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Review by Crow
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Pastor Juan, having been a Baptist minister for thirty years, I always get a little uncomfortable when a Christian says "The Lord has impressed on me." That is not to suggest that The Lord will never put particular thoughts in our heart but with so many nut cases within the church claiming The Lord told them to do or say one thing or another, it may be a good idea not to sound as though The Lord gave you an exclusive message that could have just as well come by common sense. Please don't take offense, for you may be from a denomination where such utterances are commonplace. I agree with your premise, but I am concerned with how it may sound to those without.

May The Lord Bless,
Crow
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Review of Farewell, for Now  
Review by Crow
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
As I read that he was in the Airforce for one year, what was the precipitating factor that brought on the PTSD? You say that he saw three suicides in one year. Certainly, that affected his mental state. To be in such close proximity to darkness will exact a heavy toll on many people. It is so very sad that our armed forces do not take better care of those who serve.

This is another touching poem. I am trusting that his days of turmoil have turned to sweet rest. There must surely be comfort in the knowledge of that.

Remembering Quentin,
Crow
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Review of Temporal  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, Lilliy Loidd, I have no idea what this piece means, but I never much cared for abstract art. Oh, I'm well aware that you knew exactly what you intended to say, but it is obvious that I am not one of the initiates. Keep up the good work and don't think too badly of troglodytes like me.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Traffic Jam  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a cute poem, but the problem you see is that this ride is taking the reader to a dark place. It may be light-hearted darkness, but darkness just the same. Being in jail on multiple charges is certainly no game. Looking at your end result as I am, I would rather be legal in that traffic jam.

Clever job, Norman. Try to get that license and insurance fixed.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Maya  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
How many times do you think this scene has played out in similar triangles, and sometimes with deadly consequences?

I appreciate this short exchange. It could happen at any place and at any time. Well done.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Who Am I?  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, Not Siki, it is nice to meet you. I will admit to being some of the things you described. I identify with the melancholic and the dreamer most of all. I appreciated your self-introduction.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Raven Speak  
for entry "Judgement
Review by Crow
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A fascinating work indeed. Does this piece make complete sense to me? Oh, but there is the rub. I have learned early on that it doesn't have to come through with perfect clarity to be enjoyed and savored. All I can say is, I like it. Truth be known, I like a great many of your works. I must add, I hate the rules.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Ember month  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Believe me, Lee, I would not just agree with the other reviewer for the sake of not breaking up a perfect set. I just decided to take a look at some new entries and your title and introduction caught my eye. I love sentimentality and nostalgia. This work of yours did not disappoint. I was drawn in immediately and could see the scene and feel the thoughts. This is an excellent piece of writing, Lee. I will admit that Dad's taste in mashed potatoes coincides with my own. So, here is to great potatoes and a touching piece of writing. Well done.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Special Time  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, George. Since my name is George, I thought I might peruse your port to see what goodies you physicist types might have to share. This offering was very nice. I particularly like the momentum of this poem. The rhymes are tight and clean and without wasted work the reader. To put it another way, you don't slow down the reading process with cryptic phrases that must be examined two or three times. Simple and clearly understood poems are always my preference.

Well done, George. I will review more of your work very soon.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Come on, suemar, let's get this portfolio in shape. You need to start writing. You've been around long enough to be much further along. Of course, I am not chastising you. It's more a case of tough love. I realize that you have suffered stress that didn't help matters. Of course, you can always be most helpful to yourself and others by writing about your experiences.

Now, when it comes to this jogging business, you've come to the right place. There isn't a whole lot I don't know about jogging. I am sixty-eight this March and I can truthfully say that I have been jogging on and off for thirty-five years. For me, it has always been about healthy weight control. Where I live in the states, the winters are mild, but that's not to say that we don't get some really cold stretches. And I will say without apology, I hate to run in the cold. Spring and Summer are my times to hit the streets and backroads. I can't afford the extra expense of the Health Club.

Let me encourage you by revealing that I have lost as much as forty pounds by watching what I eat and running regularly. Of course, in those Winter and Holiday months is when I start to see the weight sneaking up on me. It has always been a constant battle. Recently, I came upon a game-changer. A high protein diet, water, and regular exercise. If you don't cheat, the weight will come off.

You can do this and you won't die, although it may feel like you will at first. Your body is wonderfully designed. It begins to respond the first time you do something good for it. You may start with a light jog and before long find yourself running your first mile. It's amazing how quickly the body begins to respond.

Well, I've droned on enough. You can do this thing. Of that, I have no doubt. And what better place to record your progress the WDC. I look forward to hearing from you. We'll fight this battle together.

With Kindest Regards,
Crow
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Review of Raven Speak  
for entry "Standing Strong
Review by Crow
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Well done. I really liked this one. I wonder if I know any of those crows? You expressed great rhythm and word choices in this piece. A fine piece of writing, my dear.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Highway Star  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a good one, Don. As Yoda might say, clever and funny it was. The rhythm was fine and the word choice excellent. As I read, I wanted to see what would happen to the fearless family. I'm glad they came through. Good work, Don.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, is it not ironic that when you wrote this piece you had passed sixty-eight years. And now, as I am reading and reviewing your contemplation of time, I am just reaching the sixty-eighth mark. You are now passing seventy-five. I pray that you are presently doing well.

Yes, as the years pass we wonder how much longer we have. We very often are more acutely attuned to the world around us, and feel its pain more imperiously. May God look upon both of us with His mercy.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Spirit of Mom  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a very touching poem, Teargen. Wouldn't it be nice if we could have those experiences? It could be that some believe they have, but, although I have dreamt of loved ones, I would venture toward a more corporal experience.

I will not seek to point out my favorite lines, as I embrace them all as special. I felt the love and am glad to have read your beautiful poem.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of MALLARD  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Please forgive, J.L., but I'm not getting this. I know what a canard is, but what am I missing? I also love Daffy.

Regards,
Crow
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Review of You Survived It  
Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Longtall8. I'm happy that you found us and decided to become a part. Let me say that you are very welcome.

I found this work most interesting. I am always glad to see writers that can say what they wish without filling the page with unnecessary verbiage. Also, I appreciated the theme of the work. As an older gentleman, I am beginning more and more to realize that there will be an increasing number of things to overcome. You took what most would call a disadvantage and turned it around. I'm sure that that will be encouraging to many. Well done.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Jim. This is a clever piece of work. It is a piece that one would expect from you. I'll admit, I had to read it a couple of times to be certain I followed all the diacritical marking correctly. It's a great birthday offering. Well done, Jim.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello, Rosie. I have never heard of the guy you mentioned. However, whatever confidence you may have in him, you must surely realize that he has no chance of getting on the ballot. Being young and full of energy means nothing when you enter the Washington arena. He could be the brightest bulb in the box, but when they finish with him he won't shine so brightly, if at all. Also, I don't know where you are getting your information from, but automatic weapons are not available to the public. The only groups who use full auto weapons besides the police and military are drug cartels, terrorists, and other criminal factions. The Los Vegas shooter used what is called a 'bump-stock.' which allowed his semi-auto to become what could be described as automatic. Bump-stocks have now been banned. The public is only allowed to have semi-auto firearms which means that you have to pull the trigger for each shot. These can be deadly, but they do not possess a fully automatic setting.

With Regards,
Crow
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Review of The Stranger  
Review by Crow
Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
Alright, Odessa, let's see what we have here. To begin, I started out with an assumption that you had been fooling around with Taro cards and waiting to see if their predictions would come to pass. It seems to me that your protagonist is not actually speaking, but thinking the dialogue. That is certainly a different approach. However, it began to aggravate me after a while. I feel that it would have had a much better flow if you would have told the story in the first person tense. Also, this person in the house doesn't seem to have a reason to be there. Did you stab this dark intruder? And then, when it turns out to be a cop, you seem to know them. The question is, why is a cop that you know breaking into your house?

I'm sorry to say that this story did not work for me in several ways. It just didn't make logical sense. It left me hanging with no explanation. Of course, it could just be my take on the work. I'll browse through your port and try to get a better feel for your style.

Crow
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Review of Who Am I?  
Review by Crow
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hello, Prosperous. I usually don review your work to any great extent because I have a certain resistance to what I consider the incongruous fact that you have adopted. I cannot imagine how you became attached to a faith that is so out of keeping with western values. What drew to this? How did such a foreign philosophy become your standard? Certainly, you have a right to believe what you will. I will not censure you for your beliefs.

As far as this philosophical piece in question, I find it as I do most within this genre. There are no conclusions reached because philosophy can never reach a definitive conclusion. The same questions have been asked for millennia and we are no closer to an answer. I am quite certain that we should never have expected that we would find one. It was in the asking that we found our reason for being as Descartes said, "I think, therefore I am."

It is good that anyone would explore the void of man's origins? The problem encountered is that the inquires have never changed. They are expressed in a different language and by different self-styled gurus but in the end, they are all the regurgitated thoughts and words of those who will continue to emerge as new lights of divine knowledge.
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Nwriter. Let me be the first to comment on this article. This piece will be difficult for most to read, especially since you are referring to things like Sanscript (or Sanskrit) and other Indian systems of belief and philosophy. Very few Americans not of Indian heritage would know anything about Tattvarthasutra. That being the case, it is no wonder that this work has received no reviews. I found the piece interesting to read and consider, yet I will not pretend to understand the whole of it. Still, it is an enticing piece of work for those who enjoy more cerebral forays.

I found your work well written and informative, even for the uninitiated. Keep up the good work.

With Compliments,
Crow
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Review of For the People  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.5)
Let me welcome you to WDC. If you love to write and express your thoughts in the poetry of words, this is the place to be.

This piece was interesting, certainly expressing the feelings of many Americans. I liked the simplicity of your poem. I have always believed, that, whenever possible, writers should always strive to communicate their ideas as clearly as they can.

As to your question whether this old Flivver(a term that describes an old model T or a similar car) can ever run again? I believe there is still time to salvage something of our past strength and glory, but the work needed will be enormous.

Keep on writing. The talent is there and the rest is up to you.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of David's Farewell  
Review by Crow
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Twila, this is an absolutely beautiful poem. For some readers, it might be a good idea to have a tissue at hand. The question I will venture to ask is whether he knew he was dying and hadn't told you? I have had dreams of loved ones that had already died, but never of any shortly before their passing. This account fascinates me greatly. What a treasured memory.

The form this piece takes is superb. The recurring last line is a favorite of mine. What a wonderful piece of writing.

Take good care of that grandbaby and study hard. To me, you will always be an exceptional lady.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of BIRTHDAYS  
Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Beautiful job, Angus. Yes, we're getting older, the two-edged sword of life. Very well written and an appropriate reminder to all of us.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of People melt too.  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (2.0)
Well, Matilda, I don't know what to say about this piece either. I am sure that I don't know what you are intending to say. Your poem is one of those that leaves a reader - at least this one - with a big question mark above their head. That can be good, but it can also be very bad. The reader may walk away with no idea of what they just read. I realize that poems are often open to personal interpretation, and it is true that, at times, only the poet knows the message conveyed. In this case, I wonder if you actually know what it means.

Well, this may be your style. I won't judge it but to say that it needs a little clarification. Keep at it.

With regards,
Crow
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