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Review by Sumojo
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Bikerider,
Thanks for your reply and offer of help if I ever decide to carry on with the cops and robbers stories.
I loved the introduction to this story, intriguing, encouraging the reader to find out more.
Yes, it’s hard to believe that Brad would turn to the church, but on reflection maybe after seeing and experiencing years of the worst side of humanity, maybe he sought to discover another side of life. Perhaps he was looked for peace?
I really enjoyed it, you painted a real picture of the man in words.
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Shiki
This is a wonderful start to joining this helpful group. You’re in the right place for all the help and assistance you may need or wish for.
Keep on writing.
Cheers Sue
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Review of Lost  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there Jacky,
Thanks for the explanation of where my missing items went.
The dialogue used was familiar to me. I’ve spoken all those words.
I can almost believe an alien took my missing items.
Enjoyable tale. Thanks for sharing
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Paul, what an absolutely beautifully written story, I felt for everyone, the dog, the husband, his children.
Maybe because I’m in the age bracket, or because we have a beautiful dog that I can imagine having to say goodbye to, I was drawn into the whole scenario.
There was sadness sure, but lots of love, enjoyment of life too.
We all have to face such a time, let’s hope it’s one surrounded by people or pets we love.
Well done.
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Robert, it sure is a worthy winner no matter what form it was.
Loved the picture of the stupid cat lying in the sink, maybe the sun had enticed her to lie in it’s warmth.
Not being a cat person myself, I still feel for the poor feline when the inevitable spray of water disturbs her peace .
Well done.
Cheers Sue
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Review of Fog  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi William,
A well written story which kept me reading to the end, it was full of suspense, and one just knew something terrible was about to happen.
You describe the terror of being in a fog such as that extremely well. The sound is muffled, you can feel the wetness of it clinging to your very core.
In England years ago when everyone burnt coal for fuel, fogs such as you describe were common and called “ pea soupers “.
I haven’t been in one for many years but you brought back the experience for me.
Thank you for sharing, I really enjoyed the suspense.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Robert, thank you for a very amusing tale. I enjoyed it.
It was well written and the story flowed well.
The spacing made it easy to read.
I too have written something for the Quotation inspiration, taking a completely different slant.
Good luck, a worthy entry.
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Stephen, thanks for your take on the old fairy tale, it was really amusing. What a sensitive soul Mr Wolf is! Who would have thought?
The only comment other than praise, is that it needs to be better spaced, especially as it’s written for a child.
I saw the need for more commas, and wasn’t sure that the word ‘oftenly’ actually exists, although I did look it up and the consensus was that although it is a word it’s the wrong word, if that makes sense.
On the whole though a good version, and an amusing one.
Thanks for sharing
Cheers Sue


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Review of Chicken Donny  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (3.5)
Thanks Terrence for your poem.
Although humorous, there are many truths in the verses.
He is characterised as a figure of fun, one the whole world makes light of, but one who shouldn’t be underestimated.
Even though I live in Australia, far away from Mr Trump, his actions affect us all.
One smiles, but with reservation.
Cheers Sue


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Review of The Forever Wife  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, I really enjoyed this story. It was imaginative, entertaining and well written.
How frustrating was that wife? And the fact he was unable to escape her no matter where or when he tried to go. Back and forth through history, a wonderful concept.
Well done.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for sharing this sweet story.
The dialogue was convincing. Maybe John had been waiting all his life for Annie, or maybe it was just a line. However ,Annie would have loved it.
I really enjoy stories that are mainly dialogue, leaving the reader to imagine the characters and their back stories.
Well done.
Cheers Sue



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Review of The Eyes Have It  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (3.0)
Mmmmm you had me there!
Thought he was some sort of ghoulish surgeon who relished his job.
Nice take on the job of peeling potatoes, I’ll never tackle the task the same again.
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really liked the story, so imaginative. Maybe you have a garden full of hedges clipped into shapes yourself, to have come up with such a notion.
Robert reminded me of a young Harry Potter eagerly beginning his time at the academy of dark arts.
I shall never look at a hedge or shrub clipped to within an inch of it’s life, the same again.
There is an elephant, trunk raised high in our neighbourhood , I wonder if a zoo is missing one.
Well done
Cheers Sue


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Review of Flight 657  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hi Angus,
Found this story when searching for something to read.
Poor Eddie not too bright leaving the wreckage and the safety of the fire. Still like any good horror story if the protagonists never took risks there’d be no story. I thought maybe he was going to end up in a big pot gradually being boiled.
Wondering if the tribe was one made up of women, maybe men haters.
Queen Mandy. It has a ring to it.
Thanks for sharing
Cheers Sue
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Review of Science Friction  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Huntersmoon, thanks for giving me a smile today.
I’m not one for poetry usually, but I enjoy the ones with simple rhyme.
Maybe that says something about me?
You describe today’s world as seen by an old (older) person. The frustration with politics and politicians, the apps that we can’t live without, and the latest expensive gadgets. How presumptuous that ‘they’ believe they know everything about us and what is best for us.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers Sue



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Review by Sumojo
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi, congratulations on your win.
I read through the story twice, your characters are believable, you give the reader a sense of the desperate misery of this town.
In a longer format it would have been good to know Don’s background and why he was so bitter and twisted.
An imaginative tale, well told
Cheers Sue


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Review of Head Games - FF  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ken
Good one, succinct tale in so few words.
Probably had a few folk checking out Medusa’s power.
Cheers Sue


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Review of Nice Guy  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Lewis
Thank you for sharing your story. I found it riveting. You ensured the reader of this sad tale went along on the journey, hoping that against all hope, she would at last see this besotted lover for what he was.
Someone who would do anything for her, someone who would actually give his life for her.
This is a well written piece, I would love to read more of your work. Thanks for sharing
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi
I’d sing unchained melody
Cos I loved the movie Ghost
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Review of The Manicurist  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi I caught up with your story whilst entering January’s Twisted Tale Comp.
It’s a very well written piece that captures the reader’s imagination from the beginning.
There was no clue during the tale of the twist, which made me give a gasp. That’s the whole idea of course.
Good job a worthy winner.
Cheers Sue


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Review of I Am Jellyfish  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Jellyfish
I came across this in your portfolio when I read a review on your poem ‘ Whatever happened to Great Britain ‘
I left England 45 years ago but still have family there.
I’m intrigued by this ‘I am jellyfish’ because I think I too am becoming addicted to WDC.
I’ve not been here long and there’s time to escape but not sure I want to.
Do you have any advice ?? Do I need help?
Cheers Sue
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Review of Back to Dust  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi again Ezekiel
Thanks for getting back to me for my opinion after your edit.
It is an improvement certainly. Did you think so too?
Just one thing. If you are going to say “there were no crabs” the following word will be scurrying. I’d drop the “ there were” and just say No crabs scurried sideways, no seagulls ...
You certainly paint a picture of this desolate beach. Well done.
Sue


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Review of SAVE OUR CHILDREN  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Betty,
Grandparents play a unique role in their grandchildren’s lives and always have done.
Today though they are playing a different role, that of parents, a role that was not normally expected of them.
The scourge of drugs are more often taking children’s parents away, leaving them to turn to other family members, usually the grandparents.
You have touched on a topic so prevalent today.
Thank you for sharing
Sue


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Review by Sumojo
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi John,
I read the piece and thought that it was a real experience and was loath to comment. Then I saw it was a work of fiction and although I felt a relief that you personally hadn’t gone through the dreadful experience of losing a loved one, I was made aware that someone had, probably today.
You express the trauma of the experience well.
It seemed that George had found the instructions to keep Heather comfortable was the one he’d found the most difficult to achieve, berating himself that he should have done more.
Maybe he needed more specifics, not just a generalised order or suggestion. He was left feeling inadequate.
The ending was comforting for the reader with the message that in time George will be okay.
Well written piece, thanks for sharing.
Sumojo


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Review of Accident  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (3.5)
Thanks for the story of the accident. Maybe it was a true account or an imagined scenario, one we all fear I suspect.
The dialogue seems genuine. Each person speaking needs to have a new line otherwise it becomes confusing for the reader to differentiate the speakers.
The telephone ringed?
There is too much telling and not enough showing in the piece, especially in the first paragraph.
An interesting scenario though and if it were true, a happy ending.
Sumojo


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