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for entry "More Power To You
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Bobturn,
Thanks for this intriguing turn on the "too many people" prompt. I've often wondered, as I worked out hour after hour at the gym, why nobody had thought of harnessing all the energy we were putting out. Seemed to me we could keep the lights on, if nothing else, and stay fit at the same time. I think you've figured out the downside. For the poor, of course, the scenario would have a clear upside. Always a pleasure to read your work.--S.
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for entry "Promises
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, Bobturn,
Congratulations on the well deserved win for this tale of weird geography. The descriptions are excellently crafted and bring these (un)natural features to life. The unfortunate Miles's tribulations are as if ripped from the headlines of the Chronicle of Higher Education, and the denouement is richly satisfying. This one was definitely a pleasure to read.--S.
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for entry "Weird Geography
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Hullabaloo,
This story perfectly conveys an unspeakable event that seems too evil, for lack of a better word, than anything that could possibly have stemmed from natural causes. Without having the characters expressly name it, this weird phenomenon seems to have come straight from hell...and to be dragging them back there. Nice!--S.
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Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Beholden,
Wow, this short but powerful story has a legendary quality about it. You describe the setting vividly and introduce the dream beautifully. And the photo in the header is fantastic! The only thing I was looking for was more visceral fear in the narrator. Describing the terror he's experiencing in his body would lend even more immediacy to the tale. Always a pleasure to read your work.--S.
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for entry "The Gauntlet
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Bobturn,

Thanks for this terrifying take on the "what the dog did" prompt. Gore and violence of this magnitude are things I can't personally write, but there's a place for it, and you found it here. This is a small-scale dystopia with a great little punch at the end. Well done.--S.
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Review of Overconfidence  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Beholden,
Congratulations on the win for this imaginative piece that turns the awesome Cerberus into a tiny but terrifying terrier. The amusing tone is what stays with this reader. That, and the name Hindemith...I've always enjoyed his music. This story reminds us why comic horror is such a popular subgenre. Always a pleasure to read your work.--S.
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for entry "His Master
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, Hullabaloo,
Thank you for this well-written entry on the "what the dog did" prompt. The reader is immediately sympathetic to the dog's perspective; although he lacks a name, he seems to have all the humanity that his owner is missing. If the dog is something of a monster by the end, it's only because the man has turned him into one by his neglect and mistreatment. The dialogue (inner and spoken) is excellent. One nit: no apostrophe in its (possessive). Always a pleasure to read your work.--S.
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Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Bobturn,
I very much enjoyed this parable of a rather thoughtless guy beset by incapacitating head pain. After trying everything else, he resorts to a shaman whose indigenous wisdom indeed brings a kind of relief...with a twist that seems to illustrate the inevitability of karma. My favorite part: "Becoming all nose overwhelmed him with a soaring hurricane of scents, each more intense than the last." I predict Shelby won't be a bad dog. Always a pleasure to read your work.--S.
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Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Beholden,
Congratulations on the well-deserved win for this tale of the possessed tape measure. The style is beautifully clear and reminded me of Angus's (and I consider him at the summit of the WdC horror writing community). The buildup is classic--simple, mundane, yet we know this is heading in a not-very-nice direction. My favorite part: "The tape leapt like a wild anaconda, and began to retract at a fiendish rate." Hope to see more of your work here at SCREAMS!!!--S.
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for entry "It's Just A Headache
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Hullabaloo,
Thanks for this chilling tale of mysterious brain pain. We've all been there, in agony with a migraine, at one point or other, and when in the depths of it there seems no more terrible place to be. This story proves that assumption is wrong...we're in a far worse situation after the pain takes over and spends itself. A question that crosses my mind: would the outcome have been the same had the three unfortunate victims not been so annoying? Always a pleasure to read your work.--S.
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for entry "Sweet Cheeks
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Hullabaloo,
There is something inherently creepy about ventriloquists' dummies, and you've exploited it very ably in this short tale. The tension ratchets up little by little and, although there's no real surprise (we see this attack coming), it's hard to keep from yelling out to Jane as we read. Well done!--S.
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for entry "Dumb Luck
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Bobturn,
This is an amazingly powerful story of suffering, malice, abuse, and rescue from the most unlikely source. You did a fine job getting inside the head of this sad and damaged woman. I really like the little boxes motif; it works well to convey the mental defenses she is forced to resort to in order to endure her husband's cruelty. Do you ever go back to these contest entries and work further on them? Some, including this one, I think, would repay the effort and allow your impressive skill to shine more brightly.--S.
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for entry "True Believers
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Bobturn,
Thank you for this winning entry exploring the theme of blasphemy. You managed in just over 1k words to create a thoroughly gripping story that incorporates some of the most irreconcilable social topics of our day with both humor and suspense. In short, a highly enjoyable entry.--S.
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for entry "To Hell... And Back?
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, Hullabaloo,
Reading this peculiarly matter-of-fact entry raises some interesting questions for me. The protagonist, obviously put upon by the loathesome bully, summons up a hellish force that blasts him as a demon might do. Where does her power come from? He calls her a [expletive] witch; is she indeed in league with the powers of darkness? If so, it must have been unwittingly, as she tells us neither of them was prepared for it. Is there in fact some force of cosmic justice that the meek can summon in their time of need? Or is she simply drawing upon the strength of her imagination? Regardless, the sight of the bully turning tail and running away is salutary. Always a pleasure to read your work.--S.
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for entry "A Hand Print
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Hullabaloo,
Congratulations on sharing the win for this ingenious little puzzle of a story. I love its simplicity and the stubborn impossibility (in our ordinary way of thinking of the linearity of time) of the last paragraph. I hope you keep on in this weird vein whenever the mood strikes you. Always a pleasure to read your work--S.
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for entry "Grave Experience
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Bobturn,
Congratulations on sharing the win for this short but brutal tale. I like the intertwining of the themes of art and death/burial--since prehistoric times, red ochre has figured in both. Silvia certainly wastes no time (and at 500 words max, neither did you) in dispatching the rapey date. I'm wondering for how long she and Carlos will manage to carry on with this risky if lucrative scheme. Justice doesn't seem to figure into this universe, so perhaps the scheme will endure as long as the market bears it. Always a pleasure to read your work--S.
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for entry "The Mango Man
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Hullabaloo,
I hope you had as much fun writing this story as I did reading it. Jasper's matter-of-fact explanation of his progression from thoroughly average guy to the Fruit-Aisle Slayer captivated me from beginning to end. You've revealed a new gift for comic horror...I hope we'll see more of it.
Happy New Year--S.
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for entry "Diet Plan
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Bobturn,
This story gives us thorough and persuasive answers to the questions posed in the prompt and, although it has its comic elements, I found it quite chilling. The fourth and last two paragraphs, in particular, ably convey the full extent of the biological horror. Thanks for this extremely creative take on the mango man.--S.
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Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Hullabaloo,
Thanks for this clever take on the Atropos prompt. The story opens on a liminal yet fairly mundane scene, with the narrator at home in her bedroom, in the borderland between waking and sleep. It transpires that the most fearsome of the three Fates is present, cutting the strands of unknown lives as the narrator looks on. Finally, there is a warning and a single, detached strand, which the narrator catches in her hands while the goddess moves on. The reader can only wonder how long Caroline will be able to take sufficient care of the cut strand of her life to sustain her earthly existence. The story reminds us how fragile our existence is. Always a pleasure to read your work--S.
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for entry "Atropos
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, Bobturn,
Thanks for this shocking take on the prompt. Here we have a downtrodden medical student assuming the role of Atropos, repeatedly stepping in to give fate a hand in order to secure much-needed cadavers for educational purposes (similar to the notorious resurrection men of centuries past), and in the end becoming the bringer of the aptly named Heaven Barkley's fate. I certainly wasn't expecting the latter. It's ironic that the victim whose death apparently tipped off the cops was soon to die anyway. But then Fate is often ironic, isn't it?--S.
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for entry "Bewitched
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, Bobturn,
Thanks for taking up the challenge (and you win an extra bonus for working all the prompts into the first paragraph). This little tale beautifully illustrates the point that horror depends on your viewpoint. What could have been a terrifying encounter with the Prince of Darkness is, for Amanda Pike, an entree into the most delectable echelons of power. While for Satan, the grating denouement of the story proves he made a very bad bargain indeed. I have a feeling he'll spend the next several eons scheming to belch this vexatious vixen back into the human world. Who will win? Maybe a future tale will tell.--S.
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for entry "Feeling Chilli
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Bobturn,
For a contest that was about speechlessness, you managed to deliver a tale told by one of the most distinctive voices in recent memory. True, the chilli he describes might very well leave one speechless if taken internally. Still, it's difficult to see how--apart from cursed pride--anyone could be persuaded to do it. Thinking about the kind of person who would is pretty darn scary, actually. Thanks for being a part of the SCREAMS!!! community.--S.
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Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Raven,
Wow! Thank you for entering this truly terrifying story. I like the blend of Lovecraftian and cult elements with the sympathetic law officer a la Clarice Starling. The inability to name the evil is a fitting touch at the end, and the last line is pure creepiness. Well done!--S.
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for entry "Silent Sisters
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, Hullabaloo,
You've given us another very well deserved winner in 'Silent Sisters.' The pacing of this tale of inhuman abuse is perfect and the happy ending, though it confounds the normal expectations of horror fiction, is wonderful. Well, it's almost a happy ending; finding out at last why these sisters are silent isn't happy at all. Thank you for being a part of the SCREAMS!!! community.--S.
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Review of Predator  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Odessa,
Thank you for this charming tale of an owner of a not-so-very-nice property with a determined prior resident. Lucky for Geoff that his agent Christophe is such a good shot. The dialogue, action, and visual imagery in this story work very well. My favorite line: the last. Always a pleasure to read your work.--S.
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