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for entry "Sizzling Concrete
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for sharing
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for entry "Wishing for Spring
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this!
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for entry "River Fish
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.5)
This one has such vivid imagery.
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for entry "Black Chariot
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for sharing.
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for entry "Incense
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for sharing.
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for entry "Moonlit Night
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.5)
There is an old-fashioned tone in the language of this poem.
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Review of Escape  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your poem paints a vivid word picture.
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Review of Payback  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice!
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Review of Covering up  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.5)
So true....
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Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Oh my! This is wonderful! The images set of a kind of moment that feels like a relieved "ah" rather than the usual "aha" moment, but it really works well for me as a reader.
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Review of Now Alone  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I think I am missing the full meaning in the last line. It may be that I am tired tonight, rather than the poem not being clear.
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Review of Heal  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is lovely!
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Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is powerful!
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Review of No Love Lost  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this...especially "Sir Winter"....My mind pictures a stiff formal person, like the frozenness of the season


I could only find one poem. If your link was supposed to be to more, please let me know.
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Review of One Resolution  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is wonderful!
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Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for sharing these....I especially enjoyed #28!
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for entry "Iceberg
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.5)
Such a vivid word picture!
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Review of Haiku Poems  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.0)
What a day this describes!
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Review of split into three  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for sharing this.....
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Review of M1 Ripples  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.0)
Wow....this sounds like current medical practice rather than scifi .....
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Review of Deep Blue Sea  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like this. For me as a reader, this flows more like the lyrics of a modern praise and worship Christian song than like a poem. I think the song like quality really makes the repetition within this work well for me as a reader.
Thanks for sharing this.
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Review of Wind Toys  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this image....
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Review of Balance  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This starts out in a kind of mundane way with a lot of telling rather than ""showing", with the meandering thought of the protagonist gradually focusing on what his dilemma is....The effect is very chilling for me as a reader.

In the last sentence of the first paragraph, as a reader I stumbled over the structure of the sentence. The way it is written now, I don't think you need the comma. The sentence feels crisper to me if you keep the comma and delete the word "to"

In the last sentence of the 4 th paragraph, a comma before "hmmm" would help me as a reader.
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Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this a lot!
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Review of Clutter  
Review by SusanFarmer
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for sharing this. Very early in the poem, I found myself kind of parallel processing the "clutter" in your poem versus the clutter in my own life.

For me as a reader, I felt a kind of dissonance due to the dramatic change in line length/rhythm between the stanza 1 and stanza 2--yet as I pondered this, I found that in a way this makes me feel "clutter" on a concrete visual level, which complements the content of your poem.

The only thing that I found distracting as a reader were the commas after "It is possible"....I don't think you need them for the lines to work....
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