|Hello, CurlyFry. Your piece caught my eye and I decided to give it a read. I understand that this is only a small part of a larger story, so we won't get caught up discussing the abrupt ending. However, there is something in the first paragraph that needs consideration. The second sentence," Following the footsteps of those who they have watched." This should be connected to the first by a comma or possibly a semi-colon. The way it is written it is standing there with its pants down, dangling without any support. In another area, you write that Layla glances at the tattoos and says, "What an eye candy to look at..." That phrase doesn't sound natural. You might write, "Humm, eye candy..." or something curter.
I would be interested to read the entire story, as it possesses the earmarks of a mystery or thriller. My suggestions are purely my own and are no reflection of your writing talent. The important thing about to know is that you must be ready to edit as many times as is necessary to get your story to sound fluid and natural. Oh, I almost forgot, "Not even Matthew is not a sentence. It should be connected to the last sentence with a comma.
Keep writing, CurlyFry. You will do well if you constantly study your craft.
With My Compliments,