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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! This is the first installment of you Solar package gifted to you by your secret pal. My honest review is just my opinion that doesn't hold a lot of weight, but is meant to help and encourage and in no way is intended to be hurtful or judgmental. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I liked this poem a lot. I thought it beautifully described what soul mates would feel for each other. The happiness felt is evident and enviable. I thought the imagery was written well and the rhyme scheme was easy to follow with the flow being natural and unforced.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look that would enhance your poem. I thought it looked polished and complete.

It is hard to choose a favorite stanza because I thought each one complimented the others very well.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Left Unheard  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello again, I decided to check out your port and see what else you have posted.

What I liked about this poem is the depth of feeling and the easy read. I thought that the flow was somewhat better than the last piece I read. I also thought that the rhyme scheme and meter was much better. I thought your piece was really relate-able and can strike a cord in many if not all of your readers.

What I thought needed a second look is only an editing issue. I think in the first stanza third line, " i " should be " I ". I think this is just a typo. Also I would do away with the period at the end of your poem. Since you did not use punctuation at all previously in the piece, using it at the end just makes it stand out. Other than that, I saw nothing that I thought needed correcting.

My favorite stanza of your poem was the first one. I thought it set the tone of your piece well and I thought it was the most poetic of all three stanza's.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much again, for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of The Cabin  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, I found your poem on the Newbie Page. First let me say welcome to the WDC. I hope that you enjoy your time here. My humble review is honest and meant to be helpful and encouraging. It is not meant to be hurtful or judgmental. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.

I liked your poem. I thought you painted the imagery of your piece well. I thought your poem was easy to follow and you stayed true to the title to the end.

What I thought needed a second look was the format. In the first line, the tense is wrong. Since you said "There was a cabin...then the second part of that should be "dared not go" I thought that your rhyme scheme was fine, but some of your rhymes are not true rhymes. This is not really an issue for me, in case you want to challenge yourself a little more, this would be one way to do it.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Again, welcome to the WDC. I wish you success here and in your writing. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of The Child  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi...I found your request for a review for this piece on the Request a Review Page. The info your wrote for the request broke my heart. I hate to see anyone in pain. And your words are just screaming it from the page at me. I did read your prose and it is good, but I couldn't get my mind off of what you wrote on the request page.

I know that we don't know each other at all..but if you ever want someone to talk to you..you can talk to me anytime. I log on here every single day, several times a day. I don't profess to know everything, or know the answers to everything, but I can and am willing to listen. I do know how it feels to be alone, to feel dejected and rejected. I don't want you to feel that way, not that I could make you feel better....but just know that if you need it, you do have someone who is on your side and who will be glad to listen.

Always a friend,
Taryn

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Review of Comeback  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, I found your poem on the Hub page. I haven't reviewed you before, so let me say that my honest review is only meant to help and encourage and is not meant to be hurtful or judgmental. I am no expert, but I love writing (specifically poetry) and reading...my review is just my humble opinion. Please accept it in the spirit it is given. *Smile*

I liked your piece a lot. I love that you wrote your piece from two different points of view, and separated these views so that you reader could easily keep track of where it was coming from. I can say that I have definitely been in this position before of having a long bout of not writing anything and then trying to start it up again. It can be a little daunting, and somewhat exhilarating. I thought you did a good job of relaying the inner conflict that a writer goes through sometimes when dealing with this type of situation.

Although I love the separation of views on the page, I think putting them a little closer together will make this piece easier to read. I kept thinking I was finished, but I would happen to scroll down and see there was more. I almost missed all of the other stanzas except the first one. Putting them a little closer together will alleviate this problem. The second issue I saw was in the second stanza..marry should be merry.

Overall, I thought your piece was well written, insightful, and relate-able. Thank you so much for sharing and allowing me to have the privilege of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I hope to see more of your work in the future. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Halloween  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello, I found your poem through the random read. My review is just my humble opinion. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.

I liked your poem a lot. It is perfect for the current season, and it put me in the mood of Halloween. I thought the imagery was great in your poem. And the rhythm and rhyme were also written well.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your poem was polished and complete.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of The Beacon.  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello! I found your poem on the Plug page and I thought I would give it a read. Please understand that my honest review is just my humble opinion and it doesn't carry much weight. It is meant to be helpful and encouraging. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given. If you disagree with my review, it will not hurt my feelings if you put in file thirteen. *Jackolantern*

What I liked about your piece was all of the great descriptive lines. I read your piece a few times and I found it quite inventive with good imagery.

What I thought needed a second look has more to do with creative preference. Although I loved your descriptive lines, I did feel that your poem lacked feeling. It feels empty to me and I did not feel a connection to it. Awesome imagery and descriptions are great, but if your reader isn't drawn into your poem or made to feel something then it leaves a void. I can tell by the quality of this piece that you have the ability to write. I would love to see you revamp this piece and make me feel what you are feeling. Bring me to the place that made you write these words on paper. One line in particular seemed questionable to me. Line seven seems to either have words missing or something, but it seems out of place. Again, these are just my opinions. If you do not agree then change nothing. Your poem is your poem, it should reflect you.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you much success with your writing. Welcome to the WDC. Write on! Taryn

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Review of Weeping Angel  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello! You are listed on the Lightening List for the WDC Power Reviewers Group. So, I thought I would check out your port and find something to review. My honest review is just my humble opinion. It isn't meant to be hurtful or judgmental. Please accept it in the spirit it is given. *Jackolantern*

I thought that overall, your poem is a good one. You emit strong feelings of love, admiration, and respect in this poem. I also thought that the rhyme scheme and your word choices were also good.

What I thought needed a second look was the format. For the most part it's good, but there are some areas that are too wordy. I would break them up according to the rhyme scheme you have already chosen and go from there. The last stanza is perfect, the first two are more prose than poetry.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on!! Taryn

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Review of Cooking  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, this review is for the WDC Power Reviewers Raid. I found your port because you are listed on the lightening list. Congrats! My review is just my humble opinion. It is meant to help and encourage. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I love to cook too. For me it is very therapeutic. I thought your poem was very cute and visual. I thought the format, rhyme scheme and rhythm were all consistent and written well.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look.

My favorite stanza would have to be the third stanza. I think all cooks have the fantasy of their finest culinary feat being praised as a national treasure..lol

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Broken  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello! I found your poem through the random read. Please understand that my review is my humble opinion and is only meant to help and encourage. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

In my life, love and heartache never ceases to amaze me. Just when I think I couldn't hurt more or feel any lower, I am proven wrong. Love has the capacity to color your entire world in such a way that you may never see it the same again. I thought your poem expressed this thought very well.

There are several points that I thought might need a second look. I love poetry because the interpretation can vary with each read and reader. I also know that there are different styles, forms and formats of poetry. I have used quite a few, but I tend to stick with one staple through them all. If I use punctuation (which I do quite often), then I follow the normal rules that apply when writing a complete sentence. I only capitalize the beginning of each thought or idea, and not necessarily each line. I think you have to be careful when you using punctuation in poetry because it can hinder the flow if done incorrectly. With your piece I fell that it would benefit more without punctuation. Because of how your piece flows, I feel that the punctuation hinders it just enough to cause me to miss the meter a few times. If you choose to do away with the punctuation, then I would encourage you to remove the comma's also..without the punctuation they will be obsolete. I also noticed the flow change between the first four stanzas and the last two; which in poetry does happen. I think the last two stanzas compared to the first four are somewhat wordy, and removing some the unnecessary words will make all of your stanzas more cohesive with each other and make your poem a smoother read. In the third stanza, I felt that fitted should be fit. I thought that they rhyme scheme was great with your piece until I got to the last stanza. It is the only stanza that did not follow the pattern you set with the rest of your poem. I think these corrections will make your piece more polished and complete.

My favorite stanza of your piece is the first one. I thought it set the tone of your poem well, and it pulled me into your piece.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Again, my suggestions are just my opinions, and they don't carry a lot of weight*Smile*. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Song of an Age  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello! I found your poem through the random read. I'm sure you know that my review is meant to help and encourage, and in no way is meant to be hurtful or judgmental. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I liked your poem a lot. The premise of your piece is not a new idea. We have heard this idea put in many different ways and in many different words... but the meaning is the same. However, I love how you put it all together. I thought your piece was really poetic. The rhythm and rhyme married together well, along with the imagery being very vibrant, and the flow was easy to find and follow. I had no issues with your piece. I found it to be a really nice read.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your poem looked complete and polished

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Loss of Color  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Fire* Hello Joto-Kai ! I'm reviewing "Loss of Color"  today as part of your Nuclear package from "Invalid Item" !As I am sure you know that my humble review is to help and encourage and not meant to be judgmental or hurtful. Please accept it in the spirit it is given. *Smile*

Poetry is one my favorite forms of writing, and my absolute favorite in ways to express myself. I think that it is in part because it is subjective, and if written well..the reader can find themselves in the words or can see something totally different than what the author had intended. I read your piece several times and I found it more profound with each read. I found your poem to be thought provoking and very visual. The imagery in this piece is outstanding.

My favorite part of your poem is very hard to choose. I thought each line complimented the others well. However, I think the last two stanza's are my favorite. Even though the first two are ripe with imagery, I felt that the last two stanza's were the most poetic. These lines seemed so raw and bare, that the feelings that were described in the first two stanza's became that much more vibrant. I felt that the insecurities, the doubts, the pain were all exposed here.

I didn't see any areas that I thought needed a second look or improvement. I thought your piece was really well written.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well hello....I am reviewing your story. Remember, my review is to help and encourage. It is my humble opinion, please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

What I liked about your story is that it is a sweet but not overly sweet love story; and not just about his love for Tara, but also about his love for magic. I found myself comparing the two loves and how he interacted with them. Obviously he was a lot more comfortable with magic than he was with Tara in the beginning. He took things a lot slower with Tara, whereas with the magic, he was more persistent. I also realized that he was rather clueless about them both. This is a long story, but I found that all the explanations were needed, because by the end of the story I felt like I knew Dave; almost understood him. I thought that your character development was good,..You gave us insight not just into Dave but Tara too.

As you have already told me, this piece does need to be edited. But there are only a few places that need a second look. Once you decide to edit again, you will see them.

My favorite part has to be where you described how her love for Shakespeare and spanish was learned in High School..which was very rare. I loved how you compared your two characters. I also liked the magic trick sequence. I could see it all happening. I thought the imagery in your piece was great.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. Although this particular piece was not my favorite of your port, I did enjoy it immensely. Write on, read on, rate on! Tary

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, I found this piece when I was searching through your port for something to review. I like that you have a folder for pieces that do not have any reviews. These are the types of items I like to review, and this way makes them much easier to find. As you know that my review is just my humble opinion and is meant only to help and encourage. It is not meant to be hurtful or judgmental, so please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

Regret like a broken heart, is almost a tired subject in poetry; and it will continue to be written about (including by me). Because of this, it can sometimes where a little thin. However with your piece, I found that regret was written in a very beautiful way. I love that you referenced broken sails for this piece. I thought it was very poetic, inventive, original, and thought provoking. I had no problems reading your piece. It flowed well, the meter was easy to follow. The rhyme scheme is great, and also has nice imagery. I thought your piece was written really well.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. Your poem looks polished and complete.

I think the last two lines are my favorite. It ends your poem well, leaving us with something to think about. You put a poetic spin on an old saying.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi...A friend turned me onto your port..and this piece was the first that I picked to read. This is not really a review, but more of just dropping you a note, letting you know I read your piece. You are really comical, and I have asked myself some of the same things that you mentioned in your piece...I am looking forward to reading more in your port. *Smile* I know that you said you were new and didn't know what your standing is really on whether you are here or not here...but I hope you stick around for at least a while. Thanks for the read...!
Taryn
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Review of Cow Vice  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, I found your piece through the Random Read. My review is meant to help and encourage and in no way is meant to be judgmental or hurtful. Please accept it in the spirit is given.
I always find these type of contest interesting partly because I do not have the guts to enter. I really admire those who can stick to the guidelines and write their story well. I feel you have done that. Your story is very comical, and the imagery is clearly written. I thought you story was inventive and entertaining.
I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your story was written well.
This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of First Experience?  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I found your piece through the Random Read. My first thought was HA! *Laugh*I thought your piece was very comical. I enjoy this type of humor. I knew according to the byline that there was going to a misunderstanding somewhere...I just didn't know where..I thought you set the scene very well, and the imagery is clear.*Smile*
I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your piece was brilliant
This concludes my review. A short review for a short piece.*Smile*Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of You  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, I found your piece through the Random Read. As you know, my review is just my humble opinion.
I liked your piece. It started out almost passive, but by the end it had some punch. I like that. And how true it is....I do not know who said that time heals all wounds, but I find it to be a lie. For me time does not heal anything...depending on the pain...it just changes it into something else. And of course sometimes...the pain is just pain. I liked your poem a lot. I can feel your frustration clearly.
I didn't see any areas that need a second look. I though your poem was well written.
This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of Dad#1  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem through the Random Read. I liked your piece. I love short pieces that pack a punch at the end, and your piece does just that. It leaves me with food for thought with a sweet bite at the end. It kind of goes back to the old adage that says everything you need is never far from home. And in this day and age with so many absent fathers, it is nice to know that there are still little boys out there who aspire to be just like their fathers.
I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look.
This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Spy v.s. Spy  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, I found your story on through the random read. Please understand that my review is to help and encourage. It is in no way meant to be a judgement or hurtful. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.

I normally do not review stories because I do not write them, so I do not feel qualified to review them. However when I came across yours I felt compelled to read and then review. I liked your story very much. I was pleasantly surprised to find that although it was very brief, it has a lot going for it. I thought your story was very different than most of the other stories I have read. I love the premise of your story, how you put it together, and how you ended it. I thought your piece was well thought out. I thought it was a nice twist that the person that they were watching was already being judged by not his actions, but just by his thoughts; very interesting.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought you did a really good job writing this piece.

My favorite part of your piece as I stated earlier is when the reader finds out that the person being watched is being judged and profiled by his thoughts and not even by something he's done. Brilliant.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Alone  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, I found your poem on the Read a Newbie Page and I thought I would give it a read and review. My review is meant to help and encourage, and is in now way meant to be judgmental. Please accept it in the spirit is given*Smile*
Loneliness is a crippling, acidic situation that unless forcibly removed can turn into a deep depression that is hard to escape. But on the other hand, it does make for the best poetry*Smile*
What I liked about your poem is the depth of emotion and how you clued us in on the quote. Such a beautiful quote to pattern you poem after. Good choice. My favorite stanza is the last one. It sums up your poem nicely with nice imagery and food for thought.
What I thought needed a second look is the format and your use of comma's. I think you poem (and the quote above it), would be served better centered. I would also do away with punctuation all together, including removing most if not all of the comma's present. Doing this will help with the flow and make it easier for your readers to concentrate on the feelings you are displaying rather than trying to figure out the end of the sentence or thought. I am a fan of punctuation, but I do think that depending on the format of the poem, it can hinder the overall feel of the poem. Doing away with the comma's, punctuation and centering this piece will make this an easier read.
This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Welcome to the WDC and I wish you much success. Write on! Taryn
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Review of To Thee I Pray  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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It was hard to choose something from your port because you have many credited items and most have been reviewed. Congratulations on that! I chose this poem because we have all had to hit our knees at some point and pray because we found ourselves in a situation that seemed hopeless. Thankfully, there is nothing too big or too small for God. I liked your poem. I'm not a huge fan of the two line stanza's, but I like that yours rhyme. You poem shows depth of feeling that can be felt by your reader.
There is nothing that I thought needed a second look. All of your lines rhyme appropriately and the flow was easy to follow.
My favorite stanza is the second one.
Burdens of my heart I bear
I wish not to share

This is my favorite line because for me, most of my praying is done alone...with only God and I present. I am spilling my guts and filling his ears with all the things I only want him to hear. I do not want to share them with others, only him.
This concludes my fulfillment of the Fossil Fuel Package review.Thank you so much for sharing!Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Dr Matticakes Myra ! I found your poem through the random read. I thought it was quite funny at first,and then it got a little sad. After reading this poem, all I could think of was my brother, who when I was young tormented, and demolished my toys. Ah...(sigh)memories..lol He would rip their limbs apart, set them on fire, and bury the parts all over the backyard. Thankfully, he stuck to toys and nothing living! I liked your poem. I thought it was very animated, original, and thought provoking. I say thought provoking because for me this piece has a moral. Be careful who you play with and how, because hurting them could cost a penance that you do not want to pay. I thought your poem was well written and I enjoyed it immensely.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought the meter, rhyme, and imagery were all written well.

I think the fifth stanza is my favorite and only because I laughed out loud at the visual that this stanza emitted. I thought it was fantastic. All of your stanza's are great.

This concludes my review. I hope that it was encouraging. Thank you so much for sharing.
Write on, read on, rate on...Taryn
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Review of AGONIZING LOVE  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Itchy Water~fictionandverse ! I came across your poem through the random read.*Smile*

What I like about your poem is there are several facets to it. There is hurt, anger, melancholy, betrayal, and hatred. The rhymes you have chosen work well and your word choices seem to more than aptly relay to your audience the issues you (narrator) faced. The imagery and mood is also written very well. If this is autobiographical, then I am truly sorry for the pain that you have gone through. Even if your audience has not experienced this kind of pain, they can still relate; you have expressed yourself very well with this piece.

Each stanza is great, but I think the last one is my favorite and how true it is. When you feel nothing but indifference then you really know that it is over. Anything else that is felt just feeds the love or feelings that are there, and the lines of reality can be easily broken. What is that saying...there is a thin line between love and hate? How true it is.

There is nothing that I think needs a second look. As always your work is well thought out, full of feeling, and polished.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for sharing and for everything you do here at the WDC. I appreciate ya!*Smile* Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Hello Don Two . I found your poem through the random read and I'm glad I did!

I am also in love with outer space. The mystery and beauty of it all is the stuff the dreams are made of. I thought your poem embodied this idea very well. I thought the imagery, rhyme scheme, word choices, and meter were all fantastic. I could see myself or anyone...floating out in space, passing the planets and having conversations with them. Your poem is very visual. I like it a lot.*Smile*

My favorite part is hard to choose. I thought the entire piece was delightful. If I have to choose...then I choose the first eight lines. From the very beginning, you pull me into your love of outer space and just from those lines I had to stick around and read the rest of your poem.

I didn't find anything that I thought needed a second look. You have done a fabulous job with this poem. Thank you so much for sharing. I wish you much success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on!Taryn
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