I found your letter sweet, cautious, emotional, and heartfelt. I did find some suggestions for you, and I hope that they will help you out with letter writing. I have submitted a copy of your letter of how it would look in letter written form. Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to make; I only put the corrected versions in red.

You need to start it out in a letter form, addressing the recipient according to whom you are writing. For example: Dear Joseph, You also need to have a signature at the bottom to indicate who it is from. Example: All my love and dedication to you always, Your Sugarplum Nicknames are usually considered to be used in addressing and ending love letters to ones whom we love.


Dear Joseph,

I’d always thought hearts were meant to be broken. At least, mine was, for it’s been broken more times than can be counted. When I first saw your shy face staring at me from across the room on a moonless night in January, my heart tugged me towards you, so desperate to believe you’d be the right one.

I stopped believing in “Mister Right,” but I believed in love, even though my brain begged me not to fall, not to place another crack in my already bleeding heart. But my heart, my stubborn heart, still beats no matter how many cracks it has in it. It begged me to believe that you were different, that you wouldn’t let me fall alone, that you’d be the person I needed to save myself.

So what else could I do? I had never been one for logic, and I’d always been one to let my feelings lead the way, even though that always came back to haunt my darkest nightmares in the end. Right away, my cautiousness led me to curiosity. I had to know more about you, had to know everything, even your past. Because my heart told me to believe that if I could heal you, you could heal me.

I allowed my heart to believe in you but held back, unsure of how this chapter would end, uncertain if my taking the fall would lead to me bleeding on unfriendly ground like before. So, I took the fall and I felt more alive than I have ever had before. Feeling the rush of love across my body, and you by my side, encouraging me to open up to you. For the first time in years, I wasn’t afraid to open up, although it took me a while to get used to the idea of being that vulnerable with someone. Someone that I’d given my heart to.

It gave me the sense of freedom, like you’d taken me on your wings and took me on a journey that doesn’t yet have an ending. It has been the best adventure I’ve taken so far, and you’ve been there every step of the way. It doesn’t take a scientist to notice how in love we are, how great we are together, but then again, I don’t believe even science can explain the connection between our souls and hearts.

Love isn’t something that can be easily explained, but soulmate love? That’s unexplainable, and we have that love, we’ve always had it, and we’ll never be able to give up something so rare and precious. People take love for granted, but I could never take your adoration for granted because every day, something new and exciting comes out of it, and the next adventure is just around the corner.






P.S. I had a cat named "Comet" she is missed as well.

I drift off to a starry night in the Sierra Mountains holding hands with my love. Daring not to move and break the moment captured in my breathe. You capture your readers so easily taking them to those memories they thought were lost forever. I love reading your work Brian because I'm never disappointed when I do. You always lead me somewhere. Thank you for always showing your readers what they need to see.

Grammar Corrections and Errors if any are needed!
Here are the suggestions for change, I only put the corrected version in red. It will make the piece move even smoother.

1. that begs the clouds to stay white.
My only suggestion it seemed incomplete a little.

It's so innocent sounding, like child play. Perfectly said.

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