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Review of Androclus's Plea  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Well, I am not surprised that I liked this one too...*Smile* I thought the story was very cute and sweet. You really are a romantic aren't you?*Wink*. I thought your story was entertaining and moved quickly. I wanted to find out what happened ...so you hooked me...that's good. The only thing I could see that needed changing were there a few words that need a tense change and I think your hero's name was spelled wrong in the second paragraph. But other than that, I thought your story was really good..
Thank you for allowing me to read it.
Taryn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I thought I would drop by your port and find something to read, and I chose this one. I like this piece. The flow is very natural..so natural that it is like you are sitting here speaking to me (or your audience) face to face. I like that..It is very approachable, easy to understand..and is deep. It is something that I would say to my daughter...or myself. I didn't see anything that I felt needed to change..I think it is great as it is. I thank you for sharing and for giving me the pleasure of reading it. Happy writing! Taryn

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Review of Tire Swing  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Fire* Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse ! I'm reviewing "Tire Swing today as part of your Solar package from "Invalid Item!

What I liked about your poem:

I like how a simple title can automatically place you in a place or time. That is what your poem did for me. I was immediately transported to a hot summer day, with wind blowing through my hair, and laughter floating through the air. Tire swings are so simple, but can be so much fun. I thought your poem had nice imagery and was nicely written.

What I think needs improving:

The only thing that I thought needing improving isn't necessarily an improvement, but more like a preference. With all the wonderful imagery in this poem, I was left wanting a little more expression of feeling. This is just a preference, and didn't have any bearing on the rating.

Thank you for sharing your work and allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing. I hope my review was encouraging and helpful. Happy writing! Taryn

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Rated: E | (3.5)
*Confettib**Confettip*This is a Power Reviewer’s Anniversary Review!*Confettir**Confettiy*
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*Balloong**Balloonr*Happy Anniversary!*Balloonp**Balloony*
*Candleb*Congratulations on another year with the WDC!*Candlev*
For your anniversary I have decided to review
*Cakeb**Cakep*Love Sonnet Modern

As you know, this review is meant to help and encourage; so please receive it in the spirit that it is given. This review is only my opinion, and you can choose to take my advice or not. It is your work and your work should reflect you.
My rating:*Star**Star**Star**Halfstar*
What I like about your piece:I have never tried writing a sonnet. Not that I think they are hard, but I think they can be challenging. I congratulate anyone who gives it an honest effort, which you have. I like the premise of your poem and the depth of feeling it shows.
*Gifto**Gift**Giftp**Giftr**Giftb**Giftv**Gifty**Giftw*
What I think needs improvement:Well, as I've said, I've never written a sonnet. So, if I suggest something here that does not fall into the format that a sonnet requires, please forgive me.*Smile* I always suggest that if you are using complete sentences that you do not capitalize the first letter of every line. You only capitalize the beginning of every sentence. I also noticed that some of your rhymes are not true rhymes. I also found a couple of lines that seemed out of place or odd..For example:lines twelve and fourteen.
*Gifto**Gift**Giftp**Giftr**Giftb**Giftv**Gifty**Giftw*
My favorite part:The first stanza is my favorite. The rhyming is true, each line is cohesive with the others. It is also has good imagery.

Again, congratulations on another year here on the WDC. I hope my review is helpful and encouraging. Thank you for sharing it and for giving me the pleasure of reading your work.
Your fellow Power Reviewer Group Member
Taryn Sloane
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
POETRY REVIEWS BY TARYN

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Thank you for your request for a review to help fund my membership. I hope that you find my review helpful and sufficient. Remember that my reviews are to help and encourage so please accept my review in the spirit that it is given.


What I liked about your poem: I like the fact that it sticks with the true tradition of all the other epic Punk adventures. I like how the story comes full circle and didn't end the way I thought it would. I was almost positive you were going to say it was just one of his many deaths...considering he has nine lives.

*Poseyp**Poseyr**Poseyv**Poseyp**Poseyr**Poseyv**Poseyp**Poseyr**Poseyv*
What I think needs improving: Do I really need to say??{{/font}
*Rolleyes*
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My favorite part: For once it isn't hard to choose. The last stanza is my favorite because that is when the story comes turns around and surprises me. And although Punk is still an egotist, he has somewhat calmed down in this piece..maybe he is a little more afraid of death than he likes to let on...

*Flowert**Flowerb**Flowerp**Flowert**Flowerb**Flowerp**Flowert**Flowerb*
My rating:*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*


Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reviewing your work and sharing in the adventures of Punk (my favorite cat...who is much more than a cat). I hope my review is helpful and encouraging. Write on!
Taryn

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Rated: E | (5.0)
POETRY REVIEWS BY TARYN

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Thank you for your request for a review to help fund my membership. I hope that you find my review helpful and sufficient. Remember that my reviews are to help and encourage so please accept my review in the spirit that it is given.


What I liked about your poem: As you already know...I LOVE Punk...he's a typical cat. Pompous, holier than thou, uppity, and a smart ass. You did not disappoint with this poem. I laughed with this one as I did the others. The imagery was once again, on point. I like that Punk is true all the way thru to the end.. I love how you have personified String and Punk. Very well done.

*Poseyp**Poseyr**Poseyv**Poseyp**Poseyr**Poseyv**Poseyp**Poseyr**Poseyv*
What I think needs improving: Nothing. I think it's great as-is

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My favorite part: It is so hard to choose. I laughed out loud when Punk said he was a "mouse catcher, couch cutter, and darkness incarnate". But I think I like the sixth paragraph the best. I can hear the disgust from Punk clearly...he was shocked I'm sure when he got hit with the peroxide.. as fast as he is..

*Flowert**Flowerb**Flowerp**Flowert**Flowerb**Flowerp**Flowert**Flowerb*
My rating:*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*


Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reviewing your work. I hope my review is helpful and encouraging. Write on!
Taryn

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Wonderful!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I really enjoyed this. It is entertaining and very descriptive. I thought the flow of writing moved quickly (which I think is great). I like how this piece doesn't droll on. There isn't any mundane explanations or descriptions. I was sad to see it end. I wondered if he was going to have other problems to solve? I think there is enough depth to this story to make it a book. I would definitely want to read more. Ever think about it? The ribbon awarded to this piece is well deserved. Congratulations on a well written piece.
Taryn
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
OMG!*Laugh**Laugh**Laugh*(as I wipe the tears from my eyes) Absolutely awesome! Genius...you my friend have got to be one of the most originally creative people I have met. I laughed so hard at this....omg...and when I got to the part about singing "Sexual Healing" if you are having an impotence problem, I almost peed on myself....! So funny...you have no idea how badly I needed that. Last night at work proved to be the usual aggravating day...but man after reading that....my day got a lot better. Thank you for that..
Taryn
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Review of How could you...  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
All I can say is oh my...what you said and didn't say in not so many words is astounding. The images I conjure up while reading this encompasses so many scenarios. The feelings you audience feels from this is also a little overwhelming (especially if they are parents). Amazing. I wish I had that ability. I am always a little wordy...I feel..Is this autobiographical?
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I love this story. Through all the twists and turns, I never would have guessed how it was going to end. Very suspenseful and interesting, the story drew me in and I hated to see it end. I also liked how you started the story with something that seemed to have nothing in common with the story, but in truth it has. Nicely written. Thank you for sharing it, I enjoyed it.
Taryn
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well, if you can write poems like this without the inspiration from your muse; then my hat is off to you..Wow. I think this poem is great. The story you weave here is original. I liked how you talked about the characters from your other pieces in this poem. I didn't see anything that needed to be changed except I think you meant to write plain instead of plan in the last stanza first line. The only question I have is...
Who is Nicole?*Wink*
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The imagery in this poem is great. I found this poem to be profound and sad. At the end I found myself marveling at how small man is in the grand scheme of things, and yet can manage do to grand things; but at the same time can cause irreparable damage to something that seems so indestructible. I think this poem is great. And you say you're not a poet.(huh!)
Tayn
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Review of Punk's Tale  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Laugh* I love this Punk! He is so pompous and egotistical. I'm surprised that he doesn't speak of himself in third person. You need to do an epic of Punk and all of his fantastic battles and legendary journeys...it would be hilarious. You've got Punk and his nemesis String nailed...on to the next one!
Taryn
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Review of The Bet  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
The reason why I don't normally review stories is because if I can't get into the story, then I find myself trying to edit it; thereby ultimately changing the stories itself. I feel that writing stories are more complicated than writing poetry because of all that goes into writing a story. And since I have never written a story for anyone but myself, I don't feel like I have the right to judge.
Having said all that, I liked your story. You have managed to develop characters, invoke emotions, and show sexual tension without being raunchy.Your story held my attention from beginning to end. I liked your story because you did "show" without "telling", which I am trying to get better at. I also like the way you eluded to more at the end, to let your reader know that their story did not end with that scene. Nice job! I enjoyed it and I'm glad I read it. On to the next one.*Smile*
Taryn
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Review of Awardicon Envy  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I have thought these thought many times at some point or another. I quit entering contest for several months because I didn't see the point. Now days, I only enter if I feel really inspired. Most of the time I will check out a contest to just get inspiration, but don't enter it. I don't feel that my work really fits in anywhere, especially here (some of the reviews I've gotten prove it.) *Smile* You on the other hand, have nothing to worry about. The many awardicons and ribbons prove it! (I'm envious)*Wink*
I thought your poem is something EVERYBODY on this site can relate to....how many poets can say that?
Taryn
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Review of String  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi again,
I am here to return the favor of all your reviews with a few reviews. *Smile* When I visited your port, all I could say was WOW...there are ribbons and awardicons everywhere!*Smile*. So naturally I started looking for an item that didn't have an award or that many reviews. I always do this first, because I know that for me I would rather have something reviewed that hasn't been reviewed before; rather than the same items always getting reviews. But at the same time, a review is a review! *Smile*
I loved this poem. I thought it was funny, original and insightful. It was CLEARLY written from a cat's point of view. I can relate because I have my own "string" to contend with every day...*Smile*I thought this poem was genius because I never would have thought to write from the point of view of a cat. And to write about the relationship it has with string. I'm sure everyone has seen cat's play with string, and your poem tells us what goes on in their heads. Genius!
Thank you for sharing your work. I'm off to visit some more of your work. I'm having a blast!
Taryn

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Review of Of a perfect me  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, this review is apart of the Power Reviewers raid.
I liked your poem. I thought it was melodic and original. I think you more than adequately described the tug of war some people of with reality and fantasy. And no matter how much we would like for them to see things (and us) for what they really are, we have no control over how they see things. *Smile*
What I think needs improving: For me, the lower case "i's" that you used when referencing a person was a considerable distraction. They should always be capitalized when referencing a person. I think changing this would definitely change my rating(not that my opinion or rating matters), but I feel that it would polish it up.
My favorite part: The last ten lines are my favorite because it sums up your poem and concludes it nicely.
I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Please accept it in the spirit it is given. Thank you for sharing and thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. Write on! Taryn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, this review is apart of the Power Reviewers raid. I liked your poem.
I thought it was positive and comical. I wish I could be that positive whenever I have a round of bad luck.
*Smile*
What I think needs improving: Nothing. I think it's great!
My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because I have fantasized about telling my boss where he can go, how he can get there, and as loudly as I can.*Laugh*
Thank you for sharing and thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. Write on! Taryn
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Review of One Last Hero  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
HI, this review is apart of the Power Reviewers raid. I liked your poem. I thought the premise was original, the rhythm and rhyme were unforced and natural. I thought your description of your inner conflict was adequately described and with it you invoke sympathy from your readers.
What I think needs improving: In the second stanza fifth line," wether" should be "whether". In the third stanza, I would remove the comma after heart.
Other than, I think your poem is great. Thank you for sharing it and for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. Happy writing! Taryn
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hi, I saw your name on the lightening list and I thought I would raid your port for our group raid. I liked your poem because I can relate. I wrote a poem about this same issue
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I am a ...not even close to recovering self-proclaimed chocoholic.
*Smile*

What I liked about your poem: Obviously the subject of chocolate is a favorite of mine. I also thought the imagery you invoked was quite good.

What I think needs improving: I understand this is a freestyle poem, most of my poetry is of the same form; however I had a problem finding a nice flow to this piece. The rhythm was rather choppy for me. In line 15 cholat should be chocolate(think it was just a typo). Also because this piece is a free-style poem with out a definitive rhythm, I would do away with the punctuation. I think it may be part of the reason why finding a rhythm is a little difficult (at least for me).

My favorite part: My favorite part, hands down is the last eleven lines. It describes me to a T and I have done that very thing more than a dozen times over. *Laugh* I think you have really done nice job of describing how a chocoholic copes with things and the thought process they have. Really nice job. *Smile*

Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Happy writing! Taryn
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Review of Words  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am raiding your port for our group review raid! I don't believe I have been here before, so I am glad for the chance to check it out. I picked this poem because I have a poem almost by the same name in my port. I am always curious about the spin others can put on the same topic
What I liked about your poem was how the first word of every stanza starts with "word". I thought the creativity of your piece was outstanding, and the rhythm and rhyme were also good. I think you did well with this piece.
I don't see anything that I think needs improving. I think this poem is written well.
Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reviewing your work. I enjoyed it.Taryn
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Review of Fun With Synonyms  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm raiding your port! You have so many items!. But I finally chose this one, and I'm glad I did.
What I liked about this poem: I thought the premise was cute and original. I never would have thought to do this type of poem. I thought it was genius, and to use the word keister was comical. The poem held my complete attention from beginning to end. I thought the rhythm, rhyme scheme, and tone were all written well. I thought the imagery was fantastic. I smiled all the way through this piece. It really is cute!*Laugh*
What I think needs improvement: Nothing. I think it's great!
My favorite part: I can't choose. I liked it all..

Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work. I really enjoyed it. Write on! Taryn
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Review of Winter  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, I thought I would raid your port! You have so many items to choose from it is hard to figure out where to begin! But I figured it out.*Smile*

What I liked about your poem: It is very descriptive. You flood the six lines with lots of imagery. I love that because when I read something I like my brain to be stimulated by images too, not just words. I also liked the text color you chose,

What I think needs in improving: Nothing. I think it is great as it is.*Smile*

My favorite part: The first line is my favorite because it describes winter without a single hint to a holiday.

Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading your work.Happy writing! Taryn
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Review of Last Kiss  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
As I promised, I am reviewing this poem as a thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I also read a little of your bio. I found it interesting that you said that you dislike using punctuation in your poetry and yet in the poem I choose to review...what do I see but punctuation. So, now that I've gotten past that...on to the review.*Smile*.

What I liked about your poem: I think the selling point for this poem is the imagery and the situation you describe that everyone can relate to.


What I think needs improvement: I think that if you're going to use punctuation, you should probably follow the rules of punctuation. Meaning that since you used complete sentences then every line doesn't need to begin with a capital letter unless it is the beginning of a sentence. Also in the first stanza, third line: load should be loaded. I say that because every thing you've written in this poem is in the past tense except this word, so it sounds out of place. In the fifth stanza, I think you meant to put a comma or a question mark instead of a period at the fourth line.


My favorite part*Smile*: I like the last stanza the best because it summed up the entire poem in six short lines.The imagery and depth of feeling are all here in this stanza*Smile*


Thanks again for your review of my work, and thank you for the pleasure of reading yours. I hope you know that my review is only meant to help and not hurt; so please take it in the spirit it is given.Happy writing! Taryn ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group
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