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Review by percy goodfellow
Rated: E | (5.0)
Sunflower,

Good Job! I harp on this stuff a whole lot in my class at New Horizon Academy, the Exploratory Writing workshop.

It is great to see others beating the drum.

percy bob
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Review by percy goodfellow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Kris,

You nailed this! Now print it off and paste (Staple, glue nail, velcro) it to somewhere prominent on your workstation. As you write your first vignette ask yourself, "Am I using a mix of components making the work multidimensional or am I only using one or two, making it more one-dimensional?"

Next check the distribution (Components/percentages) Ask Yourself, "Have I sort of used the same distribution and number of words as my favorite author, when writing this vignette?"

As you note components in your reading keep a list. The ones I used are not the only ones in a writer's tool box. I didn't mention, foreboding, humor and interior dialog. When you see something cool make a note and try using it in your writing.

percy bob
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Review by percy goodfellow
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Jenna,
I really like this poem...There is something inside us that cries out when we are not performing to the expectations of the great creative whatever....Something takes control of our imaginations and tells our bodies in no uncertain terms what the expectations are for passing on our genetic legacy. Your poem shows this compelling process at work and catches by the tail the elusive spirit that is responsible. Well done.

Percy
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Review by percy goodfellow
Rated: XGC | (5.0)
Incorrigible
This was a wonderful strory. I would have preferred reading it in smaller pieces. My brain has good software but a small processor. Somewhere between the forth and sixth chapter I went into lock up and had to give it a rest. Sex is such a poweful force and when it is written in such an intense and compelling manner it gets to be overwhelming. Maybe that's why it's only supposed to last for about half an hour per session...or maybe that's just me. I think a chapter a sitting after Chapter 5 is about the right pace. What I think however, that really set this story apart was the way it blossomed in context. So much erotica I read fails to pass the context test. When I read it I say, "this had some heat but where outside an erotica contest could it ever fly?" Maybe thats why you chose to make it longer, so the context could dampen out the passion and emotion. Anyway thanks for writing it and sharing. It shows where the standard is and it's way the heck up there, so high, I have to squint to see it.

Percy
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