|bees, what are we going to do with you? This will be my last review unless you are a glutton for punishment as they say Okay, so here's the problem: I've read several of your pieces, now, both poems and prose. I have to ask you if English is your first language? It makes a big difference in my approach, which you may not be interested in, in any event. I'm currently working with a Lithuanian who speaks excellent English, until it comes to writing it. If English is your primary language, then you have some work to do -- if you want to change what are now barely readable works, into well written prose and poetry both. This isn't to say your stuff isn't good; it's just "rough". And you'd be amazed at how good it could be, if and when the bumps were smoothed out.
As is so often the case, you write with your heart, with your soul (and do it really well), but not so much with your brain, which hurts your writing when that part is not done so well. I'm referring to things like structure, grammar, spelling, and punctuation. I know, BORING! Which it is until you get it down, then it's fairly easy and natural.
It's difficult to review and rate writers such as you, because your spirit is strong, you have a lot to say, and the last thing people like me want to do is dampen or discourage your energy. Maybe redirect it, and encourage you as strongly as possible, to force yourself to learn more of the basics.
Readers want to know what you're saying. YOU want us to know what you're saying, and that is only possible when the basics I refer to, are practiced and applied. The good news is that it need not be perfect. Getting close is sometimes all you need to do, but even then, it still needs to be pretty close. And right now, while your writing is in the ball park, as they say, your team is not on the playing field as yet. As I said, before, if you ask questions, I will answer them. If not, that's okay too, of course.
And as you let your heart guide you, as it should, do give some thought to all that boring stuff I talked about; you'll be thrilled that you did -- when you do.
Thanks for letting me ramble on.
Timtu (aka Bob)