Wow, I love how you captured me right from the start. You sucked me into your story with the analogy of the boat capsizing on the rocks. You described the storm we all as humans experienced this past 11 months. You gave a great knowledge of what it means to have faith to be saved from the storm. We have to have an anchor, and the best one to have is our Lord God. He is the best Rock we know. He is our strength and our refuge when there is only fear about us.

Reading your testimony then visiting your portfolio gave me more insight into who I was reading about. It has been a challenge for many others. I wondered how it affected the ministry for those in it. To be told that you couldn't have church or gatherings must have been difficult. The church I was attending decided to have church asap, and most of the congregation was affected by covid. Two did not survive out of those who attended those services. I had been shunned because I did not attend by some of those members even though they knew I was in double jeopardy if I did attend. I had been quarantined for months before the pandemic. I miss attending church and fellowshipping with others. The sheer energy during worship and services was so electrifying it feeds me the Holy Spirit for a few days.

Now, I listen to worship music on y-tube, especially when I read and review. He gives me so much inspiration when I write to others about Him. It's like He radiates the words I write/speak to others. A mighty feeling to have in one's soul.

You speak of things that most people would darn not to, for people would look at you strangely and walk away. Testimonies to me show others how He moves in our lives. No one has the power of God. Lucifer moves among us too, but we have the Holy Spirit protecting us in times of turmoil and deceit.

Your testimony spoke to me and placed me in a boat on the ocean headed to shore. I immediately start to pray as I have so many times in dangerous situations. Like the time my dog was in the car with me. She panicked for some strange reason. She wrapped her leash around my throat, and the handle of it had fallen onto the floorboard under the stirring wheel. I could not reach it from trying to hold the leash with both hands so it would not choke me. I'm still not sure to this day how she got wrapped around me, but she had. It all happened in a split second, and I was fighting for my life. I couldn't breathe or speak, but I uttered 4 words. "PLEASE, HELP ME, GOD!" That instant, I was set free. Her leash and harness were in my hands, and I was looking at them in disbelief. I screamed, "THANK YOU, LORD GOD!"

I'm not sure if you are a sailor or, at one time, was. You described a terrifying moment in a sailor's life. It is well used in this story.

You followed the prompt, rules, and I felt that you engaged me in your conversation as well. I found inspiration in your words, and I truly believe that your readers will too. Thank you for sharing your testimony with me today. We will need to show you how to do dropnotes. They make your notes, prompts, etc, less detracting to readers. I'm trying to help others learn this technique and grow in their passion for writing.

Distractions and/or Errors: The corrections are just corrections, not meaning that your story is not excellent. The revisions are intended to make it stronger. The corrections in the whole sentences were passive, and I was instructed to rewrite them by Grammarly to make it in an active voice. I found 13 errors in your short story. The following are suggestions for making your piece stronger and less distracting with grammar and punctuation errors. They are more than one correction in some sentences. I add the whole sentence to help you find it easier when/if you make changes.

NOTE: If you read the changes, it makes your testimony very strong and vocal to others. I read it after the errors were corrected. It captured every word that you wanted to convey to me. That was my ultimate decision-maker. I'm trying to help others learn this technique and grow in their passion for writing.

1. The waves below, whipped up to a white frenzy, by the tempest behind them, smashing against the rocks of a Cornish coastline. Suggestion to rephrase it to sound stronger.
The waves whipped into a white frenzy below, smashing against the rocks of the Cornish coastline below.

2. Divide this sentence into three different sentences. I always thought God was in such a storm, and there is a sense of awe at the powers revealed there, a feel for what it might be like to stand in the presence of the Almighty Himself.
a. I always thought God was in such a storm.
b. There is a sense of awe at the powers revealed there.
c. A feel for what it might be like to stand in the presence of the Almighty Himself.

3. There is something terrifying about a storm on the ocean, especially when you are the sailor caught in one, in a tiny boat, being driven towards the rocks.

4. Make this one into three sentences as well.
a. It is truly frightening when you have to make that extra tack back out to sea, just one more time, to avoid being smashed against the shore’s rocks.
b. As you do so, you are rolled by the waves, coming from the boat’s side, literally jumping the waves.
c. Drenched to the skin by the cold salty spray and praying for the moment when you can turn and run towards the shore.

5. Storms are no joke for sailors, and so the prayer of a sailor is more often for safe harbor and for a good anchorage to ride out the storm.

6. Rephrase this sentence to make it clearer sounding. Many people have described this year in terms of a storm that claimed lives, that ruined people, leaving people asking God questions.

7. It is a storm that claimed a president who had looked a dead certainty for victory, now not.

8. Divide this sentence into three also. I also added and took out a few words as well. In another trial, that my life passed through, I had a picture of being surrounded by an army of demons, feeling like bait for the forces of darkness.
a. Another trial that my life passed through this past year.
b. I had pictured being surrounded by an army of demons.
c. I felt like I was bait for the forces of darkness.

9. However, I saw an angel standing between me and those who would destroy me, his sword whirling, as he decimated the onward assault of the enemy, in my defense and in accordance with God's plan for their destruction.

10. Divide this sentence into two parts. So what does it mean to trust God when the world is shaking all around you, when all you thought solid is broken and falling away and where a world of falsity is swept away in a flood of tears and a hurricane of events.
a. So, what does it mean to trust God when the world is shaking all around you.
b. When all you thought solid is broken and falling away, where a world of falsity is swept away in a flood of tears and a hurricane of events.

11. It means to shine your light as far and wide as you can so that others also might find the safety of the shore, and it means to be at peace.

12. No storm can throw you off God's foundation, and there is no demon that can get past the angels that guard you, not this time, not this place.

13. as the bible says.
a.(Matt. 7:24-27): I would move this down above the verse.

I hope this helps you. As I said before, I am not a professional reviewer. I am here to help you sharpen your skills. I by no means am a perfect author myself. I have the Grammarly app, and it has helped me out tremendously this past year. It has sharpened my skills, and I want to freely and lovingly share it with others. If you have any questions, please feel free to ask.

Your rhythm and flow is perfect in this piece. What a delight to read.

You have penned some mighty powerful words, 40 words to be exact. I read it several times to let it sink into my soul. You touched my heart with these few words. Excellent job in conveying them.

My favorite line is:

Yout rhythm flows throughout your piece. Making this a delightful read for your readers.

You bring to my mind the prayers I say each day. Searching for His words and wisdom that I need so much in this world today. An excellent job in expressing your plan to do His will and laws.

My favorite line is:

To just feel comforted by Your embrace,

The rhythm and flow moves smoothly throughout your piece.

I see a woman who knows that God is there no matter what is happening in her life. Knowing when to reach out to Him is the key to a great relationship with His All-Mighty. I see how your faith gets you through this hard world we live in this day and time. The quarantine tested our faith and our abilities to reach out to Him more than ever. Excellent job in reflecting your faith with your words. There was one item, you put the prompt at the top. I know others want it there, but I find it distracting. Please, keep that in mind for the next contest. I look forward to seeing more of your work.

My favorite line is:

How precious is time spent in your Word.

Your rhythm flows evenly throughout your piece. Making this a delightful read.

I see in your words that no, matter the storm when you have doubt, lean on His truth and understanding. I see these words in your piece. An excellent show of your faith in our Heavenly Father. Your words will speak to your readers of your faith and love for God. This was such a delight to read. I look forward to your next entry.

My favorite line is:

Your words light my path so from your ways I won’t depart.

May you be blessed always,
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I find these words the strongest in your piece. They speak the words of love that He gives to us so we may serve Him with the same devotion that He gives to us.

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Poetry Contest" . I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing, and writing about the Bible. It is my greatest pleasure to award you "1st Place Winner" in October/November contest.

"1st Place Winner"

Isn't it amazing how quickly it can take over one's mind. I find it is so much better staying in His word. Peace flows through me during the fearful times and there has been a lot this year for all of us. Keeping hope, faith, and love in our hearts is our armor that we have to put on daily to combat evil.

I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Poetry Contest"  I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing, and writing about the Bible. It is my honor to award you 1st Place Winner" in the September Celebration Contest.

"1st Place Winner"

This needs to be everyone's outtake on this whole craziness going on. I never thought it would ever be this insane. I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Poetry Contest"  I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing, and writing about the Bible. It is my pleasure to announce that you have "Honorable Mention" for September's Celebration Contest.

"Honorable Mention"

It is a wondrous thing to receive God and His love and kindness are like no other. You have painted a unique way of telling it. I want to thank you for entering and supporting "The Lighthouse Poetry Contest"  I enjoyed reading and reviewing your entry. I hope that you enjoyed spending time, sharing, and writing about the Bible.

May you be blessed always,
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This year has brought more people closer to God. They have been looking at their lives closely and evaluating them. But, there are several that have become isolated and depression and anxiety has set in due to the circumstances. We as humans need contact even if it is just a hug or a handshake. Excellent in telling your side of the story of 2020.

NOTE: You needed to follow Rule #9. Please add word count, line count, the verse used, and the prompt to the BOTTOM of your page.

My favorite line is:

To not feel all alone
No more seasons in the rain

You put it into words that anyone would understand what it is to be yoked to Jesus. You made it sound comforting to have Him next to you. Exactly what I was looking for, simple, but full of impact on one's soul.

My favorite line is:

Because He goes through it with me -

It's extraordinary how we can balance ourselves out with one another. We are never alone with Jesus for He is always yoked to us, giving us balance when we seek it.

Oh my goodness, I totally had a problem picking just one so I choose all of it. Each line had something that spoke to me and made me smile. Thinking about walking amongst the flowers while soft fresh grass touched my bare feet.

Here are the suggested changes: None to be found. I would not change a thing in it.

Thank you for sharing this delightful piece. I enjoyed reading and reviewing your piece. It was my pleasure and I hope you have a wonderful rest of the week and thank you for helping us celebrate WdC SuperPower Reviewers 13th Anniversary.

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An adventure all it's own when you clean out your closet. A time when one walks down memory lane. Your story moves in a timely manner and well keep your readers interested to the end. Great job in accomplishing it making it a great story.

I love it, we are doing the same thing with my grand-daughter she started her second year in college. Of course, Covid-19 shortened last year for everyone. Looking back on all the moves and cleaning out of closets that families make. Which you reminded me that I need to clean mine out again.

My favorite line is: