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Review of Melissa  
Review by ophelia
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Nice rhymes :)
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Review by ophelia
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, just a suggestion, you might want to consider using some commas at the end of each line, just to cut it up abit, so the reader knows when to take a breath but other than that I really liked all the imagery and symbolism is most effective. It has an air of sweetness, just like pink roses :)
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Review of Grenade  
Review by ophelia
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice rhymes :)
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Review of Mothers Like Me  
Review by ophelia
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, that's powerful stuff!
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Review of Death, Oh Death  
Review by ophelia
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Nice ryhmes, and I like the way the end thanks death for what it does! Good stuff!

Have you ever read the Book thief by Markus Zusack?
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Review by ophelia
Rated: E | (4.5)
A nice peice about growing up! It reflected how I feel about growing up too, I often want to go back, but remember, if you were a child, you would have to go through all the horrors of being a teenager again! Look to the future and keep writing :)
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Review of Being a Dog  
Review by ophelia
Rated: E | (3.5)
"To not ever be burdened with money, making money, paying bills or worrying about money. To never be worried about transportation, lodging, food or paying bills" I'm not sure if you intended to do this but you said, paying bills twice, apart from that, a neat peice of writing about wondering what it's like to be a dog, very philosophical! :)
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Review of Ode To Beauty  
Review by ophelia
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like how you don't just describe beuty as being physical, it is in the kindness and intelligence and grace of a person as well! And your descriptions are also very lovely, I particularly like "Her forehead is an abode of snow" Very nice :D
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Review of Waking Silence  
Review by ophelia
Rated: E | (5.0)
So peaceful, I love it!
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Review of Time to Play  
Review by ophelia
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like how it could be taken in two different ways, nice one :)
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Review of Tin Rose  
Review by ophelia
Rated: E | (3.5)
Nice one, I'm not sure if you might want to put some commas in just to seperate the lines and to seperate some of the words, but otherwise it's really interesting and evocative, I like how you seemed to reference the birth of Aphrodite in the second line :)
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Review of I'm So Thankful!  
Review by ophelia
Rated: E | (5.0)
I am glad that it is ongoing so you can write more things that make you thankful and make me smile :) I like how it is a celebration of life, and love! I feel the same way as you!

I am thankful for kind people, and you seem very very kind indeed!
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Review of ECHO  
Review by ophelia
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like how you wrote it in dialect, and I love the suspense you built, and the unpredictability of the characters!
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Review of God, Who Are You?  
Review by ophelia
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like this, I particularly like how you write it an almost Biblical style. It's full of passion and feeling! Nice one!
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