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Review by turtlewriter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Norbanus,
I like the idea behind the story. The guys situation was comical to me. If the purpose was to show a solution making things worse, in my opinion the guy staying at a hotel temporarily is not really a full solution to his problem. Yes, staying at the hotel where a sheriff is staying could make his situation worse though. But I really liked it! It hooked me enough to want to know the rest of the story! Good Job. I will read more of your stuff, too!
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Review of The Dreamer  
Review by turtlewriter
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi,
This was really cute! I like the idea behind it. I also like that it is a situation that teens find themselves in these days. I thought that the daydreaming was good at creating build-up, but I would have liked to have felt more attached to Kat, or at least felt what the main character felt. The ending, however, was good! In the few sentences that you used, I felt the anticipation. Unexpected surprise! I liked it!
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