Valerie O's (valerie_ortiz) Reviews

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#3753465

Review of Pluto?

Review by Valerie O

Rated: E | (4.5)

Interesting topic. I take it, you were following a specific poetry format. A sedoka perhaps? You did a great job with the syllables. And I agree, someone needs to make the final decision as to what Pluto is...children everywhere are failing science tests because of it

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#2453952

Review of a morning spent in bed

Review by Valerie O

Rated: E | (5.0)

Cute! Your cat must love you! I wish I could just lay in bed and relax like that more often. I haven't done that in a while, but thanks for reminding me of how relaxing it can be. I don't see any errors, and I have no suggetions. Another job well done.

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#2453946

Review of Justice

Review by Valerie O

Rated: E | (5.0)

Another well-written poem. I don't see any errors. Your descriptions painted a picture in my mind. My favorite part of the poem is line 5. There is detail, imagery, emotion, and personification all in one spot, that it could be a poem all by itself.

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#2103524

Review of The Haunt

Review by Valerie O

Rated: E | (4.5)

Review of: "The Haunt"

Overall Impression:
Interesting

Spelling and Grammar:
I see no errors

Suggestions:
on the very first line, you could change loose to loosely and one to a. Remember, these are only suggestions.

Additional Comments:
I'm not sure if this was the impression you wanted me to have, but when I read this, I thought of werewolves.

Keep Writing!

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#2095484

Review of From Pleasure to Pain

Review by Valerie O

Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

Review of: "From Pleasure to Pain"

Overall Impression:
A very strong poem

Spelling and Grammar:
I see no errors

Suggestions:
none

Additional Comments:
I thought this poem was very interesting and definitely worth reading.

Keep Writing!

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#2095473

Review of The Little Music Box

Review by Valerie O

Rated: E | (4.5)

Review of: "The Little Music Box"

Overall Impression:
Great story!

Spelling and Grammar:
"Grandma why are you giving me all of this?"

Put a comma after grandma.

I searched around the room, on the left of me was a...

Replace the comma with a semicolon.

Suggestions:
none

Additional Comments:
You did a wondeful job.

Keep Writing!

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#2059660

Review of The Bakeshop Window

Review by Valerie O

Rated: E | (5.0)

Review of: "The Bakeshop Window"

Overall Impression/Meeting the Prompt:
Great use of the prompt

Spelling and Grammar:
I see no errors

Active Writing:
Nicely done

Suggestions:
none

Additional Comments:
I love how you sound so inviting when you repeat "come in". I also loved how you saved "I am the bakeshop window" for the very end. Great Job!

Thank you for your submission. Smile
Keep Writing!

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Valerie O

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#2055150

Review of Honeysuckle Dreams

Review by Valerie O

Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Review of: "Honeysuckle Dreams"

Overall Impression:
Very well written

Punctuation and Grammar:
Just try to be consistant with punctuation.
Suggestions:
None

Additional Comments:
I loved the simile in the first sentence. And your word choice throughout the poem is wonderful. Everything pulls together beautifully.

Keep Writing!

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#2055145

Review of Faded Hues

Review by Valerie O

Rated: ASR | (4.5)

Review of: "Faded Hues"

Overall Impression:
Very emotional
Punctuation and Grammar:
Try to have some sort of punctuaion on every line, possibly add more commas. Everything else looks good.
Suggestions:
None
Additional Comments:
A poem many can relate to, since it mentions slowly forgetting someone who has been lost.

Keep Writing!

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#2055043

Review of A Precious Gift

Review by Valerie O

Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Review of: "A Precious Gift"

Overall Impression:
A poem that all girls should read.
Punctuation and Grammar:
"Unbridled lust, make your heart melt" I'm not sure if make should be makes. Everything else looks good
Suggestions:
none
Additional Comments:
Great poem!

Keep Writing!

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#2052834

Review of Weekly NEWBIE Challenge

Review by Valerie O

Rated: E | (5.0)

Here's a donation for your contest. I only wish I could give more. This contest helped me learn a lot when I started off here at WDC, so it holds a special place in my heart. I'm glad to see that it is still around, and hopefully more donations will keep it going.