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Review of The Journey  
Review by deviled
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
i like ths story but i dont have a sense of direction and i kind of got lost at the begining the thing i think you should do is make the begining pop out to the readers because a good begining leads to a great reading experience but yet its only my opinion make of it what you will

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