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Review of My Snippets  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello again my friend....Since you said this was uploaded...I decided to stop by pronto and have a read. *Smile*

As always your personality shines through fantastically. There really is no difference in how you conversate on the phone and how you conversate in your work. I find it incredibly indearing. I liked each snippet because of the same reason...they highlight your personality; but I do think that I like "Thank you Kathy" the best. Do you analize all facets of your life the way you have analized this incident? I wish I had that talent..*Smile*

I do have one issue besides the fact that you already know that you need to do some minor editing...and that is in your "My Port is Full" snippet. I disagree...none of your work is trash...all of it deserves to be saved. Don't you dare do anything yet!

Well my darling...this concludes my review. As always thank you for sharing and for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success in your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of I WILL BE STRONG  
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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
Hello! I found your poem on the Review Me List for members of the WDC Power Reviewers group. I hope this day finds you uplifted and in great spirits. Understand that my review is to help and encourage and in no way is meant to be hurtful or judgmental. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I think your piece describes what many people go through in life...a sense that people do not understand fully your plight in life. Many times people assume they have been in your shoes; or even if they haven't, they think they know what your are going through...but they don't. And I have also found that when I was a teenager and into early adult hood...I always felt that no one understood my life or problems. Now as an adult who has passed all of that, I see that some people who spoke of understanding may have really understood and I just didn't open my eyes and ears long enough to see that they could really help. I think you did a good job of relaying the feeling of hopelessness and desperation to readers in your piece. It is very clear that life has dealt you a hand that you may wish you could pass over sooner rather than later. But as you say at the end of your poem, you will get through it ...time will just have to do what time does...and that is pass at it's normal pace. And you will withstand the pain and burden you feel now, and when you do...the joy and victory you feel will be that much sweeter because of it.

Depending on how you label this piece will depend on the corrections that need to be made. I see that you labeled this static item other..so I am not sure how to categorize this. If you do not plan to fix the format ..then I would definitely change the label to Prose. If you are leaning more toward poetry then the stanza's need to be more uniform. In the fourth paragraph.. wid in should be within and beacuse should be because.This piece would benefit from basic editing. There are some tense problems, and words missing that would make this piece easier to read and the flow easier to follow.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here at the WDC and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hello! Welcome to the WDC! I found your poem on the Newbie page and I thought I would check it out. My review is meant to help and encourage and is not meant to be hurtful or judgmental. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I liked your piece. I think the randomness of it is part of its appeal. The rhythm and rhyme of your piece is pretty easy to pick out and follow. I didn't have any issues with flow. I think that you have very distinct voice and point of view. Put into the right format, it can be very powerful.

The only thing I think that I would change with your piece is if you leave the format of your piece as it is, then I would change the static item to prose. Your piece is really wordy and leans more to the side of prose than poetry. If not that, then I would go back and reformat this piece by breaking it up into stanzas and removing unnecessary words. Which of course is going to make your piece much more regimented and precise. Personally I would just change the static item to prose (much easier).*Smile* Other than that, I thought your piece was good.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here at the WDC and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello! I found your poem on the review page and thought I would give it a read and a review. First let me say welcome to the WDC! I love it here and I hope that you grow to love it here too. I hope that you understand that my review is coming from a fellow writer and reader, and it is meant to help and encourage and in no way is meant to be hurtful or judgmental. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I enjoyed your poem It flows really well. I had no issues picking up your rhythm or keeping it to the end of your piece. Your meter and word choices sounded natural and unforced. I thought the imagery was also well written and I thought that your poem was relate-able. I also thought that your poem lends a lot to food for thought; allowing your reader think a little harder and delve a little deeper about things that normally seem inconsequential at first glance.

I didn't see any major issues or mistakes with your poem that I thought needed to change. However, I did feel that because you are using complete sentences, capitalizing the first letter of every sentence is a little confusing when trying to figure out when one thought ends and another begins. I think that following the normal rules of sentence formation helps when using punctuation in poetry. This of course is just my personal opinion and has no bearing on my feelings about your piece.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Again, welcome to the WDC. If you need help maneuvering your way around or have any questions, don't hesitate to drop me an email. I wish you continued success in life and here at the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, I found your poem through the random read and I thought I would also review it. My review is just my humble opinion meant to be helpful and encouraging. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I liked your poem a lot. I like how you describe basically that we are constantly evolving in such a poetic way. We are the sum of all of our parts, and even though our "stranger" may not stick around for long, they do leave behind a little of themselves that make us who we are. We evolve as our strangers evolve. I thought your poem had really nice rhymes and flow; and also thought provoking.

I saw nothing in your poem that needed a second look nor did I think of anything that could be added to enhance your poem.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I really enjoyed the read. I wish you continued success here at the WDC and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Rhea's List  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello my friend. I have finally taken the time to peruse your port and I found the piece you spoke of the other night.
I really like this piece (big surprise there..lol). I think it's because I can relate to Rhea and I'm sure a lot of people can. Rarely do we see ourselves the way others see us. I know that for me it always comes as a surprise when someone can look at me and find or see something there that I never did. I thought your story was very cute. I love that there isn't much description going on. This story stands on the dialog alone. I like that. I also feel that there aren't any unnecessary words here...that's great. I feel that your story is authentic and relate-able. I thought this story was very sweet and I see James all through it. (lol)
I didn't see anything that I thought needed correcting nor did I think of anything that would enhance your piece.
This concludes my review. As always, thank you for sharing. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here at the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, I found your poem in the sponsored items. My review is just my opinion that is meant to help and encourage and not intended to be hurtful or judgmental. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.

I liked your poem. I thought that your piece very clearly describes what it means to have the world and it still not make you happy but instead, makes you feel worse. I liked your word choices for your piece and the rhyme scheme, which made your piece easy to read. The flow was easy to pick up and follow and the imagery was written well too.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your piece looked polished and complete.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC and in your writing. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Bleed  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi...I finally got around to reading your piece, so of course I have to review and share with you my thoughts. Since getting to know you and your situation, I already know the truth that your poem speaks of; and I feel that this poem more than adequately relay's what you have shared with me. It is heart breakingly sad. It aches with hurt and pain, and it is obvious that you want and NEED to be loved. Don't we all? Your poem is easily relate-able, I myself have felt the way you feel. And as I have already told you...it will get better. I promise. It will take time, and I'm not saying that all wounds will be healed but it will get better.

Love when you have it, can be all consuming...your entire world. And when it ends it is completely devastating. There are a precious few that find true..real love that lasts a lifetime, and the rest of us spend our life time looking for it. I know that it may not seem like it right now, but maybe the love you had was not the love you were supposed to have, but a stepping stone to the one who truly belongs to you. A true love that belongs to you will love you back and for who you are. Unfortunately we cannot make someone love us back and in the way we love them. In that situation we are forced to move and and start over. But until you are able to ...you have all these feelings that don't go away because they are not returned. In your current state of mind, you are not open to that person who is meant for you. So now you are working on bettering yourself so that your heart, mind, and spirit will be open to receive the love you deserve. I tknow it's hard, but keep plugging at it. It will get better.

I like your poem. The devastating heart break that you feel is haunting in this piece and speaks volumes to me. Keep writing your feelings down. They will help you put things in perspective. I want you to remember two things for me. One...ready yourself to meet the one that is meant for you, and two..remember it will get better. Say this out loud : I AM A GOOD PERSON AND I DESERVE TO BE LOVED. *Smile*

As always, I am here for you when you need me. Keep writing and remember what I said! *Smile*
Always,
Taryn


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Rated: E | (2.0)
Hello! I found your poem on the Newbie Page and I thought I would read and review. My review is meant to help and encourage. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I liked the calmness and peacefulness of your poem. I am a night shifter, which naturally makes me a night owl...and on the nights that I do not work...I find myself doing just what you describe in your poem. I sit and look at the sky and contemplate its wonders, or i just sit there and let the wind and silence engulf me. I thought the imagery that you painted was well done.

What I thought needed a second look was your spelling, and punctuation. I think that an overall edit would serve your poem well.

My favorite stanza of your piece is the first one. I felt that it set the tone of your poem well. It is very visual and I feel it is the most poetic of the three stanza's

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you much success here at the WDC and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Master  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello! I found this poem through the Random Read, and I thought that I would give it a review. My review is just my opinion meant to help and encourage. I hope you accept in the spirit it is given. *Smile*

I liked your poem. Fickle love: such a hard idea to grasp...can something so fleeting be real, especially love? Or can love be real for just a solitary moment, and be gone with the change of the wind the next? In either case, whether it be real or not, fickle love can carry just as a whopper of a punch as a long standing love...especially to those young at heart. The depth of despair was written well in your poem. I thought you more than adequately described the hopeless feeling one can feel with rejection. I also loved the imagery you displayed in your piece. I thought your poem was relate-able. I am sure most of us at one time or another has experienced this type of love. I thought the rhyme scheme of your piece was fantastic, and the meter made the flow easy to pick up and follow.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your piece looked polished and complete.

My favorite stanza of your poem was the third one. I thought that you wrote in the heartbreak and betrayal well here.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC and in your writing. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Come To Me  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello! I found you on the "SuperPower Lightning List as a new member and reviewer. Welcome! I thought I would stop by your port to read and review. My review is my honest opinion that is intended to be helpful and encouraging; and in no way is meant to be hurtful or judgmental. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

What I liked about your poem was that it is very relate-able. Most of us have loved someone who did not love us in return...or maybe didn't love us with the same intensity or same type of love. The depth of feeling is evident in your poem. I felt you described the sincerity and "true-ness" of your love to the reader very well. There is no doubting the amount of patience the narrator has, because you have relayed quite well that no matter how long it takes, you will wait for the object of your affections to return your love.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look that would enhance your poem. I thought it looked polished and complete.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. Congrats again on making the "SuperPower Lightning List. I wish you continued success here at the WDC and in your writing. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Idea Sparks  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! This the second installment into your Solar Package gifted to you by whippoorwill.

I liked this poem a lot. I loved the idea of a visual manifestation of what happens when an idea forms right before you write it down. I thought your poem was very descriptive and easy to follow. I thought that overall, your poem was well written.

What I thought needed a second look was your use of punctuation. Your poem is a freestyle poem with very few complete sentences. With the format you have chosen, I think that omitting the punctuation will make it that much more easier to read in terms of flow. Other than that, I saw nothing that I thought needed to change to enhance your poem.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of once again reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC and in your writing. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Aches & Pains  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, here is another installment to your Nuclear Package from the Power Review Shop gifted to you by Emily My humble but honest review is intended to help and encourage and not meant to be hurtful or judgmental. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

What I liked about your poem is the rhyme scheme. I thought your piece was consistent from beginning to end. I also thought that it was entertaining and original. I like that you describe the different types of aches and pains to cement your piece.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. However I did feel that slight difference in meter with each stanza made it a little of a rough read, but that did not affect my opinion of your piece.

My favorite stanza is the last one. It tells your reader how to handle life when you do have those aches and pains that come around periodically and I felt that this stanza sums up your poem nicely.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC and in your writing. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Goodbye  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, I found your poem on the Request Page. My honest review is intended to help and encourage and is not meant to be hurtful or judgmental. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.

What I liked most about your poem is the imagery. I thought it was wonderfully vivid, loaded with happiness and freedom. I thought your piece was easy to follow.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look except for lack of punctuation at the end of the first stanza and except for the fact that I think that the title does not fit this poem. I am not sure if there is a hidden meaning here....(something like, the narrator has now become jaded against the issues of the known world) or what the point of this title is exactly. I can say that I was quite surprised after reading your poem because it was not what I was expecting with a title like Jaded. Other than that, I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you much success here at the WDC and with your writing. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Left Unheard  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello again, I decided to check out your port and see what else you have posted.

What I liked about this poem is the depth of feeling and the easy read. I thought that the flow was somewhat better than the last piece I read. I also thought that the rhyme scheme and meter was much better. I thought your piece was really relate-able and can strike a cord in many if not all of your readers.

What I thought needed a second look is only an editing issue. I think in the first stanza third line, " i " should be " I ". I think this is just a typo. Also I would do away with the period at the end of your poem. Since you did not use punctuation at all previously in the piece, using it at the end just makes it stand out. Other than that, I saw nothing that I thought needed correcting.

My favorite stanza of your poem was the first one. I thought it set the tone of your piece well and I thought it was the most poetic of all three stanza's.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much again, for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of The Cabin  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, I found your poem on the Newbie Page. First let me say welcome to the WDC. I hope that you enjoy your time here. My humble review is honest and meant to be helpful and encouraging. It is not meant to be hurtful or judgmental. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.

I liked your poem. I thought you painted the imagery of your piece well. I thought your poem was easy to follow and you stayed true to the title to the end.

What I thought needed a second look was the format. In the first line, the tense is wrong. Since you said "There was a cabin...then the second part of that should be "dared not go" I thought that your rhyme scheme was fine, but some of your rhymes are not true rhymes. This is not really an issue for me, in case you want to challenge yourself a little more, this would be one way to do it.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Again, welcome to the WDC. I wish you success here and in your writing. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Dinner  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello...I found your story through the random read. My review is just my humble opinion intended to help and encourage and is not meant to be hurtful or judgmental. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given. *Smile*

What I liked about your story was that it was not predictable. With each new piece of information I was surprised or shocked. *Smile* Which is good, because who likes a predictable story? Definitely not me! I thought your story was original, entertaining, and befitting the Halloween season. I thought that your characters were developed well enough for a short story, making your story easy to follow. I was taken into your story from the beginning to the end and was not once disappointed.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your piece look polished and complete.

My favorite part was the ending...it was an unexpected surprise.*Smile*

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here at the WDC and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of The Child  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi...I found your request for a review for this piece on the Request a Review Page. The info your wrote for the request broke my heart. I hate to see anyone in pain. And your words are just screaming it from the page at me. I did read your prose and it is good, but I couldn't get my mind off of what you wrote on the request page.

I know that we don't know each other at all..but if you ever want someone to talk to you..you can talk to me anytime. I log on here every single day, several times a day. I don't profess to know everything, or know the answers to everything, but I can and am willing to listen. I do know how it feels to be alone, to feel dejected and rejected. I don't want you to feel that way, not that I could make you feel better....but just know that if you need it, you do have someone who is on your side and who will be glad to listen.

Always a friend,
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Review of Comeback  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, I found your poem on the Hub page. I haven't reviewed you before, so let me say that my honest review is only meant to help and encourage and is not meant to be hurtful or judgmental. I am no expert, but I love writing (specifically poetry) and reading...my review is just my humble opinion. Please accept it in the spirit it is given. *Smile*

I liked your piece a lot. I love that you wrote your piece from two different points of view, and separated these views so that you reader could easily keep track of where it was coming from. I can say that I have definitely been in this position before of having a long bout of not writing anything and then trying to start it up again. It can be a little daunting, and somewhat exhilarating. I thought you did a good job of relaying the inner conflict that a writer goes through sometimes when dealing with this type of situation.

Although I love the separation of views on the page, I think putting them a little closer together will make this piece easier to read. I kept thinking I was finished, but I would happen to scroll down and see there was more. I almost missed all of the other stanzas except the first one. Putting them a little closer together will alleviate this problem. The second issue I saw was in the second stanza..marry should be merry.

Overall, I thought your piece was well written, insightful, and relate-able. Thank you so much for sharing and allowing me to have the privilege of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I hope to see more of your work in the future. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Stay of the Razor  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello! I found your poem through the Random Read, so I thought I would give it a read.*Smile* Please understand that my review is meant to help and encourage, and not meant to be hurtful or judgmental. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.

My first thought after reading your poem was how sad. How sad that a razor is given so much power. I do not know if this is autobiographical or not, I pray that it isn't. But I can say that I have been so low that I have wanted to kill myself. I would spend hours thinking of ways to do it. Thank God I never followed any of them through. Your poem brought me right back to those days that were so dark that I thought I would never see light again. I could feel the hurt and desperation in your piece; so much so that I saw myself in it. I thought the depth of feeling of your piece is what makes it outstanding.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed to change except in the sixth line. It could be just my personal preference, but I think that when ever you are speaking of the Almighty when you mention god...I think God should be capitalized. I also didn't understand why some words were capitalized and others weren't. At first I thought you were writing in the style of E.E Cummings but the more I read, the more I realized that was not the case.

My favorite stanza is the third one. I thought the imagery was very poetic here. Beautifully written.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. If this piece is autobiographical, I really hope that your time with the razor has passed and that you have been granted a permanent stay. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here on WDC and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Halloween  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello, I found your poem through the random read. My review is just my humble opinion. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.

I liked your poem a lot. It is perfect for the current season, and it put me in the mood of Halloween. I thought the imagery was great in your poem. And the rhythm and rhyme were also written well.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your poem was polished and complete.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello! I found your poem on the Plug Page and I thought I would give it a read. My honest review is just my humble opinion and doesn't carry a lot of weight. It is meant to be helpful and encouraging. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given. *Jackolantern*

I liked your poem a lot. The imagery was great and the feeling of nostalgia was easily felt. The flow of this piece was natural and light. I could easily picture myself in the atmosphere you described, reminiscing. I thought your poem was beautifully written.

What I thought needed a second look is perhaps just a personal preference. I think that your piece would be better served without punctuation. I happen to love punctuation in poetry, but as we know sometimes it can also hurt your peace if doesn't quite fit. Because of the laid back nature of your poem, I thought the use of punctuation was unnecessary. This was my only issue with your poem. I thought your poem was really beautifully written (have I said that already?). *Smile*

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of The Beacon.  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello! I found your poem on the Plug page and I thought I would give it a read. Please understand that my honest review is just my humble opinion and it doesn't carry much weight. It is meant to be helpful and encouraging. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given. If you disagree with my review, it will not hurt my feelings if you put in file thirteen. *Jackolantern*

What I liked about your piece was all of the great descriptive lines. I read your piece a few times and I found it quite inventive with good imagery.

What I thought needed a second look has more to do with creative preference. Although I loved your descriptive lines, I did feel that your poem lacked feeling. It feels empty to me and I did not feel a connection to it. Awesome imagery and descriptions are great, but if your reader isn't drawn into your poem or made to feel something then it leaves a void. I can tell by the quality of this piece that you have the ability to write. I would love to see you revamp this piece and make me feel what you are feeling. Bring me to the place that made you write these words on paper. One line in particular seemed questionable to me. Line seven seems to either have words missing or something, but it seems out of place. Again, these are just my opinions. If you do not agree then change nothing. Your poem is your poem, it should reflect you.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you much success with your writing. Welcome to the WDC. Write on! Taryn

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Review of Weeping Angel  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello! You are listed on the Lightening List for the WDC Power Reviewers Group. So, I thought I would check out your port and find something to review. My honest review is just my humble opinion. It isn't meant to be hurtful or judgmental. Please accept it in the spirit it is given. *Jackolantern*

I thought that overall, your poem is a good one. You emit strong feelings of love, admiration, and respect in this poem. I also thought that the rhyme scheme and your word choices were also good.

What I thought needed a second look was the format. For the most part it's good, but there are some areas that are too wordy. I would break them up according to the rhyme scheme you have already chosen and go from there. The last stanza is perfect, the first two are more prose than poetry.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on!! Taryn

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Review of Cooking  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, this review is for the WDC Power Reviewers Raid. I found your port because you are listed on the lightening list. Congrats! My review is just my humble opinion. It is meant to help and encourage. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I love to cook too. For me it is very therapeutic. I thought your poem was very cute and visual. I thought the format, rhyme scheme and rhythm were all consistent and written well.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look.

My favorite stanza would have to be the third stanza. I think all cooks have the fantasy of their finest culinary feat being praised as a national treasure..lol

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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