Dorianne, my name is Tina Marie one of the writer's on this website whom stumble across your item on the main website THE HUB when you login into writing.com. I do like this ariticle you shared so in short way I'd like to say thank you for sharing your piece. Rememinece gives me memories of my own while I am still waking up in the morning in God's glory being able to be very thankful to wake a new day. It is somewhat a little damp here and humid in East Texas but waking up and to read here on this site is a blessing. With you piece I could relate in personal details based in my own reasons such as the lake and Grandmal. My Mom lives at the lake and I have stayed at the lake for nine years beside her while my kids got to live next to her. She was over yesterday and made pancakes for them. As an experienced reader and fellow writer I can tell that in your item you express passion for writing. That is a good quality that is seen here. I'm not to sure why you have words underlined but I assume being taught in school that it's to put emphasis in on certain words into your passage. If I do say this correctly than that is a neat strategy because there is not many writers that I've come across do so. You see all kinds of skills and it was refreshing but more refreshing to see the passion you show in writing. Thank you much from a fellow writer.
Hi this is Tina TinaMarie and I am a member of Writing.Com and also the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . I look for the three things in a review. Introduction, the effect of story or item, and the conclusion. The effect of story or item such as poetry, short story, or even article how does cause and effect emotionally connect with the reader. I like to be keen on the emotional connection instead of spelling errors. As we begin, if at any time you feel to ask me a question on your review please ask away by my email tinag@Writing.Com or just click on the white email beside my user name TinaMarie
Itroduction Automatically you feel the setting of the poem. A reader could easily imagine what spring would look like.
Cause and Effect
The pattern matched with the creativity the writer intended to let readers comprehend. Only room for suggestions consider adding words in that would play with the readers thought including few more words at the last sentence in your middle stanza. I like the flow it is very fun to read. Conclusion The poem allowed the readers to imagine. Great first paragraph stanza. Thank you for letting me do a review for you. Have a great week. Brought to you by TinaMarie
Hi this is Tina TinaMarie and I am a member of Writing.Com and also the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . I look for the three things in a review. Introduction, the effect of story or item, and the conclusion. The effect of story or item such as poetry, short story, or even article how does cause and effect emotionally connect with the reader. I like to be keen on the emotional connection instead of spelling errors. As we begin, if at any time you feel to ask me a question on your review please ask away by my email tinag@Writing.Com or just click on the white email beside my user name TinaMarie
Itroduction
I love this poem. There was a nice flow to the poem and there was no word to describe it just speechless
Cause and Effect This poem is relatable and very inspirational.
Conclusion You get in the morning work 8 to 12 hours a day but when you read this poem the effect leaves you wanting to get back up and do it again.
Thank you for letting me do a review for you. Have a great week. Brought to you by TinaMarie
The poem is very inspiring. I enjoyed it and thank you for sharing.
Hi River, just doing a random review and your item appeared. It's short for a poem but doesn't mean it may not be reading material. My opinion is it's a valuable New Year's resolution and which I like. Anybody that kicks an addiction needs a good pat on the back. Good job and thanks for sharing this "Give it Up".
Hi, Chiu. I think your poem is absolutely cute. I love the consonants in the second line play at the end of the sentence. Other words, I like that the last words triple tine nice and wine play together to make one great poem. The end was imagery so it also played well with your poem. I think the poem is very sweet cute and cool. Liked your playful love poem.
Hi, Prosperous Snow. I have not been able to read a poem about writing short and unique. I like that you kept it short and of course you wrote about writing. Have a wonderful evening and thanks.
Hi, I reviewing your item and taking a moment out my day to review you item and was hooked when coming across it. Very persuasive and enjoy it. Thanks for writing.
Hey Jim, its me Tina and I know you haven't herd from me in a while. I seen you posted a poem and wanted a second opinion. Usually when I see a post that got a bad review and they want someone else to review I try to do my best to put on my captain hat. OK so reading your poem I did take a second glance. There were allot to read and so when you are actually reading its important to know items can't be glanced.... It actually has to be read. One of the great talents you have when you write poetry is that you keep everything new. Its never the same and its like reading new material. The layout was confusing for example that I'll show at the end of review. The poem is beautiful. The consonance are totally there throughout. I honestly wouldn't change a thing besides one comment I will share, Lornda told me one day after reading one of my reviews that was a review for someone else item to put down what it is you like I appreciate in their item. Also she got on to me and said don't worry about putting down correction. Your poem anew and nothing wrong with it. Here is the example I was talking about earlier about the format. On that ward, he was her favorite one. She had read to him whenever she could,
Hi Jack I am in the same writing group in item "Invalid Item" Public Review Group. It has been a while since I visited the page of Public Review and took a chance at visiting your port. I came across this poem and was very pleased with it. It's funny how odd in comparison of this poem I feel. I like that it explain an emotion and that you delightful made it beautiful. The rhythm and rhymes were so perfect it was tongue twisting fun with a catch to read along.
Full of imagination working in second stanza.
Third stanza so full of emotion I thought I would have to stop because it really was good I didn't know what to expect for my own emotions. Very perfected and well wrote.
Fifth stanza it was the high light point of the emotion of the poem-He will get bored and disappear...
Fourth you can hear imagination of how to expect to feel as the reader and it was well wrote.
I can't complain has to be one of my favorite poems. You truly did a remarkable job with this poem. Thanks for sharing. -Tina Marie Writing.Com Member
Hi Paris Girl, I am reviewing your poem and I'm Tina. I'm a member here on Writing.Com here on WDC and thanks for sharing your poem with the rest of the Writing community. I enjoyed the first three stanzas and enjoyed that you wrote about travel a place that is not home. You made me the reader as if I weren't home. Even inspired me to write what places I want to travel as if were not at home. Hum, what places and what do they look like if I wanted to add in a poem. You are right. You should see the world. Good luck with your travels even in the Writing World .
Hi Ann Lapine, I am Tina and I'm a member of Writing.Com. I have been for four year. Anyhow, I was just reading your article about ways to keep our memory. I like how you mention several examples. The resources was very helpful and gets me to want to check in for a brain exercise. So yes you did provide enough information on how to keep your memory. Most impressive and interesting was Jaques-Dalcroze Eurhythmice as they have already mention in Medical Outreach Media. Here are a few suggestion but before I make any just want to remind you that I enjoyed reading this and your article was very interesting. Okay, I'm in the medical field working in Medical Housekeeping in Dementia Unit. I am past graduate National Certified Medical Assistant, Current BLS CPR, First Aide, Blood Borne, Certified. Current completion in Medical Terminology and Medical Coder. In 2015 I hope to be certified Medical Coder. I work in a nursing home facility that my mom has worked in for 16 years. Ive worked there 3 yrs. In a Dementia unit they teach you that patients taste is the last thing to go. That something sweet to give them is what they remember. Also, remembering that staff have to be positive. Any negativity can only cause more stress and lead higher statistics of memory loss. These are just some few things I know that can help in using with the nursing home. I hope they help if you are wanting to add more to your article. Have a great night.
Hi whiskerface, I like this poem allot. It rhymes and tells a story to which I can relate. Personal favorite quatrain stanza and lines
I can write a grumble
Like the one you're reading here
But iambs keep me humble
And skitterry as a deer
Hold it I lie. Here's another of my favorite quatrain
I cannot, cannot write a poem
The forms rush away, fleet
One hides behind a garden gnome
With gnarly Hobbit feet
I can personally relate to the writing.
You don't have to be a professional writer to write what you feel.
There is definite image in your description of emotions. The poetry was great with rhythm but also with technical wording. Not everyone can relate to the poem because their situation may be different but it is good to have a poem that tells the audience. So in fancy way thank you for sharing your poem.
Hi Moonbeans, my name is Tina. I've been on WDC, Writing.Com for a few years and want to take an opportunity to say hi and to let you know that we are thankful you are part of the Writing Community. When I first read your poem the first the thing I liked is metaphors. You have a way of expressing poetry with your senses of vision. You can emphasis this and that same way you did with your last sentence " Hope of what is to come is better in the walk of life." Your capable of highlighting you inner thoughts and bringing it to life when you wrote "Reflections of what was and not able to the future". Suggestion, go back and revise you second line not sure where I am or what I am at like the mirrors of life. The last part of the words in the sentence needs to be eliminated. A gift of poetry is that you wrote it.
More insights and tips for future poems,
a. You have several senses. Touch, smell, taste, write all of it in each poetry you write.
b. Metaphors. There great when you write poetry. Her lips remained cold as the midnight velvet skies leaving her alone for the rest of her lonely days.
c. Dictionary is good to cruise for words to add in.
Thank you for sharing you poem and it was a great honor to read.
One of the first things that popped out to me looking at this link is that it is so organize. I knew what Product Review was before I started reviewing this now because when I didn't know as a newbie you were very sweet and understanding on to's. The kind of hospitality is unforgettable. The other thing I like about this link is because it isn't just your typical reviewing where you write plus rate all in one forum. Now the tricky part is reading other's authors, members, online writers, online fictions. This will take motivation but looking at beginning soon. Also this link gives more variety to read as well options.
Hi Lesley it's Tina. Thanks for asking me to read your item about USDA. I'm glad to say as one of your fans in writing I've also read all of your items in your port and past reviewed them. I really like that you made the item interesting for the readers. I enjoyed the last paragraph
- In a near perfect world, we would have no animal cruelty, well run meat packing plants and farms. Our pastures would be lush and green from organic fertilizer, and for we vegetarians,........... - Every passage was captivating and interesting. As always you make all your stories very interesting enough for reader to stay alert and wanting to read. Your certainly good at writing and it's always interesting to read.
Hi A*30s*Faith. I love the sense of humor and the poetry form with a flare. You have honesty in this poem and that's what makes it great. Keep up the great writing and thank you for your entry.
Sincerely, Tina
(please except the gift points for it is gifted to you for your continues effort in entry and talent in the poem. we are looking forward to having more of poems in the next season.)
December entries are open on December 1st. Future Group Email will be sent before December 1, 2013.
I really like your poem What poetry style is it? Include that. It looks like cinaquin poetry. The best line I liked is Ah, there. Very good. Sincerest Reviewer Tina George.
Hi, there Hunter. I see you left a 4 Triquains. Yes, I love Shelly and the way she teaches. A very nice teacher and great inspiration in the poetry world. So are you. You have great poetry uniqueness and I love that again you take the time to let readers know the poetry definition and meaning. The depth of describing fall is there again. The other poem was more visual to me than this one was. This poem has long word sentences that emphasized well however there where a few that the sentences didn't go with the flow. Great details and for example I liked most Days grow short
and, as the nights lengthen,
the moon takes on a golden pigment
in celebration of harvest time.
Hey Ken, this is Tina from The Season Group. Thank you for sending me an email. I have to tell you I was not disappointed at all. This was beautiful well wrote example of an Abecedarian Poem. It's rare that you get to see this kind of poem. On the bottom explanation of what Abecedarian poem meaning was easy to understand. The poem visual brought allot of imagination. To me there was not a whole of consonance or alliteration but there was allot of imagination which I was not looking for rhymes but it brings my senses to life. I can actually say I can close my eyes and it makes me think of being outside on an autumn day. If it brings that much imaginary effect than as a writer you have done a fabulous job. It's hard to get a reader to dream this much. This was a really good poem.
Hi, My name is Tina Marie and I am part of the Power Reviewer Group I want to say thank you for letting me review an item and hope you find my review encouraging and helpful. Again, thank you for letting me review your item.
In looking in any style of poetry I look for these things, rhymes, poetry patterns, flow, and you own style.
Style: Writing Shakespeare is one of the hardest forms to write in poetry. In my opinion not only did consistent patterns but the flow was spectacular and beautiful.
Rhymes: The writers tone and meaning provided enough visual and a great image of what the poem was about.
Reader Take: I think that any reader would enjoy this poem because it one those rare poems with many simile and it captured my soul.
It's been a while since I've done a review and glad I came across your poem (made my day).
I'm Tina and part of Roak Upgrade Group and yesterday it was National Science Fiction day. I'm dropping in to do a quick review. Please consider that all suggestion are based on my opinion and may be different from another reviewer. I hope that my suggestion can help improve your work but it offends you please disregard any suggestions. Thank you for letting me review your item.
Character: Great job building characters into your story. It was interesting and entertaining.
Theme: The Science Fair worked well in the introduction. It incorporated well with the character as a place of where and when.
Beginning: Single guy who encounters an attractive woman and is at the Science Fair alongside with his best friend Kevin son.
Rising Action: Reading how the different inventions at the Science Fair was mentioned in detail made your story interesting.
Action: He accidentally get trapped into the time bubble. Reading the hairless wig woman with the dog jumping emphasized your characterization in writing skills.
Conclusion: He stuck in the time Zone. He will have to find his way out or hope the kid inventor brings him back. It was interesting read to find that there was a bag left.
Errors: There was problems with past tense and presence with the story line.
Suggestion: It is time for the fair and Kevin and his son pick me up and we drive there. With in minutes, the project is set up and Kevin and I start walking around to look at the other inventions.
Second line was okay, and you want your first line to incorporate with next following sentence.
Correction: It is time for the fair and Kevin's son gave me ride. Within minutes the Science projects was set up. Kevin and me start walking around starring at the the other inventions. We found one labaled Hand Free Potato Peeling.
I enjoyed the names and the details of what the inventions do at the Science Fair.
Here is some highlighted sentences that was engaging to read. I'm somewhere that looks like the back drop of "The Land of the Lost" "Hand Free Potato Peeling a "bubble" of time around the item
Suggestion make that is to to that's pushes it forward into time at a rate that is faster than everyone else has experienced.
Overall Impression: This was a fun story and I enjoyed reading this much.
Writer: Tina Marie George
Proud Member of WDC!
Write with heart-n-passion
Flow of Poem: I'm taking away by the color of the text in the flow of the poem and also the beautiful image of an angel matching the colors of the words.
Suggestion:None
Highlighted: The expression of human spirit being expressed for others to see the bigger picture.
Overall Take: I like that poems can have so many meanings. When reading your poem it give you that thought. What else is there to think is what others are probably assume and think at the end of reading this poem. It simply can make you think or feel at your feel will. It may mean have care of another person is the angel watching over.
Conclusion positive message to express in poetry form.
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Style: Writing Shakespeare is one of the hardest forms to write in poetry. In my opinion not only did consistent patterns but the flow was spectacular and beautiful. 
