Spartacus, bringer of rain, slayer of the shadow of death
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My thoughts:It was a great story, I really like reading/watching anything based in Norse mythology. I felt like the ending was a bit uneventful but really enjoyed reading it.
My Favorite part:When Able was discovered, mage was like all cocky about it.
Characters: No one really made an impact for me, seemed more like they were just fulfilling their roles as no motivation/reason was given as to why they took it upon themselves to investigate the closing of the portal and to risk their lives going after Loki.
My issues: when Able said a magical being of great power never heard of, seemed like a strange conclusion to jump to. Think where you said never heard of is what really threw me off. Thinking like why would he think it's an unknown magical being as opposed to some other powerful organization/kingdom.
Just a suggestion but to activate the invisibility stone, imagine being invisible seemed sort of bland would be a word I guess, how about like a one word spell?
Why was Able chosen for the mission?
It seemed like Able was alone and he had the invisibility stone so how was the Griffin invisible? And also why was he sent alone seeing as the two of them used the stone earlier
Also there was a bunch of different creatures traversing the bridge, at first I thought maybe it was some sort of evacuation but doesn't seem like that was the case?
Typos: the paragraph that starts, Able began: missed the "'s" after there.
Paragraph: Bronus folded: included/excluded a word(s) somewhere there. Also following sentence has "gave small hope"
You has "let us hope the teleporter in working."
Paragraph: the mage froze.: You has "I now your there."
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