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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi,
Since this poem has already been awarded, and has a five star rating by many members; I don't believe there is anything I can say that you have not already heard. I got a kick out of reading these, I thought they were hilarious. Nice job. Not every one has the talent that you have shown to have here. Thank you so much for sharing. Taryn
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi,
You visited my port, so it is my turn to visit yours. Looking thru your port, I feel silly even trying to rate or review. But it is what I promised, so here goes:
I enjoyed this poem. I love coffee too. I can drink it by the pot load, and being a nightshifter, sometimes I do. So I definately believe that it is a lifetstyle, not an addiction..*Smile*
The only thing I would change with this poem is in the third stanza, last line. Instead of saying "It is options galore"..I would say " There are options galore."
That is just my opinion. Other than that, I thought your poem was great. Thanks for sharing. Taryn
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi,
I liked this. The rhythm abnd rhyme are perfectly matched. The flow is nice and east, and it kept my attention from beginning to end. Of course there is nothing that I would change about this poem. I think you did a fantastic job. Thanks for sharing! Taryn
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Review of outback  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like the reference to westerns in this poem. I love westerns, and while reading this poem I could picture vividly what you described. The imagery here is fantastic, the flow nice and easy...like sittin' on your back porch enjoyin the summer breeze..with a tall glass of ice tea.....that is what your poem puts me in mind of.....Again....loved your poem...You did an excellent job. Of course there is nothing I would change about it.....Thanks for sharing it. Taryn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
Beautiful poem. Sad, but beautiful. Your feelings are very present in this poem. It is well written and wreaks of stubborness *Smile* I like this poem a lot. There, of course, is nothing I would change with how you have written it. The flow and rhythm are done nicely. Though the poem has parts where it doesn't truly rhyme, it is somewhat melodic. It flows really well. Nice job. Thank you so much for sharing it.Taryn
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Review of To My Husband  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I thought your poem was sweet. The love you feel for your husband is evident. The flow is pretty good. The rhythm and rhyme pretty good also. The only trouble I had with this poem is the last line in the fourth stanza. It could be fine, but it just sounds a little off to me. Other than that, I thought your poem was great. Thanks for sharing! Taryn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I liked your poem, and it rings true. Though short, I thought you got your point across well in this poem. Your poem has a bare bones kind of feel to it. No extra words, or frivolous descriptions; sometimes with a poem that is what you need. I liked that about it. I saw nothing that I would change with this poem. Thank you so much for sharing, and please keep writing! Taryn
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Review of Drama Queen  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I liked your poem. How many people do we know like this!
Your poem was well written. It held my attention from beginning to end. I thought the flow was great. I had no issues with this one. The rhythm and rhyme were also good. There is nothing I would change with how you've written this poem. I think you did a great job. Thank you so much for sharing and please keep writing.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi,
I liked your poem... somewhat prophetic. It made me giggle...*Laugh* because it's true. Obviously there is nothing that I think you should change here. You've done a great job with this one. Thank you so much for sharing it and please keep writing! Taryn
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Review of Cherokee I Am  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,
I love this poem..the rhythm, rhyme, and flow are all good....what I found as an unexpected treat is that the poem itself looks like a bird...interesting...
There is nothing I would change with how you've written this poem. Thanks for sharing! Taryn
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Review of If God Were a Dog  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Laugh* Again, funny....never thought of it that way before...Cute..very cute...Thanks for sharing it! Taryn
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Review of Lie to Me  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi,
I enjoyed your poem. I thought that overall, you did a wonderful job. You stuck with the title through out the poem, and was basically easy to follow. However there are a few things that I would do or change.
1. I would edit,edit, and then edit again. There are places that need comma's, and " i 's " that need to be capitalized.
2. The flow is pretty good, but I think it could be slightly better. Read your poem out loud and remove any unnecessary words and the flow issue should be alleviated.
3. I think if the poem was broken up into stanza's it will also make it an easier read. Long poems with a lot of information tend to read better when put into stanza's. And since your poem has what appears to be repeating lines; stanza's would really work in your favor.
Other than that, I thought your poem was great. The subject matter is original and your poem is entertaining. With a little bit of editing, I think this poem could be five star. Thanks for sharing and I hope I was able to help.
Taryn
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi,
I read your poem and I understand what you are trying to say here. However I do have a few issues with this poem.
1. Why is every word capitalized? Is there a reason for it? The whole time I'm reading, I'm wondering why. It's somewhat distracting.
2. This poem needs to be checked for spelling errors.
3. The flow of this poem is good in the first stanza, but the second is different than the first. This throws the flow off a little. Go thru the poem and remove any unnecessary words, this should help.
The main thing to do is edit. Read your poem out loud and see where you need to make changes. Overall I think you poem is a good one, with a little more tweaking I think it could get a better rating; and more importantly, be a better poem. I hope I was able to help. Thank you for sharing and please keep writing! Taryn
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Review of Immortality  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I thought your poem was excellent! The point of view is original. The rhythm and rhyme are on point. I saw no grammatical errors. I think you did a fantastic job with this poem. The only thing I think can be improved upon is punctuation. There are some places that I see that need comma's (example: third stanza, first line after precious). I would go thru the entire poem and take each sentence independantly and punctuate it correctly. For the most part, you've done this beautifully. But I feel with a little bit more editing, this poem could be five stars. Thank you so much for sharing it and please keep writing! Taryn
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Review of A Part of Me  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi,
I read your poem, and I thought that the overall read of the poem was good.I thought the rhythm and rhyme were good also. However there are a few things I would change.
1. The poem appears to be written in sentences, but there are no punctuations. And the capitalization of some words at the beginning of lines and not others appear to be random; or based on the fact that it is a continued sentence. But again, since there is no punctuation, if they are sentences then they are incomplete. Did any of that make sense? It's a mouthful *Smile*
2. The second " i " in the third line needs to be capitalized.
3. In the fifth line, " will" should be we'll
4. In the eighth line, " its" should be "it's"
5 in the eighteenth line, "can t" should be " can't "

The biggest issue I have with this poem is deciding if these lines are sentences, and then dealing with the punctuation. In my opinion, your lines are sentences. I would go thru each line, insert comma's or periods, or semicolons (whichever is needed). Of course I would fix any grammatical errors. But this of course is just my opinion. It is your poem and it should reflect you. Do as you see fit. As I said, I believe your poem is a good one. And for me, with a little bit of editing it would deserve a better rating. I hope I was able to help. Thank you so much for sharing and please keep writing! Taryn
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi,
I can see what your trying to do with this poem. And overall I think your poem is good. However there are a few things I would change.
1. Second line: Children is crying should be Children are crying. Fifth line: noone should be no one.
2. You have two sentences that are punctuated out of the entire poem. I think you should either use punctuation or don't. But don't fluxuate between the two. It makes your poem look unfinished, and you (the author) undecisive.
3. For me the rhythm is different in each stanza. It is confusing to me as a reader; as far as rhythm goes.
4. I would edit my poem to make sure that it says what I want it to say, in the way that I want to say it. You are afterall, the author. No one can say what you want to say better than you. So why not tell it in the best way possible? Then the reader can concentrate on what you are trying to say, as opposed to looking for and fixing all the errors.

This of course is just my opinion. You can take my advice or not, it is your poem after all and it should reflect you. I hope I was able to help. Thank you for sharing and please keep writing! Taryn *Smile*
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Review of false love  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Hayley,
I read your poem, and I can see what you are trying to do here. Overall your poem is good. The story is one that most people can identify with. The rhythm and rhyme seemed to be done well also. However, there are a few things I would change.
1. The first thing I would do is edit. And just when I think I'm done editing, then I would edit again. I edit my work almost daily just make sure it says what I want it to say, how I want to say it, and that there are no grammatical errors in it.
a. Initialize the first letter of the first word of every sentence or thought. Not necessarily every first letter at the beginning of every line; because it doesn't always read that way. Just a rule of thumb.
b. There are quite a few misspelled words through out your poem. In line five: fimilar should be familiar. In the sixth line: depp should be deep. In the eleventh line: vouces should be voices. Twelfth line: neith should be neither.
c. I would make sure that I used the correct tense of certain words. For example in line, doesnt (if using doesn't, don't forget the apostrophe) *Smile* should be didn't.
2.Personally, I am a fan of punctuation. Since your lines read like sentences I would consider using punctuation. You don't have to of course. But in my opinion, it makes it easier to read.

Again, I did enjoy your poem. And with a little tweaking, would deserve a better rating. I hope I was able to help. This of course, is just my opinion. Your poem should reflect you. So implement what you want ; if any. The rest you should throw away. Thank you for sharing and please keep writing! Taryn
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Review of Red roses  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,
I thought I would drop by your port and review some thiings. It's been a while since I have visited. I hope you don't mind. *Smile*
I liked your poem. Somewhat sad, but good. Loneliness likened to a red rose. Your poem shows real emotion and nice imagery. However, I did see a few things I would change.
1. I would make sure that all "i" that are in reference to a person are capitalized.
2. I would make sure that words like "don't and won't", have apostrophes.
3. In the seventh line, I would but a space between at and last ( I'm sure you meant to do that any way *Smile*
Other than that, I thought your poem was fine. Thank you for sharing it! Taryn "Invalid Item" 
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Review of Day Dawning  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
Ah...to have magic words that would transport you to some place magical.... nice thought. Nice day dream *Smile* I liked this poem. The imagery was great! It has a nice easy flow to it, and they rhythm and rhyme were implemented well also. Great job! I saw nothing that I would change with this poem. Thank you for sharing! Taryn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I enjoyed your poem a lot. They rhythm and rhyme were executed nicely. It held my interest from beginning to end. The only thing I would change woud be your format. I would group every four lines together ( considering that they rhyme) into stanzas so that it would cut back on the length of the poem. Then after that I would go in and insert comma's and periods where needed. This of course is just my opinion .I'm a stickler for punctuation, not that you have to have it in poetry. Thank you so much for sharing and please keep writing! Taryn
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Rated: E | (3.5)
HI,
I read your poem and overall I think it's a good one. There are a few things I would change.
1. There are a few random capitalizations that need to be lower case.
2. In stanzas two and five, I would change the wording so that the flow is better. For example; fifth stanza-second line: I would change it to, "Holding his glass of expensive wine". Same stanza last line: I would change it to, " The fine days of his youth gone by." In stanza four-last line: I would remove the word had.
3. I would go back over the poem and rethink all the coma's. I think there are a few that are unnecessary.
4. In the sixth stanza-last line: I think it should be "Feels lonely". I could be wrong, but it reads a little off to me.
These of course are just my opinions. I think with a few changes, this poem could have a better rating. Thank you so much for sharing and keep writing! Taryn
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi,
I enjoyed your poem. I thought it was written well. The rhythm holds true through out the poem, as does the rhyme. Nicely done. I don't see anything that I would change. And to answer your question...No I don't think he loves her. I think he lusts after her. and with time could love her but, now no I don't think so. He dwells so much on getting her in his bed, love is mentioned but not as in depth as getting her into his bed. Again, nicely done. Thank you for sharing and keep writing! Taryn
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Review of Excuses  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,
i liked your poem. It made me giggle. After the fifth line, I expected the rest of the poem to rhyme. So when it didn't it, threw me off a little. But I still liked it a lot. The only thing I would change...maybe...would be the meter of the poem. But it's such a minor thing here that I doubt I would bother with it. It is free verse and it reads like it. So I guess, all in all I would change nothing : ) Thank you so much for sharing! Taryn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I loved your poem. The message, the rhythm and rhyme, the word choice..everything was aptly chosen and done well. I think for me the second stanza is my favorite, but all of them are good. I think this poem is positive and well written.I can see nothing that I would change in this poem at all. I think you did a fantastic job. Thank you so much for sharing it and please keep writing! Taryn
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Review of Flying Lesson  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
HI
Welcome to Writing.com! I enjoyed your poem. I thought it was nicely written. I liked how the first stanza looks like it is swaying in the wind the way your poem depicts. Very nice.
There were only a couple of things I would change.
1. I had a liitle problem with the flow of this piece. It could be just me. Seeing as how this is free verse, and there isnt really a rhyming format, I may have just missed how it was supposed to be read. No problem, I will read it again...lol
2. I think in the fifteenth line that you meant to write "not remember". Otherwise, to me it doesn't make sense.
Please remember that all this is just my opinion. Thank you so much for sharing! Taryn
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