Perhaps the second paragraph should start "I knew it was early morning because I could here the birds churping in the background." The piece generates cconcern throughout. Still concerned, wondering what was the narrator experiencing. A good element of suspense. A bout with paraalysis.
It's perfect already. It is a poem. I hope you reach your desired audience in tenfold. Earllier tonight I wrote theres nothing like reading poetry better than your own. I have done so once again. Enjoyed the honest. Eeriely felt like I was easedropping
Boredom at a poetry reading? Jaded with editting? Exausted from reading lackluster work found in reviewing? I was wondering why this piece isn't classified underwriting and inspirational and/or satire. Yet my third read reminds me that you may actually be bored, period. Sorry to interrupt and thankks for sharing.
An acrostic prayer. Very unique and sincere. The acrostic style is used by the author to input an extra plea within the poem for forgiveness from Our Lord. An excellent arrangement and a poem that inspires for all the reasons inspiration is indeed a heavenly gift.
Cassius Clay changed his name to Muhammad Ali. The twenty fourth paragraph of this article points out how the duality of spelling of religious names within theocratic circles can cause identity mistakes and always be used as an excuse to detain and interrogate.
Wow! This is a short horror. A gave it five stars for existing. It was scary and visual and leaves me with the eerie feeling that I just witnessed something horrific. Please promote it in it's proper genre. It is frightening. I don't want to reread it yet, but I would suggest letting a graphic artist sketch the story. It's your piece.
A very lovely and sentimental poem about the longing of love-ones no longer with us. I thought of my grandmother and my childhood memories as well. Very touching and a magnificient glorification of her spirit. I gave it five stars because I love grandmothers and flowers and genuine lessons about playing to win each time out. Thanks for the inspiration to address the subject within an entire paragraph.
A humbling lamentation ironically hidden within the catagory fo crime and gangster? The plight of an oppressed bird traveling continuously . A metophor for life as we as humanity continue to move in mass to "avoid" the same fate we all seem to share. Very truthful in it's analysis.
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