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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Carly, thanks for sharing the reason you write poetry in such a beautiful way. I loved your choice of words, it was as if each one was chosen carefully and specifically. I specifically enjoyed the first two lines. I think you are trying to explain that as you write poetry you delve deep into your subconscious and history to find events and times to assist you to find the perfect words and phrases called for in a specific poem.
Thank you so much for sharing.


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing your thoughts on why you write poetry, in this piece for the ‘Poet, Know it’ contest.
I particularly enjoyed the first stanza. I believe poets see the world in a slightly different way. Their minds go to a part of the brain which enables them, or maybe impels them, to describe what they see in a poetic fashion.
I myself try to write poetry but I’m not a poet. My efforts need to rhyme, I can’t produce the flowing quality needed for free verse.
The second stanza shows you are aware of the technical side of producing a piece of poetry all of which allude me.
I enjoyed this piece.
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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thanks for sharing this poem. It made me shiver just reading it. You fulfilled the brief well including all the required words. I liked the fourth stanza the best. I could sense the father’s fear he may not be able to protect his family throughout these extreme weather conditions. Good job.
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Review of Music of the Past  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a sweet poem, recalling the music of childhood, especially at Christmas time.
The music that was played at home at that time of the year was always ‘I’m Dreaming of a White Christmas’ sung by Bing Crosby. Then we’d have a constant playlist of all the old and true Christmas Carols, the same ones that people sing at Carols by Candlelight Celebrations. The pop stars of the day usually bring out a Christmas Album but the old songs still remain a favourite of mine.
Thanks for the trip down memory lane.
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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Carly, I’m reviewing this piece as part of I Write.
Well I looked at brief for this part of your story. That was to describe the setting, which you certainly did and beautifully so. I felt as I were battling the traffic, crowds and noise alongside your protagonist. I was impressed with the amount of research you undertook to get the reality of the setting. It certainly paid off. The juxtaposition between the busy, frantic city and the calm tranquility of her destination was great.
The importance of nature to Zayda was a constant throughout the piece, the reader could almost feel the anxiety and the growing relief as more and more greenery began to appear.
I loved reading this. Thanks for sharing.


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Review of Cruel Hijinks  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Thanks Carly for sharing this lovely story. The characters are believable and although magic is involved, the subject matter of bullying is so current.
Being able to retaliate with a few spells would be great though.
This stands alone but would certainly could be a chapter in a novel.

The only things I picked up were typos. eg takiing, tired instead of tried, then instead of them.
In the 11 th paragraph you said to amazing instead of too amazing.

Fifth paragraph. I would write: Darla made a point of stumbling into Zayda… not into her, as the last person named in this paragraph was the teacher. It made it sound as if Darla stumbled into the teacher.

You wrote The lingering feeling of dis-ease The word should be unease.

Nice story. I hope Zayda gets her revenge.

Cheers Sue




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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I simply adored this story and in my humble opinion it should have won the September round of Creature Features Contest. I love the language, it played in my ear as a Cornish accent from the world of the Middle Kingdom!
I loved all the names of the characters, the creativeness and the light hearted childlike quality of the story. Thank you so much for sharing.
Cheers Sue


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for entry "Innocent Child
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for entering this contest and for penning your take on the image. You considered the image of the child as an apprentice to the world of witchcraft. The witch hovering over the child is full of malevolence and yet the white clad figure seems so full of innocence.
It makes me feel sad and think of all the children in the world that suffer consequences because of their guardian’s life choices. They’re raised to carry on the family tradition, whether it’s witchcraft or something less controversial.
Thanks for sharing this poem.


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Review of JUNO  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello and welcome to WdC. I have read your story about Juno and it made me think about dog friends I have lost throughout y life. Yes,I agree with you that they always seem to be with us even though they’re not part of this world anymore.
I myself have kept the toys and collars that have belonged to my lost pets.
This story about how Juno came to waken you to warn you of danger was heartwarming.
The thing I found the most affecting was when the bed depressed as if someone or something was climbing onto the mattress.
Thank you so much for sharing this story. Keep on writing.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you so much for this delightful tale. I loved the idea of using the teeth as roadbase! And the terrible disease of green nose overflow was something that all humans know about only too well. Crustbin Thistlebum is a wonderful name for a fairy, one which children would delight in. Your story intrigued from the first sentence and would keep children’s and adults alike waiting to see if he escaped or was captured by the boy.
Well done. Thank you so much for sharing.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Phillips, thank you so much for sharing this lovely story. You definitely have a ‘voice’ in your writing. I loved the humour, the pathos and the quirky nature of the character and his relatives, all tarred with the same brush obviously.
I recommend running the story through a grammar checker though. Of course a checker would insist you spell things correctly, which wouldn’t work with the dialect, but it would assist in the correct placing of commas etc. Do not let it take away the quirkiness of this delightful story though.
I’m remembering some characters from my past which remind me of Willie Pete!
Thanks again, please keep on writing. By the way welcome to WdC.
Cheers Sue


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Review of Midnight Spirit  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
You can’t possibly leave me in suspense like that! 😩
I’m really liking what I’ve read so far and hope that you intend to complete this poem in the not too distant future.
In the first stanza ‘ off course’ is spelled like that, not ‘coarse.’
In the sixth stanza I thought the phrase ‘begged of evil’ could be improved. Perhaps ‘gleamed with evil.’ or something similar.
It certainly would freak anyone out seeing a vision of themselves suddenly grown old. Flippantly, I thought, he’ll start to look after his teeth now😱
Anyway looking forward to reading the finished poem. Perhaps you can send me a reminder?
Cheers Sue


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Review of Autumn Is  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I’m reviewing this poem for, I write 2021. You did a great job of fulfilling quite a difficult brief. My favourite stanza was the first one. I really loved your use of Autumn as a metaphor and that the leaves and trees are the lines and stanzas of a poem. Very imaginative. I really enjoyed this poem, it evoked the smells and tastes of my favourite season. Thank you so much for sharing.
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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Carly, well done on completing two good poems using this complicated formula. As a non poet I don’t think I could have got the rules straight to begin with! Anyway besides my complete ignorance of poetry I must say I liked the second one best. Because it’s about a journey of faith with a destination in mind; to find a place of peace and good living.
I’m reviewing this poem as part of I Write 2021. All success in the completion of I write and of the poetry contest.
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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Oh, how I love this poem. Firstly I loved the rhythm of the words, the piece flowed effortlessly. There were no points which made me falter, think that didn’t rhyme.
Secondly, the poem made me think about the things we say, so carelessly. And yet if those words took seed and became reality how much we would want to retract our outburst.
I loved the fact the lack of colour began in the highest tree. One leaf and yet she didn’t see. Didn’t comprehend such a thing could happen. That colour could totally disappear from the world.
This is a wonderful poem, I do hope that it’s published somewhere outside of WdC where others may appreciate it.
Thanks for sharing. I see it was written a long time ago, that fact alters nothing. The poem is as relevant now as then. In fact maybe more relevant given the world in which we are living now.


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, welcome to WdC, I hope you enjoy your time here. You’ll receive help, support and encouragement. Just reach out and ask.
When I read this short piece I could almost hear in my head the voice of Boris Karloff. You may not know who he is, depending on your age. However he used to be in horror movies and had a distinctive voice. You may be able to look him up.
Anyway it proves that the writing was quite good to remind me of a voice from my past. So we’ll done. Keep in writing.
Cheers Sue


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Review of Pink Moon  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.5)
You must have been one of those hardy souls who ventured from their nice warm bed to gaze at the phenomenon.
Every time we are told about the brightest, largest, nearest to the earth, moon I say, “ I’ll make sure I’m up in time to watch that.”
I never do. Was this moon really pink? I want it to be so much.
Was the image you captured anywhere as memorable as the real thing?
I hope it was worth the cold feet. Thanks for sharing your experience.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Carly, I really enjoyed reading this poem. I can easily imagine steeping outside at the end of a perfect summer’s day. The air has cooled but the sweet fragrances of blossoms remain. How wonderful it would be to have a stream in one’s garden to reflect the moonlight and the flickering fireflies.
I particularly liked the line “transported from the mundane to a world that shimmers”
Thank you so much for sharing this piece.
The only small error I saw was: there’s no apostrophe in it’s security keeps out the chill
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Kåre Enga in Udon Thani This poem was suggested reading, and how pleased I am to have come across it. You are such a talented poet, your work is often breathtaking as is this piece.
You touched on something which send chills through my heart. We were visiting Sri Lanka several days after the Tsunami which decimated so much of South East Asia. The devastation and loss of life was unspeakable. And yet you have managed to personify and give words to something so tremendous in its strength, power and malevolence.
I loved the way you shaped the words and the lines. So clever and imaginative.
Was the year you wrote this the year of the Tsunami in Japan? The footage shown on television will stay in my mind forever.
I’m so pleased I had the privilege of reading.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This short story is a reminder, or an invitation perhaps, to everyone of us who depend on those we call upon in times of crisis. Little thought is ever given to the care giver, the life saver or the rescuer.
They are the ones who climb out of warm beds in the middle of the night. The ones who work double shifts because there is no one available to take their place. Especially now, in a pandemic, we should give our thanks. However it shouldn’t take a pandemic or a war before we stop for a few moments and send warm thoughts to those who care for us without a moments hesitation.
Thank you so much for the story and for the reminder.
Cheers Sue


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Review of The wrong carrots  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi my name is Sue. Please remember these are just one person’s opinions. I hope you find something here useful and if not discard the rest with good cheer.


*TagO*What I liked best
I loved this children’s story. There’s a moral to it regarding interfering with nature. The best children’s stories usually come with a lesson.

*TagO*Opening paragraph.
You set up the start of this story with cute characters, two rabbits and a very inquisitive parrot.

*TagO*Characters.
Bumpy, Jumpy and Piro are the three main characters, with the late appearance of the rat who reveals the reason for the strange vegetable. For a children’s story an ideal number.

*TagO*Grammar and spelling.
In the first paragraph, you put found a new place full of juicy rabbits instead of carrots.
Paragraph two, line one. Remove space between explore and the question mark the quotation mark is the wrong way. Sixth line: comma, after carrots. Seventh line: “Sure, why not? Lead the way, Jumpy.”
Paragraph 6: God has a capital letter. 12th line: today morning Did you mean this morning, or, today? There are many cases of spaces between commas and full stops. This story deserves to put through a grammar programme such as Grammarly.
The last line: did you mean were dejected?

*TagO*Parting comments.

A great effort at writing a children’s story. Thanks for sharing.

Frog in a Hanging Basket


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Well as greeting cards go, it’s a little unusual. Of course there are greeting cards for most occasions now but I’ve never seen one for a specific ailment such as heartburn before.
I think you may have set a trend though. Cards for aching knees, or colonoscopy procedures!
The poem made me smile, especially the second verse.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi my name is Sue. I’ve been asked to resend my review as the last one wasn’t long or detailed enough. Please remember these are just one person’s opinions. I hope you find something here useful and if not discard the rest with good cheer.


*TagO*What I liked best
I loved this piece. It’s a story of hope, love and joy. The joy comes at the end of a series of harrowing accounts of cruelty, deprivation and near death.
I enjoyed your many descriptive lines. I particularly liked soft and fragrant as a lavender sachet


*TagO*Opening paragraph.
The first two lines encourages to read more. Why was this man incarcerated within those four bleak walls? I read on to learn more about his terrible experience.


*TagO*Characters.
The two characters are the soldier and his wife. A couple so in love ripped apart by the cruelty of war.


*TagO*Parting comments.

It is a lovely story. The ending is particularly moving, when he holds his baby son in his arms. Thank you so much for sharing.


Frog in a Hanging Basket

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Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (4.5)
I loved this little story of despair, hope and love. You told the story in so few words, encompassing the past, present and future. Well done. I wish you well in the contest.
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Oh well done. I enjoyed this new take on the old fairytale of Jack and the Beanstalk.
It was a shame that there was no castle, golden goose or giant though. How disappointing it was to find only Sad Sally who needed to be rescued.
I loved Jack and the Beanstalk when I was very small except when it was on as a pantomime and the giant stuck his massive head out of the castle window. I had to be taken outside, I was screaming so much!
Good luck in the contest.
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