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Review of Glass Shoes  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,
I liked your poem. The visual aspect of your piece is very compelling. The idea behind your poem is not exactly original, but how you tell the story is. The only thing that kept throwing me off is the fact that while you are using punctuation (which is good), and complete sentences; you are capitalizing every line. I think you should treat your sentences, as if they were standing alone. This will help with the flow of your piece and make it that much easier to read. Overall, I like your poem. I think it's great. Thank you for sharing it and write on!
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Review of Room To Breathe  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi,
Loved your poem. I thought it was visually stimulating and the rhythm of your poem is great. I think your poem is relatable to everyone. Interesting thought; your last stanza. Something we have all thought about in one way or another; but maybe not in those exact words. Excellent job, there is nothing I would change about your poem. I think its great. Thanks for sharing and happy writing!
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Review of Steamer Trunk  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,
I loved your poem. The rhythm and rhyme of your poem was great. The imagery was vivid and on point. It is a heartfelt poem that I can relate to; that probably everyone can relate to. The third stanza is my favorite. I feel that it describes me to a tee. There is nothing I would change about your poem. I think it is great as it is.. thanks for sharing it and happy writing!
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi,
I liked your poem. It reads very easily. The rhythm is nice, although the rhyming is somewhat predictable. The imagery you depict in your poem is nice, simple, and relatable. There is nothing that I would change about your poem really, except challenge myself more with the word choice. Other than that, I thought your poem was good. Thanks for sharing and please keep writing.
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Review of A Peek Within  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
HI,
i liked your poem. I thought it was cute and funny. The imagery was good and held my attention. However there are moments the rhythm does not stay consistent thru out your poem. I would read it again, and get rid of any extra words that may throw your rhythm off. Other than that, I thought your poem was great. Thanks for sharing and please keep writing!
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Review of Love Wears a Mask  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi,
I am returning the favor that I promised. I usually only review poetry because I feel more comfortable with them, but I see that you do not have any poetry in your port; so I chose your short story.
I thought your story was very good. It held my attention, and the language fit the time period that you chose. There are just a couple of things that I would change or add .
1. I think that if you had a little more imagery in your story, you could place your reader into the place and time you chose easier. And it also authenticates your story more. And to me, imagery is like the dessert of every written work.
2. I think there should be more to their meeting (main characters), to make the surprise at the end less predictable. I understand that this is a short story, but I almost feel this story has too much going for it to be a short story. I feel that character development is imperative to do your characters justice.
Overall, I thought your story was great! Thanks for sharing it,and again thanks for reading and reviewing my work. Please keep writing.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello,
I liked your poem, but there are some changes that I think you need to make.
1. Any time you are using "I" to identify a person, that " I " needs to be capitalized. As in lines 4, 8, and 16.
2. In lines 13 and 16 Ill should be I'll
3.Your should be You're as in lines 1,2, 3, 9, 12, 13
4. You need to go thru each line, and make your sentences - clear sentences. There are places that are lacking periods or comma's; or places that have comma's, that have periods. And there are random words that are capitalized.
Basically, you need to edit your poem. Take each sentence and write them separately. Then you will know how to punctuate them in your poem. Editing your poem will make it look finished and polished. These of course are just my opinions..hope I was able to help. Thank you for sharing and good luck!
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Review of As He Sleeps  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,
First let me say that for the past few days I have been reading newbie poetry, and basically I was unimpressed. Not because of the lack of talent, because there is plenty of talent on this site. I think I was looking for a piece that made me feel. As a mother, this piece struck home for me.
I loved your poem. It is beautifully written. The picture you paint of a child sleeping thru his mothers eyes is vivid and touching. The rhythm and rhyme is very easy, unforced, and flowing. There is nothing I would change about your poem. Thank you for sharing it and please keep writing.
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Review of Your Perfect Life  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi,
Though short, I thought your poem was a good one, but with a few changes I think it could be better than good. The number one thing I think you need to do is edit. Reevaluate your sentences.. and make sure that they are written correctly.The first thing I noticed was that you did use punctuation, which is fine. But you have at least a couple of sentences that need commas, or need to be separate sentences. For example: your fifth line to me should read like this-
And now, where are you?
No where to be found,
but in your perfect life.
Editing will make your work look finished and polished, and more of a joy to read. I hope I was able to help. Thank you for sharing and please keep writing.
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Review of My Old Boots  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,
I thought your poem was very cute. The word choice, I thought fit this piece very well. The rhythm and rhyme of this poem is also good. The imagery here paints the picture perfectly. There is nothing I would change about your poem. I think you did a great job. Thank you for sharing and please keep writing.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely!
I think your poem is great! The imagery is weaved beautifully in this poem. And as I am experiencing this very thing right now, I think you have aptly described my summer. Nice job, There is nothing that I would change about your poem. Thank you for sharing it.
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Review of My Snowflake  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
Nicely written. The imagery was written into the poem well, very descriptive and clear.It also has a nice rhythm that isn't forced.There is nothing I would change about your poem, except for maybe the spacing. I like how you ended the poem also, in case anyone had any doubt about what you were speaking of, you made it clear. Thank you for sharing it. Please keep writing!
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Review of Bittersweet End  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello,
I thought your poem was nice and the imagery well written for the most part. I do feel however, that there are instances where a different word choice would have served you better (third stanza, second line- for example). The idea behind this poem is good, but I feel the poem could be outstanding with just a few revisions of word choice and rhythm. All in all a good piece. Thanks for sharing !
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Nice. Again, the imagery is beautifully written.This poem has a hint of melancholy to it. I get a feeling of nostalgia, and a little bit of regret attached; but still over all a good feelings. The only thing I had a problem with was sometimes there was rhyming and sometimes there wasn't, so I had little difficulty finding a rhythm. But that was probably just me.*Smile* As always, I enjoy your work. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of I know that house  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
To go back in time and redo the past, or to at least relive the past, is a dream that everyone has. I thought you described this feeling well here. I thought your word choice was good, and the imagery you depict is well written. I would change nothing about your piece. Thank you for sharing!
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Review of In Dreams I See  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I enjoyed your poem. The rhythm is very nice, easy and unforced. I like the way you described your dream in italics...great way to add one more element to your work. I also am a fan of repetitive lines in a poem to accentuate a point. So all in all I love this piece. As always, nicely written and there is nothing I would change. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of Haiku to My Baby  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
Loved your poem. I thought it was sad of course, but beautiful. I'm sorry about your daughter. No word invented can express the pain of losing a child.

Thanks for sharing something so personal.
Taryn
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Review of Worthwhile  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,
Though sad, I did like your piece. The wishfullness, and hope is very evident in your writing. The rhythm was not forced, but flowed nicely. There are only a couple things I would change with your piece. Remember, these are just my opinions.
1. I would consider making each complete thought a sentence. It doesnt mean that each line has to be a sentence, but each complete thought. I say that because it seems as if you are asking a question (or two) at the end of each stanza.
2. If you do decided to make each complete thought a sentence, then of course I would edit my poem accordingly.

This of course is just my opinion. Over all I thought your poem was great! Thank you so much for sharing and please keep writing.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
It has been a while since I have reviewed, read, or even written any thing, so please bear with me *Smile*.
I enjoyed all of the poems you have included here. I love the style of writing you have...let me rephrase that. I do love free verse, it is my favorite. What I mean is I like how your voice is pertrayed in your work. Your poems are full of imagery, they involve the senses. There is obviously nothing that I would change with how you have written these poems. Although they were short, I felt that the brevity of the poems added to the clarity of them.I thought each one was written well. NIce job. I really enjoyed reading them all. Thank you for sharing and please keep writing.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi D,
I liked this one also, but it is rather sad. The piece is full of regret and wishful thinking. The subject matter is thought provoking, the flow isnt forced but seems natural. I liked how you talked about the town and how it should be used as a test site to test the bomb of bombs. How many times, through out our life, have we felt like destroying something beyond recognition because of the pain it brought us or reminded us of? I liked this piece because though the subject matter is not new, it was written in a way that it appeared new or different. Thanks as always for sharing. T
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi D,
Sorry it took me so long to get back to you...I've been really busy. I like this piece. The imagery is fantastic. It as a fantasy feel to it, fairy or angel like presence to it. I liked it a lot. As usual there is nothing I would change. Flow is nice, easy, calming. Thank you for sharing! Taryn
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Review of Together  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi D,
As you know I am a fan, so I will do my best to be unbiased...lol
Lovely!
While reading this, what came to mind was lazy summer nights, with the windows open, with the shear curtains flapping in the wind. While two lovers lay in each others arms, enjoying the longest night; telling heartfelt secrets meant for only two. Lovely. Nice flow and imagery. Well done *Smile*
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Review of My Love  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi,
I think your poem has really good bones. I think that overall your poem is a good one. Just a little more tweaking will make it that much better. *Smile* 1. First thing I noticed is all the lower cased "i 's" through out your poem. When referencing the author/speaker/narrator, these ' i 's" should ALWAYS be capitalized. 2. In stanza's 2 and 3, I was a little confused by the word wood...I think you meant woods, but I can't tell.
As I said, overall your poem is good. The rhyming is good also. Thanks for sharing and please keep writing. Taryn
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Review of New Shoes Blues  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
HI,
I thought your poem was darling. I just had this experience two weeks ago...and my feet are still crying foul! I thought your poem was written well overall. There are a couple of things I would change..but they are just creative differences. Thank you for sharing and please keep writing.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,
As usual, I thought this poem was fantastic, cute, and the imagery, vividly relatable. Your poem aptly describes what you would think a little boy would think while playing pretend with dad. I loved this poem. There is absolutely nothing I could suggest to make it better. It brought me a smile today when I needed one badly.*Smile* Thank you so much for sharing it.
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