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Review by SunWriter
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very sweet poem, SVY. The short stanzas with rhyming couplets make it very easy and pleasant to read, with the nice and simple allusions to childhood bring it a naive energy. Good luck with your other work.
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Review by SunWriter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi purgewords, just read your poem through read and review. Noes to a bigger self does have some nice structure through rhyming at most line endings and expressions of self-worth like 'to proud to beg'.
I don't think some of the lines flowed well together rhyhmically, like 'i'm no religious ... how it all could be'. It just seems clunky.
Sorry for the criticism and hope you enjoy writing here
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Review of BETRAYAL  
Review by SunWriter
Rated: E | (4.5)
I know this was written twelve years ago but I have only seen it now.
Great poem, it flowed well and you seem to have thought about getting all the couplets.
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Review of Be?  
Review by SunWriter
Rated: E | (4.0)
A great deal of alliteration in this piece. I'm not sure if I'm reading it well at a philosophical lesson but this has made me stop a minute to think on 'being' at least.

I don't know if having it as a block was a choice, but breaking it up may make it easier to read.

P.S. Hope you enjoy it here
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Review of A Storm of Terror  
Review by SunWriter
Rated: E | (3.5)
I believe this is based on the real hurricane Manuel though I'm not sure how accurate what is described in the story, it is good to have some tribute to those that died. It's a bleak story, the sentences were too short, I think, which affected the pace and didn't allow the suspense to build as well as it could.
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Review by SunWriter
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Not sure what to say, I enjoyed YuGiOh when I was younger and I didn't read the first two installments. While I guess this takes place a few years after the series and I think the characters of Seto and Mokuba are mostly faithful, but both are a little more profane and a bit 'off', particularly Mokuba. Otherwise the text is well layed-out and easy to read and is well written with a reasonable degree of plot drive.
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Review by SunWriter
Rated: E | (4.0)
A nice little story, quite sad, I wish there was more background about Hugo to read.

The tone and description of the setting were strong points and the description of how a dog would 'see', or perhaps it's more apt to say, 'smell' the world is well done.
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Review of The Last Blaze  
Review by SunWriter
Rated: E | (5.0)
I thought this was a great little story, actually very sweet, it genuinely made me laugh. I hope you write more like this, the setup was also written engagingly, which even on a short piece is quite hard to do, a least I find.
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Review of The NArrowing  
Review by SunWriter
Rated: E | (4.5)
Just came upon this by chance. Interesting piece, though I don't read much poetry (this is is my first poetry review) this doesn't seem to obtuse, I read it as the speaker's reflecting on how the chances they have in life are 'narrrowing' and feeling some form of quiet dread as a result with no certainty that there was any reason or positive result for what came before.

The metaphors or memories like those of autumn or candles in church windows made me feel cold, which really suited the theme I believe.
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