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Review of Broken  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello! I found your poem through the random read. Please understand that my review is my humble opinion and is only meant to help and encourage. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

In my life, love and heartache never ceases to amaze me. Just when I think I couldn't hurt more or feel any lower, I am proven wrong. Love has the capacity to color your entire world in such a way that you may never see it the same again. I thought your poem expressed this thought very well.

There are several points that I thought might need a second look. I love poetry because the interpretation can vary with each read and reader. I also know that there are different styles, forms and formats of poetry. I have used quite a few, but I tend to stick with one staple through them all. If I use punctuation (which I do quite often), then I follow the normal rules that apply when writing a complete sentence. I only capitalize the beginning of each thought or idea, and not necessarily each line. I think you have to be careful when you using punctuation in poetry because it can hinder the flow if done incorrectly. With your piece I fell that it would benefit more without punctuation. Because of how your piece flows, I feel that the punctuation hinders it just enough to cause me to miss the meter a few times. If you choose to do away with the punctuation, then I would encourage you to remove the comma's also..without the punctuation they will be obsolete. I also noticed the flow change between the first four stanzas and the last two; which in poetry does happen. I think the last two stanzas compared to the first four are somewhat wordy, and removing some the unnecessary words will make all of your stanzas more cohesive with each other and make your poem a smoother read. In the third stanza, I felt that fitted should be fit. I thought that they rhyme scheme was great with your piece until I got to the last stanza. It is the only stanza that did not follow the pattern you set with the rest of your poem. I think these corrections will make your piece more polished and complete.

My favorite stanza of your piece is the first one. I thought it set the tone of your poem well, and it pulled me into your piece.

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Again, my suggestions are just my opinions, and they don't carry a lot of weight*Smile*. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here at the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Song of an Age  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello! I found your poem through the random read. I'm sure you know that my review is meant to help and encourage, and in no way is meant to be hurtful or judgmental. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I liked your poem a lot. The premise of your piece is not a new idea. We have heard this idea put in many different ways and in many different words... but the meaning is the same. However, I love how you put it all together. I thought your piece was really poetic. The rhythm and rhyme married together well, along with the imagery being very vibrant, and the flow was easy to find and follow. I had no issues with your piece. I found it to be a really nice read.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your poem looked complete and polished

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Loss of Color  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Fire* Hello Joto-Kai ! I'm reviewing "Loss of Color today as part of your Nuclear package from "Invalid Item!As I am sure you know that my humble review is to help and encourage and not meant to be judgmental or hurtful. Please accept it in the spirit it is given. *Smile*

Poetry is one my favorite forms of writing, and my absolute favorite in ways to express myself. I think that it is in part because it is subjective, and if written well..the reader can find themselves in the words or can see something totally different than what the author had intended. I read your piece several times and I found it more profound with each read. I found your poem to be thought provoking and very visual. The imagery in this piece is outstanding.

My favorite part of your poem is very hard to choose. I thought each line complimented the others well. However, I think the last two stanza's are my favorite. Even though the first two are ripe with imagery, I felt that the last two stanza's were the most poetic. These lines seemed so raw and bare, that the feelings that were described in the first two stanza's became that much more vibrant. I felt that the insecurities, the doubts, the pain were all exposed here.

I didn't see any areas that I thought needed a second look or improvement. I thought your piece was really well written.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well hello....I am reviewing your story. Remember, my review is to help and encourage. It is my humble opinion, please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

What I liked about your story is that it is a sweet but not overly sweet love story; and not just about his love for Tara, but also about his love for magic. I found myself comparing the two loves and how he interacted with them. Obviously he was a lot more comfortable with magic than he was with Tara in the beginning. He took things a lot slower with Tara, whereas with the magic, he was more persistent. I also realized that he was rather clueless about them both. This is a long story, but I found that all the explanations were needed, because by the end of the story I felt like I knew Dave; almost understood him. I thought that your character development was good,..You gave us insight not just into Dave but Tara too.

As you have already told me, this piece does need to be edited. But there are only a few places that need a second look. Once you decide to edit again, you will see them.

My favorite part has to be where you described how her love for Shakespeare and spanish was learned in High School..which was very rare. I loved how you compared your two characters. I also liked the magic trick sequence. I could see it all happening. I thought the imagery in your piece was great.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. Although this particular piece was not my favorite of your port, I did enjoy it immensely. Write on, read on, rate on! Tary

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Elle , how are you? Well we are nearing the end of your package. I have chosen this poem to be the last one I review, and I will choose one of the poems I have reviewed to receive an awardicon. The awardicon will be the last of your surprises. I really hope that you have enjoyed them. I have enjoyed giving them! *Smile*

I loved this piece. We see this issue every day in our society. No one wants to take responsibility for their actions, and yet they feel the world owes them something. I thought your poem described this issue in a very creative way. I had no problems finding and following the rhythm. I liked the rhyme scheme and word choices were creative. You poem was easy to understand and relate-able.

I didn't see any thing that I thought needed a second look.

I refuse to pick a favorite stanza. They are all great, and it's impossible to pick.

This concludes my review. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello again! This is the third of five surprises that you have left to receive to conclude your package in the "A Dozen Delights Auction. I hope you have enjoyed your gifts so far!*Smile*

I love this image. I saw it on the Crazy Creative Colours Contest page and I thought it was beautiful and inspiring. I did not enter the contest, but I am glad to get the chance to read and see how you were inspired by this image. I loved your poem. I thought the nice easy flow emulated the nice easy feelings I get when I look at this image. I think that the imagery was written really well...even if the image had not been present. I also liked the rhythm and rhyme scheme that you chose. I thought that the poem complimented the image beautifully.

The only issue that I thought you might look at again was punctuation and capitalization. I happen to love punctuation in poetry sometimes. If done correctly, it can aid in the flow of your piece. With the same token it can also detract from your piece...making it hard to keep a nice rhythm if done incorrectly. For me capitalization and punctuation go hand in hand. I feel that if your use punctuation then, you should use the normal rules that apply when writing a sentence. In other words, I find it helps to only capitalize the beginning of a new thought or idea and not necessarily the beginning of each line. This of course is just my opinion.*Smile*

My favorite stanza of your piece is the last stanza. I thought it was beautifully written with the nice easy flow emulating the light whimsical floating blossom. The entire poem is great really. I thought that the last stanza ended your poem nicely, leaving your reader wishing they were there to experience what you just described. A beautiful poem to go with a beautiful image.

This concludes my review. I hope that my review was helpful and encouraging. Thank you again, for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Silent Memories  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Elle , it is me again...here with another review.

I found this poem to be very sad, obviously. I thought the depth of feeling was well written, along with the imagery, rhythm and rhyme scheme. I had no problem relating to or reading this poem. The flow was easy to find and follow.

I didn't see anything that I thought you might need to give a second look.

I cannot choose a favorite line or stanza. I thought all of the lines complimented each other well.

This concludes my review. Thanks again for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Elle . Well for the remaining suprises for your winning package in the "A Dozen Delights Auction, I have decided to do five reviews; awarding the piece of my choice a merit badge. Please understand that my review is just my humble opinion. It is meant to help and encourage and in no way is meant to be hurtful or judgmental. Please accept it in the spirit is given.*Smile*

I like this poem. It is short, but full of imagery and feeling. I thought that it was also thought provoking. I wondered why she there alone, what was she thinking, what has made her feel so empty that a bystander can also feel the void?

I didn't see anything that I thought you might consider changing except the format. Because it is very short, I feel that centering this piece will make it more powerful and pleasing to the eye to read.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Thanks again for your support of the WDC Power Reviewers Group. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, I found this piece when I was searching through your port for something to review. I like that you have a folder for pieces that do not have any reviews. These are the types of items I like to review, and this way makes them much easier to find. As you know that my review is just my humble opinion and is meant only to help and encourage. It is not meant to be hurtful or judgmental, so please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

Regret like a broken heart, is almost a tired subject in poetry; and it will continue to be written about (including by me). Because of this, it can sometimes where a little thin. However with your piece, I found that regret was written in a very beautiful way. I love that you referenced broken sails for this piece. I thought it was very poetic, inventive, original, and thought provoking. I had no problems reading your piece. It flowed well, the meter was easy to follow. The rhyme scheme is great, and also has nice imagery. I thought your piece was written really well.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. Your poem looks polished and complete.

I think the last two lines are my favorite. It ends your poem well, leaving us with something to think about. You put a poetic spin on an old saying.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi...A friend turned me onto your port..and this piece was the first that I picked to read. This is not really a review, but more of just dropping you a note, letting you know I read your piece. You are really comical, and I have asked myself some of the same things that you mentioned in your piece...I am looking forward to reading more in your port. *Smile* I know that you said you were new and didn't know what your standing is really on whether you are here or not here...but I hope you stick around for at least a while. Thanks for the read...!
Taryn
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Review of Cow Vice  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, I found your piece through the Random Read. My review is meant to help and encourage and in no way is meant to be judgmental or hurtful. Please accept it in the spirit is given.
I always find these type of contest interesting partly because I do not have the guts to enter. I really admire those who can stick to the guidelines and write their story well. I feel you have done that. Your story is very comical, and the imagery is clearly written. I thought you story was inventive and entertaining.
I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your story was written well.
This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of First Experience?  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I found your piece through the Random Read. My first thought was HA! *Laugh*I thought your piece was very comical. I enjoy this type of humor. I knew according to the byline that there was going to a misunderstanding somewhere...I just didn't know where..I thought you set the scene very well, and the imagery is clear.*Smile*
I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your piece was brilliant
This concludes my review. A short review for a short piece.*Smile*Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of You  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, I found your piece through the Random Read. As you know, my review is just my humble opinion.
I liked your piece. It started out almost passive, but by the end it had some punch. I like that. And how true it is....I do not know who said that time heals all wounds, but I find it to be a lie. For me time does not heal anything...depending on the pain...it just changes it into something else. And of course sometimes...the pain is just pain. I liked your poem a lot. I can feel your frustration clearly.
I didn't see any areas that need a second look. I though your poem was well written.
This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of Dad#1  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem through the Random Read. I liked your piece. I love short pieces that pack a punch at the end, and your piece does just that. It leaves me with food for thought with a sweet bite at the end. It kind of goes back to the old adage that says everything you need is never far from home. And in this day and age with so many absent fathers, it is nice to know that there are still little boys out there who aspire to be just like their fathers.
I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look.
This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Mountains  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem through the random read and I thought I would give it a review. Please note that my review is just my humble opinion and is not meant to be hurtful or judgmental; but meant only to help and be of encouragement. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.

I liked your poem and its' psalm-like format and rhythm. I thought these elements added to the mood of your poem. I thought your word choices and rhyme scheme were also good. I thought your poem was relate-able. Many of us can say that we have prayed or been on our knees asking God for a reprieve or deliverance from the situation that is causing our own personal hell. I also like that in your prayer, I did not see strong evidence of self pity or a "woe is me" attitude. It is hard to get away from that while praying sometimes, but it is a defeatist attitude and serves no purpose. I thought your poem was really well done.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look except in the last line. I think I would use "blessings" instead of 'power", but this is just my personal opinion. I thought your poem was written well.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Taryn

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Review of Spy v.s. Spy  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, I found your story on through the random read. Please understand that my review is to help and encourage. It is in no way meant to be a judgement or hurtful. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.

I normally do not review stories because I do not write them, so I do not feel qualified to review them. However when I came across yours I felt compelled to read and then review. I liked your story very much. I was pleasantly surprised to find that although it was very brief, it has a lot going for it. I thought your story was very different than most of the other stories I have read. I love the premise of your story, how you put it together, and how you ended it. I thought your piece was well thought out. I thought it was a nice twist that the person that they were watching was already being judged by not his actions, but just by his thoughts; very interesting.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought you did a really good job writing this piece.

My favorite part of your piece as I stated earlier is when the reader finds out that the person being watched is being judged and profiled by his thoughts and not even by something he's done. Brilliant.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Alone  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, I found your poem on the Read a Newbie Page and I thought I would give it a read and review. My review is meant to help and encourage, and is in now way meant to be judgmental. Please accept it in the spirit is given*Smile*
Loneliness is a crippling, acidic situation that unless forcibly removed can turn into a deep depression that is hard to escape. But on the other hand, it does make for the best poetry*Smile*
What I liked about your poem is the depth of emotion and how you clued us in on the quote. Such a beautiful quote to pattern you poem after. Good choice. My favorite stanza is the last one. It sums up your poem nicely with nice imagery and food for thought.
What I thought needed a second look is the format and your use of comma's. I think you poem (and the quote above it), would be served better centered. I would also do away with punctuation all together, including removing most if not all of the comma's present. Doing this will help with the flow and make it easier for your readers to concentrate on the feelings you are displaying rather than trying to figure out the end of the sentence or thought. I am a fan of punctuation, but I do think that depending on the format of the poem, it can hinder the overall feel of the poem. Doing away with the comma's, punctuation and centering this piece will make this an easier read.
This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Welcome to the WDC and I wish you much success. Write on! Taryn
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Dr Matticakes Myra ! I found your poem through the random read. I thought it was quite funny at first,and then it got a little sad. After reading this poem, all I could think of was my brother, who when I was young tormented, and demolished my toys. Ah...(sigh)memories..lol He would rip their limbs apart, set them on fire, and bury the parts all over the backyard. Thankfully, he stuck to toys and nothing living! I liked your poem. I thought it was very animated, original, and thought provoking. I say thought provoking because for me this piece has a moral. Be careful who you play with and how, because hurting them could cost a penance that you do not want to pay. I thought your poem was well written and I enjoyed it immensely.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought the meter, rhyme, and imagery were all written well.

I think the fifth stanza is my favorite and only because I laughed out loud at the visual that this stanza emitted. I thought it was fantastic. All of your stanza's are great.

This concludes my review. I hope that it was encouraging. Thank you so much for sharing.
Write on, read on, rate on...Taryn
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Review of AGONIZING LOVE  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Itchy Water~fictionandverse ! I came across your poem through the random read.*Smile*

What I like about your poem is there are several facets to it. There is hurt, anger, melancholy, betrayal, and hatred. The rhymes you have chosen work well and your word choices seem to more than aptly relay to your audience the issues you (narrator) faced. The imagery and mood is also written very well. If this is autobiographical, then I am truly sorry for the pain that you have gone through. Even if your audience has not experienced this kind of pain, they can still relate; you have expressed yourself very well with this piece.

Each stanza is great, but I think the last one is my favorite and how true it is. When you feel nothing but indifference then you really know that it is over. Anything else that is felt just feeds the love or feelings that are there, and the lines of reality can be easily broken. What is that saying...there is a thin line between love and hate? How true it is.

There is nothing that I think needs a second look. As always your work is well thought out, full of feeling, and polished.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for sharing and for everything you do here at the WDC. I appreciate ya!*Smile* Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of Space Outing  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Don Two . I found your poem through the random read and I'm glad I did!

I am also in love with outer space. The mystery and beauty of it all is the stuff the dreams are made of. I thought your poem embodied this idea very well. I thought the imagery, rhyme scheme, word choices, and meter were all fantastic. I could see myself or anyone...floating out in space, passing the planets and having conversations with them. Your poem is very visual. I like it a lot.*Smile*

My favorite part is hard to choose. I thought the entire piece was delightful. If I have to choose...then I choose the first eight lines. From the very beginning, you pull me into your love of outer space and just from those lines I had to stick around and read the rest of your poem.

I didn't find anything that I thought needed a second look. You have done a fabulous job with this poem. Thank you so much for sharing. I wish you much success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on!Taryn
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Hi! I found your poem through the random read.

What I liked about your poem is that this poem speaks of the mundane, of going through the motions and I think that your poem more than says it....it show it also. The simplicity of your poem lends itself to this fact. I am sure that everyone can relate to this poem because we all have to survive the day to day..and not only that but sometimes we find ourselves just going through the motions, not really living life as we would like or should. Good job expressing this idea.

What I thought needed a second look was your use of punctuation. Because of the brevity of the lines, I felt that using punctuation changed your flow just a bit. Normally I am all for punctuation, but in this case I think that your poem would be better served without it.

My favorite stanza is the fourth stanza because I feel that it describes my life right now. I work nights and sometimes all I feel that all I do is get up so I can hurry and get back into bed..lol

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for sharing. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Please write on, read on, rate on. Taryn
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Review of The Hunt  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi I found your poem through the random read.

I like that you wrote this for fun. Sometimes as writers we get caught up in guidelines and rules; and sometimes we forget that we started writing because it was fun.I also liked the fact that you wrote in another point of view other than your own..or from a human's perspective. I thought that the imagery and mood were written well in this piece.

What I thought needed a second look was spelling and sentence format. There are some run-on sentences and misspelled words throughout your piece. Correcting these will definitely polish up your piece and make it easier for your audience to read. Since this is prose and you are writing in complete sentences I would follow the rules that apply. In other words...if you are starting one thought on one line and continue it on the next, the next line should not begin with a capital letter. An example of this is your first two lines. I will not point out the misspelled words because I am sure you just haven't had time to edit.

My favorite stanza is the first one because it is sets a good mood for your piece and the imagery is great ( I think you meant ran instead of fan in the last line).

This concludes my review. I hope it was helpful and encouraging. Thank you so much for sharing. Write on, read on, rate on. Taryn
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Hi, I came across your poem through the random read and I am so glad I did! I thought your poem was very cute, funny, engaging, and original. I thought the rhyme scheme was perfect, word choice was great, and the imagery phenomenal. Really nice job.

My favorite part...hands down is the sixth stanza...I laughed out loud. I can read just that stanza and laugh out loud. LOVE IT. The visual for this stanza is awesome. Fantastic job.I have added this poem to my favorites.

Obviously there isn't anything that I think needs a second look.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for sharing. I really enjoyed the read. I wish you continued success here at the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on. Taryn
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Hi, I came across your poem through the random read. I see that this poem won a placement in a contest and I can see why.

This poem flows very well. I had no issues keeping a rhythm. Your word choices were good, the story line is good, and it held my attention from beginning to end. I thought you did a really nice job with this piece.

I couldn't choose a favorite part because each stanza was equally good.

This concludes my review. Thank you for sharing, I really enjoyed the read. I wish you continued success here on the WDC. Write on, read on, rate on.
Taryn
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Review of Anger Management  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, I came across your poem through the random read. I must say that my dark side loved it! *Smile*It just may have inspired my dark side to pick up a pen, instead of a hatchet...lol

When I read the poem, I expected something completely different than what I got. The title is great, but it leads me to think that you are working on your anger in what is considered a positive way. However, when you read the poem, you get a different spin. It is positive for your dark side, but not for your victim. I thought the title, the poem itself, the premise behind the poem, the imagery and rhyme scheme were all fantastic. Great job.

Obviously there is nothing that I could suggest to make it better. This concludes my review. Thank you so much for sharing. Write on, read on, rate on. Taryn
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