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Review of The Wall Thorn  
Review by Tornado Day
Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Beautiful Disaster ,

I enjoyed this writing and found much of I can relate to. More than anything, I believe it speaks to the history of a person that lives within them...that pushes them to choose and decide, and to react. We don't get just what we see. We get the whole messy/pretty package.

Other than some corrections you need to make as it relates to the use of apostrophe(s), I saw no major errors. If you cut and paste this into a word processing program, it should tell you where corrections are needed to show possessive tense. If you don't have access to that, let me know and I'll send you the details on changes I would recommend.

Thanks for this write and welcome to WDC. If there is anything at all I can do to assist you, let me know. Thanks again.

Tornado

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Review of Getting Out  
Review by Tornado Day
Rated: E | (4.5)
Benjamin,

I enjoyed this work very much. I see the deeper meaning to these words, the desire to put an end to destructive behavior.....to make a different choice, even it requires 'relearning' what comes naturally.

Very good work. Thanks for sharing and welcome to WDC. I'm delighted you've decided to grace us with your words and your presence. Let me know if I can do anything at all to assist you.

Tornado

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Review of Special Day  
Review by Tornado Day
Rated: E | (4.5)
Dearest Harshal,

This is an exceptional piece of poetry. You've done a wonderful job of describing the simple joy that comes in loving someone, and in allowing yourself to be loved in return. I commend you on this fine work.

Good luck with the Shining Stars contest, my friend.

Always,
Tornado

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Review of Oh Soul of Mine  
Review by Tornado Day
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear Manny T ,

This is a well conceived work of words, a prayer for strength and guidance, a reassurance of peace beyond the turmoil.

Here are a few recommended corrections to this otherwise extraordinary work:

Be steal o you soul of mine, be steal. (steal should be still in both cases)

And it’s pleasures or only temporary. {should be 'its are')

Lead me not astray from the words of the lord. {lord should be capitalized as 'Lord')

So the heaven’s can bottle them up. {should be 'heavens')

For Tomorrow they’ll be the wine we drink, that will bring us joy. {tomorrow should not be capitalized)

Or Dive into the sea if you chose. (dive should not be capatalized)

Be steal of you soul of mine, be steal. (steal should be 'still' in both instances)

Welcome to WDC. May you find a home for your words here, and enjoy all the resources that have been put here for that purpose. Should you ever need assistance, please do not hesitate to call on me.

Tornado

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Review by Tornado Day
Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear T. Davis ,

These words remind me of a prayer...reassurance of a high place of respect and holy honor. Very good work.

Welcome to WDC. May you find encouragement for your words, and a home for your gifts. If there is anything I can to assist you, please don't hesitate to ask.

Always,
Tornado

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Review by Tornado Day
Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Carry ,

Often I find there are subjects or emotions that cannot be conveyed any more by a greater use of words. Sometimes, less is more and less is enough. I enjoyed this piece and it carried with it the sorrow I believe you intended to convey.

Well done. Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your new home as there is so much here to do and so many areas for you to grow. I hope you will and that you will reach out to me should you need anything.

Tornado

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Review of The Empty Cradle  
Review by Tornado Day
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dearest one,

This is a deep and bittersweet piece, formed of love and sorrow, acceptance and glory. I was touched by this gift of your words from your pain.

"Love makes sweet and sad the same." Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on your place in this week's newsletter.

Always,
Tornado
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Review of Bits and Pieces  
Review by Tornado Day
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Axilea,

I could read your words all day and never thirst for anything more. Though the picture isn't always a pretty one, the brushstrokes capture our eye and pull us into a world that was never meant to be pretty in the first place.

Thank you. This is EXCELLENT work!

Bobbie
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Review of Dedication  
Review by Tornado Day
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful expression of commitment, compassion, and love. Well done.

Tornado
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Review of No more tears  
Review by Tornado Day
Rated: E | (5.0)
The great thing about life is that every single day you get the chance to start over. Good luck!

Tornado
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Review of How I came to Be  
Review by Tornado Day
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is perhaps the most insightful piece of writing I have read in years. You have managed to speak clearly to the chains which hold us from everything we wish to have and accomplish. I applaud you and this wonderfule exhibition of your talents.

Thank you.

Tornado
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