Hi, thank you for entering"TSUNAMI: a cinquain" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
Love the line...Dance of Death in Waves.
Suggestions:
I'm not crazy about the line water abounds...I would suggest changing to fit with the rest of the poem.
Overall Impression:
Well done poem and great use of form...especially the last two lines!
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Soul" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
You followed the form very well.
Suggestions:
I like the descriptions you used but maybe could do something like:
Vastness like Ocean
Overall Impression:
Overall this was a good piece and like always, I take pleasure in reading your poem.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for allowing me to review "Riders of the Moon" . The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Comments:
First Impression:
Dark and looming piece about the hunters of the night...my fave.
Suggestions:
You used the Terzanelle form really well and it was very helpful with a poem I was working on...thanks!
Maybe using the word entangle instead of blend...so the line reads "A drifting scent entangles with the light"...ok, I know it's a preference but I had to suggest something.
Spelling/Punctuation/Grammar:
None that I could see.
Overall Impression:
I thought this poem was great and I thought you did a great job with allowing this piece flow despite the constrain of the form to repeat the lines.
My favorite part was:
The moon, itself, seems to engorge
as sanguine streaks paint the fresh snow
impelled by need, they onward forge.
I really enjoyed the word choice on this piece. Looking forward to reading more of your work like always!
Thank you, Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Hades" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
Not necessarily a place I would want to go.
Suggestions:
The fifth line, "A shadow towards me came slithering." could possibly read "a shadow came towards me slithering."
Overall Impression:
I like this poem and it starts off well. the second stanza, though you introduce the "shadow" I don't really feel his "evilness" but otherwise this was done well with the "blazing inferno" and the "blistering fires."
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Ardor" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
Warmth and carelessness of love.
Suggestions:
While I enjoy the illustration of the two lovers, I thought maybe you could of used some description to make me feel the heat between the lovers more. Show how they couldn't get enough or maybe something like:
"amorousness lovers upon the hill, nothing could of prevented their fill."
Overall Impression:
The flow and the images were good but didn't express the heat as much as it could. I could see the lovers and could see the fun but I wanted to "feel" the fun more.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Dulcet Drops" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
You seduce me with your words and I'm tantalized and intrigued.
Suggestions:
None. The heat I was feeling was my own.
Overall Impression:
I could feel the approach and the kiss as it was laid upon the lips. I liked the use of the pause to emphasis the seduction. Nice visualization and really good flow as well.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for allowing me to review "Invalid Item" . The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Comments:
First Impression:
Wait, are you full of it too...just kidding. OMG I was rolling with this one.
Suggestions:
Third stanza...put a comma after customs. It seems there is a pause there when I read this. Hahahah ok, I'm still laughing.
Overall Impression:
This was great. I'm laughing still...and picturing the flying part. Nice!
By the way Ken, check out my new adventure...might be up your ally. "Invalid Item"
Thank you, Taizia
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Hi, thank you for allowing me to review "Facing the Day" . The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Comments:
First Impression:
This was a delicious and funny poem. I can so relate!
Suggestions:
I like the imagery you use...well done. No suggestions.
Overall Impression:
I thought it flowed very nicely and I love the illustration of the last stanza as you scream "Quiet" and slam the window. Bravo!
Thank you, Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Turkish Coffee - Excerpt" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
I need my COFFEE!!!
Suggestions:
I like this poem and it flows well but I didn't feel the obsession or the craving so much. It was more like it said...an excerpt to a greater work.
Overall Impression:
I would like to see the piece in it's entire form. I like where it was going and can relate to the obsession but I didn't quite feel it.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering" Just one more time..." into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
You capture obsession!
Suggestions:
None.
Overall Impression:
I could feel and relate to the feeling of the obsession. What I liked most, is that it could be any obsession!
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Sevenling (My friend loved...)" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
Well done! Bravo...I like your use of this form. "hmmm, gives me idea for round five by introducing a form to the contest...lol"
Suggestions:
None!
Overall Impression:
Despite the form, this was a very vivid poem. Even though there where "holes," I was able to fill in the blanks.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Fool in the Rain" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
OMG! Stalker...lol!
Suggestions:
Naive threw me off as not a quite perfect rhyme but otherwise the rhyme is good and so is the flow.
Overall Impression:
Bravo, you convinced me that if you were outside my window I would call 911!
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Passion" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
the confusion of relations...the maze we go through to get to the core of the other person.
Suggestions:
Nothing I like the poem the way it is.
Overall Impression:
I think you capture the prompt well. Obsessions are not logically but yet we follow them where we may...good job.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for allowing me to review "Darker than Black" . The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Comments:
First Impression:
Sorrowful poem.
Suggestions:
The line "Because hut brings love, thorns have roses" doesn't read well. I would suggest revising. It doesn't really help the poem. Either that, or the thought/expression you want to give is confusing here.
Overall Impression:
I think the poem has potential. It expresses a sorrow but fails to convey it completely.
Thank you, Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Lunar Beauty" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
Don't judge a book by its cover and we should learn to look past the imperfections...good thing I'm the judge and I got this. lol.
Suggestions:
I personally think that if you use punctuation...you should use it on all appropriate lines at the end...whether comma or period. The question mark stands out. I did think your comas are well placed. But this is usually a personal preference.
Overall Impression:
I think this is a nice examination of how we judge people for their beauty or size them up for their imperfections. Good job on this one.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Moon Sees " into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
Nice reflectional piece.
Suggestions:
Grammar and punctuation was good. Nice use of rhymes.
Overall Impression:
I could actually sense some of the emotion behind this piece. You leave enough room for interpretation. Great Job!
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Under Celine" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
I like the use of Celine. Nice touch.
Suggestions:
Everything was going wonderful and then I got stumped on the last line. "lifeless remained, and lifeless shall be so."I think I would of played up the passion of the moon more since that is where I felt you were taking me.
Overall Impression:
You did a wonderful job overall and I really like this piece and the illustration and involve the goddess too.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for allowing me to review "The Happy Story" . The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Comments:
First Impression:
Omg, this is so plausible.
Suggestions:
None. I think you did a great job.
Spelling/Punctuation/Grammar:
Didn't notice any.
Overall Impression:
The story flows really well and I think that the remembering of the spring was a nice touch. It reminds me of the movie the Postman and how they lived in a modern but different time. Where life was different but people cling to ideology of the past.
Thank you, Taizia
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Hi, thank you for allowing me to review "Flotsam" . The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Comments:
First Impression:
Never ceases to amaze me with the vividness of your writing.
Suggestions:
Oops, I knew I forgot something...I delved into the story I lost my attentions to the words and the beautiful touching painting you illustrated with words. So that would be...no suggestions.
Spelling/Punctuation/Grammar:
I didn't see any errors.
Overall Impression:
Well written piece of remembering lost love. I love the ending.
Thank you, Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"New Season" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
I like the emotion hidden in this piece.
Suggestions:
I felt like this poem was all over the place and the seasons didn't flow...or made me stop to think. I think that poetry should flow and the writer creates a picture for the reader. This piece is almost there. I had to reread a few times to get it.
Overall Impression:
I liked the poem and the image you try to create full of love and with emotion. I think with a little work this piece would be better.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Contest Entry -8 lines or less-" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
I like the form you used on this piece.
Suggestions:
I did get stumped on this line because it seemed out of place. "I feel you - you're drifting further away" Maybe you could add a line or two to expand the thought out. you seem to move from love to growing apart and the transition seems rough.
Overall Impression:
I like this piece very much and I think with a little work it would be perfect. Look forward to seeing more.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"The Music of Silence!" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
I love this piece. We should ponder silence. Hmmm, a new prompt for round 3.
Suggestions:
I like this piece. No suggestions.
Overall Impression:
Nice reflective piece.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Long Long Time Ago" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
Nice and poetic piece but...
Suggestions:
I would redo the first two lines. Reminds me of a, how do you say, movie. I would lose those two lines personally. Also, the seventh line doesn't flow just right. I would try rewording this line.
Overall Impression:
Other than the first two lines, I like this poem.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"All Better Fits" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
Cute piece.
Suggestions:
The poem strikes me as a cute children's poem but I could see more descriptions in the piece.
Overall Impression:
I like how it looks like a mushroom.
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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Hi, thank you for entering"Crush" into the Bite Size Poetry Contest. The following are just my opinions regarding your piece. Please use, or not use, what you may; after all, you are the writer.
Here is my scoring method:
3= Avg/nice piece, only moved me slightly, needs some work.
4= Nice piece, moved me but needs some work to enhance it.
5=Perfect piece, that moved me and needs no work.
Comments:
First Impression:
Very lyrical piece.
Suggestions:
Not too much suggestion. I could picture this but couldn't feel the intensity of the piece. I think you could expand on it some more.
Overall Impression:
Nice chilling piece of lust in a sinful way. I look forward to reading more of your work!
Good luck in the contest! Taizia
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