A nice peice about growing up! It reflected how I feel about growing up too, I often want to go back, but remember, if you were a child, you would have to go through all the horrors of being a teenager again! Look to the future and keep writing :)
"To not ever be burdened with money, making money, paying bills or worrying about money. To never be worried about transportation, lodging, food or paying bills" I'm not sure if you intended to do this but you said, paying bills twice, apart from that, a neat peice of writing about wondering what it's like to be a dog, very philosophical! :)
I like how you don't just describe beuty as being physical, it is in the kindness and intelligence and grace of a person as well! And your descriptions are also very lovely, I particularly like "Her forehead is an abode of snow" Very nice :D
Nice one, I'm not sure if you might want to put some commas in just to seperate the lines and to seperate some of the words, but otherwise it's really interesting and evocative, I like how you seemed to reference the birth of Aphrodite in the second line :)
I am glad that it is ongoing so you can write more things that make you thankful and make me smile :) I like how it is a celebration of life, and love! I feel the same way as you!
I am thankful for kind people, and you seem very very kind indeed!
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