Array yah...ab to kai karaho?
English is not your first lanaguge,so is mine
A good story,but your english needs refining!.Meaning that it needs refinement.Because you're writing in a slang style english langauge,I mean thats good and all ,but when you're presenting to a audience like this you need to make sure your english is good.I have problems with grammar and thats it for me,but for you..we're gonna need a special treatment.
Have you heard of Adjectives,verbs and Nouns?
I'll post some of them so it can help you further improve the story
here's example 1 of Adjectives
What are adjectives?
Adjectives are describing words - they tell you more about nouns.
Nouns are 'naming' words, they are a person, place or thing.
Adjectives tell you more about the noun. Using adjectives makes your sentences more interesting.
The pretty girls laughed.
In this sentence:
'girls' is the noun (it says who's laughing).
'pretty' is the adjective (it says more about the noun).
Here are some more sentences with nouns and adjectives.
The fat captain ate dinner.
Sam is blonde and gorgeous.
Old Hani and I drove up the big hill.
Remember that adjectives tell you about the noun, they describe the noun. Don't confuse adjectives with adverbs. Adverbs describe the verb, they tell you more about an action - eg: 'he laughed loudly'.
Remember that adjectives usually come before the noun.
You can use more than one adjective if you need to. Eg:
The tall, bright, beautiful waitress picked up the dark, dirty coffee.
There are rules about the order that you should put adjectives in when you use more than one, but the best way to know is to say the sentence to yourself. Does it sound right?
Verbs
How to make verbs agree with their subjects
1. What are verbs and subjects?
Verbs are action words -
e.g. eat, sleep, talk, walk, do, buy are all verbs
Subjects are the person or thing who are doing the action of the verb -
e.g.I eat; The dog sleeps; George talks a lot; They walk to work.
The subject of a sentence can be singular (one) or plural (many).
e.g. The computer is old. (singular)
The computers are old. (plural)
2. What is verb-subject agreement?
The verb form can change depending on whether the subject is singular or plural.
e.g. The car park (singular subject) was (verb) full.
The car parks (plural subject) were (verb) full.
In these sentences each of the verbs agrees with its subject. The correct verb form has been used.
The verb must always agree with its subject. Single subject = single verb, plural subject = plural verb.
3. How does this work?
In regular verbs:
singular plural
First person I like bananas. We like bananas.
Second person you like bananas. you like bananas.
Third person he / she / it likes bananas. they like bananas.
She likes to cycle to work.(correct) / She like to cycle to work.(incorrect)
We like swimming. (correct) / We likes swimming. (incorrect)
Helpful hint: 's' is added to the third person singular. This is the way most regular verbs in the present tense work.
Of course I have not written this ,I've copied and paste ,but this should help you improve the story
Take Paragraph 1 for example
''Sign board just read kolkatta 113 km and our speedy sumo kept racing on unending highway. From one board to another, color kept changing rest everything remained same; periodic bumps , humid atmosphere and drivers silence..! sometimes it is hard to believe that India has progressed bcoz nothing much has changed here, probably the demon of revolution had decided to by pass this area.''
This is your first paragraph
The Sign Board read Kolkatta ,113 km.Our Speedy sumo kept racing on the unending highway!From one board to another,the colour kept changing while everything esle remained the same;periodic bumps , humid atmosphere and drivers silence..!Sometime it's hard to believe that India has progressed because nothing much has changed here, probably the demon of revolution had decided to by pass this area.''
This is a improved version and makes it more clearer to read.
I'll email you some more,if you need help email me,I'll be happy to help,I enjoyed the story though.Tho chalo aur ab kai story banou!
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