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Hi silverfeathers! After reading "Silence" , I offer these comments:A wonderfully well written piece about friendship and love being all mixed up. Jared wished he could have his best friend, but know his friend is straight. He pines for him, loves every moment he spends for him but does not wish to add any burdens to Damon. Very well written. The characters are polar opposites yet they interact like they belong together. One a writer the other a mathematician.
First Impression:The images you use were incredible. I felt like I was the person in love with Damon, the way you described him would make any red blooded person fall in love. The way you described the Beanie Bag was well done too, you could feel how comfortable the characters were. The descriptions of Damon's hands as he talked and the sparkle in his eyes was incredibly realistic.
Suggestions:At the beginning when you are first describing Damon, the sentence was incredibly long. I wished for it to be split up, you may consider doing that. Otherwise it was very well written.
Keep on Writing and thank you for this wonderful piece.
Jewel Busy Busy Busy!