This is nature combined with life and that's a great combination. And you're right!! Life is short so we might as well enjoy it!! Good descriptions and I like the length of it. I especially like the third stanza!!
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I love any kind of nature poem and this is a beautiful example. Well written and your descriptions are very vivid. It also has a very nice flow to it. I especially love the second stanza, because love is deeper than any ocean.
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You got the description very true, life can be crazy but you just gotta keep your chin up. I really like he descriptions of cars being fixed and coasters going on one track!!! I did see s grammar error or two you might want to check.
Beautiful poem, it flows nicely and it's well written. The last two lines on the last stanza are the truest for me though, they can be a burden but can give us good too. Short piece but you get the message across in a few lines.
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I really like this piece it had some great qualities to it. It doesn't flow as smoothly but some poems don't. It's still a great piece!!!! I would definitely add some punctuation, that always helps greatly!!
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Ah, this was quiet a long piece. But I loved it. Very beautifully written, great descriptions and I can almost see the scenes as they happen. You tell a great story, and it was worth the read. Exactly the kind of story I love.
I really like this piece, it has a great flow and reads well. I did notice one grammar error on the last like I'm assuming it should had been "Seem" instead if "Seam.
I would also ad some punctuation. But overall a great poem!
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A laughed when I read the title to this poem, because it's something I can relate to very much so I had to read it. I like your descriptions, and it has a nice flow to it. You might want to add come punctuation to it though.
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I have wrote many poems on this subject, and it fascinates me. This is an excellent example of this kind of subject. The line "The sky is falling!" They call" is exactly whats going to happen but I think no one will believe it's happening. So great job on this poem.
I love this piece, very well written and it flows nicely. I especially love the third stanza, beautifully done. I would add some punctuation in there, that would greatly help. But overall an amazing poem.
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This piece rings very true!!! Sometimes things doesn't go as planned and you may not end up where you think. You captured that thought perfectly!!!! The only grammar error I saw was an I that needed to be capitalized.
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Overall it's a lovely poem, I like the story in it. However I did see a few grammar errors, lots of "i" you might want to capitalize. And add some punctuation. I especially love the forth stanza.
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This is a very sweet bit, it's writing from the heart and it shines through. This is a very lucky woman I must say.
I did see a few grammar errors so you might want to go back and check it over. Otherwise then that it's a wonderful piece.
Absolutely beautiful, everything flows so nicely and smoothly. I especially love the second stanza. I can picture your scene quiet well, and it gave me a few chills!
Excellent poem here!! I love the details and the descriptions. You tell a beautiful story and I can picture the scene perfectly.
However I would add some punctuation in there, that helps greatly.
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Overall it's a great poem, however on the second line of the last stance I noticed a little error, I think you meant different.
And adding some punctuation would help greatly!
But I love the subject and the rest is well done.
I have been an avid writer for a few years now and I can definitely say this is a true description. Especially the part about the runner being in the zone. That's how I get when I write. But you are right, that writing is a way of life. Once you start you can't stop.
Oh, I loved this. This is exactly my kind of poetry style. I can almost see this scenario happening. The sound of cicadas is one of my favorite things about nature. And I especially like the idea of everyone singing 'The Star- Spangled Banner', great thought there.
A very chilling poem but also very beautiful. It reminds me of some great horror movie, it has that same effect. Very well written and I can almost visualize it!!
I especially love the lines "They gather 'round a darkened church, where nary a songbird braves to perch'.
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I absolutely loved this piece!! It's actually very very true!!!!
I loved rule 6 because I've experienced that with my younger cousins.
Everything looks perfect and I see no grammar errors!!!!!!!
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I love this piece, it gave me a few chills!
I have been to some of the old battlefields and I can say they are a bit spooky.
I see no grammar errors and your flow is nice.
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This is an absolutely beautiful poem. The visuals were great! You might want to add a bit of punctuation to it but other than that I see no problems.
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This poem gave me a few chills! I truly love this piece. The flow is very nice and the gammar is perfect. I love the last paragraph especially. Very true words. Lovely lovely poem.
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