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*Buttonv* I tend to focus on how a piece makes me feel, rather than a line by line review. My reviews usually run around 1000 characters w/o Writing ML. If I notice spelling errors I'll be sure to point them out. *Buttong* As far as grammar, it's been a while since I was in school, but I an let you know if it sounds awkward or not. I may even look up some information on a particular so I can pass on correct info to you. *Buttonp* Many of my ratings fall between 3-5 stars. I will give out less for pieces that need a fair bit of polishing, but I also try to offer useful advice and a second review of the piece after it's been finished/polished.
I'm good at...
In my own writing, I guess it might be putting emotion into my poetry and prose.
Favorite Genres
Regency Romance,
Least Favorite Genres
Horror, Erotica,
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, Prose, Short Stories (1000 words or less for the purpose of reviewing.)
Least Favorite Item Types
I enjoy the occasional novel but have no time to review them.
I will not review...
Anything over 18+. Anything with erotica, occult, witches, demons, ghosts, zombies, fetishes.
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Review of Land Lover  
Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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First Impression
         This was a really interesting take on being the outsider. I really liked your use of imagery. Your poem was very cleverly written. The poem also had a nice flow to it.

         I liked the lines:
It’s not a simple factual error
You’re just not meant to live there

         as well as:

You may be a whale
You may be a dolphin
But
You still need air to breathe

         sometimes you just don't fit in and it's not necessarily your fault or anything you can do about it.

Suggestions
         None.

Final Thoughts
         Thanks so much for letting me take a look. Great poem!

Keep on writing!

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Review of Below the hill  
Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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First Impression
         Thanks for letting me review this piece. I think you did a very good job in addressing this woman's grief. The poem has a very melancholy feel to it.

         I liked the last stanza the most. The contrast of the hill above her, while she wallows in her grief below. The final line is also very effective at showing the continuing existence of grief.

Suggestions
         The rhyming scheme in the first stanza is different than the following two. I prefer the 2nd and 3rd stanzas.

         I also find myself a little unsatisfied the line "She cannot climb it." I don't know why.

         The first and second line of the second stanza you use "these scenes..." and "those...fears", I'm not sure that feels right.

Final Thoughts
         Overall I really appreciated this poem.

Keep up the great writing!

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Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (4.5)
Just took your poll.

I used to like to see the 5 stars. But the longer I've been on WDC the more I'd prefer constructive criticism. I want 5 stars but I want to earn them. So if I do receive a low rating I want to know why. Where did I fail what could I improve. Is my grammar poor, am I too long winded, was there substance in my writing?

I like poetry that makes you feel. And not just leaving with this ick kind of feeling like I get sometimes. I want tp provoke an emotional response in the reader. They don't have to think it means exactly what it means to me, but it should mean something.

Bear in mind that some of my pieces are very personal. But tell me how I can better present my thoughts or at least where I failed.
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Review of Last Hurt  
Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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First Impression
         I am very sorry for your pain. Thank you for sharing what could only be a very difficult topic.

Suggestions
         None, I only hope that writing provides you with some reprieve from these tragic circumstances.

Final Thoughts
         Keep on sharing. Thanks again.

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Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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First Impression
         I have personal experience with a bipolar family member and also my own mood disorder that I can really relate to this poem. I think you have really managed to capture the essence of what it's like being bipolar. I used to often feel (to a lesser degree) those same combinations of emotions, like I was being torn apart by several often opposite emotions at the same time.

         I really liked the repetition of the stanzas "Too high...Too low", and the contrast of "bouncing of the walls"; "laying on the floor"

Suggestions
         I think changing "bouncing of the walls" to "bouncing off the ceiling" might increase the contrast of it.

Final Thoughts
         Nicely done. And I hope that you have been able to find some balance in your life. Keep on writing and thanks for sharing your personal stories.

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Review of Som  
Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Impression
         This morning I was looking for someone different to rate. Since I don't normally review a lot of mods, I made that my goal. Your poem is very short but creates a very peaceful image of a little one sleeping. I have an 11 month old daughter, so this poem spoke to me. The image of sweetness, sleeping so peacefully... snoring. I love it.

Suggestions
         It's short but that only seems to lend itself to simplicity of the poem. i don't think I'd change a thing.

Final Thoughts
         I look forward to getting a chance at reading more of your work.

Maybe you'd like to check out our group.
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Review of Bindings  
Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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First Impression
         I really enjoyed this piece. My favorite part is the whole second stanza, especially the first two lines. I also really liked the first line of the third stanza. I found this poem, those lines, very moving and personal. That connection can never be severed, even if your child never makes it to that moment when you "both were born."

Suggestions
         None.

Final Thoughts
         ...I choked myself up a little.... Your writing has a lot of warmth and feeling. Keep up the great work.

Maybe you'd like to take a peak at our group.

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Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Impression
         Thank you for sharing your personal experience. The world can be a very difficult place, especially for someone who is still trying to find their place in it. I know what it is like to suffer from depression. But it is important to remember that it's an illness, just like diabetes. Sometimes you can find things that work without medication, and sometimes you need a little more help. Needing help doesn't make anyone a failure, it makes you stronger for admitting it.
         Love and support may not always be enough but it's a pretty good start, at least he has you.

Suggestions
         Your piece is about a personal experience but since you are trying to educate, maybe you could include some of the warning signs that we should all be aware of.
         This is just a suggestion, and since you have already shared something personal, maybe a little more could help others.

Final Thoughts
         As a new mom, I know I can't protect my daughter from everything, but hopefully I can equip her to handle some of it.

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Review of My Little Girl  
Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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First Impression
         I, too, have suffered the loss of a child. It's something you carry with you, always. The line "As you laid lifelessly inside me" is probably my favorite. It's very moving, heartbreaking and I remember how I felt during my experience.

Suggestions
         I think it should be "taking" instead of "taken".
         The second stanza has a couple of rhymes, while the first does not. You might want to consider altering it so it either rhymes or doesn't.
         I think centering it would give it visual appeal.

Final Thoughts
         I'm so very sorry for your loss. And thanks for sharing such an emotional experience.

Keep writing!

Perhaps you might like to read my poem regarding my personal experience.
"A Journey of Love and Loss"  [E]

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Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: E | (4.5)

First Impressions
         You have captured a very tender moment. It's these things that we will treasure as they grow and seem to need us a little less. But their independence will only meean that we have done our job well.

Suggestions
         Keep writing!

Final Thoughts
         Welcome to WDC. Perhaps you'd be interested in our new group for moms.

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Chelsea *Reading*
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Review of Always Write  
Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (4.5)
Great tip. It's a habit I should do more often. Although I also like to keep a copy on my computer. And sometimes it's easier to work on a few things at once, then whatever mood you're in, you could work on something.
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Review of Life The unknown  
Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: ASR | (2.0)
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First Impression
         Seeing as how it's not finished don't let the rating discourage you. Your poem starts off well. The simple observations about nature or certain moments in our lives can make for very beautiful and emotional poetry. So don't worry about making it too complicated, that's when poem is more likely to fail.

I like the first stanza, you begin by describing what you hear. You could continue speaking to our senses, feeling the breeze, the scent in the air. It makes the reader feel like they're right there.

Suggestions
         Besides the spelling mistakes there are some grammar that needs to be corrected, but these could be addressed when you feel your poem is more complete.

         From what I read so far it seems like you're describing the building of a storm. This just happens to be one of my favorite moments to experience. You mention the "gentle swaying of the trees" in the first stanza, perhaps describing how the wind picks up speed or strength or little details like that would help build anticipation for the coming storm.

Final Thoughts
         It's rough but you have a good start. And if you would like more feedback, I don't want to carry on too long, I'd be happy to offer some.

Keep it up.

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Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Impression
         This is a very beautiful piece. It tells a very moving story about endurance and life. Poetry is best when it comes from the writers heart and this seems very heartfelt.
         I really enjoyed the lines "life runs deep under the massive trunk, down into the depths of the earth" and the lessons learned. And the last line "for spring will come again." is the perfect conclusion to your poem.
 
Suggestions
         Keep writing! Practice will only improve the gift of poetry you naturally posses.
 
Final Thoughts
         I look forward to reading more of your poetry.
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Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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First Impression
         Hysterical! I'd loved it, especially the line about him "pushing and pulling and saying bad things;"

Suggestions
         Can't think of anything to change.

Final Thoughts
         Great little pick me up. You've brightened my day.

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Review of Open Wounds  
Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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First Impression
         I really liked your opening lines. It's so true the cleansing power of rain. It washes away much.

Suggestions
         I'm not a big fan of people who write with a thesaurus in hand. And it feels a little like that here.
                   Although I do feel that poetry is more deserving of thoughtful attention to language than ordinary writing, it can have a negative impact at times.
         One more suggestion, the addition of either punctuation or breaking it into stanzas would make it more pleasant to read.

Final Thoughts
         A good poem, with a lot of potential. I'd be interested in reading more of your work.

Welcome to Writing.Com and keep writing!

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Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Impression
         I think it was very well done.

Suggestions
         Stanzas might make it a little more visually appealing. Perhaps in lines of 4.
         The line "But the sun never gives way." I would change it to "ne'er"

Final Thoughts
         Not the usual type of poem I like, as far as content, but you did it very well.

Keep it up!

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Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Impression
         Lot's of emotion and depth. I like the third stanza about the silence being deafening and echos in the emptiness.

Suggestions
         In your first stanza I believe it should be "barely".
         I might change the second line of the second stanza to "I'd rather not hear."
         The only other suggestion I have is about your punctuation. It seems to be a little random, sometimes non-existent.

Final Thoughts
         The end is very sad, Locking yourself behind an iron door and knowing you'll never show those pieces. The damage and scars left from cruelness are very real, even if they are only on your heart.

Keep it up!

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Review by Winn Storm
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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First Impression
          Not quite the usual format you see with poetry.
          I thought it was a very moving poem. You've taken us on a very emotional journey, which makes the end all the more tragic.

Suggestions
         The format made it a little trickier to get the rhythm.
          In the last stanza, would "Footsteps running at a hastened pace." be more suitable?
          Then "For whose life should he now save?"

Final Thoughts
          Those are my suggestions, I'm no literary professor.
          Really great poem though. And I loved the moral dilemma you posed at the end.

Keep up the great work!
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Review of The Home Sampler  
Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (4.5)
I am no stranger to the effects a bipolar person has on those around him. This poem very aptly describes the mood swings and the frustration of trying to keep up with who or what mood is predominant every minute of every hour.

Overall the poem was very good. Those who don't have the same experience could benefit from an additional stanza, perhaps with more detail about the effect on you, the emotion.

Thank you.
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Review of The Bitter Rose  
Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very beautiful poem. It has a very melancholy mood to it and flows so softly and so gently that is truly a pleasure to read over and over. I found the imagery very vivid, I could almost see myself in the moonlight, observing the delicate rose and mourning it's loss.

Thank you for your wonderfully written poem.
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Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed your poem, even in the face of suffering it holds out a little bit of hope. How often we feel helpless when we see our loved ones battling a serious illness.

Your use of imagery paints a very vivid canvas for the reader. I really enjoyed the line about trading "worn shoes for wings".

Thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Cost of Lost  
Review by Winn Storm
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
You have very eloquently expressed a very tragic story. Thank you for having the courage to write about something so personal. The best poetry is personal and touches others as well. Your poem definitely touched me. Thank you again for opening your heart.
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Review of The Write Mom  
Review by Winn Storm
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really liked this poem. And I can totally relate! It's been months since I wrote more than a couple cheesy lines. My daughter (9 months) is quite active and needs lots of stimulation. I hope when she's older to write more.

I enjoyed the playful quality you had, even though you may have wished for something grander. The nursery rhymes that found their way in is very apropos.
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