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*Buttonv* I tend to focus on how a piece makes me feel, rather than a line by line review. My reviews usually run around 1000 characters w/o Writing ML. If I notice spelling errors I'll be sure to point them out. *Buttong* As far as grammar, it's been a while since I was in school, but I an let you know if it sounds awkward or not. I may even look up some information on a particular so I can pass on correct info to you. *Buttonp* Many of my ratings fall between 3-5 stars. I will give out less for pieces that need a fair bit of polishing, but I also try to offer useful advice and a second review of the piece after it's been finished/polished.
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Regency Romance,
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Horror, Erotica,
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Poetry, Prose, Short Stories (1000 words or less for the purpose of reviewing.)
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Anything over 18+. Anything with erotica, occult, witches, demons, ghosts, zombies, fetishes.
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Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent article. I really enjoyed hearing your thoughts and perspective on raising goats. I love the title as well. This is the type of lifestyle my husband and I are working towards. We start construction on our house this spring, if everything goes well.

Your article was both informative and well written. I look forward to reading more of your work.


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Review of Get Up  
Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is a lovely and moving poem. I think you did well in expressing what it's like trying to move on.

The one thing I would suggest is to go back and edit the format. The individual lines could be made shorter, many of your lines could easily be two separate lines. The body of the poem could be divided into stanzas. I think this would give a little more order to your poem.

Thanks for sharing.



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Review of Chapter One  
Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (2.5)
Hello, I came across your piece as a random read. I don't often review chapters, but I too have been working on a book and so I'm trying to expand on the types of reviews I do.

An opening chapter should grab the readers attention. I think yours does that, at least the opening line. You know there is tension, someone is angry and we, the reader, are interested to know why.

I can see that you are trying to include descriptions in your writing, this is good, however, we need to be careful that don't describe everything in the same way. For example, "my small, cramped bedroom", "my brown, wooden door", "the wooden, creaky stairs". I still find myself struggling with how to describe the scene. Perhaps, try to shake it up a bit. Instead of telling the reader, "I did this, then I did this", try to rearrange the sentence structure a bit. "The bed springs creaked as I rose and reluctantly approached my bedroom door." (Although, I use words that end in -ly, we are often encouraged to use them sparely, if at all. It will make our writing stronger.)

Another thing to consider, is the character description. Many writers do as you have done and literally stand them in front of the mirror, simply to examine the features that they have seen for years. It's ok not to have a complete physical description in your first chapter, although I do like to know if the main character is male or female. A general age is nice, I'm guessing your character is younger, (teen or young adult) since it seems that they live with their mom, but of course there could just as easily turn out to be some reason. She has a key and lets herself into his house, whatever.

After the main character gets downstairs and sees his mom, I think you could leave out the part, "When I looked," and just say "Behind her two burly-looking police officers..."

As far as the plot, there's not a lot there, but you have already dropped the reader into the action as it were. This is good. Something has happened to involve the police, and we are intrigued to know what.

I hope I have been helpful. I don't like to make assumptions about writers but if you are still new to writing, the best advice is to keep at it. It's like a muscle, the more you use it the stronger it gets. And read, read lots of books. Good books can teach you how to express the ideas in your head. Bad books can show what not to do, and how painful it can be to read them. So keep it up.

P.S. I gave you 2.5 stars. In general, it's best to pay more attention to comment then the number. I gave the rating I did, because your chapter still seems to be in its early stages. If you continue to work on it, I could always give you my thoughts on any updates.


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Review by Winn Storm
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I came upon your piece as a random read. So I read the title and first sentence, then checked the rating to be sure. PG13, and continued to read. As a chocolate lover, I can agree with your story and apt description. It's a very cute piece. I enjoyed reading it. I would almost say you could expand it further, but if a certain word limit was required, then it was well done.

Thank you for the enjoyable read.

Winn Storm


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Review of One  
Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello, I came across this piece randomly. Your topic is very relevant today, and you express yourself well, but briefly. I like your choice in wording, my only caveat is that it is so short. I feel like it's not complete. You given us truth and statements, but I can't say I'm emotionally moved by this piece.

I'd like to see you expand on what you have already created. Don't just tell me, make me feel it. Overall it's a really good start and I did enjoy reading it, any advice or critiques were meant in the most upbuilding sense only. Thank you for sharing your work. And welcome to WDC.

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Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (3.5)
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         Hi. I came across this through Random Reads. I don't often review chapters, since they require more time. Bare in mind I haven't yet read the first chapter. I think you have a solid start, it's seems like you are building up to some action. It didn't drag on, although in my opinion it seemed a bit short for a chapter. (I do realize that online books often have shorter chapter than books in print.)

*Buttono* Favorite line
         I suppose I like the first paragraph. It seems to have the most description and sets the scene for the chapter.

*Buttong* Suggestions
         I see see a few areas that could use improvement... or rather more detail/drama and less summarising. I selected a couple lines to pick apart if you don't mind. (In the hopes of being constructive, and not at all mean spirited.)

         "and an old man hop out"... did he really hop out. For a old man, he must be in decent shape.

         "He gazed nervously at Cletus." Perhaps instead of just telling us he was nervous, you could show it. He fidgeted and avoided eye contact. That sort of thing.

         "sat on the weathered porch and watched the sun rise and set," Did they really sit there the whole day?


*Buttonb* Final Thoughts
         Like I said it's still a solid chapter and only one small piece to a very large story. I think it could benefit from a little more detail. But I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing.

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Review by Winn Storm
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Buttonr* First Impression
         I came across this as a random read. The first paragraph intrigued me. I liked your use of language and the context your narrative provided.

*Buttono* Favorite line
         The opening paragraph is definitely the one that stands out to me. It's intelligently written and a bit of a break from the ordinary.

*Buttong* Suggestions
         While the rest is still well done, including the twist at the end. It doesn't feel at the same level of writing, the dialogue felt humdrum, but this is sometimes the case. So I suppose it is realistic. It does create a stark contrast to the opening paragraph. Perhaps a few more details, gestures.

*Buttonb* Final Thoughts
         I found it an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing, and perhaps I will be able to read something else from your portfolio one day.

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Review of The Door  
Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (3.5)
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         I liked how you began the poem, with hope and expectation. You did well expressing the waiting and not knowing, it captures the readers attention. I feel the end is somewhat anti-climatic, but isn't that how it sometimes is after a goal or dream is realized. It's not always what we imagined and now we must figure out where to go from here.

*Buttono* Favorite line
         I liked the opening line. I personally love those moments just before dawn.

*Buttong* Suggestions
         In the second stanza you write how your dreams and goals and purpose has been attained, and yet I feel that it was because of the partitioner that these were achieved, along with patience on the part of the author. Perhaps expressing how our patience has paid off, or giving some other detail about how they "have become the best [they] could possibly be".

*Buttonb* Final Thoughts
         Overall, I did enjoy the poem and even if you should decide not to change a thing, I think you have a fairly solid poem. Keep on writing!

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Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Buttonr* First Impression
         This is a very sweet poem, artfully delivered. Your descriptions help to sweep the reader up with the emotions you are experiencing. I found the rhythm of your poem to be slow and gentle as you linger over each detail. Not to say that it was in any way tedious, I thoroughly enjoyed the journey.

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         It's hard to pick just a single line since they mingle so nicely together. I really did enjoy the second and fourth stanzas; your description of the object of your affection is one of a secret admirer, sweet and observant but not yet that of a lover. Given that you say this ended in a friendship confirms these suspicions.

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         I do have a few suggestions for your consideration. In the first stanza, you speak of her "prescience", do you mean her presence or does she have some foreknowledge of something? Presence would be my guess.

Her prescience presence entices my heart to reach new heights.

         While the term "amongst" is correct, it is the archaic term for "among". The style of your poem lends itself to the more modern term and I think in this case simpler is better.

She sits amongst among the jasmine,

         Again, I think keeping the wording simple is better. Too many words will only muddy the image you have painted.

Demons retreat, no longer encircling me at the altar.

         You mentioned the possibility of adding another stanza, I think the poem is very nice as is and doesn't need another stanza to make it feel complete. If you still choose to add one, be cautious of of just making it longer, instead of better. I feel you have 2 good stanzas and 2 excellent stanzas, if adding another, it should be excellent.

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         Thank you for asking me to review your piece; it is an honor to offer my opinions.

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Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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         I'm back to review this again. I meant to do this much sooner. It's a great idea for a fundraiser.

*Buttono* Favorite part
         I really like the creative theme you came up with for your fundraiser.

*Buttong* Suggestions
         I had a couple suggestions the first time I reviewed this. But since you have made some changes I have chged my rating from 4.5 to 5 stars!

*Buttonb* Final Thoughts
         I know you were taken away for family issues and real life, but I hope to see you back here soon, as I'm sure many other WDC members are.

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Review of A Place To Belong  
Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Buttonr* First Impression
         This poem expresses some of the feelings I have felt. The meaning of family was redefined after the birth of my daughter. I created my own family. I also never, really fit in with my family, always on the opposing side, always the "trouble maker". Your poem managed to reach me on an emotional level.

*Buttono* Favorite line
         It was hard to pick a favorite, especially since a number of them were so heartbreaking. But I do like that it ended with hope.

*Buttong* Suggestions
         Your poem was very well written. It had a nice rhythm that suited the mood of your piece. I can't think of how to improve it. However, I think there should be a period after the line:

But had no clue how.

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         I truly enjoyed reading your poem, particularly because it expresses my feelings so accurately.

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Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Buttonr* First Impression
         This is a great idea for a fundraiser. It's new and creative and a little bit addictive.

*Buttono* Favorite line
         I love the image you used at the top of the page.

*Buttong* Suggestions
         My only caveat would be that some of the package names run a little long. I know it's a fundraiser but it can end up being expensive. Perhaps limiting titles to a couple words or maybe 15 letters would be nice for future events.

         One other suggestion would be as to the end date of your activity. With no known end date, interest might begin to wane. Having a target ticket sales is good but maybe the 2000 is a little high. Personally, I rather see a couple rounds, with a smaller jackpot.

*Buttonb* Final Thoughts
          These are just a couple of my personal thoughts. You have a really great event here and it has been fun participating!!

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Review of The Novelist  
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*Buttonr* First Impression
         This is an excellent poem. I like that you chose to write about writing. You have painted a very nice image of an author sitting down with his (her) creation. I can visualize pressing out the paper and even hearing the sound as I arrange my surroundings.

         You take the reader on a journey as we followed this author. I felt as if I were hovering over his shoulder. It started of slow and methodical, picking up speed as the author tries to capture his thoughts and put them on paper.

*Buttono* Favorite line
         I really enjoyed the whole poem it is hard to pick out just one part. Although, these lines seem stand out just a bit. The rhythm is good and the rhyme is perfect. And everything just sounds so productive. This is, however, where I get stuck. I get lost in their background story, I struggle to keep with the action.

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Nurture the characters, give them vocations.


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         I can think of no way to improve your poem. It is clever and creative. I enjoyed every word.

*Buttonb* Final Thoughts
         I enjoyed how your piece manages to come full circle. It gives it a really nice balance, after all a writers job is never done just because the book is. Our characters tend to have a life of their own and live on after the last chapter is finished.

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Review of Mistaken Identity  
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*Buttonr* First Impression
          I think I'm going to have to try my hand at this. Although, I don't think I would be as successful as you have beeen with your piece. All dialogue... way more interesting than simply telling the reader everything. This is something I struggle with. It does save all the 'he said', 'she said'. You have managed to tell a comical and interesting short story just using dialogue.

*Buttong* Suggestions
         There was one line I noticed...

"But I if you could just give me a few minutes of your time..."

         Either the "I" is unneeded or you meant for him to stutter, in which case, I think you might need a comma or something.

         I didn't notice anything else that could be improved.

*Buttonb* Final Thoughts
         I think this is a great writing exercise and a well written story as well. Your dialogue was believable and not at all cheesy. Great work. And Happy Anniversary! *Balloonr* *Balloonv* *Balloony*

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         I thought I would continue with the beach theme. We have long winters in Canada and I'm missing summer. I'm so glad you post the explanations of the poetry form you've used. It makes is easier for an ill-informed poet like myself to feel comfortable sharing my thoughts. I've never been to a sand castle competition but I was able to picture it in my mind.

*Buttono* Favorite line
         The title is what caught my eye, it's sort of a whimsical yet complete accurate title. Also I like your rhyme serious and delirious. It brought a smile to my face as I pictured a grown man playing in the sand, determined to win.

*Buttong* Suggestions
         I can't think of any improvements for your piece. I'm not sure I would use the form myself. I might find it stifling, but you did very well with it.

*Buttonb* Final Thoughts
         Another very well written piece with the power to transport the reader. Thanks so much.

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Review of Summer Joy  
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         First off, congratulations on 10 Years at WDC!! Thank you for a chance to review your work. It can be difficult to review a haiku. They're so short, but that's one of the things I like about them. They're short but full of meaning. Yours had me transported to the beach, watching my kids playing in the sunshine. So just because of that I like it very much. It also carried a sense of nostalgia to it.

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         No suggestions for your piece. But keep up the great work at WDC!

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         Congratulations again.

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Review of Amy  
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         Thank you for participating in my contest. I really enjoyed your poem. A new baby can be hard on an older sybling. I've recently had a second child. And I'm sure she would agree with you at times, that's it's not easy. She's a great sister, but even before the new baby arrived things were different. It's hard to play with a mom who can hardly move.

         You did a great job relating what it was like having to adjust to an outsider.

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I'd trade in her
On any day!


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         I think you have a very well written piece. I can't think of any improvements to it.

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Review of Free to be me  
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         You put a lot of emotion into your writing. I found it very easy to feel what you felt. It wasn't over the top or cheesy. And even though it had a melancholy air to it, I didn't walk away from it feeling sad or depressed. But it did make me think. We all make sacrifices in relationships but sometimes we are forced to change who we really are. I guess it's the fact that you weren't willing to lose certain parts of yourself, the parts you felt brought the two of you together in the first place that adds a little hope to this poem. I think it shows an inner strength that I admire.

*Buttono* Favorite line
         You vowed to love me for better or worse,

         Not to love me, but fix me first.


*Buttong* Suggestions
         There really wasn't anything that sprang to my mind that needed correcting or changing. There were a couple places where your rhyming scheme/pattern seemed to break down for a second. I'm no expert when it comes to any of the more formal types of poetry, it''s very possible I'm just being ignorant. But despite this mild deviation, I didn't feel it in any way spoiled the flow of the poem. Rather, I thought it had a nice pace to it.

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         It was a pleasure to read your work and I look forward to reading many more of your pieces.


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         First off I know I picked something you wrote quite some time ago, but it's nice to dust off an old piece sometimes and see how far we've come. I like the premise of a daughter of a celebrity in the 1920's. It has a lot of potential to allow the reader to experience a different time.

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         I noticed that you tried to include references to things from the 20's. But I was surprised you chose a Ford Model T as the mother's car. Although it was produced until 1927, it was more often driven by the common middle-class. I would suspect that a woman like her would prefer something a little snazzier.

         Despite these period references the language of your main character seemed quite modern to me. More colloquialisms like Tin Lizzie (referring to the Model T) may have helped the believability of your story. Although I did find your your references to be otherwise accurate. Including your mention of author Fitzgerald. Even of the party where she danced with the Charlie Chaplin, who often preferred younger women.

*Buttono* Favorite line
         All in all I enjoyed your story. I like the line where the mother was telling your main character how "body language is the main voice of life." I can picture the mother using her body language to communicate very well.

         The same thing goes for her discussion with the science teacher and accusing her of not failing as a teacher. I could picture her very well. And even appreciated her boldness and fierceness when coming to the aid of her child.

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         Thanks so much for sharing your story of another time. I enjoyed read. Keep on writing!

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This is a really cute little story. My daughter has a way of getting into very small spaces.

I don't normal critique Cramp entries too strictly since they are more about writing in a very limited amount of time. But I think this would be worth making into a slightly longer piece.

Keep up the good work.

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         Hi, welcome to Sisterhood of Mom's. I really like this piece. I think we all would like to do a better job with out children than we experienced, even if our parents meant well.

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         I think I liked the last lines.
They will see
I am all the things for them
you never were to me.

         but I also liked the line
someone should have helped you
         To me it eases (but not excuses) the mothers' lack of affection, etc. Rather than making her the villain, she becomes more an object of pity... I think. Although the focus remains where it should on the authors voice, their story and hardships.

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         I can't think of anything in particular for this piece. So, keep on sharing your work. I look forward to reading it.

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         First off, happy WDC anniversary! Five years! It's nice to know that even published authors appreciate the opinions of of others here at WDC. I'm often a little intimidated by those who have their work published.

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         As a published author and poet, the opinions of my peers still helps educate me on ways to improve future endeavors, and I value those opinions.

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         I'm so glad you've found friends here. I'd also like to know which groups, activities or whatever else you've enjoyed. Is there a particular group that you are most at home, most active in?

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         Keep up the great work.

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         As a mom, I can totally relate to your predicament. I really enjoyed reading your Signs of a Challenged Housekeeper.

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         That would have to be:

8. The cable company technician instructs you on how to dust your TV screen for a better picture.

         My husband hates my computer screen. My daughter and I watch a lot of videos online, and of course there's fingerprints and smudges, and the odd sneeze. I do clean it, but generally only when I can't see past the smudges.

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         Your article was funny, but I still don't feel less guilty... except maybe because I'm not alone when it comes to killer dust bunnies scaring my pets. Maybe you could right a Top 10 Reasons My House is a Mess...

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         Thanks for your sharing your medical knowledge. It's great to have access to that sort of thing, when you need it.

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         Keep sharing your work. I'm trying to put together a collection of articles on parenting for my group "Invalid Item. If you ever want to share something you can visit our "Invalid Item and post to the forum.

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         Great idea for a group! Looks like you are already off to a great start. Your group page is nice too. It's easy to follow, informative and the name is great too.

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         It's so appropriate that you were able to use an acronym that relates to writing.

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         Keep up the good work.

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         I look forward to seeing your group continue to grow.

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