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Review of Divine Nudges  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Jay,

I wanted to commend you on your excellent teachings in "Devine Nudges." Like you, I am a stickler for doctrinal correctness. To the great majority in the Christian world, doctrine has become an ugly word. We both know they would rather have their ears tickled with soft words. There are copious amounts of bile flowing from pulpits today. Please keep up your most important work in bringing forth the truth.

Your Friend,
Crow
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Review of Divine Nudges  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Jay,
I have read your response to the prompt with great interest. We could discuss at length the points that you make concerning "Original Sin." I will point out one point that I believe bears careful analysis, lest it would seem to indicate that Christ's atonement fell short of its intended goal. You write: Suffering is allowed as the teacher and the crucible, which the Lord will ultimately remove when He restores the original perfection of His Creation. Right now suffering is the crucible, which perfects us into the Image of Jesus by removing the dross from our lives.This point we should further discuss at a time as per your convenience.

A Brother In Christ,
Crow
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Review of Cavy  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Another gem for my perusal. It is both a picture of disgusting loss and delightful life. I enjoyed reading this piece very much. Well done.

Kindest Regards,
Crow
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Review of Our Daily Rain  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
A most excellent piece of work. You have a true talent for poetry. I have always been an anglophile. I have never been to England, But it is one of the very few places I would love to visit.
I truly love this poem. To me, it shows a genuine love for your country. The flow of words is as those silver drops of rain of which you spoke. When I read your prose, I feel as though I have taken to my lips a cool glass of water on a Summer's day.


With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Thinking  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (1.5)
I really don't know what you expect out of anybody who would read this, notwithstanding that your abbreviations are ambiguous. It makes no sense to me at all and would have been better placed on the newsfeed.

Crow
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Review of Forgive Me?  
Review by Crow
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This poem is simplicity in a small box. Your message is clear and without ambiguity. In my opinion, this is the way poetry should be written. I know that there are thousands of poems that could only be unriddled by the author, but I have always been drawn to those less convoluted. Another nice piece of writing and a pleasant read.

My Compliments,
Crow

P.S. typo alert: did I go too far instead of to far
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for entry "The Red Room
Review by Crow
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a good one, nice, cleanly paced, and straightforward in its message. You tapped into a visceral fear lurking in most people, the image of swarming hungry rats focussed on one purpose...food. Interestingly enough, this has been a not uncommon theme employed for hundreds of years in horror stories, and especially Gothic Horror. You used it very well, and with a new little twist. Great job.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (2.5)
Alright, so your advice about swimming is excellent. For people with pools, the idea of using them for exercise should have been considered this past summer. It is much less likely that people will swim in the winter unless their pool is heated. I just can't figure out why I didn't spring for a new swimming pool to use last summer. Could it be that after all of my bills are paid, and I go to the grocery store, I have about $300.00 in the bank, and that's on a good month. Oh yeah, I forgot about gas for the car. Yep, I'll get on that pool project right away.

Your Incredulous Reader,
Crow
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Review of There Was Me  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Another gem, Christopher. It is fascinating that we can cherish pain, but we often do. I know it to be true with myself.
I appreciate your poetry very much. It touches the part of our nature which is broken.

Compliments,
Crow
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Review of We Have a Shadow  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Clearly, a very personal poem written from the depth of experience. I appreciated your clarity. My favorite stanza is We destroy worlds.
We make "we"
To be obsolete.

Wonderful simplicity that tells the sad story of everyday humanity. Well done.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Let this old crow be the first to congratulate you on prose well-written. This is very lovely love prose. It has a very light and airy quality. Well done.

Best Season Wishes,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very nice thought. I'm an old crow, and we take care of our own.

Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a wonderful story and you did an excellent job writing it. How mysterious is the act of dying. No matter how much we study the process, we can never understand it. Can you really blame people for being fascinated with death? Of course, morbid fascination is one thing, and being in awe of it is quite another.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, why shouldn't I be the first to welcome you with a review? It sounds as though you have been through the mill. The good thing is that you are on the mend. I'm happy to hear that. Since you can't do much else, you may as well write. I hope to hear more from you as you continue to improve.

With Best Wishes,
Crow
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Review of Divine Nudges  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Having been a Baptist minister for 30 years, I can certainly appreciate the sound knowledge and wisdom you impart. since I am also a Calvinist, I have a completely different existentialist view than most.

I highly respect your writing skills. You are a tremendous asset to this writing community.

With My Compliments,
Crow

PS: You just snatched 67,000 points from me in the writing challenge. You were not supposed to write so many words. *Wink*
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Review of Poetic Pieces  
for entry "A Two-Faced Bitch
Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'll give you one thing, hullabaloo; you certainly have a way of attracting people to your personality. I'm simply glad that I can fly. Your imagery made me lose a few feathers. I should be used to the scene you paint. Crows are often at home in the dark mind. Great work.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Poetic Pieces  
Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Unless I have been grossly unobservant, I do not understand this poem. First, you say that Berchta is benevolent, but then she goes around splitting children open. I should ask who this Berchta is. Other than the seeming dual personality of this old lady, I found your piece delightfully horrible, in a good way. Nice work.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
You are a true inspiration. I cannot imagine the things that you must deal with on a daily basis. It may sound bizarre to say that I enjoyed reading about your daily and seasonal challenges, but I have been interested in your circumstances since I met you. You may not realize how much you have to offer the rest of us, but keep writing and being an example to us all. I hope that I can be considered a part of your pack.

With My Compliments,
Crow

Just a note about my salutary phrase: Durning the Civil War, Officers would send messages to one another on the battlefield. They would often tell the runners to deliver the message "with their compliments." Being an amateur Historian, I use this as a salute for a job well done and a sign of respect.
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Review of More Than Man  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is indeed an interesting beginning. It is, however, contradictory in one sense. You say that he is searching for a greater form of existence but then describes a life of seeming desolation. Therefore, he has not achieved that for which he sought. As the novel progresses, there may be a resolution to this conundrum. It would be interesting to see how you work it out. It is, however, good writing.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hell, Paul. Although you are ten years my senior, I did grow up in that period. Unlike yourself, I can't say that I thought about the whole bomb thing. I do remember hearing the warning signal going off every day at about noon in downtown Baton Rouge, La. I wasn't frightened or anything like that. I did, and still do remember that sound being really cool. Surely, we had different experiences, but I wouldn't trade growing up in that period of history for any other.

I did really enjoy your reminiscence. It was well written in a nostalgic tone. The reading was very enjoyable.

With Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.5)
I read the two offerings in your port, and I want to encourage you to get busy writing. Why just two pieces in around two years? Are you a serious writer or just a hobbyist? You say you have words burning within. If you don't let them out, you might spontaneously combust. Also, you need to art up your port to attract readers. Do something to get people's attention.

You have the talent, so use it. Start writing and give us something to read. Your two works are fine, and with a little work, they can be even better.

Hoping to see more of you in the future,
Crow

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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.0)
I don't think it will take you but a second to understand why I was attracted to your poem. The only thing I question is why you failed to use any punctuation. I realize that some poets don't get caught up in dots and commas, but those diacritical markings can change the flow and meaning. And, may I ask who Clancy is, another crow, I suppose.

If your poem is written in an artsy form, then you achieved your goal. All in all, I did like this piece. I will be interested in visiting your port to browse your other offerings.

With My Compliments,

Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
A most illuminating article, Jay. It requires one to think, and that always a positive thing. As two individuals go, we are probably different in many ways. I assume that we are both Christians. However, being a Calvinist, we would probably disagree on theology. That being said, I will rarely dispute another's beliefs unless they border on the absurd and have no scriptural foundation. I have also reached the age where I believe that I can say whatever I want. Of course, such a belief is COMPLETELY FALSE. Yes, I have strong opinions, but I will not force them on anyone. Finally, I have a naturally suspicious nature. I am very wary of opening myself up to strangers.

Now that I have spent all of this time speaking about myself (something which I hate), I need to review your Essay. I did find it clear and informative. You clearly thought it out before going to press. There is good sound advice in this piece. You seem to honestly believe what you are saying. This fact is something perceived in the inner man. You are absolutely correct in what you say and it reminds me of a scripture. "He that will have friends must show himself friendly." You have certainly shown the truth of the axiom which says that you always catch more flys with honey. I believe that is the way it usually works on Wdc. Excellent job.

With My Compliments,
Crow


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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (3.0)
I tried sponsoring a writer, filled out the form, and submitted it. However, nothing under this writer's name shows that I am sponsoring him.

Crow
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Review of Undiscovered  
Review by Crow
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Good morning, Octavius. You may find it somewhat strange, but I have already read your story three times. That should be considered unusual. I tell you that I usually don't care to read stories, especially fiction. So, consider yourself blessed. Of course, I'm just joking about you being blessed, though you are.

Let's look at your title. I believe that titles are critical since they get the reader's attention. I am huge on titles. I found yours to be excellent. It was understated but intriguing. It made me want to see what it was leading to.

Your characters were believable. They were acting irresponsibly, but under the circumstances and the fact that they were young is an explanation in itself. Their conversation is also logical for two young ladies on an adventure.

The pace of your story moves very well for me. I like stories to get to the point. Your pacing is well done.

The crash could have been expected. If it hadn't happened when it did, I don't know what you would have done to fill the time.

After the crash, the one girl that finds herself in a flipped over car begins her self-conversation. I love self-conversation.
It works for me because that is what many people would do. I know that I certainly would. I talk to myself all the time.

The creatures and the scenes that follow are well written and logical toward an open-ended conclusion.

Octavius, I will have to stop at this point, or my review will be longer than your story. I see this as a story that could easily be lengthened into a short movie. I would definitely watch it.

NOTE: What I am about to say, I say from a reviewer's perspective. When you respond to this review, please do so with more than "Thanks" I would like to hear your opinions on your story. So very often, people put very little thought into their responses. ALSO, I'm giving you five stars because I believe you earned them.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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