easily caught up in learning more about how your relationship with your "cherished friend" developed and blossomed into all it became.
You have some editing to do in some of your sentences to correct a few mistakes in wording and grammar, and you might want to tone down some of the "flowery" excesses in your descriptive adjectives, but, overall, a very good, heartfelt essay, "milkwalrus". How did your teacher like it? Writing is so much fun, putting thoughts and ideas together that will reach out and touch others' hearts. Keep on letting your imagination "soar" and having fun as you do so, like me!
It just swept me along, fascinated, to its succinct conclusion. What idea for a character-driven scenario with a happy, satisfying lesson to be learned by your main character of 'Jason'. Loved how you structured your narrative as you unfolded it, sent it on its journey, then brought it to its wise ending.
Another great poem, perfectly expressing its topic in well-considered components. "The Pursuit of Dreams" indeed is suggested by the photo given for contestants to use to inspire their creative imaginations. Loved how that photo inspired yours, Ken!!!
WOW!!! What an unique idea for a poem! Sandcastles are always such a visual treat to watch someone build, knowing that eventually the sea will rush in to reclaim all that sand so lovingly, delicately formed into the designer's temporary work of art. Hopefully, he/she brought a camera to preserve their "masterpiece" on film before the tide washes it away.
A great continuation of your storyline, Maureen!!!
As I was reading it, I kept picturing its scenes being played out as one of Hallmark Love Story fans' favorite Hallmark movies! I think you could definitely turn it into a romantic screenplay, as well as, a Hallmark novel, and make some serious money blessing Christian Romance fans with it, Maureen! You have some editing to do on some sections of this continuation, but those grammar corrections are minor and easy to correct when you're ready to edit your work.
I ABSOLUTELY LOVE WHERE YOU ARE GOING WITH THIS LOVE STORY, MAUREEN! It's an unique idea, with situations that draw your readers in, keeping them interested, and looking forward to reading what's going to happen next in Marissa and Michael's growing relationship. GREAT JOB!!!
WOW! What a beautiful poem about the moon! Like the moon, it just rolled on endearingly to its sweet conclusion. It reminded me, of course, Maureen, of all of God's purposes in creating our earth's uniquely designed moon as a special blessing to Adam and Eve and from them to each of us! In one of my Word Find Puzzles that I hope you will enjoy doing, in my "ARTICULOUS WORD FINDS" folder in the "FOR THE LOVE OF WORD SEARCHING" folder, I have a puzzle with words chosen from an article about the uniqueness of our moon that I found at the AnswersInGenesis.org website that I encourage everyone to read there before doing that particular puzzle. I encourage you to do the same, Maureen.
What a great way to get your readers hooked and interested in finding out more about your characters and what's going to happen next for them! Loved reading this portion of the novel you're working on. I know you've been having creative fun imagining all the possibilities and putting them down to work and expand on as you develop your initial ideas further.
This little preview of your scenario made me look forward to reading your completed love story when you've finished it.
Steve
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