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for entry "Innocent Child" 
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for entering this contest and for penning your take on the image. You considered the image of the child as an apprentice to the world of witchcraft. The witch hovering over the child is full of malevolence and yet the white clad figure seems so full of innocence.
It makes me feel sad and think of all the children in the world that suffer consequences because of their guardian’s life choices. They’re raised to carry on the family tradition, whether it’s witchcraft or something less controversial.
Thanks for sharing this poem.


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Review of JUNO  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello and welcome to WdC. I have read your story about Juno and it made me think about dog friends I have lost throughout y life. Yes,I agree with you that they always seem to be with us even though they’re not part of this world anymore.
I myself have kept the toys and collars that have belonged to my lost pets.
This story about how Juno came to waken you to warn you of danger was heartwarming.
The thing I found the most affecting was when the bed depressed as if someone or something was climbing onto the mattress.
Thank you so much for sharing this story. Keep on writing.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you so much for this delightful tale. I loved the idea of using the teeth as roadbase! And the terrible disease of green nose overflow was something that all humans know about only too well. Crustbin Thistlebum is a wonderful name for a fairy, one which children would delight in. Your story intrigued from the first sentence and would keep children’s and adults alike waiting to see if he escaped or was captured by the boy.
Well done. Thank you so much for sharing.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Phillips, thank you so much for sharing this lovely story. You definitely have a ‘voice’ in your writing. I loved the humour, the pathos and the quirky nature of the character and his relatives, all tarred with the same brush obviously.
I recommend running the story through a grammar checker though. Of course a checker would insist you spell things correctly, which wouldn’t work with the dialect, but it would assist in the correct placing of commas etc. Do not let it take away the quirkiness of this delightful story though.
I’m remembering some characters from my past which remind me of Willie Pete!
Thanks again, please keep on writing. By the way welcome to WdC.
Cheers Sue


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Review of Midnight Spirit  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
You can’t possibly leave me in suspense like that! 😩
I’m really liking what I’ve read so far and hope that you intend to complete this poem in the not too distant future.
In the first stanza ‘ off course’ is spelled like that, not ‘coarse.’
In the sixth stanza I thought the phrase ‘begged of evil’ could be improved. Perhaps ‘gleamed with evil.’ or something similar.
It certainly would freak anyone out seeing a vision of themselves suddenly grown old. Flippantly, I thought, he’ll start to look after his teeth now😱
Anyway looking forward to reading the finished poem. Perhaps you can send me a reminder?
Cheers Sue


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Review of Autumn Is  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I’m reviewing this poem for, I write 2021. You did a great job of fulfilling quite a difficult brief. My favourite stanza was the first one. I really loved your use of Autumn as a metaphor and that the leaves and trees are the lines and stanzas of a poem. Very imaginative. I really enjoyed this poem, it evoked the smells and tastes of my favourite season. Thank you so much for sharing.
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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Carly, well done on completing two good poems using this complicated formula. As a non poet I don’t think I could have got the rules straight to begin with! Anyway besides my complete ignorance of poetry I must say I liked the second one best. Because it’s about a journey of faith with a destination in mind; to find a place of peace and good living.
I’m reviewing this poem as part of I Write 2021. All success in the completion of I write and of the poetry contest.
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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Oh, how I love this poem. Firstly I loved the rhythm of the words, the piece flowed effortlessly. There were no points which made me falter, think that didn’t rhyme.
Secondly, the poem made me think about the things we say, so carelessly. And yet if those words took seed and became reality how much we would want to retract our outburst.
I loved the fact the lack of colour began in the highest tree. One leaf and yet she didn’t see. Didn’t comprehend such a thing could happen. That colour could totally disappear from the world.
This is a wonderful poem, I do hope that it’s published somewhere outside of WdC where others may appreciate it.
Thanks for sharing. I see it was written a long time ago, that fact alters nothing. The poem is as relevant now as then. In fact maybe more relevant given the world in which we are living now.


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, welcome to WdC, I hope you enjoy your time here. You’ll receive help, support and encouragement. Just reach out and ask.
When I read this short piece I could almost hear in my head the voice of Boris Karloff. You may not know who he is, depending on your age. However he used to be in horror movies and had a distinctive voice. You may be able to look him up.
Anyway it proves that the writing was quite good to remind me of a voice from my past. So we’ll done. Keep in writing.
Cheers Sue


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Review of Pink Moon  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.5)
You must have been one of those hardy souls who ventured from their nice warm bed to gaze at the phenomenon.
Every time we are told about the brightest, largest, nearest to the earth, moon I say, “ I’ll make sure I’m up in time to watch that.”
I never do. Was this moon really pink? I want it to be so much.
Was the image you captured anywhere as memorable as the real thing?
I hope it was worth the cold feet. Thanks for sharing your experience.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Carly, I really enjoyed reading this poem. I can easily imagine steeping outside at the end of a perfect summer’s day. The air has cooled but the sweet fragrances of blossoms remain. How wonderful it would be to have a stream in one’s garden to reflect the moonlight and the flickering fireflies.
I particularly liked the line “transported from the mundane to a world that shimmers”
Thank you so much for sharing this piece.
The only small error I saw was: there’s no apostrophe in it’s security keeps out the chill
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Kåre Enga in Udon Thani This poem was suggested reading, and how pleased I am to have come across it. You are such a talented poet, your work is often breathtaking as is this piece.
You touched on something which send chills through my heart. We were visiting Sri Lanka several days after the Tsunami which decimated so much of South East Asia. The devastation and loss of life was unspeakable. And yet you have managed to personify and give words to something so tremendous in its strength, power and malevolence.
I loved the way you shaped the words and the lines. So clever and imaginative.
Was the year you wrote this the year of the Tsunami in Japan? The footage shown on television will stay in my mind forever.
I’m so pleased I had the privilege of reading.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This short story is a reminder, or an invitation perhaps, to everyone of us who depend on those we call upon in times of crisis. Little thought is ever given to the care giver, the life saver or the rescuer.
They are the ones who climb out of warm beds in the middle of the night. The ones who work double shifts because there is no one available to take their place. Especially now, in a pandemic, we should give our thanks. However it shouldn’t take a pandemic or a war before we stop for a few moments and send warm thoughts to those who care for us without a moments hesitation.
Thank you so much for the story and for the reminder.
Cheers Sue


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Review of The wrong carrots  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi my name is Sue. Please remember these are just one person’s opinions. I hope you find something here useful and if not discard the rest with good cheer.


*TagO*What I liked best
I loved this children’s story. There’s a moral to it regarding interfering with nature. The best children’s stories usually come with a lesson.

*TagO*Opening paragraph.
You set up the start of this story with cute characters, two rabbits and a very inquisitive parrot.

*TagO*Characters.
Bumpy, Jumpy and Piro are the three main characters, with the late appearance of the rat who reveals the reason for the strange vegetable. For a children’s story an ideal number.

*TagO*Grammar and spelling.
In the first paragraph, you put found a new place full of juicy rabbits instead of carrots.
Paragraph two, line one. Remove space between explore and the question mark the quotation mark is the wrong way. Sixth line: comma, after carrots. Seventh line: “Sure, why not? Lead the way, Jumpy.”
Paragraph 6: God has a capital letter. 12th line: today morning Did you mean this morning, or, today? There are many cases of spaces between commas and full stops. This story deserves to put through a grammar programme such as Grammarly.
The last line: did you mean were dejected?

*TagO*Parting comments.
A great effort at writing a children’s story. Thanks for sharing.

Frog in a Hanging Basket


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Well as greeting cards go, it’s a little unusual. Of course there are greeting cards for most occasions now but I’ve never seen one for a specific ailment such as heartburn before.
I think you may have set a trend though. Cards for aching knees, or colonoscopy procedures!
The poem made me smile, especially the second verse.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi my name is Sue. I’ve been asked to resend my review as the last one wasn’t long or detailed enough. Please remember these are just one person’s opinions. I hope you find something here useful and if not discard the rest with good cheer.


*TagO*What I liked best
I loved this piece. It’s a story of hope, love and joy. The joy comes at the end of a series of harrowing accounts of cruelty, deprivation and near death.
I enjoyed your many descriptive lines. I particularly liked soft and fragrant as a lavender sachet


*TagO*Opening paragraph.
The first two lines encourages to read more. Why was this man incarcerated within those four bleak walls? I read on to learn more about his terrible experience.


*TagO*Characters.
The two characters are the soldier and his wife. A couple so in love ripped apart by the cruelty of war.


*TagO*Parting comments.
It is a lovely story. The ending is particularly moving, when he holds his baby son in his arms. Thank you so much for sharing.


Frog in a Hanging Basket
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Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (4.5)
I loved this little story of despair, hope and love. You told the story in so few words, encompassing the past, present and future. Well done. I wish you well in the contest.
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Oh well done. I enjoyed this new take on the old fairytale of Jack and the Beanstalk.
It was a shame that there was no castle, golden goose or giant though. How disappointing it was to find only Sad Sally who needed to be rescued.
I loved Jack and the Beanstalk when I was very small except when it was on as a pantomime and the giant stuck his massive head out of the castle window. I had to be taken outside, I was screaming so much!
Good luck in the contest.
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Review of Inhabitable  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there, I’m reviewing this story for, ‘I write 2021’.
Thanks for sharing this tongue in cheek piece. It illustrates quite nicely what an alien race would consider about our Earth. Certainly they find it an unsuitable place to invade and make their own. We have pretty well made a bit of a mess of it, that’s for sure.
I liked the story very much. The only comment I have is the lack of punctuation.
I have made a few suggestions, as seen below.
Cheers Sue.


“Have we reached?” The commander of the ship turned his gaze to the navigator, whose screen was lit with bright red dots.
“Look out of the window on your right, sir. The planet will come up shortly.”
Alute, commander of the ship which was sent out to search for a habitable planet, looked out to see a blue planet come into view.
"Let's hope we find this one habitable for our species," He commented hopefully, rising from his seat and walking up to the window.
"The initial studies were positive, sir, and it already has life on it, probably intelligent life, according to our collected data.”
"Send a probe and collect samples of air and water. Let’s see what we have here," Alute instructed, continuing to gaze out of the window.

"Sir, the results of the probe are available on your screen.”
Alute, moved to the screen and gazed at the various parameters of the analysis of water and air of the blue planet.
"I don't like this place. Every part of the planet is polluted, not one nook has been left unpolluted.” Alute's disappointment was clear from his voice.
"Maybe we can purify it, sir," one of the crew suggested, hoping that they could end their search.
"No. We don't have the time and resources to purify something that has been so badly maintained. Lets go to the option we had searched for." Alute sat back in his chair moving his gaze away from the blue planet.


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there, I’m reviewing this free verse poem as a fellow member of the I write 2021 group.
This was quite a challenge for you to include so many words into a poem. As I am certainly no poet, or even claim to be anyone in a position to comment, it certainly was a great effort. Well done.
I liked the idea of such an insignificant little bird as a sparrow, having dreams of grandeur, imagining itself as a the majestic eagle.
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi my name is Sue. Please remember these are just one person’s opinions. I hope you find something here useful and if not discard the rest with good cheer.


*TagO*What I liked best
I love the who,e story, it had me hooked from the get go. Of course as it’s entered in Twisted Tales I half expected the twist. However it was expertly done.


*TagO*Opening paragraph.
The start of the story is great. It immediately shows what’s going on in the story. It sets the place and time. A schoolyard bully taking out his own insecurities on a perceived weaker boy.



*TagO*Characters.
Steven and Allen. Two boys of the same age in the same grade. Allen was the one who seemingly is the weaker, being picked on by the school bully Steven. From the outset the reader wishes bad things would happen to Steven, a nasty , viscious piece of work. Of course as everyone knows bullies are usually frightened creatures, covering up their weaknesses by taking them out on perceived weaker beings.


*TagO*Parting comments.
Thank you so much for sharing this story. Good luck with the Twisted Tales Contest.


Frog in a Hanging Basket


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for entry "Traveling Teddy [355]" 
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ahhhh! What else can I say? A beautiful story Kåre Enga in Udon Thani told with feelings, empathy and wistfulness.
Thank you for sharing this beautiful story.
Cheers Sue


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Review of Elvis  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I loved this poem. Thank you so much for sharing, it brightened up an otherwise drab old day. I loved the segue between verses three and four, very cleverly done.
The last verse made me laugh when the person realises he’s a little tipsy.
Good job.


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Review of Way Down We Go  
Review by Sumojo
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi, T. J. I loved this story. It sustained the darkness throughout, from the beginning to the demise of Pat the Cat. It seems Mrs Nelson had been asking around the city for someone to carry out her killing before eventually finding her mercenary.
Her demise probably wasn’t the swift clean ending she’d envisaged. A frenzied knife attack surely wouldn’t have been her choice.
I’m not really convinced Mr Slate would have had the time and opportunity to get to the airport, carrying a sawn off shotgun and rigged up a booby trap?
However it would have been a sort of justice for the beating he experienced.
Great story, well written.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, welcome to WdC. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem about your dad. It is charming, delightful and emotional. It is written from the view point of a child who adores his dad. Sees him as an all powerful being. Then he realises as we all do that no one is perfect. But he still loves his dad, poached eggs and corned beef hash. I loved reading it and look forward to reading more in the future.
Cheers Sue


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