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Review of Dandelions  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed your piece""Dandelions It spoke of the love God has for us and how He wanted us to spread His word and grow His love amongst His people by spreading His seed. I want to thank you for entering "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. I do hate that it has taken me this long to review your June 2021 entry. It is my fault that I'm late in awarding and reviewing the entries. I am still having health issues. Please, forgive me for not catching up sooner. I am awarding everyone who entered special gifts for being so patient with me this past year. It is my pleasure to award you 2nd Place for June 2021 contest. I appreciate your time and support.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed your piece""God’s Guidance will not Despair me It spoke of the love God has for us and how He wanted us to spread His word and grow His love amongst His people by spreading His seed. I want to thank you for entering "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. I do hate that it has taken me this long to review your June 2021 entry. It is my fault that I'm late in awarding and reviewing the entries. I am still having health issues. Please, forgive me for not catching up sooner. I am awarding everyone who entered special gifts for being so patient with me this past year.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed your piece""Growing God's Precious Garden It spoke of the love God has for us and how He wanted us to spread His word and grow His love amongst His people by spreading His seed. I want to thank you for entering "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. I do hate that it has taken me this long to review your June 2021 entry. It is my fault that I'm late in awarding and reviewing the entries. I am still having health issues. Please, forgive me for not catching up sooner. I am awarding everyone who entered special gifts for being so patient with me this past year.


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Review of The Gardener  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed your piece""The Gardener It spoke of the love God has for us and how He wanted us to spread His word and grow His love amongst His people by spreading His seed. I want to thank you for entering "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. I do hate that it has taken me this long to review your June 2021 entry. It is my fault that I'm late in awarding and reviewing the entries. I am still having health issues. Please, forgive me for not catching up sooner. I am awarding everyone who entered special gifts for being so patient with me this past year.


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Review of Poetry Archive  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed your piece""Gardener of God It spoke of the love God has for us and how He wanted us to spread His word and grow His love amongst His people. I want to thank you for entering "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. I do hate that you missed the deadline and entered in September 2021. It is kinda my fault as well, I was and still am having health issues. Please, forgive me for not catching this sooner. I am awarding everyone who entered special gifts for being so patient with me this past year.


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Review of Damon's Lilies  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello TCPrescott,

I don't usually read horror and try to stay away from watching it, but I do on occasion. We are celebrating Angus birthday this week, and I stumbled upon your portfolio and found this gem. I did find a few grammar and punctuation errors, and I will include them for you. I also found your piece written very well and feel like it could be a great candidate for a horror movie.

I hope you find my review helpful and respectful. It always helps to have a second pair of eyes helping out.

Disclaimer:


These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful; please disregard the rest because I'm not an expert reviewer.


1. Damon peeled Lillian's socks away, taking special care not to touch her toes, interfering with her body as little as possible. (It has been re-worded for clarification)

2. Her feet were pale and pink, just like the lily. In time they would look more like a white lily, but they were the perfect color for now. (It has been re-worded for clarification)

3. Before plucking the lily between her feet, he leaned down and inhaled deeply. (It has been re-worded for clarification)

4. Maybe later in the summer, Lillian would have gone out tanning, but for now, they were still as pale as fresh-fallen snow. (punctuation)

5. Feeling adventurous, he'd slipped the stem of that night's lily into her vagina and created what Damon considered to be the 'Holy Grail' of photographs. (remove comma)

6. That was the way his mother had held flowers, never by the stem but cradled carefully in the palm. (add a comma, and remove coma)

7. He longed to stroke her hair but refrained. (remove comma)

8. Disturbing this delicate equilibrium would be a crime—a sin, perhaps. (add a comma) It makes it more dramatic. With the pause!

9. The tissue surrounding her head was pink, and the blood had blossomed across the pillow—in the shape of a flower? (add a comma)

10. Inspiration took hold, and he drew Lillian's head up by a wad of silken blond hair. (add a comma)

Last but not least, I never saw that coming the way you ended it! I enjoyed your story and look forward to reading more of your work.


Thank you for sharing. I really enjoyed reading it.

Let your creativity flow!

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Review of Brittle Dance  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, a very powerful piece. It flows evenly throughout with a dramatic ending. I could picture the dance as they spun around to be surprised by the shards of glass under their feet. Coming to a horrifying stop. VERY POWERFUL piece!!!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey Shannon, I wanted to see if you would like to join us at ""My Secret Valentine" . I am looking for adorable Valentine shops to add, just like yours. Check it out and let me know, asap.

It is an adorable little shop that you have. I hope you join us. I liked several myself.

Hope to hear from you soon, LegendaryMask❤️
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Good evening The StoryMaster,

Dropping in to wish you a Happy WdC 21st Anniversary. I stumbled upon your survey "Guidelines to Great Reviewing - The Quiz and decided to take it and review it. I think that most of us do follow the guidelines that have been set. I think that it is an excellent idea to have guidelines to follow and found it inspiring to use.

I want to thank you for keeping this an encouraging site for all who join. You make it fun, safe, and a place everyone wants to be. Here's to many more years to come.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
    
WELCOME TO THE LIGHTHOUSE POETRY CONTEST


It is my pleasure to read and review your entry for "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. First, I would like to thank you for taking the time to enter the contest. I know that there are so many different contests here on WdC. I'm so pleased that you took the time to write and enter this contest. I hope that you enjoy my religious-based contest and return often. You may also enjoy "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest another religious-based contest of mine. It is nothing like sharing the joy, love, faith, and knowledge of our Heavenly Father.

I also noticed that it is your anniversary this month. We want to wish you a wonderful WdC Anniversary from "Anniversary Reviews.
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Title:

The title "GROWING GOD'S GARDEN: sharing His love is a delightful choice for your piece.

Imagery & Emotions:

When I came up with this prompt this month I knew that I would get some creative pieces. I don't think we ever think about us being a gardener in God's garden, and I don't think we realize that we plant seeds wherever we go by our actions, words, and by the way, we present ourselves to the world.

I love the play with your words and seeing how you create the garden around you, family, and friends. You have an amazing garden that surrounds you and those you love. I'm so glad that I'm included in it.

Suggestions for Correction:

I have included a few suggestions for corrections. You will find them in red. They are simple ones that will make your piece move smoothly. I enjoyed your piece very much.

1. GOD and JESUS give me stories: His garden to show {I'm not sure if you need : in your piece.}
2. SEEDS sprout within their hearts, and His glory shows {needed a comma}
3. GARDENER in the GARDEN growing his love given freely {I think you wanted to use freely not free. To ryhme with willingly}

In Conclusion:

My favorite line is:

SEEDS sprout within their hearts, and His glory shows

I love this line because I know how it feels to feel His glory shining through me. I can still feel that glow from the very first day when I let Him in. It burst from my heart into every inch of my body. That feeling is nothing I ever want to forget. His love shines through from that seed that was planted by my baby sister and her church. I shall forever be grateful to them. This line reminds me of that glorious day.

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing, and writing about the Bible.


May you be blessed always,
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Review of The Steps  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It is my great pleasure to wish you a

*Star* Happy 🥂 Anniversary *Star*

Here at WdC and may you have many many more.
I thought while I was here, I would give you an anniversary review to help you celebrate a milestone.


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Disclaimer:


These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer by no means.


Title:


Your title "The Steps really caught my attention. Great name, and it turned out not to be what I thought it would be.
I thought it was about stepfamilies.


Storyline, plot and characters:


The storyline is very imaginative and using steps as characters, awesome. I never saw it coming that they would be the actual characters in it. A nice little twist.

Imagery & Emotions:


I love how you had them come alive and have a conversation between themselves. It's not like they could go anywhere if they didn't like the conversation. And remembering the past with the family memories was priceless. I love walking down memory lane with them. Excellent job on making this a wonderful, stimulating read.

Suggested Corrections, Grammer, Punctuation:

1. Step Three was the historian of the group and reveled in remembering things that some would rather forget.
2. Sure, the house has sheltered them all these years and given them a place to live, relax, and grow.
3. But who’s been here all this time also, giving them access to the meadow beyond you, Arch.
4. “You know, I think you’re right, Four, we are important, just not as important as we’d like to be.

They are some quick, easy suggestions. I love having extra eyes look over my work. I guess that's why I send them to you sometimes... lol.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

And the meadow, listening in on all the conversation, just grinned a Cheshire Cat’s grin, reached out his grassy arms, and hugged each of them.

I envisioned the tall green grass swaying back and forth in the light breeze by you showing me the meadow hugging the steps made this appear so real.

Thank you for sharing this enlightening story. It makes your imagination soar with the possibilities. I really enjoyed reading it, and it was a delight. "Happy WdC Anniversary, Jim! We love you very much."


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Review of LoveBound  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
   

You're a Winner


It is my pleasure to read and review your winning package of the "Mad Hatter's Tea Party that you bid on. We appreciate your support and generous donation. This is the second of three reviews that I will be reviewing and I will give an Awardicon to the best of the three.

Disclaimer:


I will give to you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed and some advice, these are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful and please disregard the rest for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "LoveBound caught my attention, well anything about love does!

Rhythm & Flow:


The rhythm and flow moved smoothly throughout making it a delight to read.

Imagery & Emotions:


I drift off to a starry night in the Sierra Mountains holding hands with my love. Daring not to move and break the moment captured in my breathe. You capture your readers so easily taking them to those memories they thought were lost forever. I love reading your work Brian because I'm never disappointed when I do. You always lead me somewhere. Thank you for always showing your readers what they need to see.

Grammar Corrections and Errors if any are needed!
Here are the suggestions for change, I only put the corrected version in red. It will make the piece move even smoother.

1. that begs the clouds to stay white.
My only suggestion it seemed incomplete a little.

Conclusion:

My favorite line is:
We pick ourselves up, play like the birds,
mimic their sounds; find beauty in everything
earthbound, playful like our winged love.

It's so innocent sounding, like child play. Perfectly said.

I want to thank you for supporting "Mad Hatter's Tea Party. It amazes me how much we all pull together in this community to help one another.


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Review of Anticipating Dawn  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
   

You're a Winner


It is my pleasure to read and review your winning package of the ""Mad Hatter's Tea Party" that you bid on. We appreciate your support and generous donation. This is one of three reviews that I will be reviewing and I will give an Awardicon to the best of the three.


Disclaimer:


I will give to you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed and some advice, these are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful and please disregard the rest for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""Anticipating Dawn" caught my attention and I wondered who was anticipating dawn.

Rhythm & Flow:


It moved smoothly throughout each stanza as a continuous conversation between two friends.

Imagery & Emotions:

This was a pleasant read and took me back to those summers I spent in my youth. I sit and ponder on those days gone by now. Thinking of that youthful girl I once was. You did an excellent job in capturing me and transporting me back into time. That's what makes you an excellent writer.


Grammar Corrections and Errors if any are needed!
Here are the suggestions for change, I only put the corrected version in red. It will make the piece move even smoother.

1. evening is spent
2. porch, and
Your comma was in the wrong place. I've done that a time or two.

Those are my only two suggestions. Other than that it is an excellent piece.

Conclusion:

My favorite line is:
anticipation inspires vision,
but nothing like
the color of the sky at daybreak

I have spent many sunrises after I had gotten off of work watching the most colorful sunrises I have ever witnessed in my life. God's wonderful artwork for all to witness. He is a Master at painting the Most Magnificent masterpieces.

I want to thank you for supporting ""Mad Hatter's Tea Party" It amazes me how much we all pull together in this community to help one another.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey Cuz,

Here is the review you requested me to look at. This is a cute informative story. I like the images that you inserted, you will see that I deleted some but added some in other areas. I also edited them a bit spaced them to the end of the sentence and removed some. So you have a more balanced piece or uniformed look, however you want to look at it. You will see that I reworded a few things as well to have them sound smoother. I love the pictures that you drew and look forward to seeing them all colored.

I love the images going to the next page. Cool effect.

Overall: A cute story, imaginary awesome, just needs fine-tuning.



Chapter One: Ants Work Hard

Hello, I am, Mr Ant! In case you didn't notice, I am an 🐜 ant. There are a few things humans can learn from us ants, and I am here to teach you. I figured I should introduce myself before we get started. I am happy to meet all of you.

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The first thing we will learn in chapter one of this book is that ants work very hard. All of these guys are my friends and family members. Together, we work hard to maintain our anthill. It takes a lot of hard work to maintain an anthill.🐜

We have a 👸 queen who runs our colony that lives in our anthill and makes sure we have babies (place a baby image here) to take care of. A colony is what you would call all of us together. Our babies have to all be kept at a certain temperature 🌡 or they will die. They also have to be fed 🍼 so they can grow up to become big strong worker ants.🐜 Some of the babies will become more queens.👸👸 Depending on the size of our colony, we may need more than one. Sometimes the new queens will go off to start their own colonies.🐜

The bigger and stronger ants go out to look for food.🐜 They also protect our colony from predators who would harm us and destroy our home.🐜🐜🐜

Click on the picture below to go to the next page.

Image of the anthill, you might put a few ants in there...lol.

Our anthill is kind of like a 🏠 house. Only, our home is usually made in the ground. It also has several rooms like a house has bedrooms. The anthill has small passageways from room to room like a house has hallways. We only have one entrance from the top. There are a lot of us, and there are a lot of rooms in our anthill. 🐜🐜🐜

We have all these separate rooms.🐜 We mostly just take care of the 🍼 babies inside the anthill.🐜 Of course, we can take a rest here when needed and we can come here for shelter when it is storming or there is a threat to our safety outside.🐜🐜🐜

Ant babies start out as eggs laid by the queen or queens. Then they become larvae. At this stage they may shed their skin several times before they become a pupa. The larvae live off the regurgitated food of adults.🐜

Pupa are in a small cocoon until they emerge as adult ants. The adults begin working to help gather food and maintain the colony or the queens assume their role of laying eggs or go start their own colonies.🐜🐜🐜

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I love the image of Sarge Ant carrying a leave back to the hill. Have you ever watched a line of ants carrying food back. It is amazing what they can do.

This is Sarge Ant. He is our strongest worker ant.🐜 He can carry up to 20 times his weight. He is one very strong ant. He sometimes has to carry the food he finds a very long way back to the anthill.

Most of his super strength is in his jaws. This is what allows him to carry such heavy objects.

Ants will eat leaves and other types of food. They prefer sweet sugary items. Often they will leave a scent trail for other ants to follow when they find a good food source. This is why a lot of times you will see ants traveling in a single file line. They are following the scent trail that was left for them by the Sarge Ant.

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Click on the image below to go back to the beginning of chapter 1.

Love the artwork. Not, a bad artist, you go girlfriend!


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Rated: E | (3.5)
    

WELCOME TO THE LIGHTHOUSE SHORT STORY CONTEST

It is my pleasure to read and review your entry for "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest. First, I would like to thank you for taking the time to enter the contest. I know that there are so many different contests here on WdC. I wanted to take "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests to a new level and designed a short story contest to allow us to share testimonies and feelings in our faith. I'm so pleased that you took the time to write and enter it. I hope that you enjoy my religious-based contests and return often. It is nothing like sharing the joy, love, faith, and knowledge of our Heavenly Father.

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Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

A little background on how I review others work:

I want to let you know that I do not review like most people. I, for one, have a unique contest. It is about God and you, your feelings for Him, and the things He does in your lives. I can’t take that away from you, but I can help you grow in the gift He has given you. I will provide you with input to help your story be a powerful testimony for others to read. I don’t want to cross any lines because this is your testimony, not mine.

I use a grammar app that helps me tremendously, and I would like to share it with others as a gift. I will give you an in-depth review of your story. This is by no means a reflection on your work. It is my opinion only, and you may use it or not. It is totally left up to you if you wish to use the changes. I have learned so much these past two years by using Grammarly. I feel more confident in my writing. When I came to WdC four years ago not knowing much about writing, but I have always wanted to write for many years. I needed somewhere to learn, and I stumble upon Writing.com. The best thing I have ever done for myself. I even have recommended it to family and friends who have joined.

When I judge a contest, I have to take many factors into play, how well it is written, grammar, punctuation, passive voice vs. active voice {I had to look those up myself}, if it is too wordy, and a few other things. I keep in mind that this is your story, your testimony, and it has to be your words that I use to make it a powerful message. I hope not to offend anyone with the reviews I give.


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Title:

The title "All Things Work Out For My Good is a true statement for all of us.

Imagery & Emotions:

I truly hate this happened to you and pray that the scars have healed and He has given you the peace in your heart.
I can relate to the feelings that come from a rape. I won't go into detail here. Your testimony hits too close to home for our family. Unfortunately, in cases like these, your readers can relate to the numbness, fear, shame, confusion, guilt, anger, so many emotions that go with rape. Especially when it is someone whom you trust.

Which cousin are you talking about? Must be on your dad's side. I don't recall anyone working at the records building in OK City. I know that it would have been a shock to realize that you could have been injured or worse. I'm glad that she is ok.
There are times in our lives when it seems we are alone until we realize all we had to do is reach up to Him. To feel all the comfort, love, strength, and compassion that He offers to us.
In Conclusion:

Distractions and/or Errors: The corrections are just corrections, not meaning that your story is not excellent. The revisions are intended to make it stronger. The corrections in the whole sentence were passive, and I was instructed to rewrite them by Grammarly to make it in an active voice. I found 20 errors in your short story. The following are suggestions for making your piece stronger and less distracting with grammar and punctuation errors. They are more than one correction in some sentences. I added the whole sentence to help you find it easier when/if you make changes.

1. And we know that all things work together for good to them that love God, to them who are called according to his purpose.
2. I love God, and I am called according to his purpose.
3. An ex-boyfriend raped me.
4. He had lured me outside before I knew what was happening.
5. I won't go into full details here, but what happened during this experience makes the difference in this story.
6. I would slip in and out of consciousness while he had his way with me.
7. Somehow, I ended back up in my body, gasping for air.
8. I had been told later that the ex-boyfriend only spent three weeks in jail for his act of violence towards me.
9. I was in shock and in a daze for several weeks after it happened.
10. All I know is I had seen a guy that looked like my ex-boyfriend at the technical school I was in at the time, and the memory and realization of what had happened to me came flooding back.
11. As horrible as it was, this event turned out for my good because I was able to fully experience what it was like to be washed in the blood of the Lamb.
12. He was able to save many people from a huge famine, including his brothers, who had sold him into slavery.
13. He was able to forgive his brothers because he realized what they had meant for his harm.
14. God had planned and used it for the good of many people.
15. Another memory takes me back to the Oklahoma City bombing at the Federal Building in 1995.
16. A cousin who would have normally been at work in the Journal Records building across the street from the Federal Building.
17. However, she happened to have been at the courthouse 5 blocks away.
18. If she would have been in her office at work, she may have been hit by broken glass and shrapnel as the windows were blown out of her office.
19. Time and time again, I have seen this verse lived out.
20. God is good all the time, and always has my best interest at heart.

I hope this helps you. As I said before, I am not a professional reviewer. I am here to help you sharpen your skills. I by no means am a perfect author myself. I have the Grammarly app, and it has helped me out tremendously these past few years. It has sharpened my skills, and I want to freely and lovingly share them with others. If you have any questions, please feel free to ask.

ATTENTION: I want to introduce you to an incentive program that I have designed to encourage others to make the edits and gain an upgraded Awardicon. If you make the suggested corrections at your own discretion because it is your work, not mine. But, remember I have used your words. If you place in the contest, I will give you a 25k Awardicon instead of a 10k. I have not forgotten the rest of you! If you do the corrections, I will give you my new Exclusive MB in the works with CR's included. I will also change your rating to reflect a higher rating.

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing your testimony, and writing about the Bible. It is my pleasure to award you "Honorable Mention" for March 2021 "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest
"Honorable Mention"
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Rated: E | (4.0)
    

WELCOME TO THE LIGHTHOUSE SHORT STORY CONTEST

It is my pleasure to read and review your entry for "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest. First, I would like to thank you for taking the time to enter the contest. I know that there are so many different contests here on WdC. I wanted to take "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests to a new level and designed a short story contest to allow us to share testimonies and feelings in our faith. I'm so pleased that you took the time to write and enter it. I hope that you enjoy my religious-based contests and return often. It is nothing like sharing the joy, love, faith, and knowledge of our Heavenly Father.

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Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

A little background on how I review others work:

I want to let you know that I do not review like most people. I, for one, have a unique contest. It is about God and you, your feelings for Him, and the things He does in your lives. I can’t take that away from you, but I can help you grow in the gift He has given you. I will provide you with input to help your story be a powerful testimony for others to read. I don’t want to cross any lines because this is your testimony, not mine.

I use a grammar app that helps me tremendously, and I would like to share it with others as a gift. I will give you an in-depth review of your story. This is by no means a reflection on your work. It is my opinion only, and you may use it or not. It is totally left up to you if you wish to use the changes. I have learned so much these past two years by using Grammarly. I feel more confident in my writing. When I came to WdC four years ago not knowing much about writing, but I have always wanted to write for many years. I needed somewhere to learn, and I stumble upon Writing.com. The best thing I have ever done for myself. I even have recommended it to family and friends who have joined.

When I judge a contest, I have to take many factors into play, how well it is written, grammar, punctuation, passive voice vs. active voice {I had to look those up myself}, if it is too wordy, and a few other things. I keep in mind that this is your story, your testimony, and it has to be your words that I use to make it a powerful message. I hope not to offend anyone with the reviews I give.


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Title:

Your title "Dousing the Flames really caught my attention and is very fitting.

Imagery & Emotions:

I can relate to how you feel about getting others sick. Except I'm on the other side of it. I quarantined myself due to my autoimmune system. Sometimes I would be so calm and other times when I had to go out to get supplies I would panic when someone would come near me. I do most of my shopping online and have it delivered or I will do curbside pickup. I rarely go inside if I can get away from doing it.

I do watch Charles Stanley online for my church. I do miss going to church, though. I can understand why you would be concerned for those at church. You are a sweet person who cares so much about others. Missing the holidays can be very disappointing. I missed a lot during these past two years.

Dousing the flames are the right words to use for this piece. Our worries come up and when we talk to God and use the Bible verses to help us they go away. I use Psalms 91 a lot, but I use Psalms when I need assurance, love, strength, and comfort. The words seem to soothe my soul. He is my Rock and Fortress.
In Conclusion:

Distractions and/or Errors: The corrections are just corrections, not meaning that your story is not excellent. The revisions are intended to make it stronger. The corrections in the whole sentence were passive, and I was instructed to rewrite them by Grammarly to make it in an active voice. I found 11 errors in your short story. The following are suggestions for making your piece stronger and less distracting with grammar and punctuation errors. They are more than one correction in some sentences. I added the whole sentence to help you find it easier when/if you make changes.

1. My OCD (Obsessive-Compulsive Disorder) brain got stuck on the idea, and I worried about it every day.
2. I decided to talk to my mom since she's a retired nurse.
3. I wiped [c:red}the tears from my eyes at the thought of not seeing my family and my brother's beautiful new house.
4. "I don't want you to have to be quarantined if I test positive."
5. We will be there in about a half-hour.
6. We love you," she said, and gave me a big hug.
7. After a nearly five-hour wait, they called me back.
8. A couple of days later, I got a phone call.
9. Despite the negative test, I continued to worry that I would get someone sick.
10. Now, every time I start to worry, I remind myself that I have had two tests, two doctors, and a nurse says I don't have it.
11. I hope that if anyone else with OCD reads this, that it can help them and break the stigma.

I hope this helps you. As I said before, I am not a professional reviewer. I am here to help you sharpen your skills. I by no means am a perfect author myself. I have the Grammarly app, and it has helped me out tremendously these past few years. It has sharpened my skills, and I want to freely and lovingly share them with others. If you have any questions, please feel free to ask.

ATTENTION: I want to introduce you to an incentive program that I have designed to encourage others to make the edits and gain an upgraded Awardicon. If you make the suggested corrections at your own discretion because it is your work, not mine. But, remember I have used your words. If you place in the contest, I will give you a 25k Awardicon instead of a 10k. I have not forgotten the rest of you! If you do the corrections, I will give you my new Exclusive MB in the works with CR's included. I will also change your rating to reflect a higher rating.

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing your testimony, and writing about the Bible. It is my pleasure to award you "2nd Place Winner" for March 2021 "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest

"*Trophyb* 2nd Place Winner"

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Review of My Window To Life  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
    

WELCOME TO THE LIGHTHOUSE SHORT STORY CONTEST

It is my pleasure to read and review your entry for "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest. First, I would like to thank you for taking the time to enter the contest. I know that there are so many different contests here on WdC. I wanted to take "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests to a new level and designed a short story contest to allow us to share testimonies and feelings in our faith. I'm so pleased that you took the time to write and enter it. I hope that you enjoy my religious-based contests and return often. It is nothing like sharing the joy, love, faith, and knowledge of our Heavenly Father.

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Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

A little background on how I review others work:

I want to let you know that I do not review like most people. I, for one, have a unique contest. It is about God and you, your feelings for Him, and the things He does in your lives. I can’t take that away from you, but I can help you grow in the gift He has given you. I will provide you with input to help your story be a powerful testimony for others to read. I don’t want to cross any lines because this is your testimony, not mine.

I use a grammar app that helps me tremendously, and I would like to share it with others as a gift. I will give you an in-depth review of your story. This is by no means a reflection on your work. It is my opinion only, and you may use it or not. It is totally left up to you if you wish to use the changes. I have learned so much these past two years by using Grammarly. I feel more confident in my writing. When I came to WdC four years ago not knowing much about writing, but I have always wanted to write for many years. I needed somewhere to learn, and I stumble upon Writing.com. The best thing I have ever done for myself. I even have recommended it to family and friends who have joined.

When I judge a contest, I have to take many factors into play, how well it is written, grammar, punctuation, passive voice vs. active voice {I had to look those up myself}, if it is too wordy, and a few other things. I keep in mind that this is your story, your testimony, and it has to be your words that I use to make it a powerful message. I hope not to offend anyone with the reviews I give.


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Title:

Your title "My Window To Life really caught my attention as I read more. I understood why you choose the title.

Imagery & Emotions:

I can't imagine what it would be like at such an age to go through what you did. When I was 5 my appendix ruptured and gang green had set in by the time they diagnosed me. I remember laying in the nursery in a crib, wondering why they had put me in a crib. I was scared, I hurt so bad and no one could figure out what was wrong.

How old were you when you had the accident on the bicycle?

I'm glad that your Angel of mercy came to visit you and gave you strength and comfort. It is the most wonderful thing to have them ease the fear that overcomes you. I have had them ease my fears many times. It is nothing like it. The calmness that you feel inside is nothing but sheer peace.
In Conclusion:

Distractions and/or Errors: The corrections are just corrections, not meaning that your story is not excellent. The revisions are intended to make it stronger. The corrections in the whole sentence were passive, and I was instructed to rewrite them by Grammarly to make it in an active voice. I found 7 errors in your short story. The following are suggestions for making your piece stronger and less distracting with grammar and punctuation errors. They are more than one correction in some sentences. I added the whole sentence to help you find it easier when/if you make changes.

1. My mind slowly began to clear, and my eyes focused.
2. While these things were going through my mind, I heard a voice coming from the dark.
3. When I looked up, someone was standing near me and assuring me that everything will be okay.
4. I felt my body strengthen, and the pain left. I rang the buzzer for the nurse.
5. I believed in God; in fact, it was his fault I was in this mess.
6. They say the sweat on your hands is the strongest glue in the world, bonding you to the pew and keeping one from going forward.
7. About fifteen years later, He chose to heal my injury totally.

I hope this helps you. As I said before, I am not a professional reviewer. I am here to help you sharpen your skills. I by no means am a perfect author myself. I have the Grammarly app, and it has helped me out tremendously these past few years. It has sharpened my skills, and I want to freely and lovingly share them with others. If you have any questions, please feel free to ask.

ATTENTION: I want to introduce you to an incentive program that I have designed to encourage others to make the edits and gain an upgraded Awardicon. If you make the suggested corrections at your own discretion because it is your work, not mine. But, remember I have used your words. If you place in the contest, I will give you a 25k Awardicon instead of a 10k. I have not forgotten the rest of you! If you do the corrections, I will give you my new Exclusive MB in the works with CR's included. I will also change your rating to reflect a higher rating.

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing your testimony, and writing about the Bible. It is my pleasure to award you "1st Place Winner" in the March 2021 "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest

"*Trophyg* 1st Place Winner"

May you be always blessed,
Let your creativity flow!


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Review of There Is No God?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
    

WELCOME TO THE LIGHTHOUSE POETRY CONTEST


It is my pleasure to read and review your entry for "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. First, I would like to thank you for taking the time to enter the contest. I know that there are so many different contests here on WdC. I'm so pleased that you took the time to write and enter this contest. I hope that you enjoy my religious-based contest and return often. You may also enjoy "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest another religious-based contest of mine. It is nothing like sharing the joy, love, faith, and knowledge of our Heavenly Father.

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Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "There Is No God?" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

Your piece moves smoothly throughout capturing your readers to the end.


Imagery & Emotions:

You painted a picture of what it would be like if there was no God from beginning to the end. I could picture the chaos and mayhem amongst the people and the confusion there would be. I found no errors of any kind. Excellent job in showing others what it would be like without God in our lives.

In Conclusion:

My favorite line is:

Life would be out of control and full of curses.

There would be so much pain, chaos, sickness, confusion, among many other things. A world without God would be life without peace, comfort, love, tranquility, among many joys and solitude. You did an excellent job in describing what it would be like. I thank God for all He does for us in return.

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing, and writing about the Bible. It is my pleasure to award you 1st Place Winner for March 2021 "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
    

WELCOME TO THE LIGHTHOUSE POETRY CONTEST


It is my pleasure to read and review your entry for "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. First, I would like to thank you for taking the time to enter the contest. I know that there are so many different contests here on WdC. I'm so pleased that you took the time to write and enter this contest. I hope that you enjoy my religious-based contest and return often. You may also enjoy "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest another religious-based contest of mine. It is nothing like sharing the joy, love, faith, and knowledge of our Heavenly Father.

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Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title ""Life Without Jesus" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I enjoyed reading this piece. The rhythm and flow moved swiftly from one line to the next making it a delightful read.


Imagery & Emotions:

You made this piece come alive with the raw emotions that would make life without God unbearable, to say the least. You had every aspect covered of what it would be like without Him. Excellent job in showing others what it would be like. I found one tiny error. You need a comma after answers, line seventeen. Other than that it is perfect.


In Conclusion:

My favorite line is:

When my world fills with chaos and strife
there is only turmoil - no peace given to my life


I wouldn't know what to do if there was no God, and I had to struggle without peace in my soul. It is a very harsh world that we live in today. Not knowing God would be like no breath to breathe.

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing, and writing about the Bible. Congratulations, it is my great pleasure to award you 2nd Place Winner in March 2021 entry for "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
    

WELCOME TO THE LIGHTHOUSE POETRY CONTEST


It is my pleasure to read and review your entry for "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. First, I would like to thank you for taking the time to enter the contest. I know that there are so many different contests here on WdC. I'm so pleased that you took the time to write and enter this contest. I hope that you enjoy my religious-based contest and return often. You may also enjoy "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest another religious-based contest of mine. It is nothing like sharing the joy, love, faith, and knowledge of our Heavenly Father.

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Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title ""No Jesus, No Peace" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

The rhythm and flow run smoothly throughout your piece. Making this a very delightful read for your readers.


Imagery & Emotions:

Your piece speaks volumes of the pain and turmoil that we would be in. With no one to turn to for peace. In today's world I find the only place to have peace is in my home alone with everything turned off, no sounds to enter into my mind. Utterly complete silence. I can relate to searching for that peace of mind. The peace that only truly comes from God. In our souls deep within. I find so much when I go there, joy, happiness, and a smile or two. You tell your readers of the chaos that would be if there wasn't anyone to turn to. Excellent job. I found one error and an easy fix. 1. By sin, I.
In Conclusion:

My favorite line is:

No one hears my heartfelt prayers.
No still small voice does speak.
No one to guide my daily steps.
My future is quite bleak.

Without God there would be no one to hear our pleas and the silence in return. How our hearts would be shredded to pieces. We would be left heartbroken. The pain would be too hard for one to bear. Indeed it would be very bleak.

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing, and writing about the Bible. It is my pleasure to award you 3rd Place Winner for March 2021 "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests.


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Review of Construction  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
    

WELCOME TO THE LIGHTHOUSE POETRY CONTEST


It is my pleasure to read and review your entry for "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. First, I would like to thank you for taking the time to enter the contest. I know that there are so many different contests here on WdC. I'm so pleased that you took the time to write and enter this contest. I hope that you enjoy my religious-based contest and return often. You may also enjoy "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest another religious-based contest of mine. It is nothing like sharing the joy, love, faith, and knowledge of our Heavenly Father.

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Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title ""Construction" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

Your rhythm moves smoothly throughout your piece. Making this an excellent read for all your readers.


Imagery & Emotions:

It makes you wonder what if they hadn't eaten the apple to start with. Cain wouldn't have murdered his own brother and there wouldn't be chaos in the world we know. I destroyed it once with Noah. It was overly evil then. Does that mean that we are not even to that point today? Very scary thought, isn't it? You have several stanzas I liked in telling your story. When {In Chaos, Job decried the Lord} should you have added; of the Lord? That kinda threw me off. I looked up the meaning of decried: To condemn as wrong or reprehensible. To express disapproval of a person, denounce. I think leaving out that one word changing its meaning. I actually thought Job decried to the Lord before I looked up its meaning. Great job! I did find a few errors, quick fixes. 1. My Son, (add comma) I'll 2. one of war (remove comma) and pain 3. Job decried (of) the Lord


In Conclusion:

My favorite line is:

"God, I fear I could not say
what life would be without Your sway."

Without His sway, I love it. I'm sure God even knows how to sway in some ways... lol I'm sure He has a good sense of humor dealing with all of us. I even laugh at myself most days.

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing, and writing about the Bible.



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Rated: E | (4.0)
    

WELCOME TO THE LIGHTHOUSE POETRY CONTEST


It is my pleasure to read and review your entry for "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. First, I would like to thank you for taking the time to enter the contest. I know that there are so many different contests here on WdC. I'm so pleased that you took the time to write and enter this contest. I hope that you enjoy my religious-based contest and return often. You may also enjoy "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest another religious-based contest of mine. It is nothing like sharing the joy, love, faith, and knowledge of our Heavenly Father.

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Disclaimer:

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Title:

Your title ""This World Without God" along with your sub-description of your title, really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

Your piece moved effortlessly from stanza to stanza making this an inspiration to all your readers.


Imagery & Emotions:

I can truly see that you have thought this one through. A world perilous without God in it. You painted a picture to one's imagination of what could very well be hell on Earth. I imagined the world on fire, destruction everywhere, fighting, killing, chaos, pain, and sorrow. I hope that I never witness hell on Earth, myself. A job well done.


In Conclusion:

My favorite line is:

Your Godless world can't save.


Although we know that there is God who we cherish deeply. I could never truly imagine a world without God in it knowing what I know today. You had a few errors as follows:

1. it sacrifices Earth(no comma) and sky.
2. It's feeding on your flesh.
3. "No, Jesus near, please start to scream {Grammarly has a second comma.}

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing, and writing about the Bible.



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I noticed that "Christmas Greetings has been nominated for a "Invalid Item in the Best Shop category. It is an honor to review and rate it. As a Nominee myself, it is so exciting to be nominated by our fellow peers. Congratulations on your nomination into the "The Quills

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I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

Originality:

I found a shop with amazing original Christmas images that are dated back to when I was a girl. Your opening image of Santa was a trip back into time. Focusing on others to cheer and delight them when things have been less than normal.

Organization:

It is a very organized shop. You have a strong opening explaining your goal in helping the community, a sense of urgency within the community to cheer others up, and end it with a challenge for everyone.

Grammar/Spelling:

I did find a few grammar errors, and some suggested additional wording or different wording. These are indicated in red.

1. People are losing their homes, facing eviction, losing their sources of income.

2. Now they face telling their children not to expect much, if anything, for Christmas.

3. I've added a variety of Christmas-themed c-notes and kept the price low.

4. Many other c-note shops offer a wide variety of Holiday greetings and cheer.

5. which is equivalent to a postcard in the mail… and it can mean SO MUCH

6. It can be a c-note form below, OR you buy it from ANY WDC c-note shop.

7. Just type each of their user names into the blank with a comma between them.

8. Your link to where they are to post their credit is invalid. I will assume that it is closed for the season and will reopen in November/Decemberish.

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Selection:

You have the appropriate and sufficient selection of items for purchase. You do have a wider selection more than most in this collection.

Cost:

Your cost is appropriate and clearly indicated; any differences in cost are indicated and explained.

Contribution:

You have given the WDC community an incentive to purchase by giving them a cut on the price. A small suggestion, maybe you can run a special a least once, maybe twice before Christmas. If they send 50 @ 600gp, 75 @ 550gp, 100 @ 500gp. Along with the MB, of course. I don't know what it is about MBs, but they can sell anything when attached.

Quality of items for sale:

You have a wide variety of images that are very themed orientated for the season.

General effect:

I thoroughly enjoyed window shopping for c-notes in this shop. It has a wide variety for everyone in mind. I will be dropping in to shop for some cNotes this Christmas season. Your prices are reasonable, and the MB is a great incentive to purchase even more. I love the idea that they can shop at any c-note shop to earn one.

It was a delight to review your shop and your items that are up for grabs. I hope that this review is helpful and encouraging for you. I wish you success in the Quill Awards and a generous 2021.

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Wow... That was amazing as it was the first time I read it. The changes made a big impact on it and it read smoothly from start to finish. It was like you were inside my thoughts. I try to do the same routine every day as well. But, once in a while, the world slips through that microcrack and seeps into my thoughts. Not, as much as last year when the unknown was in the air daily.

Thank you for recentering me. I will save this as a favorite so I can go back and reread it for encouragement in this chaotic world we live in now.

Thank you for doing the corrections and making this an exceptional read. I hope to see you in future contest at "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest and "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests as well.


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WELCOME TO THE LIGHTHOUSE POETRY CONTEST


It is my pleasure to read and review your entry for "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests. First, I would like to thank you for taking the time to enter the contest. I know that there are so many different contests here on WdC. I'm so pleased that you took the time to write and enter this contest. I hope that you enjoy my religious-based contest and return often. You may also enjoy "The Lighthouse Short Story Contest another religious-based contest of mine. It is nothing like sharing the joy, love, faith, and knowledge of our Heavenly Father.

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Title:

Your title ""God So Loves The World" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

Your rhythm and flow move smoothly throughout the piece. Making it a delightful piece to read.


Imagery & Emotions:

I am glad that you choose to use this verse in your piece. For it tells all the love God has for us. The greatest love ever. Too bad that Jesus had to die for us to be saved. If we could have been good to start with. Makes you wonder what life would be like if Adam and Eve had not eaten that apple to start with. It also makes you think what would life be like if Jesus had not died for us. Sounds like a prompt to me. Would we have had to continue the sacrifices of animals to cleanse our souls? You did an excellent job in writing the love God gives to us unconditionally day in and day out.

In Conclusion:

My favorite line is:

But have everlasting life.
They will walk on streets of gold.
Pain and tears will come to an end,
And they shall never grow old.

The ultimate goal for Christians is to have everlasting life with our Father in Heaven. For no more aging or pain and tears to be shed, only love, peace and joy to be had for eternity. What a glorious goal. To be in His presence forever.

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing, and writing about the Bible. It is my pleasure to award you the 1st Place WINNER in February's "The Lighthouse Poetry Contests

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