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Review by Crow
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello, Rosie. I have never heard of the guy you mentioned. However, whatever confidence you may have in him, you must surely realize that he has no chance of getting on the ballot. Being young and full of energy means nothing when you enter the Washington arena. He could be the brightest bulb in the box, but when they finish with him he won't shine so brightly, if at all. Also, I don't know where you are getting your information from, but automatic weapons are not available to the public. The only groups who use full auto weapons besides the police and military are drug cartels, terrorists, and other criminal factions. The Los Vegas shooter used what is called a 'bump-stock.' which allowed his semi-auto to become what could be described as automatic. Bump-stocks have now been banned. The public is only allowed to have semi-auto firearms which means that you have to pull the trigger for each shot. These can be deadly, but they do not possess a fully automatic setting.

With Regards,
Crow
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Review of Who Am I?  
Review by Crow
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hello, Prosperous. I usually don review your work to any great extent because I have a certain resistance to what I consider the incongruous fact that you have adopted. I cannot imagine how you became attached to a faith that is so out of keeping with western values. What drew to this? How did such a foreign philosophy become your standard? Certainly, you have a right to believe what you will. I will not censure you for your beliefs.

As far as this philosophical piece in question, I find it as I do most within this genre. There are no conclusions reached because philosophy can never reach a definitive conclusion. The same questions have been asked for millennia and we are no closer to an answer. I am quite certain that we should never have expected that we would find one. It was in the asking that we found our reason for being as Descartes said, "I think, therefore I am."

It is good that anyone would explore the void of man's origins? The problem encountered is that the inquires have never changed. They are expressed in a different language and by different self-styled gurus but in the end, they are all the regurgitated thoughts and words of those who will continue to emerge as new lights of divine knowledge.
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Nwriter. Let me be the first to comment on this article. This piece will be difficult for most to read, especially since you are referring to things like Sanscript (or Sanskrit) and other Indian systems of belief and philosophy. Very few Americans not of Indian heritage would know anything about Tattvarthasutra. That being the case, it is no wonder that this work has received no reviews. I found the piece interesting to read and consider, yet I will not pretend to understand the whole of it. Still, it is an enticing piece of work for those who enjoy more cerebral forays.

I found your work well written and informative, even for the uninitiated. Keep up the good work.

With Compliments,
Crow
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Review of David's Farewell  
Review by Crow
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Twila, this is an absolutely beautiful poem. For some readers, it might be a good idea to have a tissue at hand. The question I will venture to ask is whether he knew he was dying and hadn't told you? I have had dreams of loved ones that had already died, but never of any shortly before their passing. This account fascinates me greatly. What a treasured memory.

The form this piece takes is superb. The recurring last line is a favorite of mine. What a wonderful piece of writing.

Take good care of that grandbaby and study hard. To me, you will always be an exceptional lady.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of BIRTHDAYS  
Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Beautiful job, Angus. Yes, we're getting older, the two-edged sword of life. Very well written and an appropriate reminder to all of us.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of People melt too.  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (2.0)
Well, Matilda, I don't know what to say about this piece either. I am sure that I don't know what you are intending to say. Your poem is one of those that leaves a reader - at least this one - with a big question mark above their head. That can be good, but it can also be very bad. The reader may walk away with no idea of what they just read. I realize that poems are often open to personal interpretation, and it is true that, at times, only the poet knows the message conveyed. In this case, I wonder if you actually know what it means.

Well, this may be your style. I won't judge it but to say that it needs a little clarification. Keep at it.

With regards,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (3.0)
Unless you really believe yourself to be an inferior writer, I wouldn't refer to myself as you do. On the other hand, you might not be the best writer, but we all started at some point and grew better over time. No doubt, you have to put the work in to improve. Stephen King says that if you can do anything other than writing you ought to do it. If writing is just a passing fancy, then maybe you should find another way of using your spare time. However, if you find yourself needing to right, then, by all means, press on. Who knows what will come of it?

Crow
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Review of Little Boy  
Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Tell me something, Brandon. Is this work about a boy who was left to fall between the cracks by those who should have paid more attention to the signs and done something to help? For a very personal reason, I did get that impression.

As far as the style fo this piece goes, I wasn't wild about it. Don't get me wrong, as I believe every poet has his or her own style and voice. Your style may greatly differ from mine, but that comes down to personal preference. I care very little for the rules of form that many would like to force upon us. To me, it is about what the poem is saying to the reader. I also believe that to know the poem one must know the poet - as much as is possible on such a forum.

Well done, technicalities aside. I have placed you on my favorites list and am looking forward to reading more of your work.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of SEASONS OF CHANGE  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great piece, Monty. I just a tad younger than you, but I am continually watching those increasingly falling leaves. I am a nostalgia junkie. If it has to do with the past, I'm on it.

I really loved this poem. It captures the essence of the passing years. You encapsulated the idea of growing older in a very concise and understandable package. Great job.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, CurlyFry. Your piece caught my eye and I decided to give it a read. I understand that this is only a small part of a larger story, so we won't get caught up discussing the abrupt ending. However, there is something in the first paragraph that needs consideration. The second sentence," Following the footsteps of those who they have watched." This should be connected to the first by a comma or possibly a semi-colon. The way it is written it is standing there with its pants down, dangling without any support. In another area, you write that Layla glances at the tattoos and says, "What an eye candy to look at..." That phrase doesn't sound natural. You might write, "Humm, eye candy..." or something curter.

I would be interested to read the entire story, as it possesses the earmarks of a mystery or thriller. My suggestions are purely my own and are no reflection of your writing talent. The important thing about to know is that you must be ready to edit as many times as is necessary to get your story to sound fluid and natural. Oh, I almost forgot, "Not even Matthew is not a sentence. It should be connected to the last sentence with a comma.

Keep writing, CurlyFry. You will do well if you constantly study your craft.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
You hardly need further accolades from such a soul as I, but, nevertheless, I cannot forebear. You have touched the heart of my sadness, seeing those once living places living no more. Beautiful simplicity is what you have created. I have walked those streets and spoken with those shades of wonders past. Truly touch and haunting to an urban ghost as myself.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of The Zealot  
Review by Crow
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Simply wonderful. As a former pastor, I certainly understand the temptation to wax loquacious managing only to obfuscate what should be enlightening.

Great work, and better than that, it's true.

My compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Alright, Whitemorn, that was a fine piece of writing. I loved the twist and turns of history and irony. This was the perfect length for your piece. Of course, it would also make a first-rate historical/educational piece of two or three times the length.

I really enjoyed your writing. Great job.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Paper windows  
Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I must say when I first saw the length of this poem, I almost decided not to read it. I usually do care for long poetry. However, as I read the first few lines I became intrigued. I am not saying that I fully understand your mind in this piece, but I did enjoy reading it. I found the imagery interesting. I will ask you why you did not use punctuation. I have noticed that some young poets have chosen to go that route, but I would never suggest it. Readers don't like to guess where you are going. They appreciate those diacritical markings as their road map.

All in all, well done. Keep up the good work.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (4.0)
This was an interesting take on a timeless theme, a machine that develops human characteristics. Of course, machines that wish to go beyond commands represent a danger that can not be tolerated by the powers that be.

Your piece is nice but could be fleshed out in greater detail. It's your work and I feel confident that this version will not be the finished product.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, QueenOwl, I must say that this is an interesting take on a dream. Truly, only you can say what you experienced. Dreams do make excellent stories. My port contains one called, 'The Night I shot My Father' One thing about dreams is that if they deeply impress you you have little trouble remembering the details.

Your dream and what followed was very interesting. You did a good job of relating the details.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, Olem, this s quite a philosophical piece and true in certain respects. I think we all realize that we can love more than on person or fall in love many times. I also believe that we can fall out of love with a person. However, I believe the crucial problem is that people don't understand the concept of love in the first place.

You brief piece elicits thinking, and that is always a good thing.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
This piece is a nice one, and that is straight from my mouth hole. I appreciate the simplicity of thought. And, never forget, simplicity is good. You may have chosen a unique and humorous way of stating it, but all you have stated is true in a very profound way. Well done.

With My Compliments,
Crow

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for entry "Quebec City, Quebec
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Although what you explained was all but Greek to me, although I did take Geek in seminary. I would like to know how you like Canada? Is it a place you would choose to live? I have always thought Canada was beautiful if you can stand the cold. I'm from the deep South, so I'm sure I would experience a climate shock.

I want to let you know how much I enjoy your jokes. They are the best and never fail to make me laugh. They are a super way to start one's day. Your work is a great service to our writing community.

With My Compliments,
Crow
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Review of Lucile  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good story, Madeleine. I think that the pace and flow were very good. The topic was excellent since there are so many who can relate to such circumstances. I liked the story very much and believe you did a fine job.

Now, this is what you should do to make it even better and more user-friendly. Start by indenting each paragraph, separate each paragraph by one or two spaces, and increase the size of your type. You may not feel that these are important, but they may mean the difference between someone reading your work or passing you by.
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a nice poem, Charles. It may seem strange to call a poem about death, nice, but it is one of my favorite genres. I think this piece has a subtle beginning and then begins to build to the final line. Of course, I do love the mention of the crow. I wonder if I know him? The scene is well set for a walk in a cemetery. Would our visitor have tried the mausoleum door? Overall, I like the entire poem. It's not overdone, but just right. Great job.

My Compliments,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
What all of this does reveal, Ruth, is that there are a great many more professing believers on WDC than you might think. It's a safe way to relate your trials of faith and of how The Lord has worked in your life. It really feels comfortable being here.

Your Sincere Friend,
Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: E | (5.0)
         Alright, Jo, let's get this show on the road. You might think it a little strange, but we have more in common than you know. My parents also divorced when I was very young, about 1961. My father was hardly ever around anyway, so, at the time, his absence did leave a noticeable void in my life. But, who can say how these events affect young children without the child being aware. I am 67 and take medication for depression. It seems like everybody and his uncle is on meds for depression these days. No doubt, there are those who don't need to be. I too found writing as solace, and later, reading. Writing.com has become a place for my expressions to find their wings, and find them they have. WDC is a wonderful place for authors of every stripe. As an amateur historian, I have been able to translate my love of history into articles that others might enjoy. That being said, my port is very eclectic.

         As far as your work goes, you have every opportunity to make a significant impact on your readers. I wouldn't always write about depression if I were you. I feel you have much more to offer than just that. Use your varying moods to take others to places they have never been. In other words, if you are feeling low, it may be fertile ground for a great story or poem. Use all available emotions to your advantage and for that of your readers. No doubt, I am telling you things you already know.

         I did enjoy reading of your journey as a writer. I trust that the journey will continue and be an inspiration to others. If you will allow me to send out a few words of practical advice. To make your portfolio pop, find an appropriate cover picture that expresses who you are. Broden your bio so that people can really get to know you. I'm going to put you in my list of favorites in anticipation of your broadened horizons.

With Warmest Regards,
Crow
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Review of Dear Me - 2019  
Review by Crow
Rated: E | (3.0)
If there is one question I could ask of you, Jace, it would be how you think erotica serves the best interest of this writing community? How indeed does it serve anyone's best interest? It certainly panders to the base nature of all, but how is that good? If indeed you wish to have an honest conversation with yourself, you must ask why you love this genre. If you are trying to be honest, let's be honest.

Crow
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Review by Crow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well, Charity, you must be very happy. It is most pleasing to do what you love. I am very happy for you. I'll see you on discord.

My Compliments,
Crow
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