A beautiful sixteen lines of pure love in poetic form. Yes lyrics can be seen here in this divine brilliance. Very nicely worded and constructed. Punctuation appears right on although not always necessary in lyrics. Did they use it in the wedding ? Keep sharing.
A wonderfully clever and elegant work of rhyme and a legend born of the bat. Very nicely executed bit of genius. It is always a pleasure to read someone else who likes to rhyme and does it justice. Twenty four lines of pleasure to peruse. Enjoy your craft as your talent shines in abundance.
The bird may stay in the tree if it likes the swaying motion. A superb job and a pleasure to peruse. Some of the greatest poetry is also sometimes the briefest poetry. Love the last five words. A terrific way to end an elegant thought and a brilliant little gem. Keep sharing.
A very nicely written tale of turn of the century life and of a strong German matriarch and the way she dealt with life and all its surprises. That is always and interesting genre to delve into and explore. It was a pleasure to peruse this little gem. Keep writing and sharing.
Sounds like you need a midlife career change my friend. I highly recommend it. For me it turned out to be great therapy and an interesting experience to say the least. Your poem brought out some of those thoughts and was an excellent epitaph for a career and job well used up. Keep sharing.
This was an example of excellence in form and cadence. Memorial Day should make every single American out there thankful that someone has held the flag high and sacrificed their all to keep us free in both mind and spirit. Without freedom, America is no longer America. Nice work and thanks for posting.
A very elegantly penned haiku with the format following true to tradition. My favorite lines are all three. I have found haikus more difficult to write sometimes than a regular standard format free verse poem. You have succeeded in capturing the true eloquence. Nice work.
Seven exceptionally well penned couplets my friend dealing with both the introvert of ones self and the extrovert of how others view us. A profound lesson in self examination and awareness. A cold hard look into life itself. Keep writing and sharing.
Sounds like a perfect crime scenario where the killer from twenty years prior murders someone and disposes of the body one bone at a time after an acid bath, how am I doing so far? Sounds like you have more writing to do. You need to finish your book. This has some possibilities and potential.
Ah, the game of chess which I used to play. Past tense for I haven't in many years now but you have reminded me of the old familiar friend and how I have missed it. The poem is an exemplary example of writing skill with wonderful imagery and a spectacular final verse. Very nicely penned. Thanks for sharing.
and therein lay the innocence of the pure and the wonder of humanity. Very well crafted poem my friend. An outstanding example of poetry and in its briefness lies the secrets of a true poet. Imagery abounds in this tiny gem and as a person of the northern climates I can appreciate the beauty of the falling snow and its intricacies. Most definitely keep writing and sharing!
Extremely well penned poem about the life of a butterfly. Though brief the poem pulls the reader in with the first line. The simplicity is the secrete of this wonderfully penned nature poem. Very nicely presented. Keep writing and sharing these superb little gems.
A nicely relayed story of life and an aging son. The paintings show a great respect for the painter and his work. The detail and description in the story are well crafted and a pleasure to peruse. Thanks for sharing such an interesting story and keep writing and sharing.
The descriptions and details are superb in this warm and personal tale. All senses are awakened and treated to a delightful smorgasbord of taste, touch and smell. The visions brought forth are a delight to read. Thanks for sharing such a delightful and well crafted excursion.
Another beautifully penned poem of love and seasons. Spectacular wording and imagery. I could picture the urgency and longing in the flying in the face of departure. Torn between the cold and the longing. The difficult choice to be made and the silence. Thanks for sharing another wonderful poem.
There always seems to be a place for those in decline to recline. The bus stop bench was it, apparently and the current occupant thought he could have squatters rights for a short time at least. Your story progressed well so far and all it needs is for the author to breathe a bit more life into another episode. Thanks for sharing and keep writing my friend.
A very nicely crafted poem of the heart, Lou. It was a pleasure to read this wonderful work and it's deep meaning. It sounds like a code we should all try live by. One that leads to a very strong relationship and in the end to eternal happiness. It was a pleasure to peruse this
wonderful poem. Keep sharing.
This is a beautiful and alluring poem of love lost but always remembered. A very captivating and emotional poem that has a wonderful love story at it's heart. It was a pleasure to peruse and a privilege to read. Thank you for a gracious and enjoyable journey. Keep writing and sharing.
A beautifully penned story of Raines loss and her facing the questions everyone has at one time or another. An intriguing short story and a pleasure to peruse. She has a fascinating way of looking to the stars for solace and comfort. Nicely done and elegantly presented. Keep sharing.
Deep feelings and a profound loss. Always the most difficult emotions to wade through in a break up. Very nicely worded and exudes the real heartache That comes from losing someone you entrusted with your deepest feelings. Well done my friend. Keep sharing and writing.
This is very true and unfortunately some people never get through the first six words in this fine quote. They lack the drive that most all of us have to achieve the common goals that everyone else seems to have and follow through with. This is a well thought out statement on humanity and its progress and purpose and the road to both. Thanks for sharing.
I can appreciate the biographical story that you have told in this fine poem. When I was a young kid we lived in a gutted out transit bus with, you guessed it, a privy out back. We had all that we needed until my Dad built the big two story house my Mother still lives in today. Your wonderful poem reminds me of my beginnings so long ago. Thanks for sharing my friend. It was a privilege to read your work.
True love can be elusive as a dream and hard to part with once you're stricken with Cupid's arrow. I think sometimes our expectations in a relationship exceed the reality of the attraction we feel. One could write volumes on the subject but you have very nicely trimmed it down and came to the point. Nice work my friend. Keep sharing.
Nicely written flash fiction with a cold finish at the end. The cell phone being the connection between this world and the afterlife. We do depend on them so very much. To have it welcome you to the afterlife was a brilliant move. Keep writing and posting.
Nicely penned couplets my friend and a very beautiful look at nature through poetry. Well crafted and a pleasure to peruse the wonderful masterpiece in all its splendor and colorful descriptions. It is a pleasure to read and a treat and privilege to peruse. Thanks for sharing.
T.L.Finch
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