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Review of Blinkers Off  
Review by Stuckintime
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A review written because you put in the hard work to create and share your writing.


Initial reaction:


What can I say? This was fantastic. Populism and authoritarianism in its purest form. Absolute mind control of almost an entire nation. You portrayed it brilliantly.

Negatives/Mistakes: I don't review grammar and spelling, but I'll point out anything obvious I see. It's only personal opinion and means no harm *Smile*


The only negative for me is that this is unentered!


Story Comments/Feelings:

The introduction, the description of the addictive manner of the drink, is a great way to draw a reader into the story. It had me wondering where things were heading.

Finding out this was happening purposely for financial gain really hit home. Of course I was expecting this, but the way it was done in your story drove it home how easy it could be, without regulation.

I know it is easy to aim this commentary at one man, but his voice is being repeated by others all over the world meaning this story is relevant world wide.

Half way through my second reading and I just want to say how brilliant this is. A worst case scenario of a bleak future ahead.

I really enjoyed this story. Thank you for sharing.




Keep Writing!

Stuck.


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Review of The Operation  
Review by Stuckintime
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
A review written because you put in the hard work to create and share your writing.


Initial reaction:


I'm left shuddering here and I need more. I want to know the characters in this story. Who are they? What happened to them? Most importantly, what comes next?
I know this was a contest entry, but come on, you can't leave me hanging like that.

Negatives/Mistakes: I don't review grammar and spelling, but I'll point out anything obvious I see. It's only personal opinion and means no harm *Smile*


Nothing to see here. The only problem is that I want more!


Story Comments/Feelings:


I was drawn into this story straight away and wanted to know where things were headed.
For a short story, you built characters that we root for and fear really well. In fact, as I said above, you created them so well I would love to know more.

A fantastic short story which I really enjoyed. It is horrific!

Thank you!

Keep Writing!

Stuck.


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Review of The Soup  
Review by Stuckintime
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A review written because you put in the hard work to create and share your writing.


Initial reaction:


How did you do that? I could've written paragraphs and not set a scene so well. Not a wasted word, not a distraction. Absolutely spot on piece of writing.

Negatives/Mistakes: I don't review grammar and spelling, but I'll point out anything obvious I see. It's only personal opinion and means no harm *Smile*


Nothing to see here.


Story Comments/Feelings:


He sat staring at his soup whilst he ate. I could tell this was a bad man and you put it across without any doubt.

Thanks for letting me read this, it was a lesson to me. Reading how much detail you crammed into a piece in under 200 words, I should have a look at this as a reminder of how to do it more often.

Thanks again.

Keep Writing!

Stuck.


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Review of TIME  
Review by Stuckintime
Rated: E | (5.0)
I've never read this before and decided to pop into your port at random.
I was expecting blood, guts and gore.

You got me.

This is a lovely piece of writing. Almost poetic.
It's using a reality from history that makes it hit home.
Horror doesn't have to be ghosts and imaginary monsters. There is horror right there. Real. In history and in the present, it exists.

This moved me and I appreciate you letting me read it.

I would've used a review template for this, but I wanted to comment straight out after reading. It was that good.

Never noticed this side of your writing to be honest.

Thanks again.

Stuck
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for entry "Flies
Review by Stuckintime
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
A review written because you put in the hard work to create and share your writing.


Initial reaction:


I could relate to so much of this story. My father in law suffers from vascular dementia and lives in sheltered accomodation. We visit as much as possible. Although he is still capable of looking after himself, we need to check every so often. We call him every day. The amount of times we had to visit because we never got an answer is uncountable. I really do relate to the characters and their feelings.

Negatives/Mistakes: I don't review grammar and spelling, but I'll point out anything obvious I see. It's only personal opinion and means no harm *Smile*


Nothing to see here. Even though this is a 24 hour contest, I never seen any mistakes.


Story Comments/Feelings:


The story is fantastic. As I said, I can relate to the characters so this added a little extra.

You built a feeling of dread but, I didn't see what was coming. Excellent!

I'll be more careful on my next visit!

Thank you for sharing your work and allowing me to read it.

Keep Writing!

Stuck.


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for entry "Grandfather's Cup
Review by Stuckintime
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
A Horror, Inc. group review

Initial reaction:

Grandfather sounded like a nasty piece of work. He was domineering and ruled his house with an iron fist. All this was brought across by the actions of two other characters. Excellent.

Negatives/Mistakes: I don't review grammar and spelling, but I'll point out anything obvious I see. It's only personal opinion and means no harm *Smile*


This was the only obvious mistake I found and it is very minor:

It is that that still his hand, not any feelings for me.

Story Comments/Feelings:
To cram such feeling into such a short piece displays a writer that knows what they want to get across and is practiced enough to do it.

The story didn't give anything away about where it was going. I hadn't read the prompt, so I didn't know what to expect when I started.

What I got was excellent character interaction. A brilliant scene of somebody who strikes fear into the heart of others, demanding his own way.

I really enjoyed this story and the detail you managed to cram in was fantastic.

Thanks for the pleasure of allowing to read your work.


Keep Writing!

Stuck.


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Review by Stuckintime
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A review written because you put in the hard work to create and share your writing.


Initial reaction:


There is something about food stories that always seems to make me chuckle.
This is so nasty, I know I shouldn't have, but I couldn't help it, sorry.

Enjoyed this tasty little story.

Negatives/Mistakes: I don't review grammar and spelling, but I'll point out anything obvious I see. It's only personal opinion and means no harm *Smile*


At first, I felt the lack of interaction between characters was confusing. As the story went on you solved this, but at the begining maybe just something. The getting up and walking around without so much as an acknowledgement to the others felt a tad unnatural.

When the characters spoke for the first time, it felt loud. Going by the rest of the story, this was the effect you wanted and it worked. It also made the most out of a limited word count.


Story Comments/Feelings:


I like this idea. Strangers whose names are known to each other, but are linked only through one thing. They have to make a choice and all have to go along with it.

This story could have gone in so many directions and you chose one of the good paths.

So after I was initially confused, the story grew and by the end I was absorbed and really enjoyed it.

Once the people are talking and interacting in other ways, you created the scene brilliantly. You showed the mood of them well and gave them their own characteristics.

Thanks for sharing.

Keep Writing!

Stuck.


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Review of Indulgence  
Review by Stuckintime
Rated: E | (4.0)
A review written because you put in the hard work to create and share your writing.


Initial reaction:


The writing here was almost poetic. I really enjoyed the listening to the woman's voice describing her life.

It honestly felt like the opening to much larger story.

The ending leaves a lot of things open to the imagination and depending where your mind takes you, has a rather gruesome touch.

Negatives/Mistakes: I don't review grammar and spelling, but I'll point out anything obvious I see. It's only personal opinion and means no harm *Smile*


is an enticing lure but gets lost I in the light of reality.

There is another mistake I noticed like the one above.


Story Comments/Feelings:


This story has so much to give. The poetic voice of the main character's narration is riveting. I could listen to her tell her stories for so long.

I liked this a lot and although I know it has a limited word count,it feels like it needs more. The wonderful character you created needs more space to grow and speak.

I would love it if you expanded this in the future.

Thanks for sharing this lovely (well, nasty) piece.

Keep Writing!

Stuck.


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Review of Lucy, Sweet Lucy  
Review by Stuckintime
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh wicked little Lucy!

I can't really give a full review on poetry. I'm not familiar with the rules and regulations. I don't know much about prose and structure.
I do know I like this, though. Sometimes, a little piece of poetry is refreshing. When it's delightfully dark, it's fantastic.

Thanks for letting me read this piece and I'm sorry for not being able to give a full review.

Loved it!

Keep on writing.

Stuck

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Review of Dear Friends  
Review by Stuckintime
Rated: E | (5.0)
I've no idea how to review this. Absolute madness and it all happened in one year.
The Crenshaws really are an interesting family.

So it was wacky. I liked it anyway.

What else can I add? It's different to most thing I review so I just have to give 5 stars just because I can't find a reason not to.

One thing though, 5 years in Yorkshire? Maddest thing anyone in the letter did.

Thanks for sharing this, it made me smile.

Keep writing,

Stuck

(Sorry about the quality of the review, I'm writing from my phone and struggle with the small screen)
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Review by Stuckintime
Rated: E | (4.5)
Chilling, but for some reason I felt an undercurrent of humour running right the way through this chance meeting in the park.

I liked the characters, although brief, their personalities shone through.

I really enjoyed this little story, but I don't know if I felt fear or if I want to laugh. This is definitely a good thing.

Thanks for sharing and keep on writing!

Stuck

(I apologise for the poor standard of this review, but I can't type very well on a small screen.)
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Review of Last Words  
Review by Stuckintime
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm not going to say anything about errors, as there are none. I won't say anything about style as it is written perfectly in the characters' voice.

I seen this on the homepage with your name on it and had to read, even if it is via phone.

You know how to leave a reader with a chill, even in such a short piece.

Thank you for sharing and allowing me to read your work. It is an absolute pleasure.

Stuck
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Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with Horror, Inc.  
Rated: E | (3.5)
A Horror, Inc. review

What I Liked:
This was a horrible story. A nasty, wicked piece of work. I like the scenery and the colours and I like the dancing in the ballroom. So much information, all crammed into a good short story.

Story Comments/Feelings:
Nasty, wicked, horrible, good old fashioned horror. I liked it.


Negatives/Mistakes: I don't review grammar and spelling, but I'll point out anything obvious I see. It's only personal opinion and means no harm *Smile*

I know this was a slice entry so I understand how you wrote it quickly. There are a few typing errors in there, but they did not deplete from the story and, as it was a slice entry, you didn't have time to really scan for anything. Nothing wrong here, but with a bit of polish, this could be a beautiful little piece of short horror.

I really enjoyed this story. Thank you for the pleasure.

Keep Writing!

Stuck.


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Review of The Visitor  
Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with Horror, Inc.  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A brilliant piece of daily slice writing. An excellent short story that crams in so much detail.

The storyline is excellent and I had no idea where it was heading. The 'voice' is excellent and doesn't stray from the tone it sets in the first place.

As a daily slice entry, one that is written in under 24 hours, it is brilliant and it also has the potential for the characters to be used in other situations in the future. What WILL happen to them?

My crystal ball is being quiet, I guess I have to wait until you decide to tell.

Thanks for the pleasure of reading your work again. As always, it was a pleasure.

Stuck
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Review of Mama's Hands  
Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with Horror, Inc.  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Oh MY... Oh My....

This is one of the most awfully nasty stories I have ever read. That is a good thing by the way.

The writing here, the characters and the dialogue all work perfectly.

You know what? I don't think I need to add anything into this review apart from just telling you that this was a fantastic, although very, very nasty story.

It could really offend some who don't get horror. This though... this brings out horror from a place a lot of people won't dare go.

Thank you for sharing and keep writing!

Stuck


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Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I don't usually read much poetry, but as this was entered in the daily slice, I had to have a look at the scare.

It was well written, the Hocus pocus, Puddin' and pie is quite catchy. That will stick with me now whenever I hear it.

The second verse of the piece kind of threw me, it doesn't quite have the same rhythm and could be slightly changed to make it fit in with the rest of the poem.

It was entertaining, and I enjoyed reading this dark little entry.

Thank you for sharing and Keep writing.

Stuck
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Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This is a brilliant story.

You captured a true struggle in there and you also captured the desperation hat would be felt in such a situation.

I loved the way you intertwined so many fairy tales and nursery rhymes together to work it. I actually didn't click that there were so many jacks in the old stories. Now though, I know there is only one and he was a part of them all.

Thank you for this fantastic little read. Was great to see it in the slice.

Keep writing, it was a pleasure!

Stuck
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Review of Pursued  
Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with Horror, Inc.  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I'm tired from that chase, breathless!

One thing I have been told in the past, and this isn't anything to do with a failure in the writing, how did the character tell the story if they died?

I know, I know... It's something I've done myself on so many occasions. I'm just repeating what I've been told about my own writing.

Back to the story though:
I like the fact that the chaser is a black silhouette I always find the faceless a lot more scary. It's something to do with the unknown I suppose.

The chase itself, the panic felt and thoughts of the character all work perfectly and add to the full feel of the piece.

Thank you very much for this enjoyable read!

Suck
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Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with Horror, Inc.  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This story just gave me flashbacks to a classy 1950's b-movie.

Giant insects on the rampage, military intervention. A small town Sheriff and faces being sucked off. What more could one ask of a story such as this? Good writing, that is the answer.

There is a lot of good writing contained here and even a good piece of character development with the sheriff. All that in under 1000 words, that's an achievement!

What can I say apart from thank-you for sharing this story and allowing me to have the pleasure of reading.

Stuck
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Review of PINK?!?  
Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with Horror, Inc.  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Bloody hell... are you trying to scare me to death.

This was as good a piece of sci-fi horror as anything I've ever read.

An innocent game of cards, a bang and then everything that came with it... great piece of writing.

I liked the dialect in this story. All the talking in there and it felt real. None of it just came across as non-realistic.

Really enjoyed this... thank you for the pleasure!

Stuck.

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Review of Never Tell  
Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with Horror, Inc.  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
In so few words, you set a good scene which can leave the imagination running wild for hours.

There is so much that can be going on here and you leave it to us to decide what happened to the rest, and what will happen in the future.

What secrets does that corpse hold?

Thank you for the read, I enjoyed it.

Stuck
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Review of Good Times  
Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with Horror, Inc.  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Been a long time since I've read any of your work... boy was it worth the wait.

First of all, let me compliment the development of your style. You were always good to read, but now you seem to have developed a voice which is truly yours, really emphasized all the good points of your writing.

You drew me into this story right from the beginning. I lived it, felt it and most of all, I believed it. It was almost hypnotic to read.

The story itself is so basic, yet so good. Who would have thought somebody who was reliving such good memories could be doing something so terrible at the same time?

A fantastic read, one I really enjoyed.

Thank you for the pleasure.

Stuck
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Review of E duorum, Unum  
Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with Horror, Inc.  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
In just 400 words you have conjured up one of the most disturbing things I have ever read. That's a good thing by the way.

I had no idea what to expect here and what you hit me with so quickly and sharply is horrific. Something that will probably stay in my mind forever. I would love to be able to come up with some kind of advice to improve this, but I cant. It was so in my face, it was brilliant. I would love to read anything longer of this type of story you have... I will have to go through your port if you don't mind.

I think that, if you write a longer piece, you could spend more time luring the reader into a false sense of security, a lot of nicey nicey, before absolutely terrifying us.

Brilliant, and thank you for the time you spent writing this. Keep them coming!

Stuck
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Review of Old Jade  
Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with Horror, Inc.  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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WOW!!!

This is a brilliant story. You have so much crammed into a short space.

I would love to read an expanded version of this tale, what happens afterwards? What happened before hand? The characters being contacted about the death of their aunt... and so on. Thing is, it doesn't need it all. It just works the way it is.

The story itself is fantastic. Jewellery, death, murder, possession... you got it all in here.

This was a definate worthy winner of the slice, a thoroughly enjoyable story from start to finish.

Thank you for the pleasure!!

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Review of Laura  
Review by Stuckintime
In affiliation with Horror, Inc.  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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BLOODY HELL JOE!!!

What are you trying to do to me? Scare me to death?

That was a brilliant piece of writing and the storyline was terrifying.

The little details you got into this short piece were something excellent. The emotion of the main character... the childishness of laura... the fear of the nuns... you captured it all.

You said you haven't been able to write for a while... this little story was definately worth the wait.

I loved it mate, and I can't think of a single way to improve upon it.

Thanks for the pleasure!!!!


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