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Hi Neva, I came across the older poem "Canine Memories" at read and review and I'm here to give you my thoughts. I am using a template on explication provided today at "Re: The Art of Reviewing Poetry"
TITLE: I think any dog lover will be sure to stop at this poem and read because of your title. That might even extend to animal lovers in general.
IMAGERY: This poem paints vivid imagery of the stages of a dog's life with its master. The imagery is not only visual but sensual. I felt the sand and its changing temperature when reading. I saw the boy grow into a man, possibly a soldier.
Figurative imagery uses associative figures of speech to describe something by comparing it to something else. These techniques include metaphor, simile, personification, symbolism, and onomatopoeia.
RHYMING & REPETITION: There is no end rhyme but your liberal use of assonance and alliteration are musical sounds when read aloud. The development of time, aging progresses strophe by stophe.
RHYTHM: This poem reads smoothly and fluidly out loud. Your line breaks give emphasis to core words. Each strophe is a time unit giving pause before moving on.
STRUCTURE & FORM: This poem is written in Free Verse the structure of which is mentioned directly above and which contributes beautifully to the rhythm of the piece. There is a typo in L14 "as the" should be "as they". Otherwise no technical error jumped out at me.
THEME: The theme of this poem is "aging" as seen through the eyes of a dog.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:I found this piece, heartwarming.
Hi Dr M.C., Your poem "Spring is Near" came up on Read and Review and I am here to share my thoughts.
First Impression The title is fairly common and may not attract the casual reader. However, the challenge presented, to not use the vowels u and o, sounds impossible to me and I would have to read to see how you pulled it off.
Frame Written in 3 syllabic quatrains, alternating 7-6-7-6 syllables with staggered sequential rhyme xaxa xbxb xcxc x being unrhymed. Note tenderness and harness technically don't rhyme. In English, rhyme occurs with the accented vowel sound tenderness doesn't rhyme with harness. Just for your information, I see this rule violated all of the time, so much it is becoming a norm.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics Just looking for o's and u's was fun and you did it, none were found. Congratulations. No surprises. This does not always read fluidly when read out loud.
Suggestions I felt this poem kind lost focus as it progressed. Let's in the last line doesn't work in my opinion. I think in some lines, especially the last line, meaning or clarity is sacrificed for syllable count and rhyme. If it were mine, I would play with this a little more. But of course it isn't mine. Use what you find helpful here and ignore the rest.
Overall I thought meeting the challenge was impressive but may have crippled your opinions a bit when writing. Thank you for the read.
Hello n.lea, I happened on your Cat and Fly at Read and Review and I am here to share my thoughts.
First Impression The title sounds fun and the brevity is hard for me to pass over.
Frame: A prose poem in 7 lines.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics This reads like a list. The liberal use of internal rhyme adds texture. The word choices are simple and appropriate for children.
Suggestions This is just my opinion but if it were mine I would play with line breaks to smooth out the rhythm. This does not flow well when read out loud. Typo L7 yawn should be yawned. Of course this is just perspective, it your poem, use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.
Overall The content is cute and very appropriate for a small child. It was fun to read.
Hello Mr Y., I happened upon your What Waits in the Shadows at Read and Review. I'm here to share my thoughts.
First impression The title is intruiguing. The period beginning each line looked sort of neat on the page and also intriguing. The random reader would be attracted.
Frame Written in 14 lines without end rhyme and with no apparent metric or syllabic pattern. There is, however, a chain created by the last word of each line repeated as the first word of the next line. Often when seeing a chain of this nature, the first word of the poem is also the last word of the poem, bringing the poem full circle. This was not done in this poem.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics The period in front of each line creates a staccato rhythm like reading a list. The chain is interesting, a kind of wordplay. The poem takes on an ominous tone as it progresses.
Suggestions This is just my opinion, if it were mine I'd remove the periods in front of each line. They make the poem read choppy. I see no technical errors and have no other suggestions. This is your poem, use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.
Overall For me this poem came across as threatening. Gave me chills. That's the goal to have the reader connect and feel.
Hi Neva, I have the pleasure of sharing my thoughts on your poem Winter Dawn found at Read and Review.
First impression Title suggests a little intrigue. Interesting and will attract readers.
Frame You share the elements of the Shadorma in your footnote. The poem adheres to the form perfectly.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics The poem reads out loud with no stumbles or hiccups. I've been in Las Vegas in winter and yep, even then the temperature rises. In so few words you skillfully capture the feel of Las Vegas at dawn.
Suggestions If this little gem was ever put into an anthology or posted away from this site the subject line probably would not be included. I wonder if you added Winter Dawn in Las Vegas or Winder Dawn, Las Vegas Style. I got it right away, after reading the subject line and having been there. but to the random reader without inclusion in the title, they might not connect the dots.
Otherwise, there is nothing I could suggest to improve the poem.
Of course, these are just my thoughts, it's your poem. Use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.
Overall As usual I loved reading your work. Thank you for consistently producing high quality poems.
Hello Thaddeus, I ran across this old poem "Snowdrifts" at Read and Review and I'm here to share my thoughts.
First impression From title and somewhat formal appearance I prepare to read a winter poem.
Frame You saved me the work of counting syllables and stanzas. Thank you. Yes, written in 5 quatrains each made up of 2 rhymed couplets with lines of 10 syllables each. Rhyme scheme aabb ccdd eeff gghh iiaa.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics Poem is written in simple everyday language sharing the pros and cons of winter snow. There were no surprises, no pivot.
Suggestions This is a lovely snow poem as are many thousands more. If you want it to be remembered, it needs a surprise, image, word, tone. Of course I say this and need to take my own advise. It is your poem, use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.
Overall This is a well crafted poem and I enjoyed the read.
Hi Lou, I discovered this old poem "Clack, CLack!" on Read and Review and I here to share my thoughts with you.
First Impression Title leads me to believe this will be fun to read.
Frame: Centered on the page a Free Verse poem in 19 lines with appropriate stanza breaks, a quatrain followed by 3 cinquains.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics. Though I was expecting something more silly, maybe because of the title's onomatopoeia, this poem quickly took on a nostalgic tone. The poem reads fluidly. The personification helped the poem progress into empathy.
Suggestions I'm sure at this late date you will not be going back to edit this piece and I can't at only a few readings point out any areas that I would think needed rethinking.
Overall This piece reminded me of when I closed my office after 40 years in business. When I began I purchased an expensive typewriter that was used all of the time. But as the computer came along, less and less happened on that typewriter until it just sat. (just in case) Clearing out the office I muddled over what I was going to do with it. It is so sad that something that was once so important is cast aside. That is how your poem made me feel. Good writing.
Hi Winklet, An oldy of yours, "Riverstone Terzanelle" popped up on Read and Review and I am here to share my thoughts.
First Impression I found the title fascinating. Of course I would read this poem.
Frame A Terzanelle, an invented verse form created by Lewis Turco. A cross between a Terza Rima and a Villanelle. The elements of the Terzanelle are: 1. a poem in 19 lines made up of 5 tercets and ends with a quatrain. 2. metered, most commonly iambic pentameter however if you stray, lines should be of equal length. 3. rhymed A1BA2 bCB cDC dED eFE fA1FA2. Caps are repeated lines. 4, L1 is repeated in L17, L2 is repeated in L6, L3 repeated L19, L5 repeated in L9, L8 repeated in L12, L11 repeated in L18.
Yes you checked all of the boxes. Though the purist might say the lines are a little long. septameter rather than pentameter. But the iambic metric pattern is maintained and lines are of approximate length.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonicsThere were many surprise images in this piece. pebble son, waters weave, ghostly ways, sand and silt etc. This poem reads fluidly.
SuggestionsNo technical error jump out at me. I can offer nothing in improvement
Overall I was very impressed with this piece. This was not an easy form to display your story through but it complimented the content. I enjoyed this skillfully written poem.
Hi Turtle, I am here to give my thoughts on your Song for Francis that I found on Read and Review.
First impression Title, Francis favorite saint, of course, I would read.
Frame Written in 3 sixains followed by a septet. Each sixain is made up of an alternating rhymed quatrain followed by a rhymed couplet refrain. The septet is made up of an alternating rhymed quatrain followed by a tercet with L5 and L7 the rhymed refrain of previous stanzas with L6 unrhymed. Rhyme scheme: ababCC dedeCC fgfgCC hihiCxC C being a refrain, x is unrhymed. Lines of an approximate length. No apparent metric or syllabic pattern.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics The slight adjustment of the beginning of each refrain line adds depth. This reads like a song, which you warned in the title. It has a nice rhythm and sound when read out loud.
Suggestions I thought L6 of the last stanza through off the rhythm a bit and seemed out of place. I would delete it.
I was kind of looking for a reference to the character or some acts of the saint but this stayed pretty generalized. This poem could refer to any one of many saints. If it were mine, I would attempt to make it more specific to Francis. (How I would do that, I have no clue, just sharing my reaction to the poem.)
This is just my opinion, it is your poem. Use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.
Overall I thought this was a lovely poem and I enjoyed reading.
Hi Magoo, An oldy of yours "The Skunk and the Porcupine" popped up on Read and Review. You probably forgot all about it. But I am here to remind you and share my thoughts.
First Impression The title would intrigue and nature lover, and "silly" is always worth a read.
Frame Written in 5 quatrains, each made up of 2 rhymed couplets. Syllabic, all lines 9 syllables. Well crafted.
Texture, rhythm, word choices, and sonics The rhythm of normal speech, the narration flows. Wonderful words: debonaire, pungent, grubs. Full of surprises this poem reads well.
Suggestions Keep writing.
Overall I thoroughly enjoyed reading this skillfully written piece. I smiled all of the way through. Thanks.
Hi TJ, This oldy "One Cloudy Day", popped up on Read and Review. You probably have forgotten all about it but I'm here to remind you and share my thought.
First Impression The poem on the page looks easy to read and the title sounds sincere. Why not?
Frame Written in 5, iambic tetrameter, rhymed couplets.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics Because of the meter and rhyme this sounds pleasantly like a song. (but not sing-songy) The tongue-in-cheek humor was a welcome surprise.
Suggestions No technical erro jumped out at me. I see nothing I could suggest to improve on.
Overall This was a delightful break in my day. And yes the sun is shining on me too after several cloudy days. Thank you for the enjoyable read.
Hi Lou, I'm still checking in at Read and Review and your poem, Matthew 25:23 came up and I'm here to share my thoughts with you.
First Impression Obviously this was going to be a religious piece by the scripture title. That will draw in some, and scare some off. I'm part of the choir so I would have read this even if it didn't just come up for review.
Frame An decastich, a poem in 10 lines of Free Verse.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics This has a churchy tone, a sincere statement of faith. (admitting, "I've not always been"} which adds texture and a ring of honesty to the piece. It has a smooth, consistent, rhythm when read out loud.
Suggestions No technical errors jumped out at me. Readers connect to concrete images. That is why Jesus was sent, to give us a concrete example of God that we could connect to. This is mostly abstract and I think the message might be more powerful with more concreteness. This is just my opinion. Use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.
Overall This is a lovely poem and I enjoyed the read.
Hi Amyjo, I came across your "In The City" at Read and Review. I am here to share my thoughts.
First Impression I wasn't sure what to expect, the title didn't tell me much, but I read anyway.
Frame A poem in 28 unrhymed lines made up of 4 septets. No apparent metric or syllabic pattern.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics Words like, clout, chiding, hobo, foreboding, and manipulate, add depth and texture to the piece. The poem reads with a fast pace as if the reader is being pushed along on a crowded street until the last stanza when it slows down and has a reflective tone.
Suggestions I have nothing I could offer to improve this skillfully written piece.
Overall You painted not terribly favorable images of the city, which is how I feel when in San Francisco or any other large city. But it all fades away in the last stanza when you recall your mother. I loved this poem. Thank you for sharing.
Hi Big Books, I happened on an oldy of yours "It's Time to Celebrate" at read and review. I'm here to share my thoughts.
First impression The festive appearance on the page is certainly attractive and inviting.
Frame Using the Verse Form, the Pantoum for an Occasional Poem is impressive. Often occasional poems are throw-aways after the event. therefore so many are jingley and not a lot of effort displayed. The Pantoum with its rotating lines, shows a little effort has been afforded.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics This lyrical piece reads aloud quite fluidly. The upbeat tone sings CELEBRATION!
Suggestions I see no technical error and can offer no thoughts on improvement. It is not high poetry but it is a well written occasional verse.
Overall I enjoyed reading this piece and I am sure the Webmasters loved it.
Hi Sum 1, I'm still reviewing and I just found your "Before I Go" on Read and Review. Here are my thoughts.
First impression At 82 years of age, the title of your poem is a phrase, I and so many of my peers ponder quite often. Curious what your thoughts are on the subject.
Frame A poem written in 5 quatrains, each made up of 2 rhymed couplets. Lines are similar length with Accentual Verse, 4 stresses per line. No syllabic or metric patterns.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics. The poem read fluidly out loud because of the cadence of everyday language. The poem moves from the narrator's personal struggles with running out of time, to addressing the needs of another. This is a love poem.
Suggestions No technical errors jump out at me and as usual with this poet, I can see no way in which I could offer improvement.
Overall This is a skillfully written poem with content that touches this reader's heart. The poem is beautiful.
Hi PiriPica, I happened on your "Should it Rain" at Read and Review and I am here to share my thoughts.
First impression Clearly written for a child but fun to read as an adult.
Frame Written in 3 syllabic, variant rhymed cinquains. Syllabic pattern, 3-6-4-4-6, rhyme scheme aaxxa bbxxb ccddc, x being unrhymed.
Texture, rhythm, word choice and sonics The rhythm is fairly lyrical with a little bump in L4. The word choices appropriate for a small child's understanding.
Suggestions This poem carries a dominant iambic rhythm but L4 throughs that off and rhythm stumbles. If this were mine, which I know it isn't, I would reverse the words in L4. It is an unrhymed line so switching said to the front is no loss to the rhyme scheme and it provides the lyrical iambic pattern of the rest of the poem.
It is a complete poem as written. However, the thought occurred to me that it is a poem with a bee as the central character but there is no onomatopoeia, buzzing. I missed the sound. You plopped and dripped the rain, why not somehow include the buzz of a busy bee? Forgive me, just my imagination running a muck.
These are just one person's thoughts, It is your poem. Use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.
Overall I thoroughly enjoyed reading this cute poem. Thanks.
Hi Jake, Read and Review is offering 800 GPs if I review your poem "No more Summer Days", so here I am to give you my thoughts.
First Impression The title and a quick perusal of your poem, worries me a little. Is this going to be depressing?
Frame Free Verse, a poem in 30 lines broken into various sized strophes.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics. This may have been prompted by a word challenge because of the bold words. The content progresses from joy to despair. It reads out loud fairly fluidly.
SuggestionsI see no technical error and can offer nothing substantial to improve this poem.
Overall This is a desparaging piece. The reader walks away with little hope for the future. You made me feel. That is what a poem is supposed to do. Now I'm going to go read something more upbeat.
Hi Cubby, Your Christmas Day Dinner popped up at Read and Review and I am here to share my thoughts on your poem.
First impression Odd that your poem pops up a week before Easter, but given the weather outside lately, it is freezing outside, isn't that crazy? The colored font, the title certainly suggest the season which for me is usually busy but full of family and I love it.
The Frame Written in 6, alternating 6.5.6.5 syllabic quatrains with staggered sequential rhyme, xaxa xbxb xcxc etc., x being unrhymed.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics The reads like a song with a fluid rhythm. Various family members are included by name which makes this sound very personal.
Suggestions L13, delete the word "are", it is unnecessary and it creates the only 7 syllable line in the poem. Deleting the word, smoothes the rhythm and brings the line into sync with the rest of the syllabic pattern. This is just my opinion. It is your poem, please use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.
Overall Reading this felt like family. Love and joy are present and it was perfect to read for my mood today. Thank you.
Hi Dawn, I happened on an old one of your "I Am the Unknown", you've probably forgotten all about it. But here I am sharing my thoughts on your poem.
First Impression The title is a grabber and the appearance on the page is intriguing with the single line beginning and end.
The Frame A poem in 17 lines, made up of a single line, 3 cinquains, and a single line, in that order. Unrhymed with no apparent metric or syllabic pattern.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics This reads out loud fluently. There is texture and movement in 3 cinquians present an event, the thought process, and the result. The single line responses, nobody knew/nobody will every know, great beginning and end.
Suggestions No technical errors jumped out at me. If it were mine, I'd tinker with L11. The length is out of balance. I'd shorten it. Maybe a simple, delete "When choosing". This is just my opinion. It is your poem, use what you find helpful, and ignore the rest.
Overall I enjoyed reading this poem. It reminded me of first responders and good Samaritans. The best of the best.
Hi Jeff, Your "Stand-Up and Deliver" was posted at Twenty-Three in Eleven, just before me, so here I am for review. I normally review poetry and have little expertise in Flash Fiction, but I'm here to learn.
Here are my thoughts, the presentation challenges with the title and the piece appears doable, for a quick read. All pluses in drawing the reader.
I have to admit, I was expecting a baseball theme from the title and was surprised that the focus was on stand-up comedy, And then you add a hint of baseball in the mix, genius! You kept me reading.
This has great flow, the dialog sounds real and you add humor.
No technical errors jumped out at me. Of course in Flash Fiction I don't know if I'd recognize them anyway, other than a misspelled word or improper punctuation.
Hello Busman, I happened on your "Unconditionally Yours" at Read and Review. I'm here to give you my thoughts.
First Impression The title touched me. The poem on the page looked organized on the page.
Form Written in 6 unrhymed quatrains with varying length lines. S1, L1 and L2 are repeated in S6 L2 and L3. S5 employs repetition of W1 in each line.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics. This poem reads fluidly out loud. The content logically progresses. I thought S5 was very effective.
Suggestions No technical error jumped out at me. S1, L3, where do you want the reader to focus, on the Years or on of? Last word of a line takes on importance, I think it is best practice to never end a line with a conjunction unless you want to emphasize the conjunction. If this were mine, I would move the word "of" to the beginning of the next line.
I do feel the last line of the poem is redundant and doesn't trust the reader. The reader already gets it. You don't have to tell us. If it were mine, I'd eliminate the last line. or substitute S1 L3 without "of" at the end as your last line. I think it would have more impact.
Of course, this is just one person's opinion. It is your poem, use what ever you may find helpful and ignore the rest.
Overall This is a well crafted poem, touching in places. I enjoyed the read.
Hello Lou, I happened on your "Sunrise/Sunset" at Read and Review.
I am here to share my thoughts on your poem.
First impression First thing that came to mind seeing your title and poem on the page, "Red sky at night, sailors delight. Red sky at morning, sailors take warning." My husband used to say that all of the time.
Form A septet followed by a sestet with S1, L1, L2 and L3 repeated in S2 L1,L2 and L3. Also S1, L5 repeated in S2 as L4 and S1 L6 repeated S2 L5. Unrhymed with 10 syllable lines except for L3, L10 and L13 which are 8 syllables.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics. The epetition of lines adds depth to this piece. It reads fairly fluidly. I appreciated the capitalization of Him,so many these days do not.
Suggestions I saw no technical errors in this piece. I do think an added line in S2 referring to good weather would improve this piece. This is just my opinion, it is your poem. Use whatever I share here if you find it helpful and ignore the rest.
Overall As a watcher of the sunrise and the sunset daily, I felt a comfort in familiar message. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Hello Bunny Sox, I happened on your "Elaborate Fantasies" at Read and Review. I am here to share my thoughts on your poem.
First impression The title would be compelling to many curious readers. It even could suggest erotic content to some. The poem as posted has several words in bold print which suggests to me, this was written in response to a challenge to include these words in a poem.
Form Free Verse, a hexastich, poem in 6 lines.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics Since the words to be included are all abstracts, there use keeps this piece on an abstract plain. Difficult for the reader to connect. I thought, in such a short space you wove the words into your poem quite well. The piece is fluid and makes a statement.
Suggestions No technical errors given the style of writing. However in my opinion, there would be better clarity if the poem began with a Cap, L1 "In", and placed a period after "overcoming.", A Cap, L5 "You" and a period at the end. My first quick read, I was a little confused until I went back again and realized it was actually 2 sentences with a change in focus. I understand it is a style choice, but there is a poet and a reader. Is the reader reading for style or content? This is just one person's thoughts, it is your poem. Use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.
Overall I liked the message and you did a good job incorporating abstracts into a concrete message.
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First Impression The title sounds fun and the brevity is hard for me to pass over. 
First impression From title and somewhat formal appearance I prepare to read a winter poem. 
Frame You saved me the work of counting syllables and stanzas. Thank you. Yes, written in 5 quatrains each made up of 2 rhymed couplets with lines of 10 syllables each. Rhyme scheme aabb ccdd eeff gghh iiaa.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics Poem is written in simple everyday language sharing the pros and cons of winter snow. There were no surprises, no pivot. 
Suggestions This is a lovely snow poem as are many thousands more. If you want it to be remembered, it needs a surprise, image, word, tone. Of course I say this and need to take my own advise. It is your poem, use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.
First Impression Title leads me to believe this will be fun to read.
First Impression I found the title fascinating. Of course I would read this poem. 
1. a poem in 19 lines made up of 5 tercets and ends with a quatrain.
First impression Title, Francis favorite saint, of course, I would read.
First Impression The title would intrigue and nature lover, and "silly" is always worth a read.
First Impression The poem on the page looks easy to read and the title sounds sincere. Why not?
Frame Written in 5, iambic tetrameter, rhymed couplets. 
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics Because of the meter and rhyme this sounds pleasantly like a song. (but not sing-songy) The tongue-in-cheek humor was a welcome surprise. 
Suggestions No technical erro jumped out at me. I see nothing I could suggest to improve on.
Overall This was a delightful break in my day. And yes the sun is shining on me too after several cloudy days. Thank you for the enjoyable read.
First Impression I wasn't sure what to expect, the title didn't tell me much, but I read anyway.
First Impression The title made me think of writer's block. 
I can't pass on a short poem.
Frame A 13-lines poem written in Free Verse with good use of line breaks. 
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics This poem reads out loud fluently. No surprises.
First impression The festive appearance on the page is certainly attractive and inviting. 
Frame Using the Verse Form, the Pantoum for an Occasional Poem is impressive. Often occasional poems are throw-aways after the event. therefore so many are jingley and not a lot of effort displayed. The Pantoum with its rotating lines, shows a little effort has been afforded.
Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics This lyrical piece reads aloud quite fluidly. The upbeat tone sings CELEBRATION! 
Suggestions I see no technical error and can offer no thoughts on improvement. It is not high poetry but it is a well written occasional verse.
Overall I enjoyed reading this piece and I am sure the Webmasters loved it.
First impression At 82 years of age, the title of your poem is a phrase, I and so many of my peers ponder quite often. Curious what your thoughts are on the subject.
First impression Clearly written for a child but fun to read as an adult.
First impression Odd that your poem pops up a week before Easter, but given the weather outside lately, it is freezing outside, isn't that crazy? The colored font, the title certainly suggest the season which for me is usually busy but full of family and I love it.
Suggestions L13, delete the word "are", it is unnecessary and it creates the only 7 syllable line in the poem. Deleting the word, smoothes the rhythm and brings the line into sync with the rest of the syllabic pattern. This is just my opinion. It is your poem, please use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.
First Impression The title is a grabber and the appearance on the page is intriguing with the single line beginning and end.
First Impression The title touched me. The poem on the page looked organized on the page.
First impression First thing that came to mind seeing your title and poem on the page, "Red sky at night, sailors delight. Red sky at morning, sailors take warning." My husband used to say that all of the time. 
First impression The title would be compelling to many curious readers. It even could suggest erotic content to some. The poem as posted has several words in bold print which suggests to me, this was written in response to a challenge to include these words in a poem.