plot: we're inside the head and life of the teenage girl, who's name I have forgotten. It's not repeated in this chapter, as far as I can tell. It's fascinating to feel her emotions and see her moral dilemmas. It's a simple plot, but it's interesting.
characters: the girl, who has mixed feelings for her father, though she's glad he's gone. She's uncertain about her sexuality and maybe just wants to feel loved and wanted by someone. We only see Rachel through her eyes, and she thnks her best friend is gorgeous, and is also fascinated by the fact that she's been a closet bi for who knows how long. Dad shows a soft side, though still 'i'm the wronged one' mentality when he leaves. And mom seems very clueless and spineless. maybe now that he's gone, we'll see her step into the mothering position a little more.
setting: we see her house quite clearly. I wondered about Rachel's house. then they went shopping for dresses...just curious, were they in the same dressing room, like girls usually are? if so, how did that affect them?
referencing: I didnt see anything, though I wondered about how quick the divorce process is. the same day you file, do they usually kick your spouse out? I assumed it would take longer.
grammar: no problems
style/voice: good, except the things I pointed out, where it seemed to switch from her journal voice to a narrative voice. These voices should be so distinct that the reader can tell when she's writing in her journal w/out you saying, 'dear journal' or something like that.
overall: very much enjoyed it. looking forward to seeing her find herself. (I work w/ children in foster care...and they are so very confused about life and everything.)