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Review of The Sirens.  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, inkwell. This a very simple poem that does its best work by clearly conveying the message of the author. You see, simple and straightforward is always the best form to embrace. In this piece there no ambiguity. Your poem says exactly what it intends to say without becoming an esoteric piece of abstract art that only the author can understand.

The only things I might mention are unnecessary commas, but that is always open to personal taste. Overall, this was a great job and pleasing to read.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of FIVE O'CLOCK  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, again. I was highly impressed with this work. It reminded me of a piece I wrote some time ago entitled 'Partisan Of the City' As I said, I really loved this piece with its wonderful word choices and structure. The first stanza is outstanding with a rich color of sound and emotion. Simply wonderful and evocative writing.

Compliments to you,
Crow
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Review of OLD MAN  
Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well, Junky, I just happen to be trolling along and came upon your work. I was immediately taken with the quality of those pieces I read. 'Old Man' grabbed my attention being that I am a rifleman and love long distance shooting. The description, without going into detail, was well described. A sniper must be of the most patient temperament, for his life depends on it. He takes no pleasure in the kill but in the stalk and the hunt. The sniper must possess the soul of a hunter.

I congratulate you on this well-written piece and am including a little bonus for a job well done. I have one more review of your work soon to be on the way.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.5)

I found this to be an interesting piece of work. Generally, I like the way it was put together. However, when you write,
I cannot cry.
I cannot cry
you keep the two statements together. I think this is good. The only thing is that you don't always do it. Some statements are broken up. It would seem more logical if they always remained together. It's just a suggestion.

I liked this work. Very well done

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Being from Louisiana, I can certainly take this poem to heart. Louisiana is such a very unique state. I truly believe that only true Louisianians fully understand what it means to live in such a place.

Harry, your verses were true in every way. If you think the weather in North Louisiana can be unusually anomalous, consider how it often is in the capital city. This is piece is rich and savory, just like the state.

Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well done, Harry. Being absorbed with historical facts, I was waiting for the disease to be revealed. You pulled a fast one on me.
Your poem works. What else need be said?

With Regards,
Crow
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Review of Springtree  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, erbiage. Welcome to the community of Writing.com. This is the best place for budding (no pun intended) authors like yourself. I hope you will stay the course. There are many talented and friendly people here.

I really enjoyed reading this short piece. The idea of little-clenched fist is an inspired thought. Well done.

I have one pet peeve to note. It's getting to be a bad habit for poets to use the lower case i. This may be a trend but it is always bad grammar.

Always keep writing,
Crow
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Review of Inspiration?  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is really funny because we have no idea of the great possibility that something we thought was purely ours was shared by another in another time and place.

Great idea and good work.

Crow
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Review of Forgiveness  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hmmm, I didn't see that coming, and that's a good thing. I think you weave a very interesting plot in a very short space. I will say that I think he is trying to manipulate her into forgiving him.

Have you ever considered expanding this piece? It would make a great story of about a thousand words or so,

With Regards,
Crow

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Review of Query Letter  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well, Anthony, I am not a query letter expert by any means but I feel that you have started out on the right foot by keeping your approach succinct and to the point. I would imagine that you understand that publishers and editors receive reams of proposals in one form or another. How the writer is perceived from the first sentence will have an effect. However, if the publisher is not in the market for what you have submitted the letter may garner a return letter of non-interest. I have included one of many examples of letters that might be used:
Example of a Query Letter
Dear Ms. Kole,

[1] According to your agency’s website you’re actively seeking middle-grade fiction, so I’m pleased to introduce my novel, A Smidgen of Sky. [2] This novel won me a scholarship to attend the Highlights Foundation Writers Workshop at Chautauqua. It was also awarded honorable mention in the Smart Writers W.I.N. Competition.

[3] A Smidgen of Sky is the story of ten-year-old Piper Lee DeLuna, a spunky, impulsive dreamer, whose fierce devotion to her missing father is threatened by her mother’s upcoming remarriage.

[4] Everyone else has long accepted her father’s death, but the fact that his body was never recovered from his wrecked plane leads to Piper’s dream that he might one day reappear and free her from the secret guilt she harbors over his accident. Her stubborn focus leaves no room in her affections for her mother’s fiancé, Ben, or his princess-like daughter, Ginger.

[5] Determined to stop the wedding, Piper Lee schemes up “Operation Finding Tina”—a sure plan to locate Ben’s ex-wife and get the two of them back together. But just as Piper succeeds with step one of her plan, a riot breaks out at the prison where Ben works, and suddenly nothing seems sure.

[6] Since middle-graders care deeply about things and people and love to daydream about their future, I think readers will identify with Piper Lee and find her an appealing heroine as she learns that you can both cherish the past and embrace the future.

[7] This story, set in the coastal region of Georgia, runs about 33,000 words and is somewhat similar in tone to Kate DiCamillo’s Because of Winn-Dixie.

[8] I’m a 1990 graduate of the Institute of Children’s Literature and my work has been published in U*S* Kids, Child Life, Columbia Kids, True Love, Guide and StoryPlus.

Thanks very much for your time. I have included the first ten pages and look forward to hearing from you.

Editors and publishers want to know who they are dealing with. Try to stand out without overselling yourself or your work Be extremely careful of your wording and sentence structure. The manner in which you express yourself sets the stage for whether or not the interest of the editor will be maintained. Whatever you do don't make the mistake of submitting a letter that has not been carefully checked. Keep your form in the most professional light.

I trust that I have been of some help to you. The writing world is a tough road to walk. I wish you success.

With Regards,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow! I'm so glad that I've been married for forty years. Dating these days must surely be a minefield.

This piece was very well written and certainly has the ring of truth to it. You started out slowly and allowed the tension to build to its ultimate climax. The Scenes are perfectly set and the dialogue is spot on. Well done.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was a great piece of writing. I always investigate the ports of those I review. It helps me to get a feel for the writer. I'm assuming that your name is Christina. So again, well done Christina. This is something that reminds me of my wife's career. When they found out that she could do it all, they gave all of it for her to do. At the same time, she was training women half her age that were being paid more than her. When she finally resigned from the company to take a state job, they ended up paying three people to do her job. Go figure.

Just a point you might look at. You will want to change 'Tear streamed down her face' to 'Tears'. And, did you mean ' I returned my desk to its neat and orderly state' instead of return?

Great Job, Christina,

Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, Joey, the church is made up of all kinds of people, some nice and some not so nice. There are warm ones and cold ones, friendly ones and not so friendly. I have personally dealt with every type of personality known to man within the body of the church. It's a shame when people experience what you have written, but it happens every Sunday.

I like your work of prose. It speaks to the experience of thousands who are searching for a little love and acceptance. But beyond that, they simply want to feel as though they matter.

Timely thoughts and good writing.

With my Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Lizard in the Sun  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
I do love your poem. It reminds me of the fun of children in the Summertime. For some reason, children and lizards seem to rekindle my very own Summertime memories. I appreciate you reminding me of those wonderful times.

Your poem is simply and clearly written, and that is always best. I appreciate your word choices as well. WELL DONE.

Crow
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Review of Deer Hearts  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, sweetheart, you know that that buck has many gals on the side, as long as he can fend off his rivals. It is a nice thought, however, and a very sweet poem. The question is, what in the world made you write about deer? The poet's imagination knows no bounds.

As usual, great job.

Your Affectionate Friend,
Crow
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Review of The Sea of Rage  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, Dorian, this work presents quite a challenge. I will not pretend to completely comprehend all that is written, but I would doubt that my personal comprehension is the point. Philosophical expressions are very often for the writer alone. I appreciate the colorful and metaphorical hues of this piece, even if they leave me with the necessity of having to read it over and over again. It would be a smashing work for protracted discussion and analysis, although one might need analysis in the end.

I believe I did notice one point of grammar. In your first paragraph, should it not be "THE COURSE WAVES OF CYNICAL, TRANSLUCENT MATTER "ARE BENT" INSTEAD OF "IS BENT"

Your writing skills are obvious to the serious reader. I would not hesitate to give you a five-star rating, even though many may find the depth of this piece somewhat intimidating.

Great job.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Megan, you certainly are a fan. I was a fan myself, and Lady Mary was my favorite daughter. She was, however, such a snob.

I appreciate you sharing your passions. Well done.

Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved this piece. All of what you say is actually true. I am actually quite proud of being an autodidact. But I haven't finished and never will. I guess you could say that I'm addicted to learning.

Great list and good advice.

Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
I found this to be a most interesting poem. What was particularly catch was your rhyming scheme. Your piece rhymes well but speaks plainly at the same. Your message is simple and easy to understand. The reader does not have to decipher your words.
The message is very clearly stated.
I enjoyed reading this work.

With My Compliments,
Crow






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Review by Crow
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is priceless, Sinbad. I knew something was going to happen but just had to wait. I don't believe I have ever reviewed a joke before. I laughed out loud.

The timing on this piece is perfect. It is well written with nothing that distracts from what the reader feels is about to happen. The punch line is perfect. Well done.

Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Spidey. I fell on the side of Ross as did most voters. It seems that I have always loved the comma, even to a fault. Oops, there are two already. I'm trying to be more comma sensitive but sometimes it just feels so right.

Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Goodness gracious, you would need some sort of detailed list to keep track of all the different nationalities that fought over Transylvania. I never realized that the area was so contested. I'm sure there are many fascinating stories associated with the area. It would seem to me that you would put such a place so steeped in history at the top of your bucket list.

This was all very informative. I am an amateur historian. I will have to add Transylvania to my list of places to read about. Well done.

With Warm regards,
Crow
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Review of The Combat Medic  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good morning, Rocco. Let me begin by congratulating you on your freelance success. Well done, and welcome to the Writing.com community. I look forward to hearing more from you.

I found this poem to be very interesting. It is a residual of war that men carry those memories throughout the entirety of life. Your poem brings this point home most powerfully.

There is one question I would like to ask. Is the medic dying as he remembers these things. What do you mean by 'He almost slipped away today.'
As far as your form goes, all seems to work well. I did have one suggestion, but it is purely subjective so I will let it remain so.

I enjoyed your work very much. I can see you as a great asset to this community.

With regards,
Crow
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Review of Marie  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
I found this letter to be an interesting read. I not completely convinced of the sentiments you express. I can tell that the old flame is still burning, no matter what you tell yourself. When you say you love the man in your current relationship, you don't mention that you are married. If not, why not?
When you say you love him it sounds as if you are trying to convince yourself. Of course, this is just my analysis. Pay no attention.

As stated, I enjoyed this personal work. I felt that it was well written and cohesive. I hope you really are happy.

Crow
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Review of Sleeping Rough  
Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another winner here, Robert. This is a poem close to my heart because I believe that the great majority of people have never really suffered deprivation. How many would go with little food or sleep out in the cold to experience what others experience?

This poem should hit home to an overfed country like ours. The flow is excellent. This work was a pleasure to read.

Crow
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